Lesson video

Hi everybody, I'm Ms. Gardner.

And welcome to your next lesson from our unit, the Happy Prince: reading and narrative writing.

I'm really looking forward to today's lesson 'cause we are going to be writing our final section of our narrative text.

So thank you for joining me on today's lesson and let's get started.

In today's lesson from our unit, the Happy Prince: reading and narrative writing, we are writing the resolution of our story.

So, your learning outcome is, I can write the resolution of the Happy Prince.

So let's start by looking at the keywords.

We'll do, my turn, your turn.

Text flow, paragraph, direct speech and complex sentence.

Let's have a look at what these mean.

Text flow is how a text is written to keep the reader engaged.

A paragraph is a distinct section of a piece of writing indicated by a new line and an indentation.

We write direct speech to show that a character is speaking out loud in a text.

And a complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and subordinate clause.

So there are two sections for our lesson today.

In the first, we'll be preparing to write and in the second we'll be writing a resolution.

So let's start with preparing to write.

The Happy Prince narrative can be structured like this, an opening, a buildup, a climax and then the resolution.

We've already written our opening, buildup and climax so in this lesson we are writing the resolution.

The purpose of the resolution is to do all of these, resolve a story and allow readers the chance to reflect and think about what they've read.

So let's review the key moments of the resolution in chronological order.

So firstly, an important man notices the prince is looking unhappy and is missing its jewels and gold leaves.

He orders the statue to be removed immediately.

The prince and the bird are thrown into a furnace.

God asks Bird and Prince to look after the city's people together and they are happily reunited in death.

So these are the key moments of the resolution in chronological order.

But as you can see, there isn't much detail right now.

When we come to write to the resolution, we'll be describing key moments using the ambitious vocabulary from our plan to write this, describe these moments in a lot more detail to create that vivid image for the reader.

So checking for understanding.

Can you put the key moments of the resolution in the correct order? You have the four moments on the screen now.

You need to number them one to four.

So pause the video now and off you go.

Okay, so number one, an important man notices the prince is looking unhappy and is missing its jewels and its gold leaves.

Number two, he orders the statue to be removed immediately.

Number three, the prince and the bird are thrown into a furnace.

And number four, God asks bird and prince to look after the city's people together and they are happily reunited in death.

Well done.

So let's review the notes from our plan.

So the first key moment, an important man notices the prince looking unhappy and it's missing its jewels and gold leaves.

So some precise verbs and adverbs and adjectives that we generated were strolling calmly so describing that important man as he walked through the city; closely inspected and then the statue was missing its shimmering jewels, an adjective to describe its jewels shimmering.

So some dialogue.

The man said, "The happy prince doesn't look happy at all." And we can use a more precise reported clause there.

He exclaimed in disappointment.

So he said, "We can't have a shabby prince guarding our city." The next key moment was that the man ordered the prince and the bird to be thrown away into a furnace." So, some precise vocabulary we generated was, tossed the dishevelled statue.

Dishevelled is a synonym for shabby.

The ferocious furnace, some alliteration there to describe how hot and dangerous furnace was.

And the prince crumbled into dust.

The dialogue, "Take the statue down now and melt it immediately." That's what the man said.

And then a synonym for said in the reported clause, he ordered or commanded.

And then finally God asked bird and prince to look after the city's people together and they happily reunited in deaths.

And precise vocabulary we generated was, they were joyfully reunited; God's sacred garden, that's where they went and they were forever guarding their beloved city.

So we want to think about including the notes from our plan in our resolution, but as part of full sentences.

So, this sentence needs to include the following: ambitious vocabulary so precise adjectives, adverbs and verbs, which we can definitely include 'cause we have that on our plan already.

Fronted adverbials of time, place and manner, paragraphs, sentences in the past tense, direct speech and we want to think about text flow.

So we need to include a range of simple, compound and complex sentences including a relative complex sentence.

So let's recap some of these then.

We know about two types of subordinate clause, an adverbial clause and a relative clause.

So let's think about an adverbial clause.

For example, as the prince's heart crumbled into dust, the bird's body turned to ash.

As the prince's heart crumbled into dust is our adverbial clause because it begins with the subordinating conjunction, as and it doesn't make sense by itself.

It had to be joined with the main clause to become part of a complex sentence.

There are lots more subordinating conjunctions we could use such as, as, when and while.

We also can include a relative clause.

For example, the statue which had lost its dazzling jewels was no longer smiling.

Which had lost its dazzling jewels, is a relative clause.

It begins with a relative pronoun, which and it adds extra detail to the noun phrase or the noun, the statue.

And the relative pronouns we can use are which and who and they start a relative clause.

In a relative complex sentence, the relative clause can interrupt the main clause after the now or the noun phrase it links to.

So for example, here we have main clause, an important man noticed something strange about the prince.

But we can interrupt this main clause with a relative clause to add extra information about the man, about the noun.

So an important man who was strolling through the quiet city notice something strange about the prince.

Who was strolling through the quiet city, is the relative clause.

It doesn't make sense by itself.

If you removed the relative clause from this complex sentence, the main clause would still make sense.

So an important man noticed something strange about the prince.

It still makes sense even without the relative clause 'cause the relative clause kind of drops in and interrupts the main clause to add extra information.

So you can see here, the main clause has been split.

So you have the first part of the main clause, a comma, a relative subordinate clause, another comma, and then the rest of the main clause.

And this forms a relative complex sentence.

So we want to think about including that and a relative complex sentence in our writing today.

So checking for understanding true or false.

This relative complex sentence is punctuated correctly.

He approached the statue which had a lifeless bird at its feet and he inspected it closely.

Pause the video now.

That is false.

Can you use A or B to justify your answer? A, commas must go either side of a relative clause when it interrupts the main clause in a complex sentence or B, commas are needed in a complex sentence to separate the main and subordinate clauses.

Pause the video now.

That is A.

We should have a comma before the which, relative pronoun and at the end of the which, relative clause so after at its feet we need a comma because that is the relative clause and we need to show that the relative claws where it starts and ends with a comma.

Well done! Dialogue is the written conversation between two characters or more within a narrative.

It is used in our writing to help move the action forward in a narrative.

Here is the most important dialogue in the resolution.

The happy prince doesn't look very happy at all, the important man said.

We can't have a shabby prince guarding our city so he ordered, take the statue down now and melt it.

We use direct speech to show that a character is speaking out loud.

Each time there is a new speaker, you need to start a new line.

And direct speech is shown to the reader using inverted commas and they look like this.

If you see inverted commas around the speech, you know these are words that the character is saying out loud.

The inverted commas tell us where the words the character said begin and end.

So for example, the happy prince doesn't look very happy at all.

There is inverted commas on either side of that speech so we know those are the words being said out loud.

Exclaimed the man is the reporting clause that tells us who said the speech and the reporting clause does not need inverted commas either side of it.

So, direct speech can also be part of a complex sentence.

Often when someone is speaking, they're also doing something else at the same time.

We can use the subordinating conjunction, as when two actions are happening at the same time.

We can also use as in a direct speech sentence to add extra detail about how the character was speaking.

So let's have a look at an example.

So let's look at some direct speech and an adverbial clause.

The happy prince doesn't look very happy at all, exclaimed the man.

That's our direct speech.

As he closely inspected the statue is our adverbial clause.

The first idea can be stretched with the second idea to make one complex sentence.

The happy prince doesn't look very happy at all, exclaimed the man as he closely inspected the statue.

So here in this complex sentence we have speech first, then we have a synonym for said, exclaimed and then we have an adverbial subordinate clause to add extra detail to show what the man was doing as he spoke.

You could also write this out as speech second.

So you could say, as the man closely inspected the statue, he exclaimed, the happy prince doesn't look very happy at all.

So here we have the adverbial clause first.

We have a synonym for said, and then we have the speech second after the reporting clause, either work.

So checking for understanding, which speech sentence is correctly punctuated: A, B, or C? Have a look really carefully at the inverted commas and the punctuation in each of these sentences.

Pause the video now and off you go.

Okay, so the sentence that's correctly punctuated is C.

That's right.

It has inverted comm either side of the speech, take the statue down now.

It also has punctuation at the end of the speech.

You can see the exclamation mark after now.

So it's correctly punctuated.

Well done! It's time for task A.

You need to say the first few sentences of the resolution.

Make sure you include the following for text flow: precise and ambitious vocabulary from your plan, you've got to make sure you're using your plan in this task, direct speech and a range of sentence types, including a relative complex sentence.

You can use these sentence scaffolds to help you.

The next morning, an important man and you can finish that sentence.

And then he approached the shabby statue comma which and that's the start of your relative complex sentence.

So pause the video now and off you go.

Okay, well done! Welcome back.

Let's go through these.

I'm going to read the sentences out loud now and you can be checking if I've included those three points.

The next morning, an important man noticed something strange about the prince.

He approached the shabby statue which had a small lifeless bird at his feet and inspected it closely.

In shock, he exclaimed the happy prince does not look very happy at all.

So, have I included ambitious vocabulary from my plan? I have, I had strange, shabby, lifeless, inspected and exclaimed, all of those from my plan so I've included them.

Direct speech, my final sentence, I've used speech second.

I said, in shock he exclaimed, the happy prince does not look very happy at all.

And then have I included a relative complex sentence.

I have, I said he approached the shabby statue which had a small lifeless bird at its feet.

That's my relative clause and inspected it closely.

So yes, I have also included a relative complex sentence.

Thank you for helping me check over my sentences and well done on task A.

It's now time for the second section of our lesson where we are going to be writing the resolution.

When we write, we always try to do these things: plan and say each sentence before we write it.

Use punctuation where we know the rules so that includes the speech punctuation in speech sentences.

Showcase each sentence type we know, simple, compound and complex.

Write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting.

Use spelling strategies to spell words accurately and check and improve our writing when we think we have finished.

So here is the success criteria you are going to use for your writing today.

I have written at least two fronted adverbials.

I have written included a relative complex sentence.

I have used paragraphs to structure my writing and I have included direct speech sentences with correct punctuation.

So there were three key moments in your plan to describe in the resolution.

The first one was the important man notices the prince is looking unhappy and is missing its jewels and gold leaves.

Then, the man orders the prince and the bird to be thrown away into a furnace.

And then finally, God asks bird and prince to look after the city's people together and they're happily reunited in death.

You can start a new paragraph to signal the start of a new idea or key moment.

But remember, it is important to indent at the beginning of each paragraph.

So, it's really clear that this is the start of a new paragraph.

So let's have a look at a model section.

I'm going to read it out loud and you can be looking at the success criteria and checking I've included everything I need to.

The next morning, the frost slowly began to melt.

An important man who was strolling through the quiet city notice something strange about the prince.

As he and closely inspected the sad looking statue, he exclaimed the happy prince does not look very happy at all.

With disappointment, he realised that the prince was missing his shimmering jewels and bright gold leaves.

We can't have a shabby prince guarding our city, he mumbled to himself.

So this is the first paragraph of my resolution.

Have I written at least two frontal adverbials? I have.

I have the next morning and with disappointment so I can tick that off my success criteria.

What else can I take of my success criteria? Have I included a complex sentence? You can see it in green.

An important man who was strolling through the quiet city noticed something strange about the prince.

Who was strolling through the quiet city is my relative clause in my relative complex sentence.

So I can give myself a tick.

And have I included anything else from my success criteria? I have direct speech.

In this paragraph, I've included speech second, I said, he exclaimed the happy prince does not look very happy at all.

And I've included speech first, we can't have a shabby prince guarding our city, he mumbled to himself.

Both with accurate punctuation so I can give that a tick.

Now is the next paragraph.

Take the statue down now and melt it immediately.

We can't have a shabby thing like that, this protecting our city, ordered the man.

Quickly, a group of men tossed the statue and the bird into a ferocious furnace and they were left to melt away.

The prince's heart turned to ash and the bod bird's body turned to dust.

Finally, God asked for them to both look after the city's people forever.

Overjoyed that they could be together, they agreed.

So I've started a new paragraph and you can see clearly the indent at the beginning.

So I can give that a tick of my success criteria.

I've used paragraphs to structure my writing.

What else can I tick off? I have written another two fronted adverbials.

This time a fronted adverbial of manner, quickly and a fronted adverbials of time, finally.

So I can tick that off my success criteria.

I have also included speech first again.

I've said take the statue down now and melted it immediately.

We can't have a shabby thing like that protecting our city, ordered the man.

I used a synonym for set ordered in my reporting clause so I can give myself a tick.

It is now time for task B.

You are going to write the resolution of the happy prince.

Make sure you use your success criteria and your plan to help you structure your paragraphs.

So pause the video now and off you go.

Well done everybody.

Welcome back.

In a moment, you're going to read your resolution of the happy prince again.

You'll use your success criteria to help you check that you have included everything you needed to in this section.

So if you have written at least two fronted adverbials, you can give yourself a tick.

If you've included a relative complex sentence, tick.

If you have used paragraphs to structure your writing, you can give yourself a tick.

And if you've included direct speech, sentences with the correct punctuation, give yourself a tick.

So pause the video now and off you go reading back through your resolution.

Okay, well done everybody.

Well done today.

Here is a summary of everything we've learned.

We use notes from our plan to form full sentences.

Using a range of sentence types, simple, compound and complex improves text flow for the reader.

A relative complex sentence is formed of a main clause that is interrupted by a relative clause.

And we use direct speech to show that a character is speaking out loud and to move the action forward.

Direct speech can be part of a complex sentence.

Great job today everybody.

Well done!.