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Hi, everyone! In today's lesson, we are going to be planning an emotive narrative scene in "Whale Rider." This scene is part of the climax of the story.

And what does emotive mean? Well, it means that it evokes intense or strong feelings in the reader when they are reading our writing.

So when you're ready, let's plan an emotive narrative scene.

Today's lesson outcome is, I can plan an emotive narrative scene in the climax of "Whale Rider." Here are the keywords for today.

Just take a moment to read through these and their definitions.

This lesson is split into two parts, preparing to plan, and planning an emotive scene.

So let's start preparing to plan.

"Whale Rider" can be structured like this, opening, build-up, climax, and resolution.

We have already planned and written the opening, planned and written the build-up, and now we are going to be generating ambitious vocabulary to plan an emotive scene that is part of the climax.

The purpose of the climax is to take the drama to its highest point of tension and emotion.

You will be planning and writing about Paikea's encounter with the stranded whales on a beach for your emotive scene of the climax.

What is the purpose of the climax in a narrative? Is it to set the scene and introduce the main characters? Is it to take the tension and emotion to its highest point? Or is it to create an atmosphere that gradually builds suspense? Pause the video and have a think about what the answer is.

So the answer is B.

It's to take the tension and emotion to its highest point.

In the climax of the story, some whales get stranded on the beach one night and they cannot get back into the water.

All the members of Paikea's tribe go to the beach to try and help the whales get back into the sea.

After some time, the whales start to die and the villagers, including Koro, do not know what else they can do to help.

They all despair and start retreating, but Paikea is able to communicate with the whales and she eventually leads them back into the sea.

I would like you to number the following from one to four to show the order of events in this climax.

The villagers start to leave the beach.

One night, some whales become stranded on a beach.

Paikea communicates with the lead whale and the whales start moving.

Or members of the tribe arrive and try to save the whales, but they are not able to.

Which one of those is number one? Let's start off with that one.

Then move on to two, three, and finally four.

Pause the video and have a go.

Okay, so number one is, one night, some whales become stranded on a beach.

Then members of the tribe arrive and try to save the whales, but they are not able to.

The third one is, the villagers start to leave the beach.

And finally, Paikea communicates with the lead whale and the whales start moving.

You will plan two paragraphs for this emotive scene.

In paragraph one, you will describe the following.

One night, some whales become stranded on the beach.

All the villagers go down to the beach and try to rescue them.

In paragraph two, you will describe the following.

After a few hours, the villagers give up and start walking away from the whales.

Paikea communicates with the lead whale and eventually, she leads all of them back into the sea.

Let's consider evoking emotions for paragraph one.

One night, some whales become stranded on the beach.

All the villagers go down to the beach and try to rescue them.

This paragraph will need to include precise and descriptive vocabulary that conveys an emotive atmosphere.

So let's look at the first moment in more detail, using our senses of sight and of sound.

One night, some whales become stranded on the beach.

How can we make that more emotive? So we need to think about generating adjectives, verbs, and adverbs.

In the dead of night.

So this happened quite suddenly.

Eyes widening with alarm.

So we are again showing the reader how the villagers might have felt.

Rhythmic waves.

We're building a bit of atmosphere here.

Pod of whales.

Urgent shouts.

Stranded on sandy shore.

Now let's look at the second moment in more detail, again using our senses.

All the villagers go down to the beach and try to rescue them.

We are going to generate adjectives, verbs, and adverbs.

The frantic villagers.

Heartbreaking.

Pulses are racing.

The whales were symbols of heritage and culture.

Fear and determination.

And they laid there helplessly.

Which of the following ambitious vocabulary creates an emotive atmosphere for this particular scene? The sun was rising over the small coastal village.

Pulse racing with a mixture of fear and determination.

Bodies heaving with distress as they struggled to return to the safety of the ocean And stranded on the sandy shore.

Pause the video and think about which of these phrases creates an emotive atmosphere? Okay, so hopefully you said it was B, pulse racing with a mixture of fear and determination.

So we're here, we're building up to that highest point in our climax.

And then also, bodies heaving with distress as they struggled to return to the safety of the ocean gives us a sense of panic.

Let's consider the details for paragraph two.

After a few hours, the villagers give up and start walking away from the whales.

Paikea communicates with the lead whale and eventually, she leads all of them back into the sea.

This paragraph will need to convey the villagers' emotions, leading Paikea to step in.

You will include the following in paragraph two.

Direct speech for Koro and Paikea's inner thoughts.

Let's look at some examples of precise and ambitious vocabulary that convey Koro and Paikea's emotions for paragraph two.

Pieces of direct speech for Koro could look like this.

"There is nothing else we can do!" Koro declared despairingly.

"I know you believe you can save the whales, but this is not your fight," Koro pleaded hopelessly.

Some of Paikea's inner thoughts or her internal thoughts could be, Paikea wondered if this was a sign, a challenge from her ancestors.

She knew she had to try.

She could not stand by doing nothing.

And the heroine knew she was part of something greater than herself.

Let's look at the third moment in more detail, again using our senses.

After a few hours, the villagers give up and start walking away from the whales.

Again, let's think about adjectives, verbs, adverbs, and show-not-tell language.

Tears were streaming down their faces.

They hung their heads low.

"He's died," Koro whispered.

In despair.

They hugged each other.

And finally, the fourth moment in more detail.

Paikea communicates with the lead whale and eventually, she leads them all back into the sea.

Let's think of adjectives, verbs, and adverbs.

Again, for this fourth moment.

With a resolute calm.

Knew it was her destiny.

Waded into cold water.

Closed her eyes.

Touched rough, barnacle-covered skin.

And connected with creature's spirit.

Which of the following convey Koro's emotions in this part of the climax? The whales heaved with distress on the shore.

Tears streamed down Koro's face.

"They are dying," Koro sighed as he hung his head.

Paikea knew what she had to do.

Pause the video and think about which of these convey Koro's emotions? Okay, so hopefully you said, tears streamed down his face.

Again, that shows that he is feeling sad.

That's right.

If you chose C, that's great because that is a direct quote.

It's direct speech of what Koro is saying.

"They are dying," he's saying.

He sighed as he hung his head, again showing that he is despairing.

Task A requires you to fill in the blanks in these example sentences for paragraph one and paragraph two of this emotive scene in the climax.

Let's read through it together.

In the dead of night, an mmm shout from the beach interrupted the ocean's rhythmic whispering.

The villagers ran towards the sea with eyes mmm in alarm because a pod of whales had become mmm on the sandy shore.

The mmm villagers retreated away from the beach as Paikea moved with a resolute calm.

She gently mmm into the cold water and she touched the mmm, barnacle-covered skin of the heaving whale.

With her eyes closed, the brave girl felt an unspoken mmm with the creature's spirit.

I would like you to use the words at the bottom of this page to help you to fill in the blanks for paragraph one and paragraph two.

Pause the video and have a go at Task A.

Let's have a look at what the blanks should be in paragraph one and paragraph two.

In the dead of night, an urgent shout from the beach interrupted the ocean's rhythmic whispering.

The villagers ran towards the sea with eyes widened in alarm because a pod of whales had become stranded on the sandy shore.

The helpless villagers retreated away from the beach as Paikea moved with a resolute calm.

She gently waded into the cold water and she touched the rough, barnacle-covered skin of the heaving whale.

With her eyes closed, the brave girl felt an unspoken connection with the creature's spirit.

Part two of planning an emotive narrative scene is planning it! So let's move on to part two! When we write a plan, we use notes.

Notes are concise and they capture key vocabulary and information.

The purpose of notes is to help the writer to organise information easily for future use.

We use bullet points when note-taking.

They look like this.

For this emotive scene, your plan needs to include the following.

Precise and ambitious vocabulary that shows-not-tells the reader what is happening.

Ideas for direct speech and inner thoughts for Koro and Paikea that are emotive for the reader.

What should the vocabulary in your plan include? Precise and ambitious vocabulary, including show-not-tell.

Factual vocabulary.

Full sentences with capital letters and full stops.

Or ideas for direct speech and inner thoughts.

Pause the video and have a think what the answers could be.

Okay, so the answers are precise and ambitious vocabulary, including show-not-tell, and ideas for direct speech and inner thoughts.

For Task B, get ready because you are going to fill in the plan for paragraph one of an emotive scene.

Let's start with the first key moment, which is one night, some whales become stranded on the beach and all the villagers go down to the beach and try to rescue them.

Really, really have a good think about using precise and ambitious vocabulary.

Think about the emotions the characters might feel in this scene and use show-not-tell to demonstrate their emotions.

Pause the video and have a go.

Okay, so for precise and ambitious vocabulary, we might want to use dead of night to show what time of the day or time of the night it is.

Rhythmic waves.

We might want to create a bit more of an atmosphere.

Urgent shouts, frantic villagers, symbols of heritage.

And let's look and think about emotions and show-not-tell.

Eyes widened in alarm.

Pulses raced.

Heavy heart.

Laid helpless.

Fear and determination.

Those are all really good for paragraph one.

Now for paragraph two of an emotive scene.

You're going to fill in the plan for the second key moment.

After a few hours, the villagers give up and start walking away from the whales.

Paikea communicates with the lead whale, and eventually, she leads all of them back into the sea.

Once again, I want you to think about using precise and ambitious vocabulary to plan this emotive scene.

This time, I want you to focus on the characters' direct speech.

So what they might say.

Who might say it? How did they say it? And also, Paikea's inner thoughts.

Pause the video and have a go at doing part two of Task B.

Well done.

Let's look at some examples of precise and ambitious vocabulary.

Tears streaming down her face.

In despair.

With a resolute calm.

Closed her eyes.

Connected with the creature's spirit.

What about direct speech? "There's nothing else we can do!" "This is not your fight." Was this a sign from the ancestors? This would be an inner thought.

She knew she had to.

And this was her destiny.

Well done on planning an emotive narrative scene in the climax of "Whale Rider." To summarise, the purpose of climactic writing is to take the drama to the highest point of tension to evoke strong emotions in the reader.

An emotive scene of "Whale Rider" describes Paikea's encounter with stranded whales on a beach.

Precise and ambitious vocabulary, including show-not-tell language, is used to convey an emotive atmosphere.

Direct speech and characters' inner thoughts are used to convey their emotions.

Notes in a plan should not be written in full sentences and bullet points can be used to make notes clear.

Well done and thank you for completing this lesson.