Lesson video

Hi everyone.

My name is Ms. Voyle.

And I am going to be teaching you your writing lesson today where you will be writing the recount section of your journalistic report on "Little Red Riding Hood." I hope you are feeling excited.

For this lesson you need to be listening carefully.

There'll be tasks where you need somebody to talk to for lots of oral rehearsal and you'll be writing your recount section.

Let's get started.

The learning outcome for today's lesson is I can write the recount section of a journalistic report.

Here are the key words.

Let's practise saying them.

My turn.

Your turn.

Journalistic language.

Subject-specific vocabulary.

Fronted adverbial of time.

Adverbial complex sentence.

Relative complex sentence.

Well done.

Great job at saying those keywords.

Let's take a look at their definitions.

Journalistic language refers to words and phraseology used in journalistic reports.

subject-specific vocabulary is vocabulary used when writing about a particular subject.

A fronted adverbial of time is a sentence starter that tells the reader when something happens or has happened.

An adverbial complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and an adverbial subordinate clause.

A relative complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and a relative subordinate clause.

There are two parts to today's lesson.

In the first part, we will be preparing to write, and in the second part we will be writing the recount section.

So let's begin with preparing to write.

The layout of a journalistic report can be structured like this.

Headline, opening paragraph, recount section, quotes section, closing paragraph.

Let's remind ourselves what's in each part.

The headline grabs the reader's attention by telling them what it's about.

The opening paragraph provides an overview of the event by answering the questions who, what, where, and when.

The recount section provides specific details about the event in chronological order.

The quote section provides quotes from witnesses or experts.

And the closing paragraph is where the journalist says what is currently happening or what might happen next.

You have already written your opening paragraph and you have planned your recount section, and in today's lesson, you are going to be writing your recount section.

The recount section will provide the reported details of events in chronological order, which means order of time.

The recount section will be split into two paragraphs.

Paragraph one will be about the timeline and details of events leading up to the crime.

Paragraph two will be about what happened when the police arrived.

You'll use the notes from your plan to support you in writing these paragraphs.

Journalistic reports have specific linguistic features.

Journalistic language and tone, subject-specific vocabulary, fronted adverbials and complex sentences.

Linguistic features are types of words and language that a writer chooses carefully.

The majority of the recount section is written in the past tense.

Some sentences contain the present tense usually to communicate what is or is not currently known by the reporter.

For example, the reporter may say further information is not currently known.

That is in present tense.

Journalistic language is words and phrases used by journalists in their reports.

Journalistic language brings a formal objective tone to the report because it's must not sound like the journalist's opinion has influenced the writing in any way.

It helps the journalist explain what happened or what might have happened without giving their personal opinion.

The following are examples of journalistic language commonly used when reporting on a crime.

It is believed, it is thought that, it is understood, it was reported that, he has been described as, it is unclear, it is unknown.

subject-specific vocabulary within a journalistic report varies depending on the event or topic it is about.

We are reporting on a criminal offence.

The following are examples of subject-specific vocabulary important for writing the recount section because they are specific to crime.

Suspect, crime, identified, residence, breaking and entering, authorities, restrained.

You will recognise this vocabulary and this is the kind of subject-specific vocabulary you use to write your plan.

Let's check your understanding.

Which of the following sentences uses journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary to report on the crime? I will read them to you.

A, the bad guy has been described as super tall with thick, greyish fur and muscly.

B, someone told us that the suspect is six foot tall, thick, grey fur and a muscular build.

C, the suspect has been described as six foot tool with thick grey fur that covers a muscular build.

Pause the video and answer now.

The answer is, C.

Well done.

This example sentence uses formal journalistic language.

It does not write in the first person.

It says, the suspect, which is subject-specific, has been described as six foot tall with thick grey fur that covers a muscular belt.

Example A, used very informal language like bad guy and super tall, gray-ish fur, muscly.

And example B used first person, someone told us, which is very informal and a reporter would not write that way.

Well done.

A fronted adverbial is a sentence starter followed by a comma.

There are different types of fronted adverbials.

When reporting on a crime, fronted adverbials of time are commonly used.

This is crucial for indicating the time at which the crime took place or different events that unfolded.

The following are examples of fronted adverbials of time.

At approximately 2:30 PM on the 11th of January.

At around 6:00 PM.

By the time police arrived at the scene.

Currently.

Meanwhile.

None of these make sense on their own.

They are used to add detail at the beginning of the sentence.

The use of complex sentences allows us to add greater detail to the main clause of our sentences.

We create complex sentences by joining a subordinate clause to a main clause.

The following are types of complex sentence.

Adverbial complex sentence and relative complex sentence.

An adverbial complex sentence contains a main clause and a subordinate clause or the subordinate clause can come at the front with a comma to separate it from the main clause.

A relative complex sentence has a main clause, comma, subordinate clause embedded, comma, main clause.

We know two types of subordinate clause.

An adverbial clause.

Let's take a look at an example.

We know that an adverbial clause begins with a subordinating conjunction.

It was reported that the suspect repeatedly peered through the window before he entered the property.

The subordinating conjunction here is before.

Other subordinating conjunctions you could use are as, after, whilst.

A relative clause begins with a relative pronoun.

Let's look at an example.

At approximately 4:00 PM Mrs. Puckett's granddaughter, who is known locally as Red, arrived at the property.

The relative pronoun, who, has been used to add detail about the proceeding noun, Mrs. Puckett's granddaughter.

The relative pronouns that you use to begin a relative clause are which and who, but we always use who when adding detail about a person.

Let's check your understanding.

Match the grammatical term to the example.

For the grammatical terms, we have fronted adverbial of time, adverbial clause, and relative clause.

For the examples we have who were concerned by the screams, at approximately 3:00 PM, and as the police arrived.

Pause the video and match these now.

Let's take a look at the answers.

The fronted adverbial of time is at approximately 3:00 PM.

The big clue there is the time, 3:00 PM.

The adverbial clause is as the police arrived.

We know this because it begins with the subordinating conjunction as and there is a comma after it because it would be separated from the main clause with a comma.

And the relative clause is who were concerned by the screams, the relative pronoun who has been used at the beginning of this relative clause.

Well done.

Incorporating fronted adverbials and subordinate clauses helps us to turn the notes from our plan into full sentences.

Read the following bullet point notes.

4:15 PM Police arrived at scene.

Assailant restrained by local woodsman.

I could turn these into the following sentences.

Shortly after 4:15 PM police arrived at the scene of the crime.

As the police arrived at the scene, they found the assailant already being restrained by a local woodsman.

In my first sentence, I have used the fronted adverbial of time, shortly after 4:15 PM.

And in my second sentence, I have used a subordinating conjunction, as, to form an adverbial clause.

Let's check your understanding.

Turn these notes into a full sentence using a fronted adverbial of time or a subordinate clause to add detail.

The note is details of the crime remain unknown.

So you need to consider a fronted adverbial of time you could use to come before this piece of information or an adverbial clause or relative clause that you could use to turn this piece of information into a full sentence.

Pause the video and discuss with your partner now.

Well done for doing such fantastic partner talk.

I loved hearing your ideas.

Let's take a look at some examples.

If we wanted to use a fronted adverbial of time, we could say Currently, further details of the crime remain unknown.

If we wanted to use an adverbial subordinate clause, we could say, while the police begin their investigation, further details of the crime are not currently known.

And if we wanted to include a relative subordinate clause, we could say further details of the crime, which has shaken the local community, currently remain unknown.

Well done.

It is time for your task.

Say the first few sentences of the recount section and make sure you include the following.

Formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary.

Fronted adverbials of time to communicate the timeline of the crime.

Adverbial and relative complex sentences to add detail.

Here is an example to support you.

At approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December, comma, a witness saw a, comma, who.

, comma, entering the Puckett residence.

Pause the video and discuss with your partner now.

Welcome back.

Well done for orally rehearsing the first few sentences of your recount section.

It was wonderful to hear you practising.

Let's take a look at a good example together.

"At approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December, a witness saw a suspicious individual who was later identified as Mr. Wolf, outside the puck residence.

He has been described as six foot tall with thick grey fur that covers a muscular build.

It was reported that he repeatedly peered into the property before entering through the front door.

It is unclear how he gained entry." Now let's check this against our success criteria.

We wanted to use formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary.

Well phrases like he has been described as, and it was reported that are journalistic language.

There is lots of subject-specific vocabulary relating to time.

For example, witness, identified, residence.

For fronted adverbials of time we have at approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December.

For an adverbial complex sentence we have the sentence, it was reported that he repeatedly peered into the property before entering through the front door.

Before is our subordinating conjunction and for a relative complex sentence we have at approximately 3:45 PM On the 1st of December, a witness saw a suspicious individual who was later identified as Mr. Wolf outside the Puckett residence.

The relative pronoun who has been used to add detail about the suspicious individual who was seen by telling us their name.

Well done.

It's now time for the second part of our lesson where you'll be writing your recount section.

Let's take a look at the success criteria.

I have used formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary.

I have written the recount section of a journalistic report in chronological order.

I have used fronted adverbials of time to add important detail about when things happened and I have used at least one adverbial complex sentence and one relative complex sentence in my writing.

I am going to show you a model of the first few sentences of paragraph one for the recount, and then I need your help to check whether I have met the success criteria.

At approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December, a witness saw a suspicious individual who was later identified as Mr. Wolf outside the Puckett's residence.

He has been described as six foot tall with thick grey fur that covers a muscular build, right? I think I've done a good job, but I need you to check it for me.

So have a look at the success criteria and see if you can spot how and where I've met it.

Pause the video now.

Thank you so much for checking my writing for me.

Let's go over it together.

For the first point on the success criteria, I have used formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary.

Let's find some examples.

We have for subject-specific vocabulary I can see witness, yes, identified, residence.

Okay.

Those are good examples.

For formal journalistic language I can see at approximately 3:45 PM , that is very formal.

He has been described as, that is a key piece of journalistic language.

Okay, so I can tick that first one.

The second point I have written the recount section of a journalistic report in chronological order.

Well, I'm gonna leave that one because I haven't finished my recount yet, so I don't want to tick that yet.

I have used fronted adverbials of time to add important detail about when things happened.

Let's have a look.

Right at the beginning I said at approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December.

That lets the reader know when it's happened.

Great.

I can tick that.

And I have used at least one a complex sentence and one relative complex sentence in my writing.

Let's have a look.

So for relative complex sentence, I am looking for the relative pronoun who, okay, let's have a look.

A witness saw a suspicious individual who was later identified as Mr. Wolf outside the Puckett residence.

That is a relative complex sentence.

Fantastic.

I can tick that.

Now, I also want to do a quick scan for general punctuation checks.

So I can see I've got capital letters at the beginning of my sentences and full stops to end them, and I want to, I want to double check that relative complex sentence I've got because I know that my relative clause must be embedded with a comma on either side.

So let's find it.

It says, A witness saw a suspicious individual.

Ooh, I have forgotten the comma before my relative pronoun who I'm going to add that in.

Make sure you double check for punctuation that you know the rules for.

It's time for your first task, use your plan and the success criteria to write the first paragraph of the recount section.

Your first paragraph is about a timeline and details of the event leading up to the crime.

An example of the plan is here.

3:45 PM 1st of December suspect spotted outside residence.

Six foot tall, thick, grey hair, muscular build.

Suspect peered through window, entered property.

Red seen arriving 4:00 PM.

Screams heard by witnesses, police alerted.

And your success criteria is here for you to refer back to.

Pause the video and write your first paragraph of the recount now.

Well done for your fantastic writing.

I have loved reading over some of your sentences.

Let's take a look at a good example together.

We have "At approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December, a witness saw a suspicious individual who was later identified as Mr. Wolf outside the Puckett residence.

He has been described as six foot tall with thick, grey fur, that covers a muscular build.

It was reported that he repeatedly peered into the property before entering through the front door.

It is unclear how he gained entry.

At around 4:00 PM Mrs. Puckett's granddaughter, who is known locally as Red, was seen entering the property.

A short while later, a commotion broke out and raised voices caused the concern of neighbours who alerted the authorities.

It is thought that a fight broke out between Red and Mr. Wolf when she discovered him in the house." Now, let's check how this matches our success criteria.

For formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary.

We can see some examples here.

We have witness, identified, residence, it was reported that, property, alerted the authorities, it is thought that For fronted adverbials of time, we have at approximately 3:45 PM on the 1st of December at around 4:00 PM and a short while later.

And for complex sentences we have an adverbial complex sentence.

It was reported that he repeatedly peered into the property before entering through the front door.

A relative complex sentence.

At around 4:00 PM Mrs. Puckett's granddaughter, who is known locally as Red, was seen entering the property.

And another adverbial complex sentence.

It is thought that a fight broke out between Red and Mr. Wolf when she discovered him in the house.

Once you have checked your writing against the success criteria, you can take it off.

It's time for your second task.

Use your plan and the success criteria to write the second paragraph of the recount section.

What happened when the police arrived? Here is an example plan.

4:15 PM police arrived at the scene of crime.

Assailant restrained by local woodsman.

Details of the crime remain unknown.

Reported woodsman used axe to rescue victims. Victims suffered injury and distress.

Here is your success criteria to refer to.

Pause the video and do the writing task now.

Well done for producing some fantastic writing for your second paragraph of the recount.

Let's take a look at a good example together.

"By the time police arrived at the scene at 4:15 PM, Mr. Wolf was found being restrained by a local woodsman whose name is unknown.

Neighbours reported that as distressed screams were heard from inside the property, the woodsman used his axe to gain entry and protect the victims of this horrific crime.

While further details of the violent incident are still unknown, it is clear that injury and distress were caused to both Mrs. Puckett and her granddaughter." Now let's look again at how we've met the success criteria here.

For formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary we have restrained, neighbours reported that, property, gain entry, while further details of the violent incident are still unknown.

For fronted adverbials of time we have, by the time police arrived at the scene at 4:15 PM.

And for complex sentences we have while further details of the violent incident are still unknown, comma, it is clear that injury and distress were caused to both Mrs. Puckett and her granddaughter.

This is an adverbial complex sentence.

It uses the subordinating conjunction while to begin the clause.

Once you have checked your writing against the success criteria, you can tick off those points.

And you should now be able to check off that second point on the success criteria.

I have written the recount section of a journalistic report in chronological order.

Well done.

We've come to the end of our lesson, so let's go over a summary together.

The recount section of a journalistic report provides specific details about the news event in chronological order.

Using notes from a plan support in writing.

Formal journalistic language and subject-specific vocabulary are crucial for creating an objective and serious tone.

The use of fronted adverbials of time supports in communicating the timeline of events to the reader.

And the use of adverbial and relative complex sentences provides greater detail and facts for the reader.

Well done, you should be very proud of all of your writing.