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Hi everyone, my name is Miss Voyle and welcome to today's lesson where you are going to be planning your first diary entry based on the "The Firework-Maker's Daughter." This lesson is based on the 2018 Penguin Random House UK edition of "The Firework Maker's Daughter" by Philip Pullman and you may wish to refer to it.
Pause the video and get your copy of the book now.
Great, now I know you have the book with you.
During this lesson, you'll need to be listening and looking carefully.
There'll be tasks where you need somebody to talk to and you'll also need a piece of paper and pen or pencil for writing.
I hope you're feeling excited and ready to learn.
Let's get started.
The learning outcome for today's lesson is: I can write a plan for my first diary entry from the perspective of Lila.
Here are the keywords for today's lesson.
Let's practise saying them.
My turn.
Your turn.
Oral recount.
First person perspective.
Plan.
Great job, well done.
And let's take a look at their definitions.
An oral recount is speaking aloud to retell events that have already happened.
First person perspective is the point of view where the speaker or writer is the I character, providing a personal account of events or experiences.
And a plan is a framework that writers create before they write a section or whole text.
There are two parts to today's lesson.
In the first part, we will be giving an oral recount of events.
And in the second part, we will be writing the plan.
So let's begin with an oral recount.
What do we know about "The Firework Maker's Daughter"? Let's remind ourselves.
It is a quest narrative written by Philip Pullman.
The protagonist in the story is a girl named Lila, who is the daughter of Lalchand, a firework-maker.
Lila and Lalchand's relationship is central to the plot because of their conflicting views on her future.
Lila wants to be a firework-maker, but Lalchand doesn't think it is appropriate for a girl and wants her to focus on finding a husband instead.
Lila discovered that her father had shared the secret to firework making with her friend Chulak and she decided to defy her father and run away on her quest to become a firework-maker.
You are going to be writing your first diary entry from the perspective of Lila in "The Firework Maker's Daughter." The first diary entry is written at this point in time.
Lila has just found out her father's views on her future.
Your diary entry will follow this structure.
It will have a date and a greeting.
Paragraph one will provide a recount of making fireworks in the morning.
Paragraph two will provide a recount of the conversation Lila had with her father.
And you will finish with a sign off.
In this lesson, you are going to write a plan for your first diary entry.
You are going to write your plan in first person perspective as Lila.
First person perspective is the point of view where the writer is the I character, providing a personal account of events or experiences.
You will recall the key events and emotions she experienced.
You will make notes for each paragraph.
Paragraph one will be a recount of making fireworks in the morning, and how Lila was feeling then.
And paragraph two will be a recount of the conversation Lila had with her father and how she felt after that.
Let's prepare ourselves for paragraph one, a recount of making fireworks in the morning.
We need to remind ourselves of how Lila's morning began.
She was learning how to make fireworks in her father's workshop.
She experimented with ingredients.
She invented her own unique firework.
How did she feel at this point? We know that she felt inspired, proud, and excited.
Let's check your understanding.
Which of the following thoughts would convey Lila's emotions when writing about her morning making fireworks? A, it was thrilling to watch my firework invention come to life! B, I was fed up of making fireworks every day.
C, I felt so proud that all of my hard work had paid off.
Or D, I wasn't enjoying spending time with my father.
Pause the video and select your answers now.
The answers are: A, it was thrilling to watch my firework invention come to life! And C, I felt so proud that all my hard work had paid off.
Both of these examples convey Lila's feelings of being inspired, excited, and proud, well done.
Let's prepare ourselves for paragraph two, a recount of Lila's conversation with her father.
We need to remind ourselves of Lila's conversation with her father.
He told her there were many things she didn't know about fireworks.
She told him that it was her dream to be a firework-maker.
He told her it wasn't appropriate for a girl and she should focus on finding a husband instead.
How did she feel at this point in the story? We know that she felt upset, sad, deflated , lonely, confused.
Let's check your understanding.
Which of the following thoughts would convey Lila's shift in emotions when having the conversation with her father? A, I felt so supported and understood by my dad.
B, I suddenly felt the joy and excitement to leave my body.
C, I felt so far away from my father and like I didn't even know him.
D, I was over the moon about my dad's plans for me.
Pause the video and select your answers now.
The answers are B, I suddenly felt the joy and excitement to leave my body.
And C, I felt so far away from my father and like I didn't even know him.
Both of these convey the shift in Lila's emotions from feeling really excited about fireworks and connected to her father before to now feeling really sad and lonely because his views on her future were so different to hers, well done.
It's now time for a task and it is a talk task.
Recount the key events and emotions for each paragraph, and remember to speak from first person perspective as Lila.
So for paragraph one, a recount of making fireworks in the morning, what happened? And what thoughts or feelings do you have in role as Lila about what's happened? And for paragraph two, a recount of the conversation with her father, what happened? And what thoughts or feelings do you as Lila have about it? Pause the video and discuss with your partner now.
Welcome back, you did such a great job at recounting the key events and expressing thoughts and feelings in first person as Lila.
Let's take a look at the answers for paragraph one, a recount of making fireworks in the morning.
For what happened: I was learning all about fireworks in my dad's workshop.
I experimented with ingredients and I invented my very own unique firework! And for thoughts and feelings: I felt so inspired to discover all of the secrets to fireworks! I was buzzing for my future as a firework-maker.
Let's take a look at the answers for paragraph two, a recount of Lila's conversation with her father.
For what happened: My father said there was still so much I didn't know.
I told him that it was my dream to become a firework-maker but he said I should find a husband instead! And for thoughts and feelings: I couldn't believe my ears.
I was crushed at the thought of not making fireworks.
I felt so far away from my dad.
Well done for providing an oral recount of the key events, thoughts, and feelings you will need for your diary entry.
It is now time for the second part of our lesson where you will be writing the plan for your first diary entry.
When we write a plan, we use notes.
Notes are concise and capture the most important information.
For a diary entry.
This is the key events in chronological order and thoughts and feelings.
The purpose of notes is to help the writer summarise and organise key information for future use.
We do not write in full sentences.
We use bullet points when note-taking.
They look like this.
Let's check your understanding.
What will a written plan for your diary entry include? A, full sentences with capital letters and full stops.
B, bullet points for notes.
C, key events and thoughts and feelings.
D, unnecessary information.
Pause the video and select your answers now.
The answers are: B, bullet points for notes.
And C, key events and thoughts and feelings, well done.
Read the following sentence and consider this question.
How could I take the key words and phrases and turn them into note form for a plan? The sentence is: I experimented with a variety of ingredients and I invented my very own unique firework! Pause the video and have a little think about which words in this sentence are the key words I would need to note down for my plan.
In note form, I might write: experimented with ingredients, and invented my own firework.
You can see that these notes have pulled out the key pieces of vocabulary.
Particularly here, the key verbs and nouns: experimented with ingredients, invented my own firework.
Let's check your understanding.
Which of the following would be appropriate for notes as part of your plan? A, it was absolutely thrilling to watch my firework convention come to life! B, thrilling; C, thrilling to watch my firework.
Pause the video and select your answer.
The answer is C, thrilling to watch my firework.
A was a full sentence and we do not use full sentences when writing a plan and B gave a keyword thrilling but didn't say what that emotion was about.
Whereas C said, thrilling to watch my firework.
It's now time for your first task.
Write bullet point notes for paragraph one, recount of making fireworks in the morning.
Remember to write in first person perspective as Lila.
On the left hand side of the table, you have space to bullet point three pieces of notes about what happened.
And on the right hand side of the table, you have space to bullet point thoughts or feelings linked to each point that's happened.
Pause the video and do the task now.
You did a great job at note-taking for your plan for paragraph one.
Let's take a look at some examples of what I have seen.
For what happened: Learning fireworks in my father's workshop.
And for thoughts and feelings: loved every minute, wanted to discover more, inspired.
Then: experimented with ingredients and invented my own firework.
Felt so proud of my achievement, thrilling to watch.
Then: knew I wanted to be a firework-maker.
And: couldn't wait to tell Dad my dream, excited.
You'll notice that in these notes, there are lots of pieces of key vocabulary linked to the events and Lila's thoughts and feelings.
And they are written in note format, not in full sentences, well done.
It's now time for your second task.
Write bullet point notes for paragraph two, a recount of the conversation Lila had with her father.
Remember to right in first person perspective as Lila.
On the left hand side, you will bullet point notes about what happened during this conversation.
And on the right hand side, you will bullet point thoughts and feelings Lila had in relation to each point.
Pause the video and do the task now.
Welcome back, well done for your hard work.
Let's take a look at some examples for the plan for paragraph two.
For what happened: Dad said, so much I didn't know about fireworks.
For thoughts and feelings: Wanted to discover everything, didn't understand his secrecy.
Then: told him my dream, be a firework-maker.
And: hopeful, nervous about his response.
Then: he told me to focus on finding a husband instead.
And: couldn't believe my ears, felt disheartened, let down, deflated.
Well done for completing your plan for your first diary entry.
We've now come to the end of our lesson, so let's go over a summary together.
Oral rehearsal of a recount ensures we have a clear understanding of the chronology of events.
When rehearsing and planning for a diary entry, we do so in first person perspective.
An effective plan for a diary entry contains key events in chronological order and thoughts and feelings.
A plan is written in note format using bullet points to capture the most important information.
Lila's first diary entry will recount her day making fireworks and discovering her father's views on her future.
I've really enjoyed teaching you this lesson.
Well done for creating a fantastic plan and I am sure you are now feeling really ready to write your first diary entry.