Lesson video

Hello there! I'm Mrs Howley and this is Cedric.

I was just reading my diary from yesterday.

It says, I was very upset today, because Cedric ate all of the chocolate cake I made.

Didn't you, Cedric? He made me laugh though with lots of jokes.

It's not funny eating somebody else's chocolate cake, is it? Cedric! Let's see what we're learning today.

All about diaries! In this lesson we're going to identify the features of a recount and a diary entry, in particular.

We're going to play a game, then we're going to do some shared reading.

Then we're going to explore the text and then we're going to build our toolkit for writing a diary.

You'll need an exercise book or some paper, a pen or a pencil and your brilliant brain.

If you need to collect any of those things, pause the video now, then press play, when you're ready.

We're going to play a game now, called Tell and Mime.

Have you played it before? It's really simple, so don't worry, if you haven't.

Cedric is going to tell me parts of Ma Liang's diary entry, then I'm going to mime the feelings and maybe some of the actions of that part of the diary entry.

And maybe you can guess which part it is.

Okay, off you go, Cedric.

Got it! Shall I show you that again? What did you think it was? It was the moment when Ma Liang first used the magic paintbrush and he was feeling amazed.

I'll try another one.

Go on Cedric, which part now? Okay.

Shall I try that again? Which part do you think it was? It was the part, where he is thrown in jail and he was feeling desperate for that magic paintbrush.

Okay, I'll try one more, okay? Got it.

I'll try that again, join in if you like.

Which moment do you think it was in his diary entry? It was the moment, when he had the idea of tricking the greedy kind and he felt so excited.

Maybe you could try play the Play and Mime game with sections of the diary entry with a teddy or someone at home.

We're going to do some reading today.

And we're going to unpick exactly what makes a really good diary entry.

When we're reading, we need to make sure we're using these strategies.

That we've good our magnet eyes looking at the letters.

That we say the sounds and then we blend them together.

We can also look out for some of our tricky words.

And when we get to the end of a sentence, if it doesn't make sense, we're going to go back and read it again.

Today's text is a diary entry, but it's diary entry from the greedy king.

I wonder what he's going to say in his diary.

Let's have a read together.

It starts with dear diary.

What an awful day.

What an awful day! Oh dear, I don't think he has had a good day.

I was, one of our tricky words, I was so excited about using the, another one of our tricky words, the magic paintbrush.

I was so excited about using the magic paintbrush.

I thought I was, one of our tricky words, going to be rich.

I thought I was going to be rich.

Sounds like it didn't go well for him.

Let's have a look at the next sentence.

First, I asked Ma Liang.

I know that's the characters name, because it got capital letters.

First, I asked Ma Liang to paint.

First, I asked Ma Liang to paint me a golden mountain, but he painted a sea.

First, I asked Ma Liang to paint me a golden mountain but he painted a sea.

Before we read the rest of the greedy king's diary entry, let's see, if we can unpick the toolkit for writing a really fantastic diary entry.

In that first sentence, what an awful day, it sums up exactly what he's going to be writing about.

It tells you what his day was like overall and why he's writing his diary.

I'm going to call that the introduction.

Remember, we've got an introduction in Ma Liang's diary entry.

What an awful day! Next, I've spotted that the writer has included some thoughts and feelings.

It tells you that he was excited and that he thought he was going to be rich.

Thoughts and feelings.

I love reading diaries that have thoughts and feelings in.

It really hooks me in as a reader.

Next, I've spotted that we've got a tie word, that helps tell us what order things happened in.

This one is first.

I wonder, if we can spot any time words in the next part of the text.

Let's read it together.

Why would I want a sea? Why would I want a sea? Next, we set off to the mountain on a big boat.

Next, we set off to the mountain on a big boat.

The sea was calm but I felt nervous.

All of a sudden, a giant wave came, but diagraph a, came.

All of a sudden, a giant wave came over the boat.

All of a sudden, a giant wave came over the boat.

The sea was cold and I sank under the water.

It was the worst day ever.

I wonder, if you can spot any of the parts of the toolkit for creating a brilliant diary entry in the second part of the text.

Let's have a look.

Can we spot any words that mark time? We've got next.

Next, that shows us when.

We've also got a group of words that shows us when.

I wonder, if you can spot it? We've also got some thoughts and feelings again.

How does the greedy king feel, when he's in the boat? It says, the sea was calm but I felt.

Also the writer uses description of the senses.

How did the greedy king feel, when he was in the sea? How did the sea feel? It says, the sea was? And at the end of the text we've got a conclusion how he feels now, looking back on that day.

How does he feel about the day? It was the worst day ever.

I'm going to draw a picture and some notes now to help me show what I've learned so far about the toolkit.

I'm going to use the first section of the text.

Okay, so in this section of the text we've got some time words, they're really useful in the recount, because they show us what order things happened in.

So, we've got the word first in the first part of the greedy king's diary.

He tells us what he did first.

We've also got some of the character's thoughts.

So I'm going to draw a thought bubble.

And what does he think? It says, I thought I was going to be rich.

So I'm going to draw a bag of money and some coins to show the character's thoughts there.

And then, we've also got the character's feelings.

I'm going to draw a heart to represent the feelings.

And it says, I was so excited.

So that recount has included the character's feelings, as well as their thoughts.

Now, also from our toolkit we know that in a diary entry we want to use words, like I and me.

Because a character is writing the diary entry themselves.

And later in the text, you might also spot use of the senses by the writer to make the reader feel like they were there.

Now it's your turn.

I'd like you to finish off my toolkit picture.

What else can you add to it? Words, phrases.

Use the second part of the text as well.

Can you spot some time words to show the order that things happened in? Can you spot any thoughts? Maybe you could draw them into a thought bubble.

Can you spot any feelings? Have you seen the word I, we or me to show that the character's writing from their point of view? And has the character written about what they've experienced using their senses? Draw it down or draw a picture of anything you can spot.

Pause the video now and have a go.

Press play, when you're ready.

Woazza! How our toolkit is packed full now of things we're going to use in our writing to write brilliant diary entries.

Later in this unit, we're going to be writing Ma Liang's diary and you might want to use them when you're writing your own diaries as well.

Absolutely brilliant! We can't wait to get started with you on our writing in the next lesson! Keep writing in that diary.

Imma see you soon.

Bye!.