Lesson video

Hello, everybody, I am Miss Corbert and welcome to today's lesson, writing the middle of the story of "Jack and the Beanstalk" and building suspense.

I'm really excited because I just love telling stories and using really great, ambitious vocabulary.

I need you to make sure that you have some lined paper to write on, and it would also be great if you could have your success criteria printed too.

As well as that, as always, I need your listening ears.

Can I see them? Your looking eyes and your thinking brain.

I think we're ready to get started, and the outcome for today's lesson is I can write the middle of a traditional tale.

These key words will help us to get there.

So your first challenge today is to repeat them after me so I can hear you.

My turn, then your turn.

Noun.

Comma.

Adverb.

Exclamation mark.

Joining word.

Thank you so much for joining in with me.

The first part of our lesson is preparing to write.

For our writing today, we will have a success criteria, but we need to remember so many other things when we are writing.

So when we write, we always try to use capital letters at the start of sentences and a full stop or an exclamation mark at the end.

We always try to write our letters neatly on the line.

We use phonics to sound out and spell words, and for those words that we can't use our phonics for, we remember the spellings of some common exception words.

We also always read back our writing as we go, and at the end to make sure that it makes sense.

As well as that, here is the success criteria for today's lesson to write the middle of the story.

We are going to begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time.

Suddenly, after that, finally.

We will begin other sentences with adverbs, adding details to how actions happen.

Quickly, worriedly, speedily.

We will join two sentences together using and, and we'll use capital Ss at the start and end with a full stop or an exclamation mark.

We are going to be writing the middle of the story, and here it is.

I'll retell the middle of the story using my story mountain.

The next morning, Jack found a huge green beanstalk.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds and he saw a grand enchanted castle.

Sneakily, he crept inside and he saw a stinky, mean giant.

Jack stole a harp, a goose, and some gold.

That is a part of the story that you are going to write today.

We know that the next morning, Jack finds a beanstalk outside.

There is our beanstalk.

Imagine opening up your window to see an enormous, green beanstalk.

Can you show me on your face how you would feel? I would feel very shocked.

I will use an expanded noun phrase to describe the beanstalk.

Mighty, comma, green beanstalk.

Leafy, comma, green beanstalk.

Huge, comma, towering beanstalk.

We are now going to put that into a sentence.

The next morning, comma, Jack found a mighty, comma, green beanstalk, exclamation mark to show that shock that we had on our faces.

I wonder, could you choose your favourite expanded noun phrase or you could think of your own and put it into a sentence? Capital letter, the next morning, comma, Jack found a, mm, comma, mm, beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Pause the video now.

Great job.

We can use verbs and adverbs to show how the next events happen.

We know that Jack climbs up the beanstalk and he sees the castle, so mm, he, mm, up into the fluffy clouds and he saw an, mm mm, castle.

What type of words could we use? We will start with an adverb to describe how he climbed up the beanstalk with a verb.

So adverb starts our sentence.

He, mm, up into the fluffy clouds and he saw an adjective, comma, adjective, noun, which is our castle.

So we can have a look at a word bank to help us choose which words we're going to put in.

My word bank is separated by adverbs, verbs, and adjectives.

We have got quickly, excitedly, carefully.

Our verbs, climbed, clambered, raced.

And our adjectives to describe the castle, enormous, magical, grand.

Okay, let me put some of those into a sentence.

Excitedly, comma, he climbed up into the fluffy clouds and he saw an enormous, comma, magical castle.

Ooh, I wonder what sentence you are going to choose.

Could you take a photo? Get that camera out and take a photo of your word bank.

Choose your favourite adverb, choose your favourite verb, and choose two favourite adjectives.

Fantastic.

Let's see if this sentence works.

I'm starting off, capital letter.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds, and, joining together, he saw an enormous, magical castle.

I have got my capital letter and my fronted adverbial, followed by a comma, that fronted adverbial, showing how Jack clambered, capital letter, quickly, comma, he clambered, my choice of verb, up into the fluffy clouds and, I'm joining my two ideas together to explain what he saw, he saw an enormous magical castle.

There's my expanded noun phrase, and I have a full stop.

Can you plan your sentence starting, with an adverb, saying how he climbed, join together using and, and then think of an expanded noun phrase to describe the castle.

It would be great if you could include your capital letters, your commas, and your full stops, and your joining word.

Pause the video now.

Have you got that sentence in your head? Well done.

Make sure it's stuck there.

Next, Jack went inside the castle.

The verbs and adverbs that we choose help to tell the story.

Mm, he, mm, inside and he saw a, mm mm, giant.

Ooh! We are going to start again with an adverb, then we're going to have a verb to explain how Jack moved inside, and we're going to explain what he saw by describing the giant with adjective, comma, adjective, noun, an expanded noun phrase.

Again, let's have a look at a word bank.

Our adverbs, sneakily, quietly, carefully.

I've chosen those adverbs because he's going in quietly so no one hears him.

Then we have verbs.

He crept, he tiptoed, he snuck, and he saw a stinky, ferocious, or huge giant.

Or remember, you could choose your own.

I'm going to put some of these words into my sentence.

I need to start with an adverb, capital letter to start my sentence because it's a fronted adverbial and then I need a comma.

Carefully, comma, he tiptoed inside and he saw a stinky, comma, ferocious, giant, full stop.

Let's have a look at another example.

Capital letter, carefully, comma, he snuck inside and he saw an enormous, comma, lazy, giant, full stop.

What does that sentence include? What can you see? I can see a capital letter and a fronted adverbial to start my sentence, which is followed by a comma.

Carefully, my verb, snuck.

He snuck inside, my joining word and, he saw an enormous, comma, lazy giant, my expanded noun phrase, and I finish my sentence so I have a full stop.

Carefully, he snuck inside is idea one and is my joining word, he saw an enormous lazy giant is my idea two.

Now it's your turn to plan your sentence.

Start with an adverb.

How did he move inside, and he saw, describe the giant.

Pause the video now.

Have you got your sentence in your head? Amazing job.

Now we need to list the items that Jack stole.

We can put this into a sentence, but we need to be careful, because when we list more than two nouns, we can separate them with a comma, a bit like how we do in our expanded noun phrases.

So what did jack steal? He stole a talking harp, a golden goose and a sack of gold.

Here is the list, a talking harp, a golden goose, a sack of gold.

How can I put that into a sentence? Jack stole a talking harp, a golden goose, a sack of gold.

Hmm, doesn't look quite right or make quite enough sense.

I have put my nouns into a list, but my sentence does not make sense.

I need to make sure that I am listing those correctly.

The first nouns are separated by commas.

Can you see? Jack stole a talking harp, comma, a golden goose, but then when you come to the final listed noun, a sack of gold, you don't have another comma, you use the word and.

Jack stole a talking harp, comma, a golden goose and a sack of gold.

So I separate my first nouns with commas.

Just before I get to my last one, I don't use a comma, I use the word and.

Let's see if you can follow that and check which of these sentences is listing nouns correctly with the right punctuation.

Jack took a harp, a goose, and a sack of gold.

Jack took a harp, comma, a goose, comma, and a sack of gold.

Jack took a harp, comma, a goose and a sack of gold.

Which one of those is punctuated correctly? Could you pause the video now and let me know? Did you get it? The correctly punctuated sentence is C, Jack took a harp, comma, a goose and a sack of gold.

The first one is incorrect because even though we had and before the final noun, which is great, we didn't include a comma at all.

The next one is incorrect because it included too many commas.

Jack took a harp, comma, that's in the right place, a goose, comma, and, comma and and aren't friends, so it needs to be Jack took a harp, comma, a goose and a sack of gold.

Could you please say your sentence out loud, including the punctuation? If you want, you could add an adjective to describe each noun as well.

Jack took a talking harp, comma, a golden goose and a precious sack of gold.

Make sure you are saying your sentence with your punctuation.

Pause the video now.

Have you got it? Well done.

Rehearsing your sentences out loud really help you to remember what you are going to write, and you've done a great job at that, but now, we're going to bring it all together.

You are going to say your sentences.

For example, the next morning, Jack found a huge, green beanstalk.

Then you might say your sentence in a silly voice, like a high voice.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds and he saw a grand, magical castle.

Then you are going to say the sentences again, including your capital letters, commas, and full stops or exclamation marks.

Remember, you just have one exclamation mark to use today, the sentence that shows the most shock.

Are you ready with my punctuation? Capital letter, sneakily, comma, he crept inside and he saw a sneaky, comma, mean giant, full stop.

Then you're going to say the sentence to somebody else.

Jack stole a harp, a goose and a sack of gold.

Then you're going to whisper your sentence.

I'm going to whisper that sentence again to remember my punctuation.

Capital letter, Jack stole a harp, comma, a goose and a sack of gold, full stop.

You are going to follow those steps with all of your sentences, remembering to include the punctuation, remembering to include the things that you find challenging to help it stick in your brain.

So you are going to now rehearse the middle of your story aloud following those steps.

Have a look.

The next morning, comma, Jack found a mm mm beanstalk, exclamation mark, and so on.

You're going to keep going until you've rehearsed the whole middle of your story, and use what is on the screen to help you.

Pause the video now.

Amazing job.

Can I share one that I heard? and I'm going to use my punctuation so I'm ready to write.

Capital letter, the next morning, comma, capital letter, Jack found a gigantic, comma, green beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Capital letter, quickly, comma, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds and he saw an enormous, comma, magical castle, full stop.

Capital letter, sneakily, comma, he crept inside and he saw a smelly, comma, greedy giant, full stop.

Capital letter, Jack stole a sack of gold, comma, a goose and a talking harp, full stop.

Maybe that will give you a few more ideas.

Now, let's get ready to write.

We are going to move on to writing the middle of the story.

Let's remind ourselves of the success criteria before we start writing, and then we will read some sentences to check if they meet it.

We need to begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time.

Suddenly after that, finally, the next morning.

We'll also begin a sentence with other adverbs to show how the actions are done.

Quickly, worriedly, speedily.

We will also join two sentences together using and, and we'll use capital letters at the start of sentences and end with a full stop or an exclamation mark.

Let's have a look at the first sentence.

Capital letter, the next morning, comma, capital letter for Jack, woke up to find a gigantic, comma, green beanstalk.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time.

We have got the next morning.

Begin a sentence with an adverb.

Well, we have used a fronted adverbial, but not one of those.

We have used a fronted adverbials of time.

That's okay.

Join two sentences together using and.

We don't need to join every single sentence to create a compound sentence.

It's good to have different styles of sentences, like this one here, a short and snappy one to show that shock, that excitement, but we have used a capital letter at the start of my sentence.

The next morning, Jack woke up to find a gigantic, green beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Let's look at the next sentence.

Capital letter, sneakily, comma, he crept inside and he saw a smelly, comma, greedy giant sleeping, full stop.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time.

We have got fronted adverbial sneakily, but it's not showing when something happened, so we have been instead used an adverb to show how Jack crept.

We have joined two sentences together using and.

Sneakily, he crept inside and he saw a smelly, greedy giant sleeping.

And we have used the capital letter at the start.

Sneakily, he crept inside, and, I've joined ideas, so I keep going, he saw a smelly, greedy giant sleeping, full stop.

I think you are ready to help me with my writing.

I am ready to write the middle events of my story.

I have got my success criteria here stuck on my lined paper, ready to write.

Let's have a look at the success criteria.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time.

Suddenly, after that, finally.

Begin a sentence with an adverb.

Quickly, worriedly, speedily.

Join two sentences together using and.

Use capital letters at the start of sentences and end with a full stop or exclamation mark.

I have my story mountain to help me and I've already given it a start with my first sentence, Jack found a huge, green beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Now, I've just not explained when that is with a fronted adverbials of time.

Let me look back at my story mountain to see which one I added.

The next morning.

I'm going to add that in.

I'm going to do a little arrow and add that in.

Capital letter, the next, next, morning.

Morning, comma.

The next morning.

Even though I put something else at the start of my sentence, Jack still needs a capital letter because it's a proper noun.

The next morning, Jack found a huge green beanstalk.

That is much better, much more telling, helping to tell the story.

My next sentence.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds and, joining together, he saw a grand enchanted castle.

Okay, let's do the first part with my adverb quickly, and it's there on my success criteria.

Capital Q, quickly.

Quickly, he clambered.

Think about which verb you are going to use.

Clambered is actually on my story mountain.

He clambered, quickly, he clambered up, up into, in, t with an o for to.

Quickly, he clambered up into the clouds, the fluffy clouds, the fluffy.

Could you sound that out with me? F, ooh, uh, F, ee.

Remember, that Y often makes the E in adjectives, the fluffy clouds.

Could you sound out clouds for me? Cuh, ooh, ouds, clouds.

That ou spelling there likes the duh.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds.

That's my first idea, so I'm going to join that together, another idea with and to say what he saw, and, because I'm joining up, I don't need a new capital letter, he saw, saw.

What did he see? He saw a grand, enchanted castle.

Think about which adjectives you're using.

Grand.

Because I'm using another adjective, I need a comma.

Enchanted, that's a long one.

Can you help me sound it out? Eh, un, chant, e-d, enchanted castle.

Castle is quite a difficult spelling.

You might pronounce it as castle, so think carefully.

Cuh, then letter a, ss is being made by an s and a t, and my ooh ending.

Let's read it back.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds and he saw a grand, enchanted castle, full stop.

Now I'm going to talk about Jack sneaking in, so I'm going to use an adverb.

Sneakily, he crept inside and, another joining word, he saw a stinky, mean giant.

Capital letter, sneakily, comma, he saw we've already written, saw.

Oh, I've missed.

What am I doing? Sneakily, he saw? No, sneakily, he, how did he move? He crept, crept, crept.

Inside, inside, split diagraph, side, and now he saw, I'm mixing my two ideas, why it's so important to read back.

Sneakily, he crept inside and he saw a stinky, mean giant.

I've already got that on my story mountain.

Stinky, stinky, comma, mean, mean giant.

Oh my goodness.

Full stop.

Finally, we're going to list what Jack stole.

This is where we separate our nouns in a list with commas.

Capital letter, Jack, Jack stole.

St, oh, split diagraph, ole, what did he steal? Hmm, it doesn't really matter which order you choose.

I'm gonna start with the harp.

Jack stole a harp.

Before I do my next noun, I need a comma.

Jack stole a harp, a goose.

Goose, goose.

I'm using my picture to help me and, and, and, well, I've run outta space.

I'm just going to go here, and gold.

Gold, gold.

Full stop.

Let me check that, Jack stole a harp, comma, a goose, I don't need another comma because I'm getting to my final noun, and gold.

Amazing.

Let's just check.

Have I began some sentences with fronted adverbials of time? I've used the next morning.

Have I began other sentences with with other adverbs? Quickly, sneakily, yes, I have.

I've joined two of my sentences together with and.

Quickly, he clambered up into the fluffy clouds and he saw a grand, enchanted castle.

Sneakily, He crept inside and he saw a stinky, mean giant.

And all of my sentences start with a capital letter and end with either an exclamation mark or a full stop.

I think you're ready to write yours.

Thank you so much for helping me.

Thank you so much for helping me with my writing.

I think you're really ready to go.

You are going to write the middle of the story, explaining where Jack goes and what he does next.

Don't forget to check your success criteria as you go.

Pause the video now.

Well done.

I'm so impressed with your writing.

Let's have a look at this example before you double check your success criteria.

I am searching for fronted adverbials of time.

Straight away, the next morning, I've got it.

That was one that I almost forgot.

The next morning, Jack woke up to find a gigantic, comma, green beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Quickly, there's another adverb, he climbed up into the fluffy clouds.

At the top, he saw a grand, majestic castle.

I love that.

Sneakily, he crept inside and he saw a smelly, greedy giant sleeping.

That's a lot of adverbs that we've used there.

We have joined two sentences together using and.

Sneakily, he crept inside and he saw a smelly, greedy giant sleeping.

We have started all of our sentences with a capital letter.

I've moved along to the end of my idea to check each one for a full stop or that one exclamation mark.

Can you now go through each sentence and double check you have met your success criteria? And don't worry if you haven't.

This is the perfect time to check your work and meet it now.

Pause the video.

Amazing.

Are you happy with your writing? You really should be.

Well done.

We have learned so much today.

We have learned that nouns can be written in the list using commas and using and before the final noun, such as the gold, comma, a hen or a goose and a harp.

Adverbs can be used at the start of sentences, followed by a comma.

Exclamation marks can be used to show a strong emotion, such as shock at finding an enormous beanstalk.

Powerful verbs can be used to describe what characters do, like crept or snuck.

Two ideas can be joined using a joining word and.

Well done being a such a fantastic author.

Fantastic.

I hope to see you again soon.

Bye.