Lesson video

Hi, everyone.

Welcome to today's lesson where you will be using your plan to write your quotes paragraph for your journalistic report on "Little Red Riding Hood." For this lesson, you need to be listening carefully.

There'll be some tasks where you need somebody to talk to so that you can orally rehearse your sentences, and then you will be writing your quotes paragraph.

I hope you're feeling excited and ready to learn.

Let's begin.

The learning outcome for today's lesson is I can write a quotes paragraph of a journalistic report.

Here are our keywords.

Let's practise saying them.

My turn, your turn.

Quotes, direct speech, reporting clause.

Good job, well done.

Let's take a look at their definitions.

Quotes are exact words or statements taken from a source to support or provide evidence in a piece of writing.

Direct speech is the term used for a person speaking out loud in a text, and a reporting clause is a clause that tells the reader who said the speech sentence and how.

There are two parts in today's lesson.

First, we will be preparing to write, and then you'll be writing the quotes paragraph for your report.

So let's begin with preparing to write.

The layout of a journalistic report can be structured like this.

Headline, opening paragraph, recount section, quotes section, closing paragraph.

The headline grabs the reader's attention and makes them want to read the report.

The opening paragraph provides an overview of the event, and it does this by answering the questions who, what, where and when.

The recount section provides specific details of the event in chronological order.

The quote section provides quotes from witnesses or experts, and the closing paragraph says what is currently happening or what might happen next.

You have already written your opening paragraph and your recount section, and you have planned your quote section.

And today you will be writing it.

The purpose is the aim of the text.

The purpose of the quote section is to share information from witnesses or experts who know more information about the event or topic.

In this lesson, you will write the quotes section using the direct speech sentences you have already developed.

Read the following example.

A witness called Ms. Harper who is a postwoman.

Here is what she said as direct speech.

"I did notice an unfamiliar man outside the property, but I just presumed that he was Mrs. Puckett's mate at the time," she reflected regretfully.

You will notice that I have inverted commas around the words that Ms. Harper spoke.

I have a capital letter to begin my speech.

I have used a comma at the end of the direct speech before closing with inverted commas.

And there is then a reporting clause, she reflected regretfully, with a full stop to end the sentence.

Your quotes paragraph will have the following structure, an introductory sentence about witnesses, a sentence introducing the first witness, direct speech from the first witness.

And you will write this in speech first format like you planned.

A sentence introducing the second witness and direct speech from the second witness, which you will write in speech second format like you planned.

Let's check your understanding.

Which order should these sentences be written in for the beginning of the quote section? A, direct speech quoting the first witness.

B, an introductory sentence about witnesses.

C, a sentence introducing the first witness.

Pause the video and answer now.

Welcome back, hopefully you said that first we should have an introductory sentence about witnesses.

Then a sentence introducing the first witness, and then direct speech quoting the first witness.

Well done.

Read this model from the beginning of the quotes paragraph.

Several witnesses have come forward to offer further information and insight into the shocking incident.

The local postman, who was delivering posts at the time the suspect entered the property, has expressed his distress as a result of the event.

"I believed the man was a friend of Mrs. Puckett's so I didn't intervene," he stated nervously.

Let's take a look at how this model follows the structure.

First, we have an introductory sentence about witnesses in general.

It lets the reader know that several witnesses have come forward.

Then we have a sentence introducing the first witness, and there is a relative clause embedded within this sentence to add detail.

Who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property? That lets the reader know why the local postman has information.

And finally, the direct speech from the first witness using correct punctuation with the direct speech inside inverted commas and a reporting clause to state how the local postman said it.

Let's check your understanding.

Which of the following would be an appropriate introductory sentence for the beginning of the quotes paragraph? A, one witness has reported what they experienced.

B, several residents have come forward to offer their account of the events leading up to the crime.

C, several witnesses have come forward.

Pause the video and select your answer now.

The answer is B, well done.

Several residents have come forward to offer their account of the events leading up to the crime.

It states that there is more than one witness and that many have offered accounts of the event.

A says only one witness, and we know that the quotes paragraph will quote more than one witness.

And B doesn't include enough detail.

Read the sentence introducing the first witness.

The local postman, who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property, has expressed his distress as a result of the event.

"I believed the man was a friend of Mrs. Puckett's so I didn't intervene," he stated nervously.

How has a relative clause been used to enhance this sentence? Have a look and a little think.

The relative clause in this sentence explains how the witness has information regarding the crime.

We know the witness is a local postman, and the relative clause says, who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property.

This sentence is also useful for explaining who the following quote is from.

Then in my reporting clause, I was able to use the pronoun, he, rather than repeating the words, the local postman.

Let's check your understanding.

Which relative clauses would be appropriate to embed in this sentence? Mr. Balogun, relative clause, recalled his experience.

A, which is a neighbour.

B, who is a neighbour of Mrs. Puckett's.

Or C, who heard the screams of Red.

Pause the video and select your answers now.

Hopefully you answered B and C.

Both of these could be used as relative clauses here, and that is because they use the relative pronoun who.

Which is a neighbour would not work.

A relative clause must begin with the relative pronoun, who, when it is about a person.

Well done.

It's time for your task.

Say the first three sentences of the quotes section.

Make sure you include the following.

An introductory sentence about witnesses.

A second sentence introducing the first witness being quoted.

Remember to use a relative clause here to add detail about how this witness has information about the crime.

And a third sentence quoting the witness with a reporting clause.

Remember, this direct speech is in speech first format.

Use your plan to support you.

Pause the video and do the task now.

Welcome back.

It was wonderful to listen to you orally rehearsing the beginning of your quotes paragraph.

Have a little think about what you said and check your sentences with your partner.

Did you start with an introductory sentence about witnesses? Did your second sentence introduce the first witness you're quoting? Did your third sentence quote your witness using a reporting clause? Well done, let's take a look at a good example.

Local residents and bystanders have come forward to explain what they witnessed and offer further information regarding the crime.

That's my introductory sentence about witnesses.

Ms. Barone, who was passing through Cherry Pot Lane in the early afternoon, recalled seeing the suspect.

That is my sentence introducing the first witness.

And you'll notice that it has a relative clause embedded.

It says who was passing through Cherry Pot Lane in the early afternoon.

It lets us know how Ms. Barone has information regarding the crime.

And my last sentence.

"I only saw him briefly as I walked past, but now that I think about it, he did look real suspicious.

I wish I'd stopped and said something now," she explained regretfully.

Here I have used direct speech to report what the witness said, and I have ended my sentence with a reporting clause.

Well done.

It's now time for the second part of the lesson, the exciting part where you get to write all of your wonderful ideas down and create your quotes paragraph.

Let's take a look at the success criteria together.

I have included an introductory sentence about witnesses.

I have used one speech first and one speech second sentence using the correct punctuation.

I have considered perspective and informal language when quoting witnesses.

I have used a relative clause to add extra information about one of the witnesses.

Now I have had a go at writing the first few sentences of a quotes paragraph, and I'm going to share it with you.

And then I need your help to check it against the success criteria to make sure I haven't forgotten anything important.

Several witnesses have come forward to offer further information and insight into the shocking incident.

The local postman, who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property, has expressed his distress.

"I believed the man was a friend of Mrs. Puckett's so I didn't intervene," he stated nervously.

Now have a look at the success criteria and check my writing for me, and see if you can spot where and how I've achieved it.

Pause the video.

Welcome back.

Oh, my goodness, you guys were so good at checking my writing.

Let's go over it together.

So the first point on my success criteria is I have included an introductory sentence about witnesses.

You spotted my first sentence that says several witnesses have come forward to offer further information and insight into the shocking incident.

So we can tick that.

Then it says, I have used one speech first and one speech second sentence using the correct punctuation.

You guys notice that this is only the beginning of my quotes paragraph.

So I have a speech first sentence, but I don't yet have a speech second sentence.

So I can't tick this one yet.

Then I have considered perspective and informal language when quoting witnesses.

Well, I have made sure I used first person.

I believed, I believed the man was a friend of Mrs. Puckett's, so I didn't.

That's a contraction which is informal.

So I can tick that one.

And finally, on my success criteria, it says I have used a relative clause to add extra information about one of the witnesses.

Well, let's go to my second sentence.

It says the local postman, and then it has a comma and says, who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property, comma, has expressed his distress.

That is an example of a relative clause letting us know how the local postman has information about the crime.

So we can tick that.

Thank you for your help.

It's now time for your writing task.

Write the quotes paragraph of your journalistic report.

Use the direct speech sentences you have already developed.

Here is the success criteria to support you.

Make sure you check your writing against it.

Here is a reminder of speech first format and speech second format to support you in your writing.

Pause the video and do the task now.

Welcome back, and well done for producing some fantastic writing for your quotes paragraph.

I have loved reading all of your examples.

Let's take a look at one together.

Several witnesses have come forward to offer further information and insight into the shocking incident.

The local postman, who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property, has expressed his distress as a result of the event.

"I believed the man was a friend of Mrs. Puckett's so I didn't intervene," he stated nervously.

Another eyewitness named Mr. Rizzly also provided greater detail to police.

He explained, "As I watched the police grab him, I was flabbergasted to see that he was wearing what appeared to be Mrs. Puckett's clothes." Let's check this against the success criteria.

So I have included an introductory sentence about witnesses.

We can see that at the beginning several witnesses have come forward to offer further information and insight into the shocking incident.

So we can tick that.

I have used one speech first and one speech second sentence using the correct punctuation.

We can see that's being done here.

My first piece of direct speech has the speech at the beginning with the reporting clause, he stated nervously, at the end.

My second piece of direct speech has a reporting clause at the beginning, he explained, followed by the direct speech.

So we can tick that.

I have considered perspective and informal language when quoting witnesses.

Hmm, let's have a look.

Well, I can see I've got, "I believed the man was a friend of Mrs. Puckett's so I didn't intervene." Well, that is using first person and about perspective.

So I believed, and it's got a word with a contraction, didn't.

Okay, so that is a good example.

And then if we look at the second example of direct speech, it has very informal language.

It says, grab him, I was flabbergasted.

So we can tick that.

And finally, I have used a relative clause to add extra information about one of the witnesses.

Well, if we look at my second sentence, after its introduces the local postman, it says, who was delivering post at the time the suspect entered the property.

So we can tick that.

Pause the video now and check your quotes paragraph against the success criteria.

Well done, you did a great job of checking your work.

We've now come to the end of our lesson.

So it's time to go over a summary together.

The quotes paragraph should begin with an introductory sentence about witnesses.

The sentence preceding direct speech can introduce the witness and provide greater detail about them.

The quote from the witness can be more informal in language and tone than the rest of the paragraph.

A reporting clause can come before or after direct speech.

And inverted commas are used to demarcate speech and a piece of punctuation that separates speech from the reporting clause.

Well done again for your hard work.

I have really enjoyed teaching you.