Lesson video

Hello everybody, I'm Miss Corbert, and thank you so much for learning with me today.

Today's lesson is called Writing Descriptive Sentences about the setting in "Anna Hibiscus' Song." So for this lesson, it will be great if you could have your copy of the book, "Anna Hibiscus' Song," ready to help you, remind you of the setting.

And it would be great if your copy could look just like mine.

You also need something to write with and something to write on, which would be great if you could have lined paper.

As well as the success criteria nearby.

Pause the video now to make sure you've got everything.

Fantastic, I think we're ready to get started.

Here is the outcome for today's lesson.

I can join two ideas together to write a descriptive sentence, and here are the key words that will help us to get there.

Are you ready to repeat them after me? Remember, don't worry if you don't know what they all mean because you will by the end of the lesson.

Are you ready? Sense, expanded noun phrase, sentence, verb, joining word.

Well done, thank you so much for joining in with me.

Let's start with our first part of the lesson, writing descriptive sentences, and then we'll join two ideas together using and.

When we are describing the setting of somewhere, we can imagine that we are there, so we can use our senses to do that.

Here are our senses.

I wonder if you can remember what they all are using those images.

Pause the video now.

Did you remember them all? We have got, my turn, your turn, hearing, smelling, seeing, feeling, and tasting, well done.

Here are some expanded noun phrases that can help to describe the setting in the story.

I have put them on a senses map because I have all of my senses and then my expanded noun phrases, which is when I've expanded or stretched the description of my noun using two adjectives.

So look what I can see.

Speedy, green gecko, I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

(sniffs) What can I smell? Oh, a smoky, oily engine.

What can I taste? Smooth, sweet yams. What can I touch, what can I feel? Soft, ripe, mangoes.

(gasps) Amazing, what great descriptions.

And our expanded noun phrase has an adjective, comma, adjective, noun.

Can you say that with me? Adjective, comma, adjective, noun, well done.

When we use more than one adjective to describe a noun, they must be separated by a comma.

This creates an expanded noun phrase.

Hmm, I have got the car radio as my noun.

Which sense could I use to describe the car radio? I'm going to use hearing, I think, and I'm going to think of an expanded noun phrase.

Adjective, comma, adjective, noun.

So I have got an adjective, lively because the music that's playing is lively, lively, comma, echoing car radio, adjective, comma, adjective, noun, lively, echoing car radio.

I've got my adjective, lively, my comma to separate because then I have another adjective, echoing.

Then I have my noun, car radio.

Which expanded noun phrase has the comma in the correct place? Remember, Izzy is reminding us, if you have more than one adjective, you must separate them with a comma.

Hmm, we have got speedy green gecko, speedy, comma, green, comma, gecko.

And we have got speedy, comma, green gecko.

Which one of those expanded noun phrases has the comma in the right place? Pause the video now and choose one and explain why.

Well done if you pointed to speedy, comma, green gecko, the first one, speedy green gecko, doesn't have any commas separating it.

The next one, speedy comma green, it has the comma between the adjectives, but then it has a comma between the adjective and noun.

Remember, we have adjective, comma, adjective, noun, which is why we've got speedy, comma, green gecko, well done.

Now we want to put these phrases into sentences.

A simple sentence is one idea that makes complete sense and must include a verb.

So let's have a look at one.

I can hear a noisy, chirping bird.

I can see my expanded noun phrase, noisy, chirping bird, but I've put it into a whole sentence.

I can hear a noisy, chirping bird.

A simple sentence contains at least one verb, I can hear.

Hear is our sense verb, and can is also a verb.

I can hear a noisy, chirping bird.

Because remember a verb is something that we do, a doing or a being word.

So something that the action is hearing.

A simple sentence starts with a capital letter and ends with a punctuation mark.

There's my capital letter for I can hear a noisy, chirping bird, full stop.

So here's my sentence here.

I would like you to get your pointing fingers ready.

And can you point to the capital letter and full stop in this sentence? Can you point to it for me? I hope you're pointing to my capital letter I.

Then I'm going to read it, I can taste a ripe, juicy mango.

That's an idea that makes sense and it has a verb, so it needs a full stop at the end, well done.

Now can you find the verb in this sentence? I taste a ripe, juicy mango.

What is the action, what's something that we do? Can you point to it in five seconds? Five, four, three, two, and one.

Have you pointed to it? Well done if you pointed to taste, that is an action, something that we do.

Now, can you find the expanded noun phrase in this sentence? I can taste a ripe, juicy mango.

Remember, an expanded noun phrase is when we're stretching out, expanding the description of the noun.

So maybe search for the noun and then look for its descriptions.

I would like you to find the expanded noun phrase in five, four, three, two, one, and zero.

Did you find it, what is it? Ripe, juicy mango.

And I can see my comma between my two adjectives.

So I am going to imagine that I am Anna.

I'm going to describe what I can see.

I've got the book in front of me for ideas, as well as my senses map.

Hmm, I can see, I can see a smokey, oily engine.

(gasps) The oil is dripping out and the smoke is clouding.

I can see a smoky, oily engine.

I have my capital and and my full stop.

I have my expanded noun phrase and I've got a verb, see.

Now you'll imagine you are Anna and you are going to describe what you can hear.

Can you use your senses map to help you? I can hear a, mm mm mm, adjective, comma, adjective, noun.

Pause the video now.

Well done, here's one idea that I heard.

I can hear a noisy, tuneful bird.

It is my turn again, I'm going to imagine I am Anna and I'm going to describe what I can smell and I will use my senses map and the book to help me.

Hmm, let me think.

I can smell a fresh, floral flower.

I can smell a fresh, floral flower.

Now it's your turn to imagine you are Anna, and you'll describe what you can taste.

And can you use your senses map to help you? I can taste a, mm mm mm.

Adjective, comma, adjective, noun.

Pause the video.

Well done, here's one example.

I can taste a juicy, comma, sweet mango.

We will now write two descriptive sentences that we have said.

Have a look at the success criteria to help us.

I have used a capital letter and a full stop.

I have included a verb.

Can see, hear, smell, taste, or touch.

I have used an expanded noun phrase.

So I need two sentences, let's have a look.

Capital letter, I can see a smoky, comma, oily engine, full stop.

Capital letter, I can smell a fresh, comma, floral flower, full stop.

Okay, I have got my capital letter and my full stop at the start and end of each sentence.

I have included verbs, can see and can smell, and I have included expanded noun phrases from my senses map, smokey, oily engine, fresh, floral flower, fantastic.

I'm ready to write my descriptive sentences.

I have got my success criteria stuck in on some lined paper.

I've also got with me my senses map.

So it'd be great if you could have yours ready too.

So I'm going to use my senses map to write my descriptive sentences.

I've already written my first one, but let's check our success criteria first.

I have used a capital letter and a full stop for each sentence.

I have included a verb, so that might be see, hear, smell, taste, or touch or feel.

I have used an expanded noun phrase.

Adjective, comma, adjective, noun.

Speedy, comma, green gecko, noisy, comma, tuneful birds, and so on.

I have already written my first sentence.

Let's just have a check of it.

I can see a speedy, green gecko.

I have got my capital letter and my full stop.

I have got a verb, see, and I've got my expanded noun phrase, speedy, green gecko, but adjective, comma, adjective, noun, what is missing? Adjective, comma, I need a comma in between my two adjectives.

Now I'm going to write my next sentence.

I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

I ran out of space on this line.

So I'm gonna skip a line and start a new one just in case I make a mistake.

I can hear, my first word is I, my next word is can, which I've already written, but we can sound it out.

Sound it out with me, C-A-N, can.

And I've left a finger space.

I can hear, H-EAR, hear, H.

Then I need my tri-graph, EAR, E-A-R, H-EAR, hear.

I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

So for gecko, I put a, just to show that there's one gecko, but because I've written on my sense map noisy, tuneful birds, I can hear more than one.

So I don't need a, I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

Now I could sound out those adjectives or I could copy them from my senses map, which is what I'm going to do.

Noisy, N-OI, then my S is making a Z, then EE, noisy.

Often my adjectives ending in an EE sound is spelled with a Y, noisy, adjective, comma, adjective, tuneful, T-U-NE, tune, F-U-L, tuneful.

I can hear noisy, comma, tuneful birds.

I can copy it from my senses map and sound it out if I want to.

Finger space, B-I-R-D-S, birds to show there's more than one.

Let's read it back.

I can hear noisy, comma, tuneful birds.

What do I need at the end of my sentence? A full stop, let's check the success criteria.

I have used a capital letter and a full stop, capital letter, full stop, capital letter, full stop.

I have included a verb in each sentence to make it a sentence.

See and hear.

I have used an expanded noun phrase, speedy, comma, green gecko.

And can you see it? Noisy, comma, tuneful birds.

Thank you for helping me with my writing.

And now it's your turn.

Now it's your turn to write two descriptive sentences using your senses map, just like you helped me to do.

Don't forget your success criteria and check it.

Pause the video now.

Fantastic, let's see if these sentences met our success criteria.

I can see a smoky, oily engine.

(gasps) I can see a capital letter and a full stop and I can see a verb and expanded noun phrase.

I can smell a fresh, floral flower, full stop.

We have two capital letters and two full stops for our two sentences.

We have included verbs, can see and can smell.

And we have two expanded noun phrases, one per sentence, smoky, comma, oily engine, fresh, comma, floral flower.

I wonder, did you manage to check and meet your success criteria? Could you pause the video now and check? If you haven't got everything, don't worry.

I'm sure you can add it in.

Pause the video now.

Fantastic job, what amazing writing.

I think we are ready to join two ideas together using and.

The joining word and can join two simple sentences.

There are some of our key words, my turn and your turn.

Joining word, well done.

The joining word we're going to use is and.

And that block is going to help us do that building to join those sentences together.

And we know that a simple sentence is a one idea that makes complete sense, including a verb.

Let's have a look at this simple sentence.

I can see a smoky, oily engine, full stop.

Now I want another idea.

I can smell a fresh, floral flower.

At the moment, that is two simple sentences, two separate ideas on their own, each with a capital letter and a full stop.

I want to try and join those two ideas together because they're related.

It's all about describing the setting.

Hmm, I can hear a smoky, oily engine.

(gasps) The full stop has gone and it's been replaced by one of those blocks.

I can hear a smoky, oily engine and, there's our joining word, I can smell a fresh, floral flower.

We have joined those two ideas together to make one sentence.

When we do this, when we join two simple ideas together with and to make one sentence, we call it a compound sentence.

We can use the joining word and to help us build on our first idea.

I can taste a sweet, juicy mango.

That's my first idea.

Keep it in your head.

When we build on a sentence using and, we are adding more information to the first idea, so describing it, something else.

I can feel a hard, spiky branch, that's my second idea.

It's building on my ideas by giving a more detailed description of the setting.

The second idea is related to the first idea, and it is adding to what we already know.

So I am going to join those two ideas together.

Right now I have two capital letters and two full stops.

I can taste a sweet juicy, mango, that full stop is going to go and it's going to be swapped with and, and I can feel a hard spiky branch, full stop.

So it's one long sentence.

I can taste a sweet, juicy mango and I can feel a hard spiky branch, full stop.

Now, normally we would take away our second capital letter, but we can't with this one because the word I always needs a capital letter.

We are now going to join two simple sentences together, the ones that you've already written, with a joining word and, to create one compound sentence.

Look at this example and see if it's met our success criteria.

Let's read the success criteria.

I have used a capital letter and a full stop.

I have included a verb.

I have used an expanded noun phrase and I have joined two ideas using the joining word and, let's check.

I can see a smoky, oily engine and I can smell a fresh, floral flower.

I'm going to get my finger on the first part of my sentence I, there's my capital letter.

Then I'm gonna keep reading to get to the end of my idea.

I can see a smoky, oily engine, my full stop has been taken away and replaced with and, and I can see a fresh, floral flower, full stop.

I have included a verb, I can see and I can smell.

I have used an expanded noun phrase, the ones that we've already written in our simple sentences.

Smoky, oily engine and fresh, floral flower.

And I have joined two ideas using the joining word and.

This is the new part of our learning.

Make sure that you've swapped your and for your full stop.

So you've only got one sentence.

I think it's your turn to write your sentence.

But first you're gonna help me with mine.

I am ready to write my sentence.

I have got my two sentences that I've already written and my success criteria.

I have used the capital letter and a full stop, I have included a verb, I have used an expanded noun phrase, I have joined two ideas using the joining word and.

Now for my writing, I'm going to take my two sentences and join them together.

If you'd like, you could choose two different expanded noun phrases to put into your joining sentence.

So let's see what we need to do when we are joining and.

I can see a speedy, green gecko and I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

So because I'm using the same one, I can just copy really carefully.

I C-A-N, can, S-EE, see, there's my verb, I can see a speedy, comma, green gecko, G-E-CK-O, gecko.

I can see a speedy, green gecko.

I finished my idea, but do I need a full stop yet? No, because I'm going to join my ideas together.

So I replace my full stop with the joining word and.

So I'm going to start a new line because I run outta space.

I'm going to leave a line just in case I make a mistake.

And, sound out and with me, A-N-D, and.

I can see a speedy green gecko and.

Now normally we would take away our capital letter, but I always need a capital letter, even if it's in the middle of the sentence like it will be now.

I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

I C-A-N, can, H-EAR, hear noisy, I've already spelled it, N-OI-S-Y, noisy, comma, tuneful, I'm running outta space, so I'm going to start a new line, birds.

Let's read it back.

I can see a speedy, green gecko and I can hear noisy, tuneful birds.

I've joined my two sentences to make one using and, but what do I need now I've got to the end? A full stop, fantastic.

Let's just check our success criteria.

Then it's your turn.

I have used a capital letter and a full stop.

I'm going to put one finger on my capital letter, then I'm going to put my other finger and leave it there when I get to the end of my idea, I can see a speedy, green gecko, that is one idea, but it's not the end because I've joined it with and, and I can hear noisy, tuneful birds, full stop.

I've got it, I have included a verb.

Can you see the verbs, the things that we do? See and hear.

I have used an expanded noun phrase, speedy, green gecko, adjective, comma, adjective, noun, noisy, tuneful birds, adjective, comma, adjective, noun.

And thank you, thanks to your help, I have managed to join two ideas using the joining word and.

I think you are ready to write your joining sentence with and.

Now you've helped me with my compound sentence, you are going to write your own sentence by joining your two ideas together using and.

Don't forget to check your success criteria.

Pause the video now.

What fantastic writing.

Let's see if this, we know that this sentence already, we've checked it, has met its success criteria, capital letter and full stop, a verb, expanded noun phrase and joined together using and.

Can you please now check that you have met your success criteria? Pause the video now.

Fantastic, what an amazing lesson of learning.

Today we have learned that an adjective or a list of adjectives can describe a noun, such as sweet mango, or we could expand it even more, noisy, chirping birds.

Describing a setting using senses helps the reader to imagine that we are there or have been there.

The joining word and can be used to join two complete ideas into a full sentence.

And joining two simple sentences together with a joining word and is a compound sentence.

Thank you so much for learning with me today, and well done for your descriptive writing.

I hope see you again soon, bye.