Lesson video

Hello.

I'm Miss Corbett, and welcome to today's lesson, writing the end of the story, "Jack and the Beanstalk", by building suspense.

So for this lesson, you need to have with you something to write with and something to write on.

It would be great if your paper could have lines so you can do your neatest writing.

I also need you to have your listening ears if you've got them, your looking eyes, and your thinking brains, and ready to try your best.

Let's get started.

Today's outcome is I can write the end of a traditional tale, building suspense.

And here are our key words.

So the first thing I need you to do today is make sure you've got lots of energy to repeat these words after me.

My turn, then your turn.

Adverb.

Joining word.

Adjective.

Ending.

Exclamation mark.

Well done.

The first part of our lesson will be preparing to write.

We know that we will have success criteria for our ending of the story, but there are so many other things that we need to remember when we write.

So when we write, we always try to use capital letters at the start of a sentence, and a full stop or an exclamation mark at the end.

We also try to write our letters neatly on the line.

We use phonics to sound out and spell words.

And for words that we can't use our phonics for, we are trying to remember some of the spellings of the common exception words.

As well as that, we need to read back our writing to make sure it makes sense, as we go, and at the end.

As well as that, here is the success criteria for today's lesson.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time, suddenly, after that, finally.

You can choose.

Begin a sentence with an adverb showing how something happens, quickly, worriedly, speedily.

Join two sentences together using and.

And use capital letters at the start of sentences and end with either a full stop or an exclamation mark.

Thinking about all of that, I would like you to spot the mistake in this sentence.

Jack went to sell milk at the market! Hmm, pause the video now and share what you think the mistake is in that sentence.

Off you go! Let's have a closer look.

Capital letter, Jack went to sell milk at the market, exclamation mark.

It's neatly on the line.

I can see finger spaces.

It makes sense.

And those words have been spelled using phonics and thinking about some common exception words.

The mistake that I have noticed is the punctuation mark at the end.

I can see an exclamation mark.

Jack went to sell milk at the market! An exclamation mark needs to show strong emotion or shock.

Is that a shocking sentence? No.

It needs a full stop.

Capital letter, Jack went to sell milk at the market, full stop.

We shouldn't use an exclamation mark for every sentence that we write, only when there is a strong emotion or a surprise.

So I want you to think carefully about how you use yours in your writing today.

You only have one exclamation mark.

Can you write it in the air for me? Exclamation mark.

Can you steal it from the air? And can you keep it in your pocket until you want to use it? Fantastic! We are going to write the ending of the story, and here it is.

I'm going to use my story mountain to re-tell the ending of the story.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up and he chased Jack down the beanstalk.

Worriedly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk, and the giant was never seen again.

Finally, Jack and his mother lived happily ever after.

The end.

That is where we're going to get to today.

At the end of the story, the suspense, the shock, the worry builds before Jack finds a solution to the problem.

What is the solution to the problem? How do they solve the problem? The problem is that the giant is chasing them down the beanstalk, so how do they solve it? They solve it by, pause the video now.

Did you get it? Jack's mother gives him an axe, and he chops down the beanstalk so the giant comes crashing to the ground, never to be seen again.

So we are going to put together our sentences to end our story, and to join our first ideas together, we can use the joining word and.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up.

He chased Jack down the leafy beanstalk! My idea one, suddenly, the angry giant woke up.

And a separate idea, he chased Jack down the leafy beanstalk! Both sentences make complete sense on their own, and the second idea is related to the first, because we're talking about what happens as a result of the angry giant's feelings.

So let's join them together.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up, and he chased Jack down the leafy beanstalk! I still have my two separate ideas, but I've joined and to join them into one sentence, which means I've taken away my first full stop and replaced it with and, and I've taken away my second capital letter because it's just one sentence.

We know that exclamation marks are used to express a strong emotion.

So have a look at the sentence again.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up, and he chased Jack down the leafy beanstalk! Can you point to the exclamation mark for me? Get your pointing finger ready! Well done, there it is.

The exclamation mark is really important in this sentence because it shows shock and surprise that the giant has woke up.

It also builds that suspense and makes us nervous because it shows a sense of urgency because a giant is chasing Jack.

So that's why I'm going to use my exclamation mark.

Think carefully about where you will use yours.

So is this true or false? We use an exclamation mark to express a strong emotion like shock or surprise.

Is that true or false? Show me your thumbs in five seconds.

Five.

Let me see.

Well done if you are showing me a thumbs up.

We use an exclamation mark to express a strong opinion like shock or surprise.

We know that rehearsing our sentences out loud before we write them helps us to remember them.

We are going to start our sentence with a fronted adverbial of time to show when something happens.

I'm going to use suddenly to build that suspense.

Then you're going to use an adjective to describe the beanstalk and the giant, and you're going to use the joining word and to link those two sentences together.

Mmm, the mmm giant woke up mmm he chased Jack down the mmm beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Let's have a look at this example.

Suddenly, the furious giant woke up and he chased Jack down the long beanstalk! That sentence looks good to me.

We have a capital letter and a fronted adverbial of time.

Suddenly, a great fronted adverbial of time to show suspense.

Because it's a fronted adverbial starting a sentence, we need a comma.

The furious, there's my adjective, giant woke up, and, there's my joining word, he chased Jack down the long, there's my adjective, beanstalk, and I've ended with an exclamation mark.

Maybe you can plan your sentence now.

Off you go! Pause the video.

Fantastic! Have you got your sentence ready? Well done! Let's move on to the next part.

We know that adverbs can give more information about how a character does something, because they describe verbs.

Just like fronted adverbials of time, adverbs can also sometimes come at the start of a sentence, so it must be followed by a comma.

They are also called fronted adverbials because they're starting a sentence.

Listen to these sentences.

Happily, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe.

Quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe.

Carefully, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe.

Which fronted adverbial do you think sounds best in this part of the story, and why? Pause the video.

Really interesting ideas.

I don't think Jack chopped down the beanstalk happily, because he wasn't happy.

He was a bit worried, so he might have done it quickly, or he might have done it carefully, or he might have done it worriedly to make sure that the giant didn't get to him.

So let's see how this sentence does.

Worriedly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe, and the giant was never seen again.

This sentence starts with a capital letter and a fronted adverbial to show how Jack chopped down the beanstalk.

Worriedly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe, and, there's my joining word, the giant was never seen again.

Phew, full stop.

You can end your story with a final sentence like lots of traditional tales do.

Finally, Jack and his mother lived happily ever after, full stop.

Can you now plan your final sentences? Pause the video now.

Fantastic! We know that rehearsing our sentences like we've been doing out loud helps us remember what we are going to write.

You are going to follow these steps with all of your sentences.

Let me give you an example.

Say the sentences.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up, and he chased Jack down the beanstalk! Then say your sentences in a low voice.

Worriedly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk, and the giant was never seen again.

Then say the sentences, including your capital letters, commas and full stops or that one exclamation mark.

Capital letter, suddenly, comma, the angry giant woke up and he chased, capital letter, Jack down the leafy beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Then tell somebody else your sentence.

Finally, Jack and his mother lived happily ever after.

Then whisper your sentences.

Finally, Jack and his mother lived happily ever after.

You are going to do those steps with all of your sentences so you've had it in your head so many times, really thinking about the parts that you need to focus on in your writing.

So rehearse the ending of your story now aloud, following the steps, and you can use this to help you too.

Pause the video now.

Well done! Let's look at one example.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up and he chased Jack down the towering beanstalk! Quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe and the giant was never seen again.

Finally, Jack and his mum lived happily ever after.

Did you manage to rehearse your ending aloud? I think you are ready to write.

And the next part of our lesson is writing the end of our story.

Let's remind ourselves of today's success criteria, then we will read some sentences to check if they meet them.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time, suddenly, after that, finally.

Begin a sentence with an adverb to show how the actions happened, quickly, worriedly, speedily.

Join two sentences together using and.

And use capital letters at the start of sentences and end with a full stop, or you have one sentence for an exclamation mark.

Suddenly, the outraged giant woke up.

We have got a fronted adverbial of time, suddenly.

We have began our sentence with an adverb, but not one that's showing how the action happened, so we've used our adverbial of time instead.

We haven't joined two ideas using and.

If you want, we've practised joining them together.

You don't need to do that with every sentence.

And then have I got a capital letter and a full stop? I'm going to look at the start of my sentence, my capital letter, and when I get to the end of my idea, I should have a full stop.

Suddenly, the outraged giant woke up, full stop.

Yes, I have.

Quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe and the giant was never seen again.

So this time I've chosen an adverb to show how the character did something, quickly.

I've joined two sentences together using and.

Quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe and the giant was never seen again.

I'm going to check my capital letter and full stop.

Capital letter for quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe, and, I keep going, the giant was never seen again, full stop.

I think you're ready to help me with my writing.

I am ready to write the ending of my story for "Jack and the Beanstalk".

I have got my success criteria stuck in.

Let's read through it.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time, suddenly, after that, finally.

Begin a sentence with another type of adverb, quickly, worriedly, speedily, to show how that action is done.

Join two sentences together using and.

And use capital letters at the start of sentences, and end them will a full stop or an exclamation mark.

I've got my story mountain to help me write the end of the story.

My first sentence is going to be two ideas joined together.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up and he chased Jack down the beanstalk.

Okay, capital letter, suddenly, for my fronted adverbial of time, which is on my story mountain above me, and it's also on my success criteria.

Suddenly, capital letter, suddenly.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up.

The angry, angry giant, we know that giant starts with a g, giant.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up.

Woke, a split diagraph, woke up.

I'm not going to do a full stop because I'm going to join my idea with another idea.

And, and what did he do? He chased Jack down the beanstalk.

He chased, chase, and my ED ending, chased Jack.

Jack needs a capital letter, Jack, down the beanstalk.

Maybe you could challenge yourself to describe the beanstalk.

Beanstalk, beanstalk.

Now, because that's happened suddenly and it's surprising, what punctuation might I use? An exclamation mark.

Exclamation mark.

Capital letter, suddenly, the angry giant woke up and, joining word, he chased Jack down the beanstalk, exclamation mark.

Worriedly is my adverb that I'm going to use to explain how Jack chopped down the beanstalk.

Worriedly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk and the giant was never seen again.

Worriedly is also on my success criteria.

Capital letter to start a new sentence, worried, then my LY, comma.

Worriedly, Jack chopped.

Could you sound that out with me? Do chop first, chop, and I'm adding my ED.

Often we have to double that final letter before I add it.

Jack chopped down the beanstalk.

And we've already written down the beanstalk because he chased Jack down the beanstalk, so I can just copy that.

Down the beanstalk, beanstalk.

I'm not going to do a full stop because I'm joining another idea together.

And the giant was never seen again.

And the giant was, how do I spell was? New line, W-A-S, never, never, seen again, again.

Worriedly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk and the giant was never seen again, full stop.

Then I might end my story like lots of fairy tales end.

Jack and his mum lived happily ever after.

I'm going to check my success criteria to make sure I've got everything.

Begin some sentences with fronted adverbials of time.

Suddenly.

Begin a sentence with an adverb.

I've used worriedly.

Join two sentences together using and.

Both of my sentences here are compound sentences.

They both have and, and the ideas could be separated on their own.

And I've started with my capital letter, and I've checked that I've ended with either a full stop or an exclamation mark.

Now I'm going to write Jack and his mum lived happily ever after.

But now it's your turn.

Happy writing! Thank you so much for helping me with mine.

That really shows me that you're ready to start yours.

So you are going to write the ending of the story, explaining what happened when the giant wakes up.

Don't forget to check your success criteria and try your best.

Pause the video now.

Fantastic job! I'm so impressed, and you've ended your story! You've got to the end! Let's have a look at one example.

Suddenly, the angry giant woke up and he chased Jack down the beanstalk, exclamation mark! Quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe and the giant was never seen again.

Finally, Jack and his mum lived happily ever after.

Have I got some sentences with fronted adverbials of time? Can you see them for me? I can see suddenly, I can see finally.

Have I began a sentence with another type of adverb to show how actions happen? Quickly.

Have I joined two sentences together using and? Suddenly, the giant woke up and he chased Jack down the beanstalk.

Quickly, Jack chopped down the beanstalk with a sharp axe and the giant was never seen again.

Have I used my capital letters at the start of my sentence and a full stop or an exclamation mark at the end? Yes I have.

I checked all of them.

Now it's your turn to follow those steps with your success criteria with your writing.

Remember, don't worry if you haven't quite met them now.

Now is your chance to change that and check.

Pause the video now.

Amazing job! You have managed to write the end of your story.

I'm so impressed.

Today, we have learned that some fronted adverbials of time build suspense, such as suddenly.

Some adverbs describe how characters may move and can be used at the start of a sentence, such as quickly.

When we start the sentence with them, we call them fronted adverbials.

Two ideas can be joined together using a joining word and, and exclamation marks can be used to show surprise, such as when the giant follows Jack down the beanstalk.

Thank you so much for learning with me today, and I really hope you're proud of your writing.

Bye!.