Lesson video

Hi everyone, my name is Ms. Voyle, and welcome to today's lesson where we are going to be planning the opening of our narrative based on "The Iron Man." During this lesson, you'll need to be listening and looking carefully.

There'll be tasks where you need somebody to talk to, and you will also need a piece of paper and pen or pencil for writing your plan.

I hope you are feeling excited and ready to learn.

Let's get started.

The learning outcome for today's lesson is I can plan the opening of a narrative based on "The Iron Man." Here are the keywords for today's lesson.

Let's practise saying them.

My turn, your turn.

Plan.

Notes.

Atmosphere.

Ambitious vocabulary.

Fronted adverbial.

Great job, well done.

A plan is a framework that writers create before they write a section or whole text.

Notes are written out of full sentences.

Atmosphere refers to the mood created in a section or whole of a text.

Ambitious vocabulary is high level language in writing that meets the text purpose.

And a fronted adverbial is a sentence starter followed by a comma.

There are two parts to today's lesson.

In the first part, we will be preparing to plan.

And in the second part, we will be writing the plan.

So let's begin with preparing to plan.

"The Iron Man" can be structured like this.

Opening, buildup, climax, resolution.

In this lesson, we are planning the opening.

The purpose of the opening is to do all of these.

Engage the reader.

Introduce the protagonist.

Introduce the setting.

And convey the atmosphere.

In the opening of "The Iron Man," we are introduced to all of these.

The setting, which is an unknown part of the world on a clifftop by the sea.

The protagonist.

This is the Iron Man.

The author, Ted Hughes, creates a mysterious atmosphere in the opening of "The Iron Man." We want to do the same in our writing.

Let's check your understanding.

The purpose of the opening is A, to solve a problem.

B, to introduce the characters.

C, to convey the atmosphere.

Or D, to build up the tension.

Pause the video and select the correct answers now.

The answers are B and C, well done.

The purpose of the opening is to introduce the characters and to convey the atmosphere.

When we plan, we note down precise and ambitious vocabulary to help paint a vivid picture for our reader.

We must include precise verbs, adjectives, adverbs, and a range of nouns.

In the opening, we are setting the scene.

We can use fronted adverbials of place and time to help do this.

Let's check your understanding.

Which of these will not be in our plan? A, verbs and adverbs.

B, adjectives and nouns.

C, a list of punctuation.

Pause the video and select the correct answer.

The answer is C, well done.

We will not include a list of punctuation in our plan.

You will need to include a range of verbs, adverbs, adjectives, and nouns.

Here is a summary of the opening of "The Iron Man." "The Iron Man stood on the very edge of a cliff in the middle of the night, staring out at the sea below him.

The Iron Man fell off the cliff and landed on the beach below.

His body broke apart and his parts were dispersed all around.

One of the Iron Man's hands found one of his eyes and he gradually reassembled his body.

He was just missing one of his ears.

The Iron Man's attention was drawn back to the sea.

He walked deep into the ocean until he disappeared under the surface of the water." Let's check your understanding.

Put the key moments of the opening in order.

I will read them to you.

"The Iron Man fell off the cliff and landed on the beach below." "The Iron Man stood on the edge of a cliff in the middle of the night." "The Iron Man reassembled his body." "The Iron Man's body broke apart and his parts were dispersed." "The Iron Man walked into the ocean until he disappeared under the water." Pause the video now and number these one to five to show the order of events in the opening.

Let's take a look at the answers together.

One, "The Iron Man stood on the edge of a cliff in the middle of the night." Two, "The Iron Man fell off the cliff and landed on the beach below." Three, "The Iron Man's body broke apart and his parts were dispersed." Four, "The Iron Man reassembled his body." Five, "The Iron Man walked into the ocean until he disappeared under the water." We need to generate precise and ambitious vocabulary to describe each moment in detail and convey the atmosphere of the story.

Nouns are people, places, or things.

Adjectives describe nouns.

Verbs are doing, being, or having words.

And adverbs describe verbs.

We need to generate a range of these word types.

Let's look at each moment in more detail.

"The Iron Man stood on the edge of a cliff." We need to generate adjectives to describe the nouns in this moment.

We might say mysterious, colossal creature as a way of describing the Iron Man.

Steep cliff.

Unusual life form.

That's another way to refer to the Iron Man.

Vast, restless ocean.

Giant robot.

Strong, howling wind.

Let's take a look at the next key moment.

"The Iron Man fell off the cliff and landed on the beach.

The Iron Man's body broke apart." We need to generate verbs and adverbs to describe the action in this moment.

We might say that he plummeted quickly.

His body shattered into pieces.

He smashed violently onto the rocks.

His pieces lay silently.

Let's check your understanding.

Which adjectives would you use to describe the Iron Man in the opening scene? A, small.

B, colossal.

C, colourful.

D, unusual.

Pause the video and select the appropriate adjectives to describe the Iron Man now.

The answers are B and D.

We would describe the Iron Man as colossal and unusual, well done.

Let's look at the next moment in more detail.

"The Iron Man reassembled his body." We need to generate adjectives, verbs, and adverbs to describe this moment.

We might refer to the Iron Man as a determined creature.

We might describe his hands by saying strong metal hands.

We might say he slowly located the different pieces of his body.

He carefully pieced himself back together.

He desperately searched.

Let's look at the next moment in more detail.

"The Iron Man walked into the ocean until he disappeared under the water." We need to generate adjectives, verbs, and adverbs to describe this moment.

We might refer to him as the mysterious Iron Man.

We might say the waves crashed relentlessly.

He strode purposefully into the deep water.

We might describe the ocean as vast and say that he disappeared quietly.

Let's check your understanding.

Which verb and adverb would you use to describe how the Iron Man walked into the sea? A, strode purposefully.

B, edged tentatively.

Or C, tiptoed gently.

Pause the video and select the correct answer.

The answer is A, well done.

The verb and adverb "strode purposefully" would be an appropriate way to describe how the Iron Man walked into the ocean.

We can use fronted adverbials to describe each moment in detail and add extra information for the reader.

In narrative writing, we can use these types of fronted adverbials.

Fronted adverbials of time.

Fronted adverbials of place.

And fronted adverbials of manner.

Fronted adverbials of time tell the reader when an action is taking place.

Here are some examples.

In the dusk of night.

One dark night.

Just before sunrise.

Fronted adverbials of place tell the reader where an action is taking place.

Here are some examples of these.

At the top of a cliff.

Across the rocky beach.

In the middle of the deep sea.

And fronted adverbials of manner tell the reader how an action is taking place.

Some examples are slowly, carefully, without hesitation.

Let's check your understanding.

Which fronted adverbials would you find in narrative writing? A, fronted adverbials of cause.

B, fronted adverbials of time, place, and manner.

C, formal fronted adverbials.

D, viewpoint fronted adverbials.

Pause the video and select the correct answer.

The answer is B, well done.

You would find fronted burials of time, place, and manner in narrative writing.

It's now time for your first task.

Fill in the blanks with the ambitious vocabulary listed below.

I will read this to you.

"In the dusk of night, a.

, unusual life form emerged on the edge of a steep cliff.

Without warning, the great Iron Man stepped out into the open air and he.

to the ground below.

The Iron Man's determined hand.

each part and pieced his body back together.

The.

Iron Man gradually walked deeper into the.

ocean." The words for you to choose from are slowly, colossal, vast, located, mysterious, and descended.

Pause the video and fill in the blanks now.

Welcome back, let's take a look at the answers together.

"In the dusk of night, a colossal, unusual life form emerged on the edge of a steep cliff.

Without warning, the great Iron Man stepped out into the open air and he descended to the ground below.

Slowly, the Iron Man's determined hand located each part and pieced his body back together.

The mysterious Iron Man gradually walked deeper into the vast ocean." Well done for filling in the blanks with the appropriate piece of vocabulary.

It's now time for the second part of our lesson where you will be writing the plan.

When we write a plan, we use notes.

Notes are concise and capture key vocabulary and information.

The purpose of notes is to help the writer to organise information easily for future use.

We use bullet points when note-taking.

They look like this.

Let's check your understanding.

What is in a plan? A, full sentences with capital letters and full stops.

B, bullet points for notes.

C, ambitious vocabulary.

D, unnecessary information.

Pause the video and select the correct answers.

The answers are B and C, well done.

Your plan will be written in bullet point notes and it must include ambitious vocabulary.

It's now time for you to fill in the plan for the first key moment, "The Iron Man stood on the edge of a cliff.

He fell and landed on the beach." Include fronted adverbials and ambitious vocabulary in your plan.

An example of a fronted adverbial for this moment is "In the dusk of night." Pause the video and fill in the plan for the first key moment now.

Welcome back, let's take a look at some examples of notes for the first key moment.

For fronted adverbials, we could have without warning, or curiously.

And for ambitious vocabulary, colossal, unusual life form; steep cliff; vast, restless ocean; plummeted quickly.

It's now time for you to fill in the plan for the second key moment, "The Iron Man reassembled his body slowly." Include fronted adverbials and ambitious vocabulary.

An example of a fronted adverbial for this key moment is slowly.

Pause the video and do the task now.

Well done for filling in the plan for the second key moment.

Let's take a look at good examples of notes for this moment now.

For fronted adverbials.

Carefully; determinedly; across the rocky beach; when the sun rose.

And for ambitious vocabulary.

Desperately searched; gathered the strength; slowly located; strong metal hands.

It's now time for you to fill in the plan for the third and final key moment of the opening, "The Iron Man walked into the ocean until he disappeared." Include fronted adverbials and ambitious vocabulary.

An example of a fronted adverbial for this key moment is just then.

Pause the video and do the task now.

Welcome back, let's take a look at some good examples of notes for this key moment together.

For fronted adverbials, captivated by the waves; purposefully; as the waves crashed.

And for ambitious vocabulary, strode purposefully; deep, murky water; disappeared gradually; vanished under the misty waters.

Well done for completing your plan for the opening.

I am sure you have lots of fantastic and ambitious vocabulary to support you in your writing.

We've now come to the end of our lesson, so let's go over a summary together.

The purpose of the opening is to engage the reader and to introduce the setting and characters.

When we plan, we note down precise and ambitious vocabulary to help paint vivid pictures and to convey the desired atmosphere.

A fronted adverbial of time, place, or manner indicates when, where, or how action in the rest of a sentence takes place, and a plan includes notes, a sequence of events, and ambitious vocabulary.

Well done for your hard work in today's lesson, I've really enjoyed teaching you.