Lesson video

Hello, I'm Miss Chu.

And in this lesson you are going to be publishing your "Whale Rider" narrative and reading aloud your story.

So when you're ready, I think we should start.

It sounds very exciting.

Today's lesson outcome is, "I can publish the final version of my "Whale Rider" narrative and I can read it aloud to an audience." Here are the keywords that you'll need for this lesson.

Please read through them now.

In this lesson, you will be publishing and reading aloud.

So let's start publishing.

To publish a piece of writing means to produce a final best version that becomes available to others.

It is important to use neat joined handwriting when publishing so that it is visually appealing to the reader.

Publishing your work is another opportunity to make any last edits and improvements to your writing.

Let's review the structure of the narrative writing.

We have our opening, our build up, our climax, and finally, our resolution.

Well done.

You can use paragraphs to indicate the start of a new section.

This is an example of the layout of a published piece of narrative writing.

You have to start with your title, you have your opening.

Perhaps you might want to include an illustration.

You write the buildup, you have your climax of the story, maybe another illustration, and then finally you have your resolution.

Which of the following examples shows the layout in an appropriate way for the first page of your narrative? Would you A, start with the climax, then the title and then the resolution? Or would you B, start with the title, buildup, then opening? Or would you C, start with your title, the opening of your story, include an illustration and then the buildup? Pause the video and have a think about which one of these is the most appropriate layout.

Okay, so the answer is C.

Yes, you have to start with your title.

Then you start with your opening.

The opening introduces the characters and sets the scene for the whole story.

You may choose to use an illustration after your opening, but you don't have to put one in there.

But what needs to follow the opening is the buildup because you are building up suspense to lead to the climax, which is the most significant part of the story, or where the main action of the story takes place.

I'd like us to design the layout of the narrative writing.

I'd like us to design the layout of our narrative writing on a piece of lined paper now.

Start with a title and plan where you'll write the other paragraphs, the four paragraphs, the opening, the buildup, the climax and the resolution.

Make sure you leave blank spaces for where you will want your illustrations to go.

Illustrations are often found in fictional texts.

Illustrations provide visual representations of the characters, settings and events described in the text.

This helps the reader to better imagine and engage with the story by bringing the story to life.

Illustrations can convey emotions, moods, and they can capture expressions and body language that enhance the reader's understanding of the character's feelings and actions.

You wrote a version of the narrative, "Whale Rider." Well done, you.

Now you will add illustrations of the key moments to your published piece of writing.

What key moments could you include in your published version? Turn and tell the person next to you or tell an adult what key moments you would like to include in your published piece of writing.

Oh I heard some people saying, "I want to include the moment where Paikea and her grandfather are riding on his bike." I heard someone else say, "I want to include the part where the stranded whales are on the beach." And then finally I heard someone else say, "I want to include the illustration of Paikea riding on the back of the whale in the ocean." Let's learn to draw an illustration that could appear in the narrative.

You can use different sources to help you draw this illustration.

You could use the internet, look in books, use videos or look through previous lessons.

You can choose two key moments from "Whale Rider" that you would like to draw.

You will need these materials.

You'll need paper, pencils, erasers and you could use wax crayons or coloured pencils.

Let's choose the key moment of when the whales are stranded on the beach to illustrate.

Task A, I would like you to complete your illustrations.

If you have chosen the part where the whales are stranded on the beach, start by sketching the beach and the sea lightly.

Add the outline of the whales and draw any details in the background such as the waves, the horizon, the sky.

Perhaps you want to include clouds.

And then finally, I'd like you to colour in your illustration.

Pause the video and start to illustrate.

Well done.

I'd like you to pause and reflect now.

Did you do all of these? Did you start by sketching the beach and the sea? Did you add the outline of the whales and draw any details in the background? And then finally, colour in your illustrations? You did? Well, well done.

Use the finalised and edited outcome of your "Whale Rider" narrative and the success criteria below now, to publish.

Let's read through the success criteria.

I have drawn two illustrations.

I have designed the layout of my narrative to allow appropriate space for each paragraph.

I have used neat joint handwriting to publish my narrative, and I have checked the spelling of my ambitious vocabulary.

Okay, so the two illustrations that I chose to draw are here.

This is the part where the whales are stranded on the beach.

That's in the climax.

And this is an illustration of Paikea riding on the back of the whale.

That's in the resolution.

So my two illustrations are actually in my last two paragraphs.

So I think I'm going to put my final picture here at the bottom.

And then this one, I think I will place somewhere over here.

Perhaps that will be the start of my climax.

Or maybe here.

To begin, I'm just gonna put these to the side 'cause I know they'll be on this page.

To begin with, I need to start off with my title.

So I've got my ruler ready to write, to underline my title, and I'm going to write "Whale," capital, h, finger space, "Rider." And then I'm going to underline it with my ruler.

I've got it roughly in the middle.

And then I want to start my opening, which will be over here, indented slightly.

And I'm going to start here.

"One bright, sunny-" And I have to use my best handwriting here.

"Day, a young girl rode on a bike with her grand-" Oops, I've run outta space.

So I'm just gonna do a little hyphen there.

"Father, towards the sparkling, blue sea." So that's going to be the first sentence of my opening.

I think my opening might finish there, and then I will start my buildup here.

I finished writing my opening and I started my buildup here.

So, left a bit of space from the margin to show my indent, make the start of my new paragraph.

And that is the end of my buildup.

So I'm about to write my climax now.

I've decided to stick in the illustration of the whales being stranded on the beach here.

And then I'm going to start my climax here.

So I need to indent now slightly from my illustration.

"In the dead of night, an urgent, sudden cry from the beach interrupted the ocean's rhythmic motion." I'm going to stop there and show you what it looks like when I've finished writing my entire climax and my resolution.

(page rustles) I think I'm gonna have to put my next illustration (paper rustles) on this final page here.

Now we'll show you what that looks like when that is finished, I have now completed my opening, my buildup.

I've started the climax here and I stuck in my first illustration here and I actually needed to continue to this page.

And this part, and this paragraph, is still the climax and it finishes there.

And my second illustration, I thought, would fit really nicely here just before the resolution.

I haven't quite finished the resolution.

I still need to write the part where Koro sees or witnesses a miracle.

So I'm going to continue writing that and I think that that would bring me onto the next page.

So I've ended up publishing over 1, 2, (paper rustles) 3, 4, 5 pages, and that's okay.

I would like you now to pause the video and have a go at publishing your edited outcome of "Whale Rider".

Well done.

I hope you have drawn two illustrations.

If you have, you can tick that.

You have designed the layer of your narrative.

You have used neat joint handwriting and you have checked the spelling of ambitious vocabulary.

So you can tick all of those off.

Well done, you have published successfully.

We are now onto the second part of the lesson.

Reading aloud.

Reading aloud your narrative can be an important final stage of the writing process.

It is a way of showing something you have written to other people.

Reading aloud with expression involves using your voice, body language and facial expressions to convey emotions.

When reading aloud we need to think about all of these.

Volume, pace, expression, eye contact, body language.

Let's focus on volume now.

It is important that when we read aloud, we speak at an appropriate volume.

We must speak loudly enough so that the listeners can hear.

We must not shout or try to speak when others are speaking.

If you whisper, mumble or mutter your words, your listeners will not be able to hear what you are saying.

True or false? We should mutter when we are reading aloud to others.

Hmm, is this true or is this false? Pause the video and have a think.

The answer is, of course, false.

Why? Why should we not mutter? Talking in a loud clear voice is important so the audience can hear you.

When reading aloud, we need to think about all of these.

Volume, pace, expression, eye contact, and body language.

We're going to focus on pace now.

Pace refers to the speed at which we speak.

If we speak too quickly, our audience may not be able to clearly hear what we are saying.

If we speak too slowly, our audience may lose interest in what we are saying.

Speaking at the correct pace will give us more time to use an appropriate volume, speak clearly and make eye contact.

True or false? We should speak very quickly when we are reading aloud to others.

Pause the video to have a think.

The answer is, of course, false.

Why? Well, speaking at the correct pace helps the reader to hear and understand what you are saying.

When reading aloud we need to think about all of these.

Volume, pace, expression, eye contact, and body language.

Let's focus on expression now.

Reading with expression means reading with feeling and emotion to bring the words to life.

Emphasising certain words and phrases makes the reading aloud experience more engaging for the listener.

Facial expressions are an important aspect of body language.

We can express emotions more clearly by changing our facial expressions.

True or false? Reading with expression is less engaging for the listener.

Is this true or is this false? Pause the video and have a think.

Once again, this is false.

Why? Reading with feeling and emotion brings the words to life.

This is of course more engaging for the audience.

When reading aloud, we need to think about all of these.

I wonder if you remember them now.

We've said them a few times.

Volume, pace, expression.

Say the last two with me.

Eye contact and body language.

We are now going to focus on eye contact.

Eye contact involves looking into the eyes of the people in our audience.

Eye contact is very important because it helps us to connect with our audience and for them to feel connected to us.

When the audience feels connected to us, they are going to find what we have to say way more interesting.

If you are holding a piece of paper, it is important that you are looking up at the audience as you read.

True or false? Eye contact involves looking down at your notes when reading aloud.

Pause the video and have a think.

The answer is false.

Why? 'Cause you have to make eye contact.

Eye contact involves looking into the eyes of the audience when presenting.

When reading aloud, we need to think about all of these.

The final one we're going to look at is body language.

Body language refers to how we hold ourselves and parts of our bodies when reading aloud.

Body language helps others understand how you feel and what you are saying, even if you don't say a word.

Body language is very important because it helps us look confident.

Strong body language includes all of these.

Standing with our feet shoulder width apart, speaking with our chin up and standing with our shoulders back, not slumped over.

When presenting, confident body language includes what? Speaking with our chin up, standing with our shoulders back, hunching our shoulders, or using facial expressions to convey emotions? Pause the video and think about which of those is the correct answer.

The answer is speaking with our chin up.

And is there another one? Yes, standing with our shoulders back.

And is that it or is there another one? Using facial expressions to convey emotions.

You're right.

Rehearsing is when you practise something before you perform in order to get better at it.

If you make a mistake when you are rehearsing, you can learn from this to make your performance even better.

When you rehearse, try to think about these things, like you would when performing in front of an audience.

You need to think of volume, pace, expression, eye contact and body language.

I will practise reading aloud my buildup in "Whale Rider".

You will help me ensure that I'm using the checklist below.

Are you ready? "With expression, the dutiful Paikea sang melodically as she led the group of boys and men.

Everyone sat down.

Courageous Paikea knew she was not allowed to, but she sat defiantly in the front row.

With a furrowed brow, Koro rose up and demanded, "You're a girl.

Go to the back." After hesitating, she slumped off, feeling defeated.

What can I do to prove myself?" she thought to herself." How did I get on? Did you use the checklist below while I was reading? Did you think about my volume, pace, expression? You couldn't see whether I was making eye contact and you couldn't check my body language, but I can assure you that I was doing both of those things correctly.

I would like you now to read aloud your "Whale Rider" narrative.

Speak at a volume that ensures all members of the audience can hear you.

Read with expression to bring the words to life.

Make eye contact with audience members in order to form connections with them as you speak.

Use strong body language and different facial expressions to convey emotions clearly.

Speak at a slow, clear pace.

If you're ready, you can give task B a go by pausing the video.

Amazing.

Did you remember to do these things? Speak at a volume that ensures all members of the audience can hear you? Read with expression to bring the words to life? Make eye contact with audience members in order to form connections with them as you speak? Use strong body language and different facial expressions to convey emotions clearly? Speak at a slow, clear pace? You did? Well, well done you.

To summarise, a piece of published writing is the final best version and should be visually appealing to the reader.

Neat joined handwriting is important when publishing a piece of writing.

Illustrations can bring the world of the story to life and make it more vivid in the reader's mind.

Reading aloud involves speaking to an audience at a suitable volume and pace.

Reading with expression means reading with feeling and emotion to bring the words to life.

Well done, you have published and read aloud your "Whale Rider" narrative.