Lesson video

Hi everyone, my name is Ms. Voyle.

And welcome to today's lesson where you are going to be writing a section of a narrative based on "The Borrowers".

For this lesson, you need the 2014 Puffin Books edition of "The Borrowers" by Mary Norton.

You also need the plan that you wrote for today's writing.

Pause the video and make sure you have the book and your plan with you now.

Great, now I know you have the book and your plan with you.

During this lesson, you'll need to be listening and looking carefully.

There'll be tasks where you need somebody to talk to and you'll need a piece of paper and pen or pencil for doing your writing.

I hope you are feeling excited and ready to learn.

Let's get started.

The learning outcome for today's lesson is: "I can write a section of the build-up of 'The Borrowers'." Here are our key words for today's lesson.

Let's practise saying them.

My turn.

Your turn.

"Suspense.

"Show and tell.

"Subordinating conjunction.

"Adverbial clause.

"Adverbial complex sentence." Great job.

Well done.

Let's take a look at their definitions.

Suspense is when you are feeling anxious or excited about what may happen.

Show and tell is a writing technique for showing a character's feelings with description of their actions and expressions.

A subordinating conjunction is a word that starts an adverbial clause.

An adverbial clause is a type of subordinate clause that starts with a subordinating conjunction.

And an adverbial complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and an adverbial subordinate clause.

There are two parts to today's lesson.

In the first part, we will be preparing to write.

And in the second part you will be writing a section of the build-up.

So let's begin with preparing to write.

"'The Borrowers' can be structured like this; "opening, "build-up, "climax, "resolution.

"In this lesson we are writing a section of the build-up.

"You'll write two paragraphs for the build-up.

"The purpose of the build-up is to do the following: "develop the plot and characters, "and build up suspense and excitement.

"You will focus on the following "key moments in your writing." In paragraph one.

"Arrietty spent weeks doing chores until Homily "finally told Pod to take her borrowing.

"He protested, but Homily remained firm." And paragraph two.

"Arrietty excitedly followed her father "along the passages to the clock.

"She climbed in and gazed up in awe." "Your narrative build-up needs to include "the following linguistic feature: "precise and ambitious vocabulary." This should include a range of verbs, adjectives, adverbs and nouns from your plan.

And you should include show and tell language that builds suspense.

You also developed this in your plan.

You should include a range of sentence types in your writing to support text flow.

Simple and compound sentences, and adverbial complex sentences.

"Linguistic features are types of words "and language that a writer chooses carefully.

"We will use the notes from our plan "to write to the build-up, "including a range of sentence types." Here is an example of the notes we developed for paragraph one of the build-up.

We developed precise vocabulary to describe what happened.

And we developed show and tell to convey how the characters were feeling.

Our examples of show and tell convey how all of the characters are feeling.

For example, we have, "devoted herself to chores" and "behaved immaculately." That is describing how Arrietty behaved and how she felt.

"Sighed and protested" describes how Pod reacted to being asked to take Arrietty borrowing.

"Spoke firmly" is show and tell for Homily.

And then we have, "eyes lit up with glee," which is another example of show and tell for Arrietty.

Let's check your understanding.

True or false? "When I write the build-up, I can just copy out my plan." Pause the video and select your answer.

That is false.

Well done! Now it's time to justify your answer.

"A: I should use the notes in my plan "to form a range of sentences." Or "B: I should reorder the events from my plan." Pause the video and select the correct justification.

The answer is A.

Well done! You should use the notes in your plan to form a range of sentence types.

Let's look at the different sentence types formed from the plan for paragraph one.

Here is a model.

Listen carefully, I will read it to you.

"Several weeks had passed with no mention of borrowing, "but Arrietty was determined "to prove herself sensible enough.

"Pleasingly for Homily, Arrietty devoted herself "to a wide range of household chores.

"Then, the day finally came.

"As Pod got ready to go borrowing for supplies, "Homily announced that he must take Arrietty too." Let's take a look at the different sentence types in this model.

The first sentence is an example of a compound sentence.

It has used the coordinating conjunction but to join two main clauses.

The following sentence is an example of a simple sentence because it contains one main clause.

And the final sentence is an example of an adverbial complex sentence.

It begins with an adverbial clause.

"As Pod got ready to go borrowing for supplies." The adverbial clause relies on the main clause to make sense.

"Let's look at the rules for simple and compound sentences.

"A sentence made of just one main clause "with just one idea is called a simple sentence." It contains one main clause.

"A compound sentence is a sentence formed "of two main clauses and a coordinating conjunction." Main clause, coordinating conjunction and, or, or but followed by another main clause.

"Let's look at the rules for an adverbial complex sentence." "An adverbial clause is a type of subordinate clause.

"It is a group of words that contains a verb "and does not make complete sense.

"When an adverbial clause is joined to a main clause, "it makes an adverbial complex sentence." The main clause can come first and be followed by a subordinate clause.

Or the subordinate clause can come first, and here it needs a comma to separate it from the main clause that follows.

Let's check your understanding.

"Match the sentence types to their definition." For sentence types, we have a: simple sentence, b: compound sentence, c: adverbial complex sentence.

The sentence definitions are: "a sentence formed of a main clause "and an adverbial subordinate clause.

"A sentence made of just one main clause "with just one idea." "And a sentence formed of two main clauses "and a coordinating conjunction." Pause the video and match these now.

Let's go over the answers together.

A simple sentence is a sentence made of just one main clause with just one idea.

A compound sentence is a sentence formed of two main clauses and a coordinating conjunction.

And an adverbial complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and an adverbial subordinate clause.

Well done for demonstrating your understanding of the different sentence types.

"Adverbial complex sentences improve text flow.

"The subordinating conjunction allows us "to join the adverbial clause to a main clause "to make an adverbial complex sentence.

"The subordinating conjunction can come first." And here we need a comma to separate it from the main clause.

Let's take a look at an example sentence of this.

Here we have used the subordinating conjunction when to begin the adverbial subordinate clause.

When they reached the first gate along the passages, "Arrietty was intrigued and watched carefully." We can also begin with the main clause and put the adverbial subordinate clause following it.

Let's take a look at an example of this.

Here we have, "Arrietty was intrigued "and watched carefully," that's the main clause, "when," that's the subordinating conjunction, "they reached the first gate along the passages." The adverbial clause relies on the main clause to make sense.

"A range of subordinating conjunctions can be used "to begin an a verbal clause.

"Each is used for a different purpose." We have; when, as, because, and so.

Great job, well done.

"These three subordinating conjunctions will be useful "for your writing today." When means at that time.

As means at the same time.

And so means to show effect.

Let's take a look at some example sentences using these subordinating conjunctions.

"The day finally came when Homily asked Pod "to borrow supplies.

"Arrietty's pulse raced as nervous excitement "ran through her.

"Arrietty carefully observed her father "so she could learn from him." Let's check your understanding.

"Choose the appropriate subordinating conjunction "to complete the adverbial complex sentences." I will read them to you.

"A: Arrietty spent weeks doing chores, "she could prove she was ready to go borrowing.

B: Arrietty bubbled with excitement, "she got ready for her first borrowing expedition.

"And C: Arrietty stepped into the cavern "of the great clock, "she gazed up at their namesake in wonder." Pause the video and choose the appropriate subordinating conjunction to complete these adverbial complex sentences now.

Let's take a look at the answers together.

"A: Arrietty spent weeks doing chores "so she could prove she was ready to go borrowing.

"B: Arrietty bubbled with excitement as she got ready "for her first borrowing expedition.

"And C: When Arrietty stepped into the cabin "of the great clock, she gazed up "at their namesake in wonder." Well done for demonstrating your understanding of adverbial complex sentences.

It's now time for your first task and it is a talk task.

You are going to orally rehearse the first few sentences of your build-up.

"Make sure you use your plan and include the following: "show and tell language that builds suspense.

"Precise vocabulary from your plan, "including fronted adverbials." And at least "one adverbial complex sentence." "You can use these sentence starters to help you.

"It had been weeks since the discussion of borrowing "and Arrietty.

." Here complete the compound sentence.

"She had devoted herself to household chores so.

." Here complete the adverbial subordinate clause.

Pause the video and orally rehearse your sentences now.

Welcome back, well done for orally rehearsing your sentences.

I thoroughly enjoyed listening to you.

Let's take a look at a good example together.

"It had been weeks since the discussion of borrowing "and Arrietty was desperate to prove herself.

"She had devoted herself to household chores "so her mother would know she was ready "for a borrowing expedition.

"Then, the momentous day finally arrived.

"As Pod got ready to borrow supplies, "Homily called out for him to take Arrietty with him.

"Arrietty's eyes lit up with glee." Let's take a look at how this includes the necessary linguistic features.

So for show and tell language that builds suspense, we can see it says that, "Arrietty was desperate to prove herself.

"She had devoted herself to household chores.

And when she finds out that she can go borrowing with her father, it says, "Arrietty's eyes lit up with glee." All great examples of show and tell that builds suspense up towards Arrietty's borrowing expedition.

"For precise vocabulary from your plan, including fronted adverbial.

For precise vocabulary, we can see discussion of borrowing.

"Desperate to prove herself." "Devoted herself to household chores." "Ready for a borrowing expedition." "Momentous day finally arrived." "Eyes lit up with glee." And for an example of a fronted adverbial we can see the fronted adverbial of time then.

And for an example of an adverbial complex sentence, I can see two great examples here.

First we have, "she had devoted herself to household chores "so her mother would know she was ready "for a borrowing expedition." Here the main clause comes first and the adverbial subordinate clause follows it." And then we can see the sentence, "As Pod got ready to borrow supplies, "Homily called out for him to take Arrietty with him." Here the adverbial subordinate clause comes first and a comma has been used to separate it from the main clause.

Well done again for orally rehearsing your sentences.

I hope you are feeling really ready to begin your writing.

It's now time for the second and most exciting part of the lesson where you are going to be writing a section of the build-up.

"When we write, we always try to do these things.

"Plan and say each sentence before we write it.

"Use punctuation where we know the rules.

"Vary our sentence types.

"Write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting.

"Sound out words to spell them accurately.

"And read our sentences out loud to check they make sense "and edit to improve our writing if necessary." Here is the success criteria for your writing today.

Listen carefully, I will read it to you.

"I have described Arrietty "setting off on her borrowing expedition." You will do this in paragraph one.

"I have described Arrietty's journey "along the passages to the clock." You will do this in paragraph two.

"I have built suspense through the use of show "and tell language." "And I have written a range of sentence types, "including at least one adverbial complex sentence." I am now going to share a model of the beginning of the build-up with you.

Listen carefully.

"Arrietty had spent weeks doing chores to prove herself "when Homily finally announced, it was the day.

"She told Pod what she needed "and she firmly instructed him "to take Arrietty borrowing too.

"Pod protested with worry, "but Homily was firm.

"With an excited bounce, Arrietty got ready." I now need your help.

Can you please check my writing against the success criteria to check that I have met it? Pause the video and do this with your partner now.

Thank you so much for helping me check my writing.

You did a great job at spotting where I've met the success criteria.

Let's go over the answers together.

For "I have described Arrietty setting off "on her borrowing expedition." Well we can see that this writing builds up to that point.

And the final sentence says "With an excited bounce, "Arrietty got ready." So we can tick that.

For "I have built suspense through the use "of show and tell language" we have "Arrietty had spent weeks doing chores to prove herself." This begins to build suspense.

Then it says, "When Homily finally announced "it was the day." This is definitely building more suspense.

It then talks about Homily instructing Pod to take Arrietty borrowing too.

"Pod protested with worry." So we don't know what's going to happen yet, that builds more suspense.

"But homily was firm." And then the final sentence is a great example of show and tell which builds suspense towards her setting off.

"With an excited bounce, Arrietty got ready." So we can definitely tick that.

For the final point on the success criteria, I have written a range of sentence types including at least one adverbial complex sentence.

The first sentence is a great example of an adverbial complex sentence.

The main clause comes first: "Arrietty had spent weeks doing chores to prove herself." And then the subordinating conjunction when has been used to begin an adverbial clause.

"When Homily finally announced it was the day." So we can tick that final point.

It's now time for you to begin your writing.

You are going to focus on one paragraph at a time.

Indent the first sentence and use the success criteria and your plan to help you write paragraph one of the build-up.

Pause the video and do your writing now.

Welcome back.

Well done for working so hard on writing your first paragraph of the build-up.

Let's look at a good example together and check it against the success criteria.

"Weeks had passed since any mention of Arrietty "going borrowing, but she had been determined "to prove herself.

"As she helped her mother with a range of chores, "she was eager to show how well she could behave.

"The day finally came when Homily asked Pod "to go borrowing for supplies.

"Just as Pod got ready, Homily called out "for him to take Arrietty too! "Feeling concerned, Pod protested, "but Homily remained unwavering.

"When Arrietty heard the news, her eyes lit up with glee." For "I have described Arrietty setting off "on her borrowing expedition." This entire piece of writing builds up to Arrietty setting off.

And then we can see, "Homily called out for Pod to take Arrietty too." We can see, "Pod protested, but Homily remained unwavering." And then, "When Arrietty heard the news, "her eyes lit up with glee." This describes the build-up to Arrietty setting off on her borrowing expedition, and it also uses great examples of show and tell to build suspense.

So we can tick both of those first points on our success criteria.

And for "I have written a range of sentence types, "including at least one adverbial complex sentence." Let's take a look.

So the first sentence here is an example of a compound sentence.

It uses the coordinating conjunction but to join two main clauses.

Next we can see a great example of an adverbial complex sentence.

Here, the adverbial subordinate clause comes first.

"As she helped her mother with a range of chores, "she was eager to show how well she could behave." And we can see another example of an adverbial complex sentence at the bottom.

"When Arrietty heard the news, her eyes lit up with glee." Here a different subordinating conjunction has been used to form an adverbial complex sentence, when.

So we can definitely tick that last point on the success criteria.

It's now time for you to continue writing.

Indent the first sentence of paragraph two.

Use the success criteria and your plan to help you write paragraph two of the build-up.

Pause the video and do your writing now.

Welcome back.

Well done for your hard work completing writing this section of the build-up.

Let's take a look at a good example of paragraph two and check it against the success criteria.

"As she bubbled with enthusiasm "for her first borrowing expedition, "Arrietty followed her father "along the carefully trodden passages.

"When they reached the first gate, she was intrigued.

"She watched her father skillfully unlatch it "and they carried on their journey.

"Eventually they came to the bottom of the clock.

"Arrietty's heart pounded as she felt a mixture "of nervous and excited anticipation.

"With confidence, Arrietty stepped up and inside.

"She gazed in awe at the grandness "of the very clock her family had been named after." So far I have described Arrietty's journey along the passages to the clock.

We can see, "Arrietty followed her father "along the carefully trodden passages.

And, "Eventually they came to the bottom of the clock." So we can definitely tick that.

For "I have built suspense "through the use of show and tell language." I love the examples of show and tell language in this model.

We can see, "As she bubbled with enthusiasm." I love the choice of the verb bubbled here.

We can see, "Arrietty's heart pounded "as she felt a mixture of nervous and excited anticipation." And I love the way she has been described looking at the clock.

"She gazed in awe." This lets us know how much she admired the clock.

So we can tick that point.

And for "I have written a range of sentence types, "including at least one adverbial complex sentence." We can see two examples of adverbial complex sentences right at the beginning.

First we have, "As she bubbled with enthusiasm "for her first borrowing expedition." That's the adverbial subordinate clause.

"Arrietty followed her father "along the carefully trodden passages." That's the main clause.

Another example is, "When they reached the first gate," that's the adverbial subordinate clause, "she was intrigued," that's the main clause.

So we can tick that final point.

We've now come to the end of our lesson, so let's go over a summary together.

"In this section of the build-up, suspense is built around "Arrietty setting off on her first borrowing expedition.

"The use of precise and ambitious vocabulary, "including show and tell language, "supports the building of suspense.

"Using a range of sentence types, "including adverbial complex sentences, supports text flow.

"An adverbial clause begins "with a subordinating conjunction.

"And an adverbial clause is joined with a main clause "to form an adverbial complex sentence." Well done, again, for writing this section of a narrative based on "The Borrowers".

I hope you have enjoyed learning because I have really enjoyed teaching you.