Lesson video

Hello and welcome to lesson 10 on our unit of The Day the Crayons Quit persuasive writing.

My name is Ms Bourke and I am a teacher with the Oak Academy.

Today is a really important lesson.

We are going to be practising saying our sentences aloud before we write them down in our next lesson when we write our first paragraph.

Okay, so let's get started.

Let's look at our agenda for today.

First, we will do a warm up.

Next, we will look at persuasive letters and recap some of the features.

Then we will answer some questions, we will ask some questions for our character and answer them.

And finally, we will orally rehearse paragraph one.

In this lesson, you will need an exercise book or a piece of paper, a pencil and your brain for all the thinking you need to do.

You will also need to do any work we have already completed in this unit, including your character that you came up with, and any commands, and rhetorical questions that you have written.

If you don't have any of those things, pause the video and go and get them now.

Good job.

It's time for our warm up.

I would like you to choose the correct conjunction for each of these sentences.

I've given you two choices.

You can use the joining conjunctions so, or you can use the joining conjunction because.

You need to choose which one goes in each sentence.

My sentences are, I tripped over mm my cat ran under my feet.

My second sentence is, my cat ran under my feet mm I tripped over.

I feel lonely mm none of my friends are at the park.

None of my friends are at the park mm I feel lonely.

Pause the video and choose the correct conjunction for each of these sentences.

Okay, good job, let's have a look.

In my first sentence, I needed to use the joining conjunction because.

I tripped over because my cat ran under my feet.

We have what's happened, because, and then the reason that that happened.

My next sentence was my cat ran onto my feet so I tripped over.

This one we have the reason, the reason is the cat ran under my feet, and then what happened, the consequence, so I tripped over.

The next sentence you needed because.

I feel lonely because none of my friends were at the park.

Give yourself a tick.

And finally, none of my friends are at the park so I feel lonely.

Please go through and tick all of the ones that you got correct.

Well done.

Now we are going to look at a persuasive letter.

Let's look at an example of a persuasive letter.

Here we go.

This letter has been written to me by my board game.

I'd like you to pause the video and read through this letter now.

This is just paragraph one.

Okay, good job.

I'm going to read through it with you now.

Dear owner, listen up! I'm your incredibly lonely, distraught board game.

Do you even remember me? Do you know how it feels to be forgotten about and left on a shelf? I feel so unloved because you never play with me anymore.

I am the saddest, most unwanted toy in the world, in the whole world.

I think you should play with me because I am much more fun than watching boring, old television.

That's my first paragraph.

Now let's read through the second paragraph that the board game has written me.

Pause the video and read through the second paragraph now.

Good job.

Now let's read through it together.

Do you remember how much fun we used to have? You used to play with me all the time, but now you only use me when it's raining.

Then, when the sun comes out, you rush outside and leave me unfinished on the table.

You are so cold-hearted that you didn't even notice when the cat rudely ate one of my pieces.

Start playing with me or I will completely lose it.

If you don't take me off the shelf, I will run away and never come back.

You're upset, neglected friend, Board Game.

Did you spot any features of persuasive writing in that letter? Let's just have a look at paragraph one.

Okay, here's paragraph one.

I would like you to pause the video now and find all the adjectives that you can in paragraph one, remembering the adjectives are our describing words.

They describe things.

Pause the video now and point to all the adjectives you can find.

Well done.

I wonder if you found them all.

Let's go through them together.

We had the adjectives lonely and distraught, unloved, saddest, unwanted, fun, boring, and old.

Well done if you managed to find all the adjectives in the first paragraph of this letter.

Now, I would like you to find the rhetorical questions.

To help you, you're going to be looking for a question mark at the end of the question, aren't you? Remember, rhetorical questions are used by the writer to persuade the reader.

They don't really need to be answered.

I would like you to pause the video now and see if you can find the rhetorical questions in this paragraph.

Well done.

Let's have a look here.

Here they are.

Do you even remember me? That's one of our rhetorical questions.

And do you know how it feels to be forgotten about and left on a shelf? That's our second rhetorical question.

Well done if you found both of those for rhetorical questions.

Good job.

Now I would like you to find opinions and reasons.

Now, remember, our opinions and reasons often have the joining conjunctions so and because between them.

I wonder if you can find an opinion, or some opinions and some reasons in my writing now.

Pause the video and have a look.

Okay, I wonder if you found them, let's have a look.

Here's our first one.

I feel so unloved, that's the opinion, I feel unloved or I am unloved, because, and here is our reason, you never play with me anymore.

Good job if you found that opinion and reason.

And our next one was, I think you should play with me.

That's the opinion there.

I think you should play with me.

And the reason, because I am much more fun than watching the boring, old television.

Good job if you found those opinions and reasons in this paragraph.

So we found some adjectives, some rhetorical questions, and some opinions and reasons.

Now, we have some questions for our character that I would like your character to answer.

Here is my character, my upset board game.

I would like you to answer these questions for your character.

So you're going to pretend to be your character and you're going to answer these questions.

The questions are, what do you want your owner to change? How do you feel? Why do you feel that way? And, what would make you happy? Remember, pretending to be your character can you answer these questions as your character? Pause the video now.

Okay, good job.

I had a go at answering these questions as my character the board game.

What do you want your owner to change? I want you to start playing with me now says my character the board game.

How do you feel? Upset, lonely, unloved, and neglected.

Why do you feel that way? Because you never play with me.

I'm left on a shelf all by myself.

What would make you happy? For you to start playing with me.

For you to move me to a more comfortable shelf? Ah, so the board game is also a bit uncomfortable on their shelf.

These are my character's answers to these questions.

I wonder how your character answered those questions.

It's time for today's task.

We are going to be orally rehearsing paragraph one of a persuasive letter.

That means we are going to practise saying our persuasive letter aloud.

We are just working on paragraph one today.

We are going to write paragraph one in our next lesson.

And then after that, we will look at paragraph two.

Here is our plan for paragraph one.

The first thing we need to do is address the letter to somebody.

So dear mm.

The letter will be addressed to you because you own the object.

So you need to write your name in there.

Then your character will need to say who they are.

It's me.

They should use adjectives to describe them as well.

Then you need to ask the reader two rhetorical questions.

Then you'll need to give a feeling and the reason you feel that way and an opinion and the reason that you think that.

I would like you as you say your sentences allowed to write down any ambitious adjectives that you say so that you can remember them for when we do our writing in the next lesson.

So we are going to start with our first two parts, dear mm and it's me.

Here is my sentence.

Dear Ms Bourke it's me, you're unloved, distraught board game.

I have written in my adjectives box unloved and distraught as two adjectives that I think are ambitious that I want to keep and remember for my writing tomorrow.

Now it's your turn.

You need to say the first few sentences of your letter aloud starting with dear mm.

That will be dear, your name, it's me to get your character to introduce themselves using adjectives and write your adjectives down and write your adjective down.

Pause the video and say your sentences aloud now.

Well done.

Good job.

Okay, so we've done these first two parts of our plan.

We have addressed the letter to who and we have introduced ourselves as the character.

Now we need to come up with some questions.

My questions as the board game are going to be, have you completely forgotten about me? Do you know what it's like to be left on a dusty, old shelf all alone? Those are my rhetorical questions that the board game is using.

Remember to write, we're saying these aloud in a first person using words like I and me.

I have written down my adjectives dusty and old.

Now it's your turn.

I would like you to say aloud your two rhetorical questions.

You could borrow these from our previous lesson where we wrote some rhetorical questions, but I would still like you to say them aloud.

Pause the video and say your rhetorical questions aloud now.

Excellent work.

I wonder if he came up with any adjectives you could add to your adjective box as well.

Let's look at our plan.

Wow, we are doing so well.

We've done our greeting, we've introduced our character, we've done our rhetorical questions, now it is time to come up with a feeling and a reason.

I feel mm because.

My feeling and reason is, I feel neglected because you haven't played with me in years.

My feeling is neglected, and my reason for feeling that way is because I haven't been played with for years.

I've added neglected there to my adjective box because I think that's a good word that I want to use in my writing in the next lesson.

Okay, now it's your turn.

How does your character feel and why? Remember to use the joining conjunction because in your sentence to explain why your character feels that way.

Pause the video now and say your sentence aloud.

Excellent work.

I wonder if you managed to write down a really ambitious adjective to describe how that character is feeling.

Okay, wow, so we have done our greeting, we have addressed the letter, we have introduced the character, we have said aloud our rhetorical questions, we have said how we are feeling and why, now it's time to give an opinion and a reason why.

Here's my opinion and my reason why.

I think you should play with me, that's my opinion as the board game, I think you should play with me, and then I've used the joint in conjunction because to help me explain why, because I am amazingly fun.

I am also a good way to spend time with your family and friends.

Those are my two reasons there, that you should play with me more.

One, I've given two reasons, one is because I'm amazingly fun, and two is because I'm a good way to spend time with your family and friends.

I would like you to give your opinion and reason now.

What does your object think and why? What do they want you to change and why? Pause the video and say your sentence aloud.

Excellent job.

Don't forget to add any ambitious words you have used into your adjectives box.

Wow, we have completed our whole plan.

We have said all our sentences aloud.

We have done a greeting, we've introduced our character, we have done, we have said aloud to rhetorical questions, we have given a feeling and a reason for that feeling, we have given an opinion and a reason for that opinion.

Excellent work today.

Give yourself a pat on the back.

Well done.

You have completed a warm up, you have looked at some features of persuasive letters, you have answered some questions for the character, and you have completed our task.

Good job.

Congratulations, you have completed your lesson.

If you would like to please share your work with a parent or carer.