Lesson video

Hi, everyone.

My name is Ms. Voyle and welcome to today's lesson where you are going to be planning two paragraphs for the build-up of your narrative based on "The Iron Man".

During this lesson, you'll need to be listening and looking carefully.

There'll be tasks where you need somebody to talk to and you will also need a piece of paper and pen or pencil for writing your plan.

I hope you are feeling excited and ready to learn.

Let's get started.

The learning outcome for today's lesson is "I can plan two paragraphs for the build-up of 'The Iron Man.

'" Here are our key words for today's lesson.

Let's practise saying them.

My turn.

Your turn.

Suspense.

Plan.

Notes.

Ambitious vocabulary.

Show-and-tell.

Great job.

Well done.

Let's take a look at their definitions.

Suspense is when you are feeling anxious or excited about what may happen.

A plan is a framework that writers create before they write a section or whole text.

Notes are written out of full sentences.

Ambitious vocabulary is high-level language in writing that meets the text purpose.

And show-and-tell is a writing technique for showing a character's feelings with description of their actions and expressions.

There are two parts to today's lesson.

In the first part, we will be preparing to plan and in the second part, you will be writing the plan.

So let's begin with preparing to plan.

"The Iron Man" can be structured like this, opening, build-up, climax, resolution.

In this lesson, we are planning the build-up.

We will write our build-up in two parts.

Today, we will plan both parts.

The purpose of the build-up is to do all of these.

Develop the plot and characters, buildup suspense, and excitement.

In the build-up of "The Iron Man", suspense is built up.

Suspense means when you are feeling anxious or excited about what may happen.

How do you act if you are watching a scene full of suspense? Pause the video and discuss with your partner.

I loved hearing your different answers about what suspense feels like for you.

I heard, "My eyes are glued to the screen." "I'm biting my fingernails!" And, "I'm holding my breath and I can't look away!" Let's check your understanding.

True or false.

If a scene builds up suspense, it makes the viewer feel sad.

Pause the video and select your answer.

That is false.

Well done.

Now it's time to justify your answer.

A, suspense is when you are feeling anxious or excited about what may happen, or B, suspense is when you are feeling really happy.

Pause the video and select the correct justification.

The answer is A.

Well done.

Suspense is when you are feeling anxious or excited about what may happen.

Here is a summary of the build-up of "The Iron Man".

A young boy named Hogarth spotted the Iron Man and told his parents.

His father went out in search of the giant.

The farmers in the land grappled with the news and Hogarth's father made a close escape from the Iron Man.

The following morning, the residents of the farms found all of their machinery missing or half eaten, and they knew it was the Iron Man.

The farmers dug a huge hole to trap the Iron Man, but he never came.

Eventually, he reappeared and Hogarth lured him into the hole.

The farmers were overjoyed and rallied to fill the hole.

After they buried the Iron Man, Hogarth's feelings shifted to sorrow and guilt.

Let's check your understanding.

Put the key moments of the build-up in order.

I will read them to you.

"His father went out in search of the giant and had a narrow escape.

A young boy named Hogarth spotted the Iron Man and told his parents.

The farmers dug a huge hole and they trapped the Iron Man.

The residents of the farms found all of their machinery missing or half eaten.

After they buried the Iron Man, Hogarth's feelings shifted to sorrow and guilt." Pause the video now and number these one to five to show their order in the build-up.

Let's take a look at the answers together.

One, a young boy named Hogarth spotted the Iron Man and told his parents.

Two, his father went out in search of the giant and had a narrow escape.

Three, the residents of the farms found all of their machinery missing or half eaten.

Four, the farmers dug a huge hole and they trapped the Iron Man.

Five, after they buried the Iron Man, Hogarth's feelings shifted to sorrow and guilt.

As writers, we can create suspense in different ways.

Show-and-tell language, rhetorical questions, exclamation marks, ellipses, and short and snappy sentences.

Let's check your understanding.

Which linguistic devices can writers use to build suspense? A, full stops.

B, ellipses.

C, conjunctions.

D, short, snappy sentences.

Pause the video and select the correct answers.

The answers are B and D.

Well done.

Writers can use linguistic devices like ellipses and short, snappy sentences to build suspense.

We know that we always use full stops and conjunctions in our writing.

The build-up of your narrative will be split into two paragraphs.

Paragraph one will focus on the following key moments, key moment one, Hogarth spotted the iron man while fishing and ran home to tell his parents.

Key moment two, Hogarth's father went in search of the giant and made a close escape.

Paragraph two will focus on the following key moments, key moment three, the farmers found their machinery missing and dug a hole to trap the giant, but he never came.

Key moment four, Hogarth lured the iron man into the hole and the overjoyed farmers buried him.

Hogarth's feelings shifted.

We need to generate precise and ambitious vocabulary to describe each moment in detail.

Nouns are people, places or things.

Adjectives describe nouns.

Verbs are doing, being or having words and adverbs describe verbs.

Show-and-tell language describes the character's emotions by describing their body language and facial expressions.

We will need to include a range of these when developing our vocabulary for our plan.

Let's look at the first moment in more detail.

Hogarth spotted the Iron Man and told his parents.

We need to generate adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and show-and-tell language here.

Can you discuss with your partner whether you can think of any precise vocabulary you would use to describe this moment? Let's take a look at some examples together.

Calmly fishing in a narrow river.

Rustling sounds of nature.

Uneasy feeling in his stomach.

Now that's a great piece of show-and-tell, and we can see from these examples that the suspense is gradually building.

Two bold, glowing lights caught his attention.

Humongous figure approaching.

Couldn't breathe, raced home in panic.

Another great example of show-and-tell that has heightened the suspense.

Let's look at the next moment in more detail.

Hogarth's father went in search of the giant and made a close escape.

Can you discuss with your partner what precise vocabulary you would use to describe this moment? Let's take a look at some examples.

Full of fear and anger.

Swiftly grabbed his gun.

Hurriedly shared the news.

Spotted a half crunched tractor.

Heart beat rapidly, fled in panic.

That's great show-and-tell.

Gigantic, iron foot.

Let's check your understanding.

Which show-and-tell language would you use to describe how Hogarth's father felt? A, huge smile over his face.

B, heart beat rapidly.

C, jumped excitedly.

D, fled in panic.

Pause the video and select the correct answers.

The answers are B and D.

Well done.

Heart beat rapidly, fled in panic.

These examples of show-and-well convey that Hogarth's father is feeling very scared.

Let's look at the next moment in more detail.

The farmers found their machinery missing and dug a hole.

Can you discuss with your partner what vocabulary you would use to describe this key moment? Let's take a look at some examples.

Shocking, dreadful sight.

Scanned the scene, trembled with rage.

Gigantic teeth marks.

Determined to protect their livelihoods.

Determinedly dug a colossal hole.

Here in these examples, we can see that you could use the word determined as a verb or you could use it as an adverb determinedly to describe a verb, dug.

Waited in eager anticipation.

Let's now look at the next moment in more detail.

Hogarth lured the Iron Man into the hole and the farmers buried him.

Can you discuss with your partner what vocabulary you would use to describe this key moment? Let's take a look at some examples together.

Finally appeared.

Cleverly lured, sharp clinking of metal.

With a sudden crash, disappeared into the pit.

Farmers triumphantly cheered.

Rallied together.

Sense of sadness and regret.

This refers to how Hogarth's feelings change after the Iron Man has been buried.

Let's check your understanding.

Which verbs and adverbs would you use to describe Hogarth and the farmers in the final moment of the build-up? A, cried relentlessly.

B, cleverly lured.

C, chatted happily.

D, triumphantly cheered.

Pause the video and select the correct answers.

The answers are B and D.

Well done.

We would use the verb and adverb cleverly lured to describe how Hogarth got the Iron Man into the hole and we would say triumphantly cheered to describe how the farmers felt once they knew the iron man was in the hole and they buried him.

It's now time for your first task.

Fill in the blanks for the beginning of paragraph one of the build-up.

I will read it to you.

"One day, a local farmer's son named Hogarth was fishing when he suddenly felt a sense that somebody was watching him.

He up towards the nearby cliff and realised a strange figure was approaching him.

His pulse began to and he home to tell his parents.

His father grabbed his gun and went in search of the giant." The vocabulary for you to choose from is race, peaceful, glanced, fearfully, nervous, gigantic, and sprinted.

Pause the video and fill in the blanks with the correct piece of vocabulary now.

Let's take a look at the answers together.

"One peaceful day, a local farmer's son named Hogarth was fishing when he suddenly felt a nervous sense that somebody was watching him.

He glanced up towards the nearby cliff and realised a a gigantic strange figure was approaching him.

His pulse began to race and he sprinted home to tell his parents.

Fearfully, his father grabbed his gun and went in search of the giant." It's now time for your next task.

Fill in the blanks for the beginning of paragraph two of the build-up.

I will read it to you.

"The very next morning, the farmers discovered a scene on their land.

They in anger as they found their machinery missing and to pieces.

Working together, they dug the most hole to trap the Iron Man.

They metal bait around it and waited, but he never came.

One day, Hogarth finally spotted the Iron Man and lured him into the pit." The vocabulary for you to choose from is anxiously, horrifying, colossal, shook, chewed, cleverly, planted.

Pause the video and fill in the blanks with the correct piece of vocabulary now.

Let's take a look at the answers together.

"The very next morning, the farmers discovered a horrifying scene on their land.

They shook in anger as they found their machinery missing and chewed to pieces.

Working together, they dug the most colossal hole to trap the Iron Man.

They planted metal bait around it and anxiously waited, but he never came.

One day, Hogarth finally spotted the Iron Man and cleverly lured him into the pit." Well done for demonstrating your understanding of how to use different types of precise and ambitious vocabulary in the build-up.

We've now come to the second part of our lesson where you are going to be writing your plan.

When we write a plan, we use notes.

Notes are concise and capture key vocabulary and information.

The purpose of notes is to help the writer to organise information easily for future use.

We use bullet points when note-taking.

They look like this.

Let's check your understanding, what is in a plan? A, full sentences with capital letters and full stops.

B, bullet points for notes.

C, ambitious vocabulary.

D, unnecessary information.

Pause the video and select the correct answers.

The answers are B and C.

Well done.

You should write the notes of your plan in bullet points and you should include ambitious vocabulary.

We are going to write our build-up in two parts and we will plan both parts in this lesson.

Part one will describe the following.

A young boy named Hogarth spotted the Iron Man and told his parents.

His father went out in search of the giant and made a close escape.

Part two will then describe these events.

The following morning, the residents of the farms found all of their machinery missing or half eaten.

The farmers dug a huge hole and Hogarth lured him into the hole.

The farmers were overjoyed and rallied to fill the hole.

After they buried the Iron Man, Hogarth's feeling shifted to sorrow and guilt.

It's now time for you to fill in the plan for the first key moment for paragraph one.

Hogarth spotted the Iron Man while fishing and ran home to tell his parents.

You need to develop fronted adverbials, ambitious vocabulary, and show-and-tell, which builds suspense.

Pause the video and do this now.

Well done for filling in the plan for the first key moment.

Let's take a look at some good examples.

For fronted adverbials, on top of the hill, trembling with fear.

For ambitious vocabulary, peaceful sounds of nature trickled, two humongous lights beamed, giant, terrifying figure approached.

And for show-and-tell building suspense, uneasy feeling in his stomach, nervously glanced around, pulse raced, sprinted home.

It's time for you to fill in the plan for the second key moment for paragraph one.

Hogarth's father went in search of the giant and made a close escape.

Develop fronted adverbials, ambitious vocabulary, and show-and-tell to build suspense.

Pause the video and do this now.

Well done for completing your plan for the second key moment.

Let's take a look at some good examples.

Full of fear and anger.

With no time to waste.

Grabbed his gun, jumped in car.

Urgently shared the news.

Half crunched tractor, gigantic iron foot.

Trembled with worry.

Heart beat rapidly.

Fled in panic.

Well done for completing the plan for paragraph one.

It's now time for you to fill in the plan for the third key moment for paragraph two.

The farmers found their machinery missing and dug a hole to trap the giant, but he never came.

Develop fronted adverbials, ambitious vocabulary, and show-and-tell to build suspense.

There is already a good example of a fronted adverbials here for you, the next morning, to show when this happened.

Pause the video and do this task now.

Well done for filling in the plan for the third key moment.

Let's take a look at some examples together.

Across the land.

That's a great fronted adverbial of place.

With teamwork and strength.

A good fronted adverbial of manner.

For ambitious vocabulary, metal scraps, terrific teeth marks, dug a gargantuan hole, luring metal bait.

And for show-and-tell, scanned the scene, shouted with rage, waited in eager anticipation.

It's now time for you to fill in the plan for the fourth and final key moment in paragraph two.

Hogarth lured the Ironman into hole and to the overjoyed farmers buried him.

Hogarth's feelings shifted.

Develop fronted adverbials, ambitious vocabulary, and show-and-tell to build suspense.

Pause the video and do this now.

Well done for completing your plan.

Let's take a look at some good examples for the fourth key moment together.

For fronted adverbials, on top of the hill, trembling with fear.

Ambitious vocabulary, iron beast eventually emerged, sharp clinking, cleverly lured, rallied together, buried the destructive giant.

Show-and-tell, grit teeth with determination, cheers of joy and relief, sense of sorrow and guilt.

These last two points of show-and-tell show the contrasting feelings between the farmers and Hogarth after the Iron Man has been buried.

We've now come to the end of our lesson, so let's go over a summary together.

The purpose of the build-up is to build up suspense and excitement before the climax.

The build-up of the Ironman describes humanity's response to the Iron Man.

When we plan, we log precise and ambitious vocabulary to help paint vivid pictures for our reader.

A plan includes notes, a sequence of events, and ambitious vocabulary.

And show-and-tell language shows a character's feelings by describing their actions, body language, and facial expressions.

Well done for your hard work planning the build-up of your narrative based on the Iron Man.

I have really enjoyed teaching you this lesson.