Lesson video

Hello everyone, it's Mr. Brown here with your English lesson for today.

And we are writing a section of a non-chronological report.

Now the non-chronological report is about Florence Nightingale and Mary Seacole and we are writing today a section on Mary Seacole.

So lots to do.

Let's not waste any more time.

Let's get started.

And the outcome for today's lesson is I can write a section about Mary Seacole in a non-chronological report.

The key words we'll be using are complex sentences and subordination, quite tricky, these ones today.

So let's definitely do a my turn, your turn.

Give you a chance to say these words out loud.

Repeat after me.

Complex sentences.

Amazing, well done.

Okay, here's a big one.

Subordination.

Good.

Should we do it one more time? It was tricky that one wasn't it? Subordination.

Yes, got it, okay.

So our lesson is split into three cycles.

Today, we're going to focus on complex sentences first.

We will then start preparing to write and finally writing a section.

A complex sentence is a sentence formed of a simple sentence, joined with subordination.

Now, that might sound confusing at this stage, but we were going to explain all of these terms so you will become very familiar.

Do not worry.

Mary Seacole became a doctress.

There was a war in Crimea.

Now these are both examples of a simple sentence about one idea that makes complete sense.

Mary Seacole became a doctress.

Full stop.

There was a war in Crimea, full stop.

That is a simple sentence.

It contains one idea and that's it.

These two ideas are not simple sentences.

When she grew up, so Mary felt she had to go.

They are not simple sentences, they cannot work on their own.

They don't make sense.

When she grew up, I'm thinking, what happened when she grew up? So Mary felt she had to go, well, did something happen? So Mary felt she had to go.

They do not make sense on their own.

They are less important because they need to be joined to a simple sentence in order to make sense.

So they are not as important as the simple sentence, because the simple sentence isn't required.

You can have a simple sentence on its own, but you can't have one of these on its own.

These are ideas.

So these are subordinate to something else, which means they are less important, they are subordinate.

There are certain words that allow us to join a first idea to a subordinate idea.

So join them together.

Now those words are because, when, if, so, that, let's say those together because, when, if, so, that.

Now we call these subordination joining words.

So these are the joining words we will use to join a first idea to a subordinate idea, an idea that cannot work on its own.

We use them to join a subordinate idea to a main idea.

And this creates something called a complex sentence.

Say it with me, this creates a complex sentence.

Each of these subordinating joining words are useful for different purposes.

So because, forgiving a reason, when, tells you a timeframe.

So, for giving a result and we will look at these in detail, don't worry.

And that's forgiving more detail.

So to summarise, different subordination joining words are useful for different purposes.

I'll go through these one more time.

Because, used forgiving a reason for something.

I want to go to the park because I need to play football.

When, for giving a timeframe.

I want to go to the park when it stops raining.

So, for giving a result, I want to go to the park so I can see my friends.

That, forgiving more detail.

I want to go to the park that is next to school.

Each of these subordination joining words are useful for different purposes.

Okay, let's check your understanding of these joining words and their purposes.

I would like you to match the subordination joining word to its purpose.

Because, when, so, and that, you've got for giving a timeframe, for giving more detail, for forgiving a result, or forgiving a reason.

Can you please pause the video and match the subordination joining words to their purposes, now? Welcome back everyone.

Let's see if you managed to do this correctly.

So because, we use because when we are giving a reason for something.

I did my homework because the teacher asked me to.

When, for giving a timeframe.

So, for giving a result and that for giving more detail.

Well done if you managed to match those correctly.

Okay, it's time for a task for you.

I would like you to choose the correct subordination joining word to complete these complex sentences about Mary Seacole's life.

Because, when, so, and that are your subordination joining words, Mary Seacole became a doctress.

She grew up.

Would it be Mary Seacole became a doctor because she grew up.

Mary Seacole became a doctor when she grew up.

Mary Seacole became a doctress so she grew up, or Mary Seacole became a doctress that she grew up.

This is what I suggest you do.

You say the sentence out loud with each subordination joining word in the blank position and see which one sounds right.

So the next one is, she was inspired by her mother, hmm.

She was a doctress too.

Mary made the long journey to Crimea, hmm.

Took her three weeks and the army said no to Mary.

Hmm, she had to find another way.

Okay, over to you now.

I'd like you to pause the video and have a go at choosing the correct subordination joining word to make these complex sentences complete.

Off you go.

Welcome back everyone.

Let's see how you got on.

I am so intrigued.

So Mary Seacole became a doctress when she grew up.

She was inspired by her mother because she was a doctress too.

Mary made the long journey to Crimea that took her three months and the army said no to Mary.

So she had to find another way.

Well done if you chose the correct subordination joining word to complete those complex sentences.

Time to prepare to write.

The sections of a non-chronological report are structured in this order.

Introduction, section one, section two and conclusion.

And in this lesson we are writing the second section, which will be all about Mary Seacole You may have a plan to help you in writing, now if you don't, there's no problem at all.

You can use this one.

As you see on the screen, you've got bullet points for bullet points that you could use as a plan to guide you through writing about Mary Seacole's life.

Now, when we write, we always try and do these things.

Let's not forget we plan and say each sentence before we write it.

We use punctuation where we know the rules.

We vary our sentence types.

We write letters neatly on the line in join handwriting.

We sound out words to spell them accurately and we read our sentences out loud to check they make sense and edit to improve our writing if necessary.

Let's check our understanding of that.

Which of these do we always try and do when writing? Is it A, start writing without thinking about it? B, write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting or C, write letters as quickly as possible.

A, B, or C.

Pause the video and decide for yourself now.

Welcome back everyone.

Let's see if you were right.

Congratulations if you said B, you write letters neatly on the line in joint handwriting.

A, start writing without thinking about it, absolutely not.

And C, write letters as quickly as possible.

If you're writing as quickly as you possibly can, you are not going to be able to write them neatly on the line in joint handwriting.

And we know that's so important.

Well done if you said B.

it's time for you now to have a go.

I'd like you to say the first three sentences out loud of the section of your report on Mary Seacole.

Now I want you to use at least one complex sentence and use the plan below to help you include the relevant information.

So there you can see the plan.

At least one complex sentence.

So think about those subordination joining words because, so, when, let's get those in your writing if you can.

It's over to you now.

Pause the video and say the first three sentences out loud of your section on Mary Seacole.

Off you go.

And welcome back.

Let's see how you got on.

So before we have a look as an example, can you just make sure you check your sentences? Did you include any complex sentences? If you didn't, this is an opportunity to stop and have another go.

Did you include information from your plan? Let's have a look at my example.

Mary heard about the Crimean war, so she volunteered to travel there and help.

So is my subordination joining word? Therefore, I have said a complex sentence.

However, the army did not allow her to go.

Mary paid to make the long journey to Crimea.

That took three months.

We know that is a subordination joining word for extra information.

I could've just said Mary made the long journey to Crimea.

That's my simple sentence.

But I wanted to make it a complex sentence by adding a little bit more.

And that took three months, was the bit that I added.

Well done.

I hope you got a chance to be able to say your sentences out loud and that you are feeling ready to write, because that is what we're going to do right now.

Here's your success criteria.

I have written a subheading, is the first thing you need to do.

We know by now in a non chronological report, every section needs a subheading that's underlined.

So we'll make sure we do that.

I have used my plan to include the key information about Mary Seacole's life.

We must ensure we are using our plan.

There it is.

Make sure you are following that plan to guide your writing.

I have used at least one complex sentence.

So a complex sentence, we know what that is.

Now we know it's going to be using subordination, joining words like when or that or because or so.

And finally, I have read my writing back to check for any mistakes, the thing that we cannot overlook.

We must read our writing back to check and edit our work.

So it's now my turn and then our turn.

I'm going to have a go at writing and then we are going to check against the success criteria.

I'm going to write the subheading and start of my section on Mary Seacole.

And then we would check my writing and check against the success criteria to see if I have achieved any of my targets.

So subheading.

Okay, Mary Seacole.

I know that I want my section to be engaging for the reader.

I want to make Mary Seacole sound interesting.

She was an incredible woman.

So I'm going to give you give an adjective before it.

Something Mary Seacole.

Amazing Mary Seacole.

Fantastic Mary Sequel.

But I do like alliteration.

I do like to have a word that starts with a hmm because of Mary Seacole.

So what could we say? Ah, marvellous Mary Seacole.

She was marvellous.

And then I'm getting some alliteration in there and it's just a fun, engaging, and interesting way to write your subhead.

Marvellous Mary Seacole.

And you see I have underlined too.

Okay, it's now time for my first sentence.

Now I know from my plan that I'm going to talk about when Mary Seacole was born, which was 1805.

So I'm gonna phrase this as a question.

Were you aware that Mary Seacole was born in Jamaica in 1805 with a question mark? Great way to engage the reader straight away.

Mary became a, now my plan says Mary became a doctress and her mother was too.

So I'm gonna try and include a subordination joining word here.

So let's go for because, 'cause I can say Mary became a doctress because there it is.

She wanted to follow in the footsteps of her mother.

Perfect.

So already in my first two sentences, I'm using my plan.

I'm getting in that complex sentence.

I've created that because I've got because there, okay, that's me with my writing.

It's now time for us to look at the success criteria.

Let's work together.

We are going to check against the success criteria.

So the first thing says, I've written a subheading.

Can you see my subheading? Can you point to it? Can you read it to me? Excellent.

Yes, you can see it.

Marvellous Mary Seacole.

It's underlined.

It is there.

So I can tick off that I've done my subheading.

I have written a subheading tick.

Okay, great.

So next thing my plan says, I have used my plan to include the key information about Mary Seacole's life.

Yes, I kept referring back to it, didn't I? I said my plan says this.

So this is what my sentence should be and that's how we're going to use our plan.

So I can tick that.

Now the tricky one, I have used at least one complex sentence.

Is there a complex sentence there? Can you see it? A complex sentence will have a subordination joining word.

Can you see that word? Well, well done if you can because it's there.

I have done it.

It's because, because it's a subordination joining word, which means that I've written a complex sentence.

So well done to myself.

I'm really happy with that.

Again, the last thing is I have read my writing back to check for any mistakes.

I always think you can't tick this until the very end.

You must be consistent.

But I was reading my writing back, wasn't I? So let me read it one more time just to check.

Were you aware that Mary Seacole was born in Jamaica in 1805? There's my question mark for my question.

Capital letter, good.

Mary became a doctress because she wanted to follow in the footsteps of her mother.

Full stop, nice.

That's my complex sentence.

Okay, looking good.

It's now your turn.

You are going to write and underline your own subheading and then use the success criteria and the plan to write the section on Mary Seacole.

And there's the success criteria that I would like you to use.

You have a good knowledge of Mary Seacole, you have a great knowledge of complex sentences.

You know how to do this.

I believe in you and I'm really excited to see what you produce.

So it's over to you.

Pause the video and have a go writing your section on Mary Seacole now.

Welcome back everyone.

Okay, I'm really interested to see how you got on.

How did you find it? Let's read an example and see if there's any similarities between this example and yours.

Marvellous Mary Seacole.

Were you aware that Mary Seacole was born in Jamaica in 1805? Well, Mary became a doctress when she grew up.

She followed in the footsteps of her mother because she was a doctress too.

Unfortunately, the Crimean War started, so Mary volunteered to travel to Crimea and help.

However, the army did not allow her to go.

Mary knew she would have to travel there herself if she wanted to help the soldiers.

Mary Seacole made the long journey to Crimea that ended up taking three months.

And I've used an exclamation mark there to really emphasise this was a huge amount of time.

Amazingly, that's my viewpoint, fronted adverbial.

Amazingly, Mary set up her own hospital in Crimea called the British Hotel, and she also was brave enough to travel to the battlefield to help injured soldiers.

After the war, okay, that's a frontal adverbial of time, Mary wrote her autobiography and she was the first Black woman in Britain to do so.

So lots of detail in there.

I've used my plan lots.

I've got complex sentences in there, with those subordination joining words.

And we can see my subheading is there, it's underlined, Marvellous Mary Seacole.

She followed in the footsteps of her mother because she was a doctress.

That's a complex sentence.

Unfortunately, the Crimea War started.

So Mary volunteered to travel to Crimea and help, so makes it a complex sentence.

And then Mary Seacole made the long journey to Crimea, that ended up taking three months.

We know that is for extra information.

So three complex sentences used there.

I would like you now to check your writing back, to check that it makes sense to read it aloud.

Check that there are no punctuation errors.

And then when you do that, the last thing you should do is check your success criteria to see if you've done everything.

If not, you can edit and improve your writing so that you can take everything.

Please pause the video now and have one last moment with your writing to read through and to check, to be sure that you are happy, that there are no errors and things that need editing.

Off you go.

Welcome back everyone.

Okay, I am sure that you checked thoroughly.

I'm sure that you have a subheading, that you used your plan, that there is at least one complex sentence, maybe more, and that you read your writing back to check for any mistakes.

Well done.

To summarise our learning today, a complex sentence is a sentence formed of a simple sentence joined with subordination.

Subordination means joining a simple sentence with a second idea of lower importance.

Mary Seacole was a doctress who helped injured soldiers during the Crimean War, and Mary set up her own hospital in Crimea called the British Hotel.

Excellent work on writing a sectional about Marvellous Mary Seacole.

I'll see you again very soon.