Lesson video

Hello, everybody.

It is me, Miss McCartney, and I am super excited to learn with you today because we are going to be writing the fourth and final instalment of our recycled story.

We get to write the ending today and make the learning for the world really obvious to everybody.

And I think that is one of the best things about being a storyteller.

Let's get started.

In our lesson today.

You will need a piece of paper or something to write on, a pencil or something to write with, and your wonderful creative brain.

You will also need your boxing up plan that we created together in lesson six of unit eight.

It will really support you with your writing today.

If you need to go and collect any of those things, pause your video now.

Brilliant.

Let's see what we are going to be doing today.

We are going to start with a spelling activity.

Then we are going to complete our shared write all together for the fourth and final instalment of our story.

And we will finish by editing our story just like real authors.

Okay.

Let's get started with our spelling.

Today, we are looking at adding the suffix -ness to our root words.

And when we add the suffix -ness, we turn our root word into a noun.

Can you say we turn our root word into a noun? Your turn.

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Let's have a look at some examples.

I have got the root word loud.

And when I add my suffix -ness, I get the noun loudness.

My turn.

Your turn.

Loudness.

Your turn.

Brilliant.

Okay.

If we have our root word dark, and we add our suffix -ness, we get the noun darkness.

I think you might be able to start spotting a pattern.

I have my root word kind and I add my suffix -ness to make the noun kindness.

This time I have got my root word, forgive.

Before I show you what my noun would be when I add the suffix -ness.

can you whisper what you think the noun would be with the suffix added? What's the noun? Excellent everybody.

We get the noun forgiveness.

You have done something great job.

Give yourself some story telling shine.

Brilliant.

Well, actually, maybe it should be some spelling shine right now.

Okay.

Can you use the nouns that we have created in three sentences? Miss McCartney's example is the baby shark couldn't believe the loudness with which has family cheered.

And we have got the nouns, loudness, darkness, kindness, and forgiveness.

Pause your video now to create your three sentences.

Excellent.

Come a bit closer and whisper your favourite sentence to me.

Oh, I had a really good sentence.

One of our learners said, when the character found out who they really were, they felt like they had stepped out of the darkness.

What a great sentence.

Well done everybody.

It is now time to start our shared write.

I cannot wait.

We are now going to write the fourth instalment of our story.

I have written my problem toolkit, at the side so that I can be reminded of the features when I'm writing.

Difficulty, consequences, thoughts and feelings, and learning for the world.

Can you pause your video now and write down your toolkit? Excellent.

I'm just going to take a quick look at my boxing upper plan to remind myself of the ending.

I would like you to pause your video and read your summary.

Fantastic.

Okay.

I am going to start my story.

Now, I left off where our baby shark, who is actually a fish, started swimming with the fish and they smiled and waved at her, and taught her the fin high five.

So now I'm going to start with my next difficulty.

Out of the corner of her eye.

Eye is a tricky word.

We just need to know how to spell it.

Out at the corner of her eye she spotted her shark family.

Hmm.

I wonder what action you need to write about to introduce your difficulty.

Can you write it at the side so that when you do your big write in a minute, you are reminded of your idea.

Pause your video now and think about your first action.

Brilliant.

Our of the corner of her eye, she spotted her shark family.

Oh, in fact, I'm going to say, Oh, Uh-oh.

Uh oh, okay.

So definitely introduced my difficulty.

And now I'm going to mirror my character's thoughts and feelings by asking some rhetorical questions.

I'm going to, hmm, what question do I really want my baby shark to ask? Out of the corner of her eye, she spotted her shark family.

Uh oh, I'm going to say, was this the moment of truth? Was this the moment of truth? Okay.

Pause your video now and write down your rhetorical question that mirrors your character's thoughts and feelings.

Brilliant.

Okay.

Was this the moment of truth? Hmm, going to put some emphasis on that when I say it.

Was this the moment of truth.

Okay.

I've alluded to her thoughts and feelings.

Now I'm going to think about the consequences.

The baby shark.

The baby shark swam in front of her fish friends.

In fact, I'm going to say her new.

If you want to add in a word, you can use this little symbol that looks a bit like a hat.

In front of her new fish friends to protect them.

Okay.

So, I'm starting to think about the consequences that actually my baby shark thinks that she needs to protect her new fish friends from her shark family.

Hmm.

I wonder what you are going to write to allude to your, to hint, to your consequences.

Can you pause your video now and write down your idea? Ooh, we've got some wonderful show don't tell.

Some people's characters start to shake.

And the other person's character starts to pace up and down because they are panicking.

Brilliant.

The baby shark swam in front of her new fish friends to protect them.

However, as her family got closer, she saw.

Hmm.

In my story, she saw them smiling with open arms. What does your character see? Pause your video now to write down what your character sees.

Okay.

However, as her family got closer, she saw irregular past tense verb.

She saw them smiling.

Now I'm going to change smiling with open arms, to smiling with open fins.

She saw them smiling with open fins.

Fantastic.

She knew.

Now, I'm going to say she knew who she really was.

Can you pause your video? Ugh.

I got my words all mixed up.

Can you pause your video now and write down what she knew.

Brilliant.

I should have said what your character knew then.

She knew finally, going to use an adverb to describe.

She knew finally who she really was.

Okay.

I'm going to start finishing my story now.

So I have also thought about my learning for the world and her finding who she really is.

She knew finally who she really was.

Okay.

And I'm going to write her siblings couldn't wait.

Wait to play, wait to play with her new friends.

I always remember how to spell friends by breaking it into two.

Fri, ends.

Fri, ends, friends.

Her siblings couldn't wait to play with her new friends and learn the fin high five.

And then I finished my story.

Oh my goodness.

Okay, I've got a tick next to everything from my toolkit.

I'm going to read through to make sure I'm fully happy.

Okay.

It's not top of the top.

Out at the corner of her eye, she spotted her shark family.

Ooh, Ooh.

I'm going to add something here.

She spotted her shark family in the shadows.

'Cause that makes the mood a little bit enigmatic.

I don't know what's going to happen.

She spotted her shark family in the shadows.

Uh oh.

Is this the moment of truth? That baby shark swam in front of her new fish friends to protect them.

However, as her family got closer, she saw them smiling with open fins.

She knew finally who she really was.

Her siblings couldn't wait to play with her new friends and learn the fin high five.

I am super happy with my ending because I think it really shows learning for the world.

I would now like you to pause your video and write the ending of your story.

I cannot wait to see it.

Wow.

I am so impressed that we have finished writing the fourth and final instalment of our stories.

Before we do our editing, I would love to see your writing.

Can you hold it up to the screen so I can have a little look? Such a wonderful effort from everybody? Well done.

Give yourself some storytelling shine.

Now we are going to edit our story.

I would suggest that you get all four sections together to do your editing today, so you can read your story as a whole.

The first thing you need to check for is to make sure that the punctuation is in the right place.

Make sure you haven't forgotten anything.

Read your story out loud to somebody in your house, to me on the screen, or a teddy talk partner, and then you can see if your story fits together, or if you need to add or take anything away.

Make sure that you have made the difficulty really clear, that you have highlighted the consequences, that you have thought about your characters' thoughts and feelings, and you are really happy that you have created some wonderful learning for the world.

Pause your video now to do your editing.

Well done everybody.

I'm going to give you a round of applause and you can give yourself a round of applause too.

I would love to see some of your recycled stories.

If you'd like to please ask your parent or carer to share your work on Instagram, Facebook, or Twitter, tagging at OakNational and at TeachTMcCartney, hashtag LearnwithOak.

Well done, everybody.