Lesson video

Hello, wonderful storytellers.

It is me Miss.

McCartney, and I am so excited to be learning again with you today.

Today, we are going to be reading as a writer.

So we are going to be looking at some different pieces of reading, that help us with our writing.

But before that, I have got a short quiz called guess or not guess name the character.

So I am going to explain something that happens in our story, and you are going to name which character I am talking about.

Let's start with a slightly easier one.

This character enjoys reading and has multiple arms, which character I talking about? Tell your screen now.

Fantastic.

You knew that one elephant-headed Ganesh.

Well done.

Okay.

Which character name the character that is intelligent, wise, knowledgeable and eloquent.

Tell your screen.

Hmm, interesting.

Some people said Ganesh and some people said Buddhi.

I think if you said either of those answers, you did a great job.

Okay.

Two more.

This character enjoys shining his armour so all the people can see how wonderfully dressed he is for war, name the character, tell your screen.

Fantastic, Kartikeya.

Okay, last one.

This character tells stories to Kartikeya on his journey, name the character and tell your screen.

Brilliant.

You could have said the Buffalo or the polar bear.

Well done such great knowledge of our story.

Let's start our learning for today.

Storytelling superstars, to make sure that you are fully prepared for your learning today, you will need three things, a piece of paper or something to write on a pencil or something to write with and your wonderful brain filled with different stories.

If you need to go and collect any of those things, pause the video now.

Okay.

Let's have a little look at what we are going to be learning today.

We are going to play a small game about show don't tell, we are going to look at something called a mood toolkit, then we are going to read as a writer and finally end with a little rhyming couplet game.

So let's get started with our show don't tell activity.

Now I am going to read out a statement.

It says, "He shrugged and swallowed to stop the water rising in his eyes." Now I would like you to do that with me.

So I am going to shrug, swallow to try and stop the water rising in my eyes.

Okay, after three let's do it together.

One, two, three.

Okay, what I would like you to think about is what is that showing us about the character? What is it showing us about the mood of our story? Hmm, have a little think about it and keep the idea in your head.

Okay, let's have a look at our second one now.

We have got, "They stood eye to eye, hands clenched.

The people were becoming redder and sweatier as they spat at each other." Now it doesn't mean they were spitting at each other, it means they were so angry that when they were shouting, it was like they were spitting.

I wonder what emotion that shows us.

Does that show us a happy emotion or a sad emotion? Think carefully in your head.

The emotion and the word that best describes those few sentences.

Okay, let's have a look at our next one.

We have got, "The corner of her mouth started twitching and her eyes glittered.

Now I think this looks a bit like this, and then you can have a go.

It's a bit where you're trying not to laugh.

So kind of like, can you do that kind of face? Brilliant.

She walked away confidently with her head held high.

Hmm, I wonder what these sentences are showing us.

Are they showing us that the character is frustrated? Are they showing us that our character is feeling hmm triumphant and pleased with herself? Have a little think and keep your idea in your head.

Okay, last sentence.

"His heart started to beat rapidly.

He tried to stand as firmly as he could, but his knees started to shake." Does that tell us he was excited? Does that tell us that he was really ecstatic happy? You have to think about that and keep the idea in your head because we are now going to find out what these actions show, rather than tell us.

Let's have a look at our first one.

He shrugged and swallowed to stop the water rising to his eyes.

So he could be really sad.

It sounds like he's going to cry 'cause he's trying to stop the water coming to his eyes.

He could be ashamed.

He could have felt like he's done something wrong or he could feel embarrassed.

So if you said any of those things or a similar idea, well done.

Let's look at number two.

They stood eye to eye, hands clenched that people were becoming redder and sweatier as they spat at each other.

I am sure that you would have said that the characters were angry or they were furious, they were showing fury.

When people clench their hands and get very red and sweaty usually they are angry.

Let's have a look at the next one.

The corner of her mouth started twitching and her eyes glittered.

She walked away confidently with her head held high.

So she might be triumphant.

She might have kind of won something or she might've beaten somebody.

But the corner of her mouth twitching suggests she was trying not to smile.

And our final one, his heart started to beat rapidly.

He tried to stand as firmly as he could, but his knees start to shake.

Now this could show us that he was nervous, perhaps even terrified, or it could show us that he was excited.

So well done everybody for having a think about what the writer was trying to show us, rather than tell us.

The writer did not say, the character was angry, the character was nervous or sad but they showed us through that action.

Excellent, everybody.

Okay.

We are going to look at something now called a toolkit.

And a toolkit is something that writers or storytellers have in their brain to help them.

And today we are going to be looking at moods that move us.

You see, you've just seen some examples of that now.

And in our toolkit, we have actions.

Let's do the actions together, actions, your turn.

Fantastic.

Appearances, your turn, brilliant.

Thoughts, your turn and feelings, your turn.

Brilliant.

So we can create moods that either mirror the character's mood so they're the same as the characters mood or guide our reader's response.

So we can help our reader to feel the mood that we want to, as the writer.

So, actions, appearances, thoughts, and feelings.

I would like you to pause the video now and write down the four different ways that we can create moods that move us because they're really important.

Excellent! So now that you have written those down, you can keep looking back to them to help you.

Let's have a look at our first activity.

We are going to read as a writer.

So today we are going to be doing some reading and we are going to think about how it could help us with our writing.

So at any time you can pause the video and you can write down anything that you might want to use in your writing later.

I am going to read out this piece of text and I would like you to have your magnet eyes on the screen, listening really carefully, and following along with your reading finger.

He rushed in jumping over the books on the floor and skidded to a halt in front of his brother.

His brow was sweaty and he was grinning from ear to ear.

Brother, brother, I must tell you about the intelligent mind and eloquent Buddhi.

I simply must throw a ball for her and her family, explained Kartikeya.

Kartikeya felt as though his heart would explode just thinking about the wonderful princess.

Okay.

So this is an example of how we have created a mood to move our listener.

I would like you now to hunt for the actions that our writer has used, the appearances, the thoughts and the feelings.

You have got the sentence stem at the bottom of the screen.

The writer described, and you can say actions, appearances, thoughts, or feelings by and you need to hunt and find it in the writing.

And this created the mood and you need to tell me which mood it has created.

So off you go hunting for actions, appearances, thoughts and feelings and then we are going to go through it together.

Pause your video now.

Wow! It was so good to see so many children pointing at the screen and using the sentence then to explain their ideas.

So let's have a look for an action first.

Hmm, I'm going to use skidded to a halt.

So the writer described the action skidding to a halt and this created the mood of overwhelming excitement.

He was so excited.

Kartikeya was so excited that he was running so fast that he skidded when he stopped, I'm sure that perhaps that happens to you sometimes in the playground.

Okay, now we need to find an appearance.

Something in the writing that tells us what the characters looked like.

Ah, I'm going to use, he was grinning from ear to ear.

The writer described appearance by saying he was grinning from ear to ear, and this created the mood of happiness.

He was so happy.

His smile went from one ear to the other ear.

It didn't really, but that is how the writer has shown us how excited Kartikeya was.

Okay, let's have a little think about thoughts now.

Can I find what Kartikeya was thinking? Hmm.

Well, I know that he has been thinking about Buddhi because he tells his brother, he says, "I simply must throw a ball for her and her family.

I simply must, which tells me that he is really excited and he feels really determined that he has to do it.

Okay, let's have a look for our last one, feelings.

Can I find any evidence about how Kartikeya feels? Ah, the writer described feelings by stating, "Kartikeya felt as though his heart would explode." So that tells me actually he feels so strongly.

He admires Buddhi so much in perhaps loves her, that he feels that his heart could explode.

Wow.

I am super impressed with everybody's learning now.

Now that we have gone through an example together, I'm even more excited for our next section.

Let's have a look.

I am going to read the writing again.

But this time you could be looking for actions, actions is? Let's start again.

This time you could be looking for actions, appearances, thoughts, and feelings whilst I am reading.

As he scrambled and tripped, he wiped the trickling blood from his knee.

The air was becoming thinner and it was harder and harder to breathe.

The squawking of the eagles was getting closer and closer as though they were preparing to devour him.

He wondered how his people and his brother would feel if he never returned.

Somewhere deep inside him, he knew he would make it.

It was just though his legs were carrying him without being told to.

Oh, I really liked the mood that this section creates.

So have a look for the actions, appearances, thoughts, and feelings, you have the same sentence stem at the bottom, pause your video now to find these things.

Okay.

What actions did you find? Can you whisper the actions that you found to your screen? Okay.

So he scrambled and he tripped.

Now that can create the mood of somebody who is really, really anxious, but nervous.

Anxious but determined sorry.

They are feeling really nervous and determined.

And they are also not able to concentrate.

So it's a little bit erratic.

Now, erratic is when something is not controlled.

Erratic, things are happening all over the place.

But I think the mood here is quite erratic.

Let's think about appearance now.

Hmm, do we get a description of what he looks like? We do get a little bit, but it's more action.

We get him wiping the trickle in blood from his knee.

And that tells us that he is determined to carry on.

He's not crying over his knee, he is wiping the blood away, but that is a bit more of an action not an appearance.

Okay, his thoughts.

He wondered how his people and his brother would feel if he never returned.

And that creates a mood of uncertainty.

He is worried that actually he might not make it.

Okay.

We are going to move on to our section number three of read as a writer.

I am super impressed with all of the effort that you have put in so far.

Okay.

Kartikeya smiled and bowed to the feast's guests.

But, everytime he thought no one was watching his smile dropped and his brow furrowed.

This is what furrowed brow looks like.

He just could not stop thinking about the race.

An uneasy feeling had been in his heart ever since he knew that something wasn't right.

Was it fair to confront his brother at the feast? he pondered, which means he thought, whilst everyone else danced, he paced back and forth.

Okay, think about the actions, appearances, thoughts and feelings, that create the mood in this scene.

Pause your video now and use your sentence stem at the bottom.

It is so wonderful to see how much people have grown in confidence over this lesson.

I can see people pointing to the actions and the thoughts so quickly now.

So at the beginning, actions tell us Kartikeya smiled and he bowed.

So first, we might think that his actions create a happy mood, but as we read further on, we can see he paced back and forth, whilst everyone danced.

And when people pace, it sometimes means they are thinking really hard and they can't relax.

They feel very agitated.

Which means they've a lots of thoughts and feelings, but they aren't happy about them.

So we've got a really agitated mood, which is not a good mood in comparison to the first sentence.

Let's think about his thoughts.

Was it fair to confront his brother at the feast? So Kartikeya wants to go up to Ganesh and ask him about the race around the world.

But he's wondering if it's fair.

So this makes me a little bit nervous because Kartikeya is thinking perhaps they could get into an argument at the feast.

And that is what I am thinking too.

So it is creating a very nervous, agitated mood.

You have done so well in today's lesson.

I am so impressed.

If there are any phrases, so any groups of words that you really liked that you would like to use in your writing later in this unit, in lesson seven, eight, nine, and 10, you could pause the video and write them down.

Okay, to end our lesson, we are going to do a short rhyming couplet game.

Now, the word at the end of each line Rhymes.

So I'm going to do my first one now, which is, Ganesh ruled with his learning.

But kartikeya found his lies, and you need to find a word that rhymes with learning.

So let's do that one again.

Ganesh ruled with his learning, but Kartikeya found his lies quite, concerning.

Fantastic if you got that one.

It was a bit of a tricky one.

Okay, let's do our next one.

Now remember for a rhyming couplets, you have to have the last two words rhyming.

So Kartikeya visited the sea, but unfortunately the brothers did not? Let's do it again.

Kartikeya visited the sea, but unfortunately the brothers did not, agree.

I wonder if you could come up with your own rhyming couplets.

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Fantastic learning everybody today.

Super proud of all of you.