Hi, everybody, it's Ms. Gardner and welcome to the final lesson from our unit, "The Journey" Diary Writing.

You've all worked so hard in this unit and I'm really excited for today's lesson because we are going to be able to publish our finished work.

So for this lesson you'll need access to the book, "The Journey" by Francesca Sanna So if you need to, you can pause the video now so you have it ready for the lesson.

Okay, great, hopefully we've got the book which means we are ready for today's learning, off we go.

In our final lesson from our unit, "The Journey" Diary Writing, we are going to be publishing or finished work.

So your learning outcome is I can publish a diary entry based on "The Journey." So let's start by looking at the key words.

We're going to do my turn, your turn.

Layout.

Drawing.

Doodle.

Let's have a look at what these mean.

The layout of a text refers to the way information is organised on a page.

A drawing is a picture or a diagram made with a pencil, pen, or colouring pencil and a doodle is a sketch completed absent-mindedly.

So there are two sections of our lesson today.

In the first, we'll be publishing a diary entry and in the second, we'll be looking at drawings and doodles.

So let's start with publishing our diary entry.

To publish a piece of writing means to produce a final best version that becomes available for others.

It is important to use neat, joined handwriting when publishing so that it is visually appealing to the reader and also so that they can read it.

Publishing your work is another opportunity to make any last edits and improvements to your writing.

So let's just review the layout of the diary entry.

So first we had our date, then a greeting, "Dear diary," then paragraph one where we recounted "The Journey," paragraph two where we expressed the current feelings of the girl and her hopes for the future, and then the sign off.

And of course, all of this we wrote in first person perspective 'cause we were writing in character as the girl.

So this is an example of the layout of a published diary entry.

At the top you have your dates, then a greeting.

Then paragraph one, the recount of "The Journey," and you can see there is a drawing there.

So there is a space left to complete a drawing.

Then paragraph two, then some doodles, and then finally the sign-off.

So this is just an example layout of a diary entry.

It might not look exactly like this, but it will definitely start with the date and the greeting, have paragraph one, then paragraph two, then a sign-off and some doodles and drawing as well on the pages.

So check for understanding.

Which the following examples shows the layout in an appropriate way for the first page of a diary entry? A, you have paragraph one, then the date, then the greeting, B, you have the sign-off, then the date, then the paragraph one, then a greeting, or C, you start with the date, then you have the greeting, then paragraph one, and then a drawing.

Pause the video now.

That's right, it is C.

That would be the most appropriate layout because it's starting with the date.

Then you're greeting, "Dear diary," then paragraph one, well done.

So you're going to need to design the layout of your diary entry on a piece of lined paper.

You'll need to have start with a date and then a greeting, and what's really important is that you need to make sure you leave some blank space on your pages for where you will want your drawings and doodles to go.

So you don't want to cover your entire large pages with writing because you need to leave some space with those drawing and some doodles.

What's important to remember is that when you are publishing your diary entry, you are not expected to come up with loads of new ideas, and sentences, and thoughts that you want to include in a diary.

You've done all of that hard work of thinking about what to include already in the previous lessons.

When you are publishing, you are using the writing you've already completed in previous lessons.

You are just going to be rewriting it, but with your neatest handwriting and also making sure that you've made any edits that you needed to to punctuation, or grammar, or spelling so that your published entry is the best version it can be.

So if you've noticed that there's a spelling mistake you'd written earlier that you hadn't corrected, that's okay.

But when you publish your writing, you want to make sure you write it correctly, not with the same mistake that you had before.

So this is just another chance to make sure that you're checking over your work, making edits, and making improvements so that when you publish it, it's the best that it can be.

So this is the success criteria you're going to use to help you today.

Let's go through it.

I've designed the layout of my diary to allow appropriate space for each section.

I have used neat, joined handwriting to publish my diary entry.

I have checked the spelling of ambitious vocabulary and I have drawn a drawing and a doodle.

So let's have a look at what this could look like.

Here is my example of a published diary entry.

I'm going to use my success criteria to check I've included everything.

So have I designed the layout of my diary entry to allow appropriate space for each section? I have, so I started by writing my date and my greeting at the top.

I then wrote my two paragraphs and I made sure I left space on the page for my drawings and my doodles which I'm going to draw later so I can give myself a tick.

Did I use neat, joined handwriting to publish my diary entry? I have, I made sure I was trying to use cursive handwriting throughout the whole of my diary entry so I can give myself a tick.

Have I checked the spelling of ambitious vocabulary? I did, there was some tricky spellings in there, so I made sure to look at my plan to see if they were on the plan or if they weren't on my plan, I made sure to check either online or using a dictionary to make sure that they were spelled correctly so I can give myself a tick.

And then have I drawn a drawing and a doodle? I haven't yet, I can't give myself a tick.

I'm going to come to that later, so I'll leave that spot on my success criteria blank.

Okay, it's time for task A.

You are now going to be publishing your diary entry and you're going to be writing the final best version of your paragraphs.

So you'll need to get some lined paper.

Then you need to use the finalised and edited outcome of your diary entry to publish.

If you can spot some mistakes in spelling or punctuation from earlier, make sure you write it correctly now in your final published version.

So making sure you're using your success criteria to help you, and pause the video now, and off you go.

Okay, well done, everybody, welcome back.

Hopefully you can tick the first three sections of your success criteria.

If you've designed the layout of your diary to allow appropriate space for each section and made sure you left blank spaces for your drawings, you can give yourself a tick.

If you use neat, joined handwriting, you can give yourself a tick.

If you check your spellings for ambitious vocabulary, you can give yourself a tick.

None of you should be ticking the last box yet because we'll be doing that in the next session of the lesson.

If you need to, you can pause the video now and go back and make any edits to this published entry.

Otherwise, really well done.

Okay, it is time for the second section of our lesson where we are looking at drawings and doodles.

Drawings are often found in a diary entry.

We often use drawings in our diaries as a way of telling stories.

These visual narratives may represent events from our daily lives, dreams, or fantasies.

Creating art, including doodles and drawings, can release emotions and help us to cope with the challenging situations.

It can be really helpful to draw in your diary as a way of reflecting on what's happened and thinking about it, and perhaps help you to cope with difficult situations that we face.

So you wrote a diary entry from the first person perspective as the main character from "The Journey." Now you are going to add drawings to your diary, imagining the key moments you think she might have drawn in her diary.

So discussing this with your partner or whoever you are with, what key moments from her experience do you think she might have drawn? Pause the video now.

Okay, here are some possible responses.

Now we know there were lots of really important moments and big moments that happened in her journey.

So here are just a few responses.

Yours might be different and don't worry if they are.

The boat crossing on the rough seas.

The furious security guard at the border.

A house with a garden that she hopes to find.

So let's have a go now at learning to draw a drawing that could appear in the girl's diary entry.

I'm going to draw the moment that the boat was crossing on the rough seas because I thought that was a really important moment and really memorable part of her experience, and I thought it might be something that she would quite like to draw because there's lots of people.

There was all the fellow passengers.

There was the water, the seas, the rough waves.

It's quite a good opportunity to show your creative side, so I want to draw this moment.

But you do not need to draw this.

You can draw whichever moment from "The Journey" that you want to.

So you will need these materials.

Some lined paper, and you're going to use the lined paper that you've already written your published diary entry on because remember you left some space for the drawings and doodles.

Pencils, erasers or rubbers, and then markers or colouring pencils if you'd like to use them.

So I'm going to show you how I drew my drawing and then you'll be able to go and do this yourself independently later on.

So the thing I did was start by sketching the outline of the boat just like this.

You can see there's not much detail in here.

It's just a single outline of the boat.

Then you add the outline of the passengers onboard the boat just like this.

Again, not much detail.

Just I wanted to show that there were lots of people and that they were all quite packed and crammed on the boat.

Then you add details to the passengers and the boat just like this.

So you can see I added in the rubber rings that I used for extra safety.

I added in some facial expressions, some hair, maybe a bit of clothes, and I drew a bit of extra detail onto the mask, the sails.

Then number four, draw lines around the boat to show that it is in the sea.

So you can see here very roughly I drew lines to try and create an image of rough seas.

The sea was not calm.

We know that 'cause she felt really sick, so I want to show that in my drawing, that the waters were rough.

And then finally, colour in your drawing and this is optional, but it is a really nice way to add extra detail to the drawing.

So I chose to do the boat crossing 'cause I thought it was a really important moment from the story and by having a picture of this moment, it means the reader has an even better image of what was happening.

So a doodle is a sketch completed absent-mindedly.

This means you are not thinking really carefully about what you are drawing.

This means also that you are not trying to create a perfect drawing, but you are kind of drawing an image of the thoughts that are running through your head.

For example, one of the thoughts that might have been running through her head were the hopes for the future.

She hoped for a house with a garden and maybe some trees in it.

So this is a doodle of these hopes and dreams that she has and you can see here it's not a perfect drawing.

It is not filled with really careful detail and colours, but it is just a doodle reflecting the thoughts that are running through the girl's mind.

So checking for understanding.

What is a doodle? A, an oil painting, B, a labelled diagram, C, a sketch completed absent-mindedly, or D, a photograph? Pause the video now.

That's right, a doodle is a sketch completed absent-mindedly.

So you're not thinking really hard about every single detail.

It doesn't need to be perfect.

It's just a reflection of the thoughts running through your mind.

So it's time for task B.

You now need to take your published diary entry and find the blank spaces that you'd left earlier.

First, you need to draw a drawing of a key moment from "The Journey." You might choose to do the boat journey or you might choose to do another key moment.

Perhaps the moment that they said goodbye to their families.

Perhaps the moment they spent overnight in the forest.

Maybe the moment they were turned away by the security guard.

Any of those would be great, and then you're going to sketch a doodle the girl may have added into her diary entry.

Remember she's a fictional character so we don't know exactly what she will have drawn, but you are trying to empathise with her and understand her thoughts and feelings.

So you can just be imagining what you think she might have drawn.

Then you'll be able to tick in your success criteria I have drawn a drawing and a doodle.

This is the final point on your success criteria.

I have drawn a drawing and a doodle.

So once you've completed those, you'll be able to take this off your success criteria.

So pause the video now and off you go adding the drawing and your doodle to your diary entry.

Well done, everybody, welcome back.

Okay, let's have a look at my example of my diary entry.

So you can see here I have designed the layout of my diary to allow appropriate space for each section.

So I gave myself a tick.

I used neat and joined handwriting, I checked my spellings for ambitious vocabulary, and now I have also drawn a drawing.

You can see there the picture of my boat and I've coloured it in and then the doodle where I was thinking about the thoughts that were running through her mind where she was imagining where they might live.

So I can give myself a tick.

Really well done, everybody.

I hope you've enjoyed publishing your diary entry as much as I have and I also hope you've enjoyed this unit.

You've all done so well, really well done.

Here is a summary of everything we've learned today.

Children often use drawings in their diaries as a way of telling stories.

A doodle is a sketch completed absent-mindedly.

Neat, joined handwriting is important when publishing a diary entry and a published diary entry should be visually and linguistically appealing to the reader.

Well done, everybody, great job.