Lesson video

Hello, everybody, I'm Ms. Corbett, and welcome to today's lesson, writing the beginning of a story, including character and setting for the story "Jack and the Beanstalk." So for this lesson, you need to make sure that you have something to write on.

It would be great if that paper could have lines, and it would also be great if you could have your success criteria nearby.

As well as that, as always, I need you to have, can you show me? Your thinking brain, your listening ears, and your looking eyes.

I think we're ready to get started.

The learning outcome for today is I can write the beginning of a traditional tale, introducing the characters and setting.

And these keywords will help us to get there and will come up in our lesson.

So your first job is to repeat them to me loud and proud.

Are you ready? My turn, your turn.

Beginning.

Character.

Setting.

Plot.

Comma, or comma.

Your turn.

Well done.

The first part of our lesson is preparing to write.

You are going to write the beginning of the story today.

And when we write, we have a success criteria, but there are other things that we always try to do.

We always try to use capital letters at the start of a sentence and a full stop or an exclamation mark at the end.

We also try to write our letters neatly on the line.

We use phonics to sound out and spell words, and we remember the spellings of some common exception words, those words that we can't always use our phonics for, and we always read back our writing to make sure that it makes sense.

As well as that, here is the success criteria for today's lesson.

Have you got those listening ears ready? You are going to use sequencing language to order events.

You will join two sentences together using and.

You will use an expanded noun phrase and use capital letters at the start of sentences and end them with either a full stop or an exclamation mark.

The writer tells us in our version of "Jack in the Beanstalk" what happens in the story by narrating or telling the events.

So I'm going to use my story mountain that I have to retell the beginning of the story.

Are you listening? Once upon a time, a young, brave boy named Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow named Betsy.

One day, Jack met a strange, curious man who offered him some magic beans in exchange for the cow.

Jack returned home and his mother was furious.

Angrily, she threw the beams out of the window! In the beginning of the story then, the main characters, Jack and his mother, and the first setting are introduced, where they live.

Here are some different adjectives that we might use to add even more details to that beginning of our story.

Strange.

Who would be strange? The man.

Mysterious, man.

Young, Jack.

Energetic, Jack.

Curious.

Maybe the man or Jack.

Old.

I think the man.

Adventurous, Jack.

I will use an expanded noun phrase to describe Jack.

Some of these adjectives I would use and some of them I wouldn't.

So, mm mm boy.

Hmm.

Would I say mysterious, old boy? No.

Okay, I think I've got one.

Energetic, comma, curious boy.

Or, energetic, comma, young boy.

Young, comma, adventurous boy named Jack.

I wonder which expanded noun phrase you're going to use.

Remember that when we use two object adjectives together, they must be separated by a comma.

Well done.

So which adjectives best describe Jack's mother? We've got some that would describe Jack and the man.

Which ones would describe his mother? Poor, cheerful, lonely, or gentle.

Which adjectives would you use to describe Jack's mother? You could put them in an expanded noun phrase, adjective, comma, adjective mother as the noun.

Pause the video now.

I chose poor, comma, lonely mother.

She's not particularly cheerful because she's so hungry and she's not particularly gentle because we see her get very cross.

We know that rehearsing a sentence out loud before writing helps us to remember it.

Let's plan the opening of the story, introducing the main characters and the setting.

Once upon a time.

Okay.

Once upon a time, a mm mm boy called Jack lived with his mm mm mother and a cow called Betsy.

Okay, so I need to think of two adjectives to describe Jack.

I've got those.

And two adjectives to describe Jack's mother.

I've got those.

Let's have a look at my sentence and see whether it's got all of those things in.

Once upon a time, an adventurous, young boy called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow called Betsy.

What do you think? Pretty good.

Let's see what that sentence includes.

Capital letter and sequencing language.

So capital letter to start my sentence and my sequencing language, my fronted adverbial of time.

Once upon a time, comma, an adventurous, young boy.

There's my expanded noun phrase, adventurous, comma, young boy.

Called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother.

Another expanded noun phrase, poor, comma, lonely mother.

And a cow called Betsy.

Full stop.

Can you plan your sentence? Once upon a time, a mm mm boy called Jack lived with his mm mm mother and a cow called Betsy.

Pause the video now and plan your sentence.

Fantastic.

Well done for planning your sentence.

Can you keep it in your head? Ding! Well done.

We can use the joining word and to link the next two ideas in the story together.

One day, a mysterious, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow.

(gasps) That's a great sentence.

One day is my sequencing language.

Mysterious, old man, my expanded noun phrase.

Offered Jack magical, another adjective, beans for the cow.

His mother was furious.

(gasps) Furious is a great adjective.

Let's join those two ideas together.

Both sentences make complete sense on their own.

And the second idea is related to the first idea.

His mother is furious because Jack swapped the cow.

So let's make them together.

One day a mysterious, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow and, my first full stop has been replaced, his, (gasps) my second capital letter has been replaced, his mother was furious.

Full stop.

So I've joined my two simple sentences together to make one compound sentence.

My idea one and my idea two have been joined together with the joining word and.

Let's have a look at this one.

Capital letter, one day, comma, a curious, comma, strange man, offer Jack colourful, I like that adjective, beans for the cow and his mother was angry.

Full stop.

Slightly different adjective.

This sentence has capital letter and my sequencing language, one day, comma, an expanded noun phrase, curious, comma, strange man offered Jack colourful, another adjective, beans for the cow and, my joining word, his mother was angry, furious, fuming.

Think about it.

Full stop.

Now it's your turn to plan your sentence.

One day, comma, a mm mm man offered Jack mm beans for the cow and his mother was mm.

Full stop.

Pause the video and plan your sentence.

Fantastic.

Have you got his in your head? Ding! Jack exchanged the cow for some magical beans from the old man.

Angrily, she threw the beans out the window.

So we know she's furious, we've already written about that, but we want to say that she threw them out the window because we know what happens next, so it's a really important part.

Capital letter, angrily, she threw the beans out of the window.

The adverb angrily describes how she threw the beans.

This is a fronted adverbial, not a time, but a fronted adverbial to show how she threw the beans, angrily, furiously, sadly, heavily.

How did she throw them? Could you think of the adverb that you will use? Mm, she threw the beans out of the window.

Have you got one? Great.

At this sentence, angrily, she threw the beans out of the window! Exclamation mark.

Why is there an exclamation mark at the end of that sentence? Hmm.

Because exclamation marks are used to express a strong emotion.

Jack's mother is so angry that they've lost their source for food, so we're showing how angry she is by adding an exclamation mark.

So, rehearsing your sentences out loud to help you, will help you remember what you're going to write.

So you are going to say your sentences in different ways.

You are going to do these steps with all of your sentences.

I'm going to show you an example with each.

Say the sentences.

Once upon a time, a brave, young boy named Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow named Betsy.

Say the sentences in a low voice.

One day, a strange, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow and his mother was furious.

Say the sentences again, including capital letters, commas, and full stops or exclamation marks.

Capital letter, one day, comma, a strange, comma, old man offered, capital letter, Jack colourful beans for the cow and his mother was furious, full stop.

Tell somebody else your sentence.

Angrily, she threw the beans out of the window! Exclamation mark.

Whisper your sentence to your pencil.

Angrily, she threw the beans out of the window! Exclamation mark.

Now you are going to follow all of those steps to rehearse the beginning of your story following the steps from the beginning to name those events so you are ready to write.

Once upon a time, a mm mm boy called Jack lived with his mm mm mother and a cow named Betsy.

Full stop.

Capital letter.

One day a mm mm man offered, capital letter for Jack, mm beans for the cow and his mother was mm.

Full stop.

Adverb, capital letter, comma, she threw the beans out of the window! Exclamation mark.

Pause the video and rehearse the beginning of your story.

Off you go.

Well done.

Did you manage to rehearse the beginning of the story aloud? Fantastic.

Here's an example that I've heard.

Maybe you could peek sneak some of their ideas.

Capital letter, once upon a time, comma, a brave, comma, determined boy called Jack lived with his worried, comma, lonely mother and a cow called Betsy.

One day a kind, comma, generous, which means giving, man offered Jack magical beans for the cow and his mother was outraged, very angry, full stop.

Capital letter, angrily, comma, she threw the beans out of the window! Exclamation mark.

Are you ready to write the beginning of your story? Fantastic.

Here is the second part of our lesson, writing the beginning of the story.

Let's remind ourselves of our success criteria for today's writing and we will then read some sentences to check if they meet it.

Use sequencing language to order events.

Once upon a time, one day.

Join two sentences together using and.

Use an expanded noun phrase.

Use capital letters at the start of sentences and end them today with either a full stop or an exclamation mark.

Remember, we don't want to end every sentence with an exclamation mark, so think carefully about how you are going to use yours.

Let's have a look at the first sentence.

Once upon, a time a curious, young boy called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow called Betsy.

Let's see.

Use sequencing language to order events.

Once upon a time.

Join two sentences together using and.

Now I can see and.

Once upon a time, a curious, young boy called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow called Betsy.

We haven't joined two sentences together with and because a cow called Betsy isn't a sentence.

A cow called Betsy, that doesn't make sense on its own, so and is being used in a different way.

But we have used an expanded noun phrase, curious, young boy, poor, lonely mother.

And we have used a capital letter and I'm going to make sure that I've used it correctly in my sentence.

So I put my finger on my capital letter.

Once upon a time, I get another finger and move along until the idea is finished and make sure there's a full stop or an exclamation mark there.

Once upon a time, a curious, young boy called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow called Betsy.

Full stop.

You can see a capital letter for Jack and a capital letter for Betsy as well because they are proper nouns.

Let's have a look at one more sentence.

One day a strange, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow and his mother was outraged.

My sequencing language is there, one day.

This time I have joined two sentences together.

One day a strange, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow, there's my first one, and his mother was outraged.

There's my next one.

So there's my and.

I've used an expanded noun phrase, strange, old man, and I've also chosen to use an adjective on its own, magical and outraged.

And I'm going to check again my capital letter is on my first word, one day, and I'm going to move along.

One day, comma, a strange, comma, old man offered, capital letter for Jack, magical beans for the cow and his mother was outraged.

Full stop.

I think you're ready to help me with my writing.

Do you think you can? Fantastic.

I am ready to write the beginning of my story for "Jack and the Beanstalk." I have my success criteria stuck on some lined paper.

Let's check my success criteria.

Use sequencing language to order events.

Join two sentences together using and.

Use an expanded noun phrase.

Use capital letters at the start of sentences and end with a full stop or an exclamation mark.

I also have my story mountain that I made to help me sequence those events and remember the vocabulary that I've chosen to use.

This is the part that I'm writing today and I've already started it, so I was wondering if you could help me check my first sentence.

Capital letter, once upon a time, a brave, curious boy called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother and a cow named Betsy.

Full stop.

(gasps) I'm pretty happy with that so far, let's check though.

Brave, comma, curious boy for my expanded noun phrase, called Jack lived with his poor (gasps) lonely mother.

I've got two adjectives, but they're not separated by a comma.

(gasps) I'm really glad I checked before I carried on writing.

My next sentence is, one day, a strange, comma, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow.

And, there's my joining word, his mother was furious.

Okay, I have got one day on my story mountain.

So capital letter, one d ay, day.

We know that if we start with a fronted adverbial of time or a fronted adverbial, we need a comma.

One day, a strange, old man.

I also have that on my story mountain.

That helps me so much with my writing.

One day a strange, that j spelling, comma for my expanded noun phrase, old m a n offered Jack.

Okay, offered.

O ff, making the word off, er, the word offer the er is at the end, so it's my E-R.

Then it's ED ending for my verb.

E-D, offered Jack.

Okay, Jack.

New line, j a ck, Jack.

That doesn't look right.

(gasps) What do I need for Jack? It needs to be a capital letter because Jack is a proper noun.

Jack, a strange, old man offered Jack magical beans.

M a, again j spelling in magical, i cal beans.

Could you stand out beans with me? B ee n s beans.

B ea n s, beans.

One day, a strange, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow.

F or the c ow.

This ow prefers to be at the end.

Cow.

Then my joining word and his mother was furious And his mother, m o th er, mother, was, hm, W-A-S furious.

(gasps) I've seen that adjective before.

F ur is made with those two letters, which normally make an er sound, i then us, furious.

Okay, capital letter, one day, comma, a strange, old man offered Jack magical beans for the cow, joining word and, his mother was furious.

Full stop.

My final sentence is angrily, that's my adverb, she threw the beans out of the window! (gasps) I wonder which adverb you'll choose.

So I need a capital letter, angrily.

A ng r ly, that L-Y ending.

I need a comma again.

Angrily, she, sh with an E spell she, threw, threw.

Make sure you have your tongue sticking out for that th.

Th r ew, E-W likes to be at the end.

She threw them, the beans, out, ou t, out of the window.

Could you sound out window with me? W i n d o, which O likes to be at the end? (gasps) O-W.

Angrily, she threw them out of the window.

So we know she's angry.

How can we show with our punctuation shock? What could we use an? Exclamation mark.

I'm going to read back my story and check my success criteria.

Use sequencing language to order events.

Once upon a time and one day.

Once upon a time, a brave, curious boy called Jack lived with his poor, lonely mother.

(gasps) There are my expanded noun phrases.

And a cow named Betsy.

Now we've used and there, but a cow named Betsy isn't a sentence on its own, isn't an idea, full idea that makes sense on its own.

One day, a strange, old man, another expanded noun phrase, offered Jack magical beans for the cow and, this is where we've joined them together, his mother was furious.

Angrily, she threw them out of the window! Exclamation mark.

I've got three sentences.

My capital letter to the end of my first sentence, my capital letter to the end of my next sentence, and my capital letter to the end of my final sentence with an exclamation mark.

Thank you so much for helping me with my writing and now it's your turn.

Now you've helped me, it's your turn to write the beginning of the story introducing the main characters, setting, and plot.

Don't forget to check through your success criteria.

I can't wait to see your writing.

Pause the video now.

Wow, you are such an amazing storyteller.

We are just going to now check our success criteria to make sure we're happy with our writing.

Can you help me with mine? Once upon a time, there's my sequencing language, a brave, inquisitive boy, an expanded noun phrase, called Jack live with his poor, lonely mother, another expanded noun phrase, and a cow called Betsy.

Capital letter, one day, a kind, strange man offered Jack colourful beans for the cow and his mother was furious.

Angrily, she threw the beans out of the window! Okay, have I got sequencing language to order events? I have.

Can you find it for me? Once upon a time, one day.

Did you put some sequencing language in? Can you double check for me? Fantastic.

Join two sentences together using and.

One day, a kind, strange man offered Jack colourful beans for the cow and his mother was furious.

We've got it.

Can you now check yours to make sure you've got it? You'll get a bit of extra time at the end to check too.

Use an expanded noun phrase, adjective, comma, adjective noun.

Brave, comma, inquisitive, boy, kind, comma, strange man, poor, comma, lonely mother.

Yes, I have.

And I've used my capital letters and ended with either a full stop or an exclamation mark.

Can you pause the video and go through your writing just like we have with this one to make sure you've met your success criteria.

If there's something that you're missing, don't worry, now is the perfect time to correct it.

Pause the video now.

Amazing job.

You are very quickly becoming an author for writing the beginning of your story.

What a great lesson.

We now know that traditional tales are mostly told in the past tense.

We've narrated the events.

We have written the beginning of the story introducing the main characters, the setting, and the plot.

Two ideas can be joined together with the joining word and.

We also know there should always be a comma between two adjectives describing a noun.

Exclamation marks can be used to show strong emotion like when Jack's mother threw the beans out of the window.

You should be really proud of your achievements today.

Well done.

Hope to see you next time.

Bye.