Lesson video

Hello everybody.

I am Miss Corbert and thank you for learning with me today.

Today's lesson is called Writing the Middle of the Letter as part of the learning around Anna Hibiscus' song.

For this lesson, you'll need something to write with and something to write on.

It would be great if your paper could have lines so you can do your neatest handwriting.

I also need you to have your listening ears, your looking eyes, and your thinking brains.

It would also be great if you could have your success criteria nearby.

Pause the video now to make sure you have all of those things.

Have you got them all? Does that mean we're ready to get started? Brilliant, let's get started.

The lesson outcome for today is I can answer questions based on my own experiences in a letter, and here are the keywords that will help us to get there.

I want to hear your loud and proud voices repeating them after me.

My turn, then your turn.

Question, a question is something that we ask.

Adverb, an adverb describes a verb.

First person, that's when we are talking about ourselves, and expanded noun phrase, such as happy, friendly friend.

The first part of our lesson is preparing to write.

So today you are going to write the middle part of a letter.

And we know that when we write we need to try and remember lots of different things, such as use capital letters at the start of sentences, and a full stop or a question mark at the end.

We try to write our letters neatly on the line.

We use phonics to sound out and spell words, and we remember the spellings of some common exception words, which are words we can't use our phonics for.

So our success criteria for today's lesson is use expanded noun phrases to describe places and people.

Use and to join to ideas.

Use adverbs to add detail to verbs, and read back to make sure that our sentence makes sense.

So I'm going to read it and see.

My funny, silly sister plays happily.

My kind, caring brother reads quietly.

So these sentences have expanded noun phrases, funny, silly sister, kind, caring brother.

Use and to join two ideas.

Mm, they don't do that.

Do they have adverbs describing the verbs? My verbs are plays happily.

There is my adverb and reads quietly and we read them back.

Now how can I join them together, those two ideas are related and about related ideas so I can join them together.

My funny silly sister plays happily, and my kind caring brother reads quietly.

Let's see what happens.

I have added my and which means I have made one sentence.

So my first full stop has gone and been replaced with and, and my second capital letter has gone because we don't need it to start a new sentence.

My funny, silly sister pays happily and my kind caring brother reads quietly.

I have joined two ideas together to make one sentence.

So we received some questions from Anna Hibiscus that we'll answer in a letter.

I wonder if you can remember what they were.

What is it like where you live? What do you family do when they are happy? What do you love to do with your family? What do you do when you are happy? And do you have a question for me? A letter is a way to communicate to someone.

So a letter includes these things, a greeting such as dear and to, and an introduction of who you are.

Then you write about what you want to tell them, and maybe you might end with a question to keep the letters going and then you close it off.

We have written the introduction and the greeting of the letter.

So in this lesson we will start the main part of the letter by answering some of Anna's questions.

We'll answer the questions in the first person because we're thinking about and writing about ourselves.

The first question we need to answer is, what is it like where you live? We can use descriptive language and our senses to help Anna to imagine where we are.

So we would use our senses to help us what we can hear, what we can smell, what we can see, what we can touch, and what we can taste.

So I am going to describe what it is like where I live.

Are you listening? Are you ready? I live in sunny, fun Blackpool, full stop.

Blackpool is a town in the north of England.

I can see bright, blue skies and I can hear noisy, chirping seagulls.

So I have used the senses of sight and hearing.

I have used expanded noun phrases where I've expanded my description of my noun by adding more than one adjective, and they're separated with a comma.

I live in sunny, fun Blackpool, I can see bright, blue skies and I can hear noisy, chirping seagulls.

And I have joined two ideas using and.

My first sentence is a simple sentence.

I live in sunny, fun Blackpool, full stop.

I can see bright, blue skies and I can hear noisy, chirping seagulls.

Now you'll describe what it is like where you live and choose two senses.

I live in, mm mm, and then the name of the place.

I can see, hear, smell, touch, taste, and I can, and try and think of some expanded noun phrases to help you.

Pause the video now.

Fantastic, can I show you an example? I live in busy comma, exciting Leads.

Leads is a city, full stop.

I can see, it's talking about the sense of sight, tall, shiny buildings and joining two ideas together, I can taste fresh, red apples.

I wonder if your description was just as fantastic.

So how well do my sentences meet my success criteria? I live in sunny, fun Blackpool.

I can see bright, blue skies, and I can hear noisy, chirping seagulls.

Have I got my expanded noun phrases? Can you see them? Could you point to one of them for me? Well done.

Sunny comma fun Blackpool.

Bright comma blue skies.

Noisy comma chirping seagulls.

Have I used and to join two ideas? Can you see it? There it is.

I have joined my two senses descriptions.

I can see bright, blue skies and I can hear noisy, chirping seagulls.

Have I used adverbs to add detail to verbs? I haven't in these sentences, so that must mean that I need to in my next one.

And we have read those sentences back together to make sure that they make sense.

The next question we need to answer is what do your family do when they're happy? We can use expanded noun phrases to describe members of our family because they're people and we can use adverbs to add detail to what they do, the verb.

Look at this example of ways we have described Anna's family members.

My kind, caring grandfather counts quietly, and my energetic, funny cousins cartwheel bravely.

So I have named my family members, grandfather and cousins.

I've described them kind, caring grandfather, energetic, funny cousins.

And I've said what they do and how they do it with my adverb.

Counts quietly, cartwheels bravely.

So that's what we are going to be doing in our sentences.

So I am going to explain what two family members do when they're happy.

Hmm, who should I talk about? I've got it.

My kind, energetic sister dances excitedly and my caring, loving auntie reads calmly.

So I have used adverbs as well as expanded noun phrases.

The adverbs I have used to describe dances I've used excitedly.

And to describe how my auntie reads, I've put calmly.

Now you'll explain what two family members do when they're happy.

My mm mm mm, what do they do and how do they do it? And my mm mm mm, what do they do and how do they do it? Pause the video now.

Fantastic, can I share an example with you? My silly, funny sister jokes happily.

And my loving, caring grandmother paints carefully.

Fantastic, now I would like you to see how my sentence meets my success criteria.

We went over the first one together and now it's your turn.

I'm going to read you the sentence one more time, then you are going to decide if it meets the success criteria.

My kind energetic sister dances excitedly and my caring loving auntie reads calmly.

Pause the video now and spot where I've met my success criteria.

Fantastic, have I used expanded noun phrases to describe people? Kind, energetic sister, caring, loving auntie.

Yes, I have.

Have I used and to join two ideas? There it is, my kind, energetic sister dances excitedly and my caring, loving auntie reads calmly.

Have I used adverbs to add detail to verbs? The way we look for this is we look for our verbs and see if you can see an adverb.

Something that we do, dances excitedly, reads calmly.

Yes I have, and we have read about my sentence to make sure that it makes sense.

Well done if you manage to spot all of those things.

The third question we will be answering today is we need to answer what do you love to do with your family? We can use adverbs to add detail to what we like to do because we know that adverbs add details to verbs which are often doing words.

So I'm going to explain what I love to do with my family.

And then you are going to have a go.

I love to hike, which means going on lots of walks, bravely with my family.

I love to hike bravely with my family.

I have used an adverb bravely to describe the verb hike.

Now you'll explain what you love to do with your family.

I love to verb adverb with my family.

Pause the video now.

Fantastic, here's an example that I heard.

I love to sing songs tunefully with my family.

The verb is sing, and the adverb is tunefully.

Amazing, so how does this sentence meet my success criteria? Let me see.

Have I used an expanded noun phrase? No, but that's okay because I know I've already used them in my other sentences.

Have I used and to join two ideas? No, but again that's okay because I have used them in my other sentences.

Have I used an adverb to add detail to my verb? Hike bravely, I have, and I have read it back to make sure it makes sense.

I love to hike bravely with my family, well done.

We are now getting ready to write.

The best way that we can get ourselves ready to go is to say our sentences as many times as possible.

We are going to say our sentences in different ways to help that information stick in our head.

I'm gonna show you with one sentence per point, but it'd be great if you could do all of those things with each sentence.

So first thing, say your answers to the questions aloud.

I live in sunny comma fun Blackpool.

Okay, say them in a silly voice.

I'm gonna shoot a low voice.

I can see bright comma blue skies and I can hear noisy comma chirping birds.

Full stop.

Then I'm going to say my sentences, include my capital letters, full stops.

And if you've used commas, those as well.

My kind comma energetic sister dances excitedly and my caring comma loving auntie reads calmly, full stop.

And finally whisper your sentence to your pencil pen.

I love to hike bravely with my family.

Now it's your turn to say all of your sentences in all of those different ways.

Pause the video now.

Did you manage to say them in all of those ways? Are they in your head? Well done if they are.

Here is my example again.

I managed to say those in all of my different ways and I think I'm ready to write.

Are you ready to write? Can I see a thumbs up? Fantastic.

So the next part of our lesson is writing the part of a letter.

Let's remind ourselves of the success criteria for today's writing.

Then we will read some sentences to check if they meet it.

Just like you help me with mine.

Use expanded noun phrases to describe places and people.

Use and to join two ideas.

Use adverbs to add details to verbs and read our writing back to make sure it makes sense.

Let's have a look at the first sentence.

I live in the calm, peaceful countryside.

This is our first sentence that you'll be writing.

Now you'll notice here that this sentence doesn't use the specific name of the place so it doesn't have a capital letter countryside because it's not a proper noun.

If you describe to use the name of your place, Blackpool Leeds, Manchester, Doncaster.

You need a capital letter to name that place, but let's see.

I live in the calm, peaceful countryside.

I can see an expanded noun phrase, two adjectives describing one noun, and the adjectives are separated by a comma.

We haven't used and to join the ideas, and we haven't added adverbs, but we have read it back to make sure it makes sense.

The next sentence, I can smell fresh, green grass and I can hear noisy, fluffy sheep.

I think that person lives in the countryside.

I can see expanded noun phrases there, fresh, green grass, noisy, fluffy sheep, but this sentence does another thing where it joins two ideas together.

I can smell fresh, green grass and I can hear noisy, fluffy sheep.

And we've read our sentence back.

One more sentence.

This is what I like to do with my family.

I love to visit museums quietly.

'cause in museums we have to be quiet.

I can't see an expanded noun phrase.

I haven't used and to join two ideas 'cause I have used an adverb.

My verb here is visit and we visit them quietly and we've read back to make sure it makes sense.

I think you are ready to help me with my writing.

I can't wait for you to help me.

I'm ready to write the middle of my letter.

As I've already written the beginning of my letter, I've put my success criteria underneath so it can all be one piece of writing.

So maybe if you've already done that too, then you could do that too, but don't worry if not.

Let's look at our success criteria.

Use expanded noun phrases to describe places and people.

Use and to join two ideas.

Use adverbs that are detailed to verbs and read back to make sure our writing makes sense.

I've already started my writing, so let's check it so far.

Capital letter, I live in sunny, fun Blackpool.

There's my expanded noun phrase to describe my place.

Full stop.

I can see bright, blue skies, expanded noun phrase, and I can hear noisy, chirping birds or seagulls are the type of birds which you might see in Blackpool.

Now is ready for my next sentence.

To describe what my family like to do.

Okay, my kind, energetic sister dances excitedly.

This is a sentence that I've already written before so I think I can remember.

Capital letter M with a Y, my kind energetic.

If I'm using two adjectives, I need a comma.

Start a new line.

Energetic, can you see that the letter G is making that g sound, energetic sister, sister, er likes to be at the end.

My kind energetic sister times my verb, what does she do? Dances, dan, then this ce is being made by the letter C is dances.

My kind, energetic sister dances.

How does she dance, excitedly.

I have some vocabulary that I've generated before where I can find excitedly.

Excited, then ly to make it into an adverb.

My kind energetic sister dances excitingly, I want to talk about another family member.

And my caring loving auntie reads calmly.

Now I found outta space.

So I'm going to start a new page.

I'm going to bring my page in front of me so I'm sitting nice and comfortably.

So where was I up to? My kind, energetic sister dances excitedly.

And to join my two ideas, and my M with a Y.

How did I describe my auntie? Caring and loving.

I have both of those adjectives that I generated too, so I can copy them.

Caring, loving, I've got two adjectives there.

What do I need in between, a comma.

Caring, loving auntie.

Some people spell auntie in different ways.

I'm going to spell it like how the author spells it, auntie.

My caring, loving auntie, what does she like to do? She likes to read.

Can you stretch that word for me, reads.

Reads, reads.

R, I know it's ea ds, reads.

I've ran out a space and I need to write calmly.

I've also got that one written down too.

Calmly, calmly.

Let's check if I finish my sentence, go back.

My kind, energetic sister dances excitedly and my caring, loving auntie reads calmly, full stop.

The final thing I need to do is write about what I love to do with my family.

I'm just going to practise saying it and then it's going to be your term with your writing.

I love to hike bravely with my family.

Before I write that sentence, I'm going to check my success criteria.

Have I used expanded noun phrases to describe places and people? Sunny, fun Blackpool, bright, blue skies, noisy, chirping, birds, places.

kind, energetic sister, and caring, loving auntie, people.

I've used so many expanded noun phrases and I've remembered my commas.

Have I used and to join two ideas.

Let's check, my kind, energetic sister dances excitedly, and my caring, loving auntie reads calmly.

Yes, I have.

And I've just read out two adverbs, excitedly and calmly, and we've read our writing back to make sure it makes sense.

Now I'm going to write my final sentence.

I love to hike bravely with my family, but first I think you are ready to start your writing.

I can't wait to see it.

Now it's your turn to write the middle part of your letter answering the first three questions.

Don't forget to check your success criteria.

Pause the video now and I can't wait to see your writing.

Wow, what excellent focus I saw when you were writing and I'm so impressed with how well you are trying to answer those questions and meet your success criteria.

Let's remind ourselves about how my writing meets my success criteria.

I have got lots of expanded noun phrases, sunny, fun Blackpool.

Bright, blue skies.

Noisy, chirping, seagulls.

Kind, energetic sister.

Caring, loving auntie.

I have used and two times to join two ideas.

I can see bright, blue skies and I can hear noisy, chirping sequels.

I also use and to join my descriptions about my family members.

Remember, we don't need to use and all the time only when we have two related ideas.

I have used adverbs that add detail to verbs.

My verb might be dance and I chose excitedly.

Reads calmly, hike bravely.

And I have read my writing back to make sure it makes sense.

I would like you to pause the video and double check you've met your success criteria.

Don't worry if you haven't because now is the time to make our corrections.

Pause the video now.

Did you manage to meet your success criteria? Can I see a thumbs up if you did? Well done.

What's a fantastic lesson of learning? So today we have learned that a letter might include questions which you have to reply to.

Expanded noun phrases can help someone to imagine something or somewhere.

When using two adjectives, a comma is placed in between them, such as peaceful, comma, calm countryside.

Adverbs can add detail to how someone does something.

Hikes bravely, reads quietly, dances excitedly.

And writing in the first person uses words such as I, we or mine.

Thank you so much for learning with me today, and I hope to see you next time.

Well done on your letter.