Lesson video

Hello, I'm Miss Corbett, and thank you so much for choosing to learn with me today.

Today's lesson is writing the middle of the story, the "Magic Porridge Pot," which is so exciting 'cause you're so close to becoming a real storyteller.

So for this lesson, I need you to have your listening ears, your thinking brains, and your looking eyes.

It would be great if you had someone to talk to, but most importantly, you need some lined paper if you have some, something to write with, and it'd be great if you could have your success criteria nearby as well.

Let's get started, and I'll write our learning outcome today is I can write the middle of the story.

So by the end of this lesson, you will have written the middle of the story of your own version of "The Magic Porridge Pot," and these key words will help us get there.

Are you ready to repeat them after me? Let me hear your loud and proud voices.

My turn, then your turn.

Plot.

Middle.

Problem.

Exclamation mark.

Verb.

Well done.

The first part of our lesson will focus on preparing to write, getting our sentences and everything we need in our heads.

To start us off, we need to remember what we always try to do whenever we write.

We have our success criteria for the lesson, but these are things that we always need to remember.

So we are going to be writing the middle of the story, and when we write, we always try to use capital letters at the start of sentences and a full stop or an exclamation mark, one of our key words, at the end, we try to write our letters neatly on the line, we use phonics to sound out and spell words, and we remember the spellings of some common exception words.

Have a look thinking about those things at spotting the mistakes in this sentence.

I'm going to read it to you.

One day, Jin met a wise woman in a lush forest.

I would like you to pause the video and see if you could spot any mistakes.

Pause the video now.

Did you spot them? Could you tell me the mistakes? What am I missing? I'm missing a capital letter at the start of my sentence, and am I missing a full stop at the end.

Let's check.

There it is, capital letter.

One day, Jin met a wise woman in a lush forest, full stop.

Things are great about that sentence is I can see sequencing language.

I can see a capital letter for Jin, our proper noun.

I could see an adjective to describe the characters and the settings, wise woman, lush forest.

All it needed was a capital letter and a full stop.

Thank you for helping me.

We have a story mountain that we can retell the story, but today we are going to be focusing on the middle of the story.

Can you see that it's sandwiched between the beginning and the end? So we are focusing on the middle of the story.

Use your story mountain or this story mountain to retell the middle of the story.

I'm going to go first.

Then Jin chanted the magic words.

The pot made delicious porridge.

After that, the pot overflowed with porridge! (gasps) The porridge flooded the streets.

Ooh, do you think you could use your story mountain or this story mountain to retell the middle of the story? Pause the video now.

Fantastic.

Well done.

That's going to help you with your writing.

So from that, we know that, in the middle of the story, Jin uses the magic porridge pot, but there is a problem.

What is the problem? There's that illustration to help you.

What is the problem? The problem is she accidentally says the words twice, so the pot overfills and floods the streets.

(gasps) I think this is going to be a really exciting part of our story to write.

Jin said the magic was twice, and the magic porridge pot overflowed, flooding the whole village.

(gasps) So we focused on the middle of the story.

Which one of these events took place in the middle of the story? Is it A, B, or C? Pause the video now, off you go.

Well done if you are pointing to, let me see your pointing finger, A.

In the middle of the story, the porridge floods the streets.

B is showing what happens at the beginning of the story where Jin meets the wise mysterious woman, and C shows what happens at the end of the story, everyone working together to clean the streets.

Well done.

Our sentences need to explain that Jin spoke to the pot and that it filled with porridge.

So we've got these bits here.

Then Jin mm the magic words.

The pot made mm porridge.

Hmm, let's find some adjectives to describe and verbs to explain what is happening.

We can use word banks to give us ideas for adjectives and verbs, and they can help with our spelling, too.

So if you spot any that you like, you might want to note them down.

Verbs are doing or being words.

That's one of our key words.

So can you say that with me? Verbs are doing or being words.

Well done.

So for the word spoke, speaking is an action.

If we spoke, we've already done it.

You could say Jin spoke the magic words, Jin said the magic words, or you could choose a more interesting verb that shows us how Jin said it.

Jin whispered the magic words.

Jin chanted the magic words, which means she says it in a bit of a rhythm.

Cook, little pot, cook.

Jin uttered the magic words, which means she said it quite quickly, or Jin murmured the magic words, which means she said it quite quietly.

Which one are you going to choose? Jin mm the magic words.

Which one are you going to choose? That sounds like a fantastic choice.

And adjectives describe nouns, which we know.

Let's try and describe the porridge.

(gasps) Delicious porridge, tasty porridge, scrumptious porridge, creamy porridge.

Hmm, all great adjectives.

Which one would you like to choose? Can you tell me? Mm porridge.

Fantastic choice.

Maybe you might want to pause the video and write some of those either verbs or adjectives down.

Pause the video now.

Have you got them? Fantastic.

You'll need those later.

So which of these verbs best expresses, shows how Jin said the magical words? Shouted.

Hmm, I'm not sure she shouted them.

Called, whispered.

I'm going to give you five seconds to choose the best one for you.

Five, four, three, two, and one.

The one I would've chosen is whispered.

Using shouted or called might change the meaning of the sentence, which we don't want to do too much.

So which of these adjectives best describe the porridge? Thinking that Jin wants to make lots and help lots of people for people to eat.

Revolting, ugh, which is another word for disgusting.

Scrumptious.

Sad.

Which adjective are you going to choose to describe the porridge? I'll give you five seconds.

Five, four, three, two, and one.

Which one have you chosen? Scrumptious.

If people wanted to eat porridge, you wouldn't call it revolting, and I don't think porridge can be sad either, so I would choose scrumptious.

Well done.

So we are going to rehearse our sentences out loud before writing, and that helps us remember them.

So we're going to choose a verb for our first sentence and choose an adjective for our second sentence.

Then Jin mm the magic words.

We need a verb.

Then Jin whispered the magic words.

Then Jin chanted the magic words.

The pot mm made porridge.

We need an adjective.

The pot made tasty porridge.

The pot made creamy porridge.

Let's have a look at ones that I've chosen and see if it works.

Then Jin uttered the magic words.

The pot made delicious porridge.

Let's see what we have in those sentences.

I have a capital letter to start my first idea and sequencing language, then.

Then Jin uttered.

There's my verb for how Jin said the magic words.

Uttered the magic words.

My first idea, you can see using the pictures to help you.

One picture per idea.

I've got a full stop.

Then I need to start my new idea.

So I need a capital letter.

The pot made delicious, there's my adjective, porridge, full stop.

So another full stop to show I've got two ideas.

I wonder whether your sentences are the same or different.

Let's now plan a sentence to explain what happened next.

We will add a verb that helps to explain what happened.

After that, the pot mm with porridge, (gasps) and I can see an exclamation mark.

Can you do that with me? Exclamation mark.

(gasps) An exclamation mark is a really exciting piece of punctuation that expresses a strong emotion, like shock or surprise.

Imagine being in a street and it being filled with porridge! You'd feel shocked.

So we are going to use an exclamation mark.

In your writing today, you only have one exclamation mark to use.

Can you get your exclamation mark in your hands? Give it a shake and put it in your pocket.

You've only got one to use.

I'm going to use it in this sentence.

After that, the pot mm with porridge.

Let's choose a verb to help us.

We can use the word banks to help us come up with different verbs to explain what happened.

What did the porridge do in this picture? (gasps) Overflowed.

The porridge overflowed.

The porridge burst from the pot.

The porridge gushed! The porridge exploded! (gasps) Which one are you going to choose? Maybe take a picture of it in your head, or you could write it down in a moment.

What did the porridge do to the streets? It covered the streets, flooded the streets, filled the streets, drenched the streets, which means it got it all wet.

You need to choose two verbs, one from each of what the porridge did in the pot and what the porridge did to the streets.

Maybe you could pause the video and write one of those down to help you later.

Pause the video now.

Those are some fantastic verbs that you've chosen.

We know that rehearsing sentences out loud before writing helps us to remember them.

You are going to choose a verb to show what happens to the pot and then, in the next sentence, choose a verb to show that the pot filled the streets.

So let's have a look at the first one.

After that, the pot mm with porridge, exclamation mark.

So you need a verb.

After that, the pot burst with porridge, overflowed with porridge, gushed with porridge.

The porridge mm the streets, and you need another verb there.

Have a think about the ones that you've already chosen, and let's look at this example.

After that, the pot overflowed with porridge! Exclamation mark.

The porridge flooded the streets.

Let's see what's in those sentences.

We have a capital letter and sequencing language to start the sentence.

After that, the pot overflowed, there's my verb, with porridge, exclamation mark.

Then I'm starting a new sentence, so I need a capital letter.

The porridge flooded, there's my verb, the streets, full stop.

So we are going to practise rehearsing our sentences out loud in different ways to help us remember what we are going to write.

So we are going to say the sentences.

For example, then Jin chanted the magic words.

Then we might say a sentence in a silly voice.

The pot made delicious porridge.

Then we might say the sentences again and trying to include capital letters, maybe finger spaces, and a full stop.

For example, capital letter, after that, the pot overflowed with porridge, exclamation mark.

Capital letter, the porridge flooded the streets.

Then you'll say all of your sentences together to somebody else, and then finally, you'll whisper those sentences to your pencil.

So you have got those sentences to help you.

Then Jin mm the magic words.

The pots made mm porridge.

After that, the pot mm with porridge.

The porridge mm the streets.

You've got four sentences to try and remember.

So you're going to practise rehearsing the middle of your story out loud following those steps.

Can you pause the video now? And off you go.

Fantastic.

I loved hearing the different adjectives and verbs that you have chosen.

Did you manage to rehearse the middle of your story aloud? This is one that I heard.

Then Jin chanted the magic words.

The pot made delicious porridge.

After that, the pot overflowed with porridge! (gasps) And we're missing a sentence.

The porridge flooded the streets.

Fantastic.

I think we're ready to write the middle of our story.

Let's have another look at our success criteria for today's writing.

We will read a sentence to see if it meets it.

Use sequencing language to order events.

Use capital letters at the start of sentences and a full stop or an exclamation mark at the end.

Remember, you only have one exclamation mark to use.

How many do you have to use? Make sure it's hiding in your pocket safe.

Use verbs to explain what happened in the plot, and then finally, read back to make sure that your sentence makes sense.

Let's see if this example meets our success criteria.

One day, the pot gush with porridge! (gasps) Have we got sequencing language? Yes, we have.

There it is, one day.

We've got a capita letter at the start of the sentence, and we have our exclamation mark at the end because that is something that happens suddenly or that is shocking.

We've got a verb to help us explain what happened.

The pot gushed, there's my verb, with porridge, and I've read my sentence back, and it makes sense.

We will be writing more than one sentence today, and one simple sentence is one idea.

So let's have a look at our first idea.

Then Jin chanted the magic words.

My idea starts with a capital letter and ends with a full stop.

I need to start my new idea with a capital letter.

The pot made delicious porridge, full stop.

I need to start a new idea.

After that, the pot overflowed with porridge! (gasps) There is my exclamation mark.

So I've started with my capital letter, and I've ended with my exclamation mark.

Let's see if this is correct.

I'm going to put one finger on the capital letter, and I'm going to read and check.

Is there a full stop or an exclamation mark after just one idea, and have you chosen carefully where to put the exclamation mark? So here we go, capital letter.

My finger is going to it.

Can your finger go to it as well? Then, I'm getting my other finger to track, then Jin chanted the magic words, exclamation mark.

A new idea, so I need a capital letter.

Get my finger.

The pot's made delicious porridge! Exclamation mark.

I've got a capital letter.

After that, the pot overflowed with porridge, exclamation mark! I have three ideas in that example, which is great because I've started them all with a capital letter, but they all end with an exclamation mark.

Jin chanting the magic words or that the pot made delicious porridge isn't really shocking, so they shouldn't have an exclamation mark.

If every sentence we use has an exclamation mark, that will get silly and a bit boring.

Let's see if that works.

Then Jin chanted the magic words, full stop.

Capital letter, the pots made delicious porridge, full stop.

Capital letter, after that, the pot overflowed with porridge! Exclamation mark.

That's better.

Now it's my turn to do my writing, and I'd love for you to help me.

I am ready to write the middle of my story.

I have my success criteria stuck on some lined paper to write on, I have a pen to write with, and I'm sitting comfortably.

I also have nearby my story mountain to help me remember the part of the story that I'm writing.

So I have that there to remind me.

So I'm going to remind myself of my success criteria.

Use sequencing language to order events, use capital letters at the start of sentences and a full stop or one exclamation mark at the end, use verbs to explain what happened in the plot, and read back to make sure that my sentence makes sense.

Now I've already written my first two sentences.

Can you read them with me? Then, there's my sequencing language, Jin chanted, a verb, the magic words, full stop.

The pot made creamy porridge.

I think I've made a mistake here somewhere.

There's my capital letter to start my first idea and my full stop to end my first idea.

Then I'm starting a new idea, and I've got my full stop.

But what am I missing? Could you tell me? (gasps) I'm missing my capital letter for the.

Oh my goodness! I'm going to put it there to remind so I can fix it.

The pot made creamy porridge.

I think I'm ready to write my next sentence, which is, after that, the pot burst with porridge! (gasps) That sounds like a time where I can use my exclamation mark.

How exciting.

After that, the pot burst with porridge.

Fantastic.

Okay.

I am going to very sensibly think after that.

I've got after that on my story mountain.

I need a capital letter.

I've got just enough room for after.

After.

A new line.

I'm leaving a line in case I make any more mistakes.

After that, comma, the, T-H-E, pot, could you sound out pot with me? Pot, pot.

Fantastic.

After that, the pot burst.

Oh my goodness.

Burst, one of my verbs.

Could you stretch that out with me? Burst, burst.

Buh.

Now my U-R likes to make the er sound in the middle, burst, burst.

Now normally, my verb, when it ends and it sounds like a T, would be an E-D, but for burst, it isn't.

After that, the pot burst with, with, with porridge.

We've seen this word so many times in our story so I can remember how to spell it, and I've got it here as well.

P-oh-r, two er, ih, then my juh is being made by these three letters, D-G-E.

After that, comma, the pot burst with porridge! (gasps) Now that's a sentence that's showing shock and surprise.

What could I use at the end of my sentence? An exclamation mark! But I've got to remember that I can't use it again.

Now my final sentence is, the porridge flooded the streets.

(gasps) I've ended my idea.

I might not have ended my idea with a full stop, but I still need a capital letter.

Capital letter, the porridge, a word that I've written lots of times now, the porridge flooded, flooded.

I'm going to write flood first and add my E-D ending.

Could you stretch flood for me? Flood.

F-uhl-uh-duh, flood.

F-uhl-uh-duh, flood.

Then I'd show it happened in the past, flooded, my E-D ending.

The porridge flooded the streets, the.

You could, if you want, add in another adjective to describe the streets 'cause I have the word messy on my story mountain.

So I might add the messy streets.

S-t.

Can I hear you sounding out with me? Er-ee-t-s, streets.

The porridge flooded the messy streets.

I finished my idea, so I need a full stop.

Let's quickly check our success criteria.

Have I used my sequencing language? I've used then, and I've used after that.

Have I used capital letters at the start of my three ideas? One, two, three, ooh, four! I've used four sentences, and I've got my four capital letters.

Have I got my full stops or exclamation marks? One, two, three, there's my exclamation mark, four! Yes.

Have I used verbs to explain what happened? Chanted, burst, flooded.

I definitely have, and we've read it back to make sure it makes sense.

Thank you so much for helping me with my writing, and I can't wait to see yours.

Now it's your turn after you've helped me to write the middle of the story explaining the problem in the story.

Don't forget to check your success criteria.

Pause the video now, and off you go.

What fantastic writing.

You should be incredibly proud of yourselves.

Well, here's an example.

Can you check the success criteria with me? Then, Jin chanted the magic words.

The pots made delicious porridge.

After that, the pots overflowed with porridge! The porridge flooded the streets.

I can see sequencing language.

Can you see any? Can you tell me what it is? Then and after that.

Well done.

I have used capital letters at the start of every one of my ideas, then, the, after that, and the again, and I've used either a full stop and just one exclamation mark at the end.

I've used a range of verbs to explain what happened in the plot, chanted, overflowed, and flooded, and we read it back together to make sure it makes sense.

Before we finish, can you check one more time to make sure that you have met your success criteria? Don't worry if you haven't first time.

I'm sure you can make some corrections.

Pause the video now.

Fantastic.

What amazing writing you've managed to achieve today.

We've worked really hard in this lesson, and I'm so impressed with how we've done.

Today, we have been writing the middle of the story of "The Magic Porridge Pot." We have used sequencing language to start our sentences.

We know that the middle of the story introduces the main plot and often involves the problem.

Every sentence must start with a capital letter, and sentences often end with a full stop, but if a sentence expresses a strong emotion like surprise, it can end with an exclamation mark.

And also, reading a sentence back is so important after writing it to help to check it makes sense.

I hope you're really proud of your writing today.

You really should be.

Well done, and I hope to see you again.

Bye!.