the process of improving writing to ensure coherence and overall quality

a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

the use of specific words and phrases to convey meaning

Editing the first half of a non-chronological report about anglerfish

English

In this unit, pupils will write one paragraph per subheading. In 'Anglo-Saxons', pupils will write two paragraphs under one subheading.

in 'How Bees Make Honey', pupils learnt how to use causal conjunctions to explain how features of the bee are used. In this unit, pupils will expand on their explanatory points over multiple sentences.

Anglerfish: non-chronological report

What do writers do when they edit their writing? 

The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure sharp teeth and a cavernous mouth.

The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure, sharp teeth, and a cavernous mouth.

The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure, sharp teeth and a cavernous mouth.

The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure sharp teeth, and a cavernous mouth.

Which sentence is accurately punctuated with commas?

Check that the tone of the vocabulary matches the text's purpose.

Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.

Check for missing or incorrectly used capital letters, full stops and commas.

Check that the diagrams and pictures match the text.

What should we do when editing punctuation?

Match the word types to their corresponding words or phrases.

What pair of adjectives would be suitable for this noun phrase? 'the __________, __________ anglerfish'

What pair of adjectives would be suitable for this noun phrase in a non-chronological report? 'the __________, __________ lure'

What are the adjectives in this sentence? 'The anglerfish's bioluminescent lure attracts unsuspecting prey in the ocean.'

What is the verb in this sentence? 'The anglerfish's bioluminescent lure attracts unsuspecting prey in the depths of the ocean.'

camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows the anglerfish waits for prey

Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish waits for prey.

Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows the anglerfish waits for prey.

camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish waits for prey

Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish

What is the main clause in this sentence? 'Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish waits for prey.'

Fill in the blank with the correct conjunction. 'The anglerfish is a deep-sea predator with a bioluminescent lure __________ it resides in the darkest depths of the ocean.'

the bioluminescent lure attracts unsuspecting prey

What is the relative clause in this sentence? 'The bioluminescent lure, which is attached to the top of its head, attracts unsuspecting prey.'

This lesson will soon be taken down.

Editing the first half of a non-chronological report about anglerfish

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