Lesson video

Hi, there.

In this lesson with me, Ms. Chu, we are going to be writing the resolution, the final part of the "Whale Rider" story.

So when you are ready, let's get going with the lesson.

Today's lesson outcome is I can write the resolution of Whale Rider.

Here are the keywords needed for this lesson today.

Please read through them now.

Today's lesson will be split into two parts, preparing to write and then writing the resolution.

So let's start preparing to write.

Whale Rider can be structured like this.

The opening, the buildup, the climax, and finally, the resolution.

In this lesson, we are writing the resolution.

The purpose of the resolution is to do all of these things, resolve a story, and allow readers to reflect.

You have already planned the resolution.

In today's lesson, you will use your plan to write the resolution.

Your narrative resolution needs to include the following linguistic features: precise vocabulary from your plan.

That's ambitious vocabulary, show-not-tell language for characters' emotions.

You need to use a range of sentence types to support text flow and cohesion.

That means you need to use simple compound and adverbial complex sentences.

You should use fronted adverbials to describe the action in the main clause in further detail.

Linguistic features are types of words and language that a writer chooses carefully.

We will use the notes from our plan to write the resolution.

Let's look at the first key moment.

Paikea greets the whale with a hongi.

These are the fronted adverbials on the plan.

At the edge of the sea, as gently as possible, and slowly.

Then we have great, majestic, heart pounding, closed eyes, and air thick with anticipation.

We should use our notes to form a range of sentence types.

Let's just remind ourselves of the different sentence types.

A sentence made of one main clause with just one idea is called a simple sentence.

A main clause has one idea.

A compound sentence is a sentence formed of two main clauses and a coordinating conjunction.

one main clause joined with and or but and another main clause.

Let's look at the rules for an adverbial complex sentence.

When an adverbial subordinate clause is joined to a main clause, it makes an adverbial complex sentence.

Here, we have our main and we have our adverbial subordinate clause.

We can also have it the other way where we start with our adverbial subordinate clause, but if we have it first, we need to remember to use a comma to separate it with the main clause.

An adverbial clause must begin with a subordinating conjunction like these: As, when, or so.

These subordinating conjunctions will be useful for your narrative resolution.

Using a range of sentence types in our writing supports text flow and cohesion for the reader.

Let's have a look at this example.

At the edge of the sea, Paikea stood with a mixture of fear and hope.

The air was thick with anticipation as the young, gentle girl leaned in slowly.

Her forehead and nose rested on the whale's forehead.

In that moment, Paikea sensed a deep connection between them and she could feel its thoughts and strength.

As you can see, this short paragraph starts with a fronted adverbial of place.

It's at the edge of the sea.

Later on, another fronted adverbial is used in that moment and that is a fronted adverbial of time.

The first sentence is a simple sentence.

The second sentence is an adverbial complex sentence.

The air was thick with anticipation is our main clause.

As the young girl, young, gentle girl, lean in slowly is our adverbial subordinate clause.

The subordinating conjunction there is as.

And in our final sentence, we have a compound sentence.

Two main clauses joined with the coordinating conjunction, and.

Paikea, in that moment, Paikea sensed a deep connection between them.

That's our first main clause.

Our second main clause is she could feel its thoughts and strength.

We can use the notes from our plan to form full sentences.

We are going to look at the second key moment now.

Paikea climbs onto its back, and she encourages the whale to move into the water.

The fronted adverbials suitable for this key moment are with quite determination, after a few minutes, with guidance.

And the precise and ambitious vocabulary is here.

Rough, cool skin, secured grip, shifted its weight, and immense power beneath.

I would like you now to spot a simple compound and adverbial complex sentence in the following model.

Once you have found each one, explain to your partner or the person next to you how you know it is a simple compound or adverbial complex sentence.

I'm just gonna read through the paragraph to you now before you complete this short check for understanding.

Courageously, Paikea climbed onto the majestic creature's back.

Its skin was rough and cool beneath her fingers, and she could feel its immense power beneath her.

As she chanted, the whale began to shift slightly.

Paikea held on tightly and her heart soared with each movement.

Pause the video now and have a go at spotting a simple compound and adverbial complex sentence.

Well done, hopefully, you spotted the first sentence was a simple sentence with one main clause.

And the second sentence was a compound sentence with a coordinating conjunction to join the two main clauses.

It was and.

Finally, an adverbial complex sentence, beginning with the subordinating conjunction, as.

As she chanted is our adverbial subordinate clause.

We are now onto task A of preparing to write.

You are going to say the first few sentences of the third key moment, using the notes from the plan to form full sentences.

The third key moment is Paikea rides the whale through the water in the sea.

The fronted adverbials on the plan are as she chanted, with a bond forged, and finally.

And the vocabulary is heart soaring, surged forward, waves embrace, and connection deepening.

You can use this sentence scaffold to support you with your first sentence.

Mm, the whale began to move.

I would like you now to pause the video to say the first few sentences of this third key moment of task A.

Well done.

Let's have a look at these first few sentences of the third key moment.

As she chanted, the whale began to move.

Paikea held on tightly as her heart soared with each movement.

She could feel the connection between them deepening and the legacy of her people coursing through her.

With a bond forged, Paikea and the whale surged forward into the sea.

As they swam further into the ocean, Paikea knew that this was only the beginning of her journey.

We are now onto part two of this lesson, writing the resolution.

When we write, we always try to do these things.

Plan and say each sentence before we write it.

Use punctuation where we know the rules.

Vary our sentence types.

Write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting.

Sound out words to spell them accurately.

And read our sentences out loud to check they make sense, and edit to improve our writing if necessary.

Here is the success criteria for your writing today.

I have used precise and ambitious vocabulary from my plan.

I have written show-not-tell language to convey character's emotions.

I have written a range of sentence types to improve text flow and cohesion.

I have written fronted adverbials to describe the action in the main clause in further detail.

You will use the notes from your plan for writing today.

Your plan contains notes for the four key moments in the resolution.

Let's look at key moment number four.

Koro understands that Paikea is the one chosen by their ancestors.

The fronted adverbials appropriate for this key moment are here.

With a deep breath, proudly, from a distance.

A shiver ran down his spine, eyes filled with tears, heart swelled, witnessed a miracle.

Let's look at a model of the fourth key moment before you start to write your resolution.

In that moment, Koro saw the truth, he had been blind to all along.

Koro's eyes filled with tears, because he was witnessing a miracle.

As he watched his courageous, spirited granddaughter connect with the symbols of their ancestors so deeply, he felt a shiver run down his spine.

Paikea was the chosen one, and she was destined to lead their people.

Let's check what we've done everything in the success criteria for this fourth key moment.

I have used precise and ambitious vocabulary from my plan.

Have I? Witnessing, courageous, spirited, connect, symbols of their ancestors, deeply, and destined? I think so, we can give that one a tick.

I have written show-not-tell language.

Koro's eyes filled with tears, a shiver ran down his spine.

He felt a shiver run down his spine.

That is show-not-tell.

It is showing us that he was sad when his eyes filled with tears and a shiver ran down his spine shows us that he felt amazed by what he saw.

So we can tick that one off.

Have we written a range of sentence types to improve text flow and cohesion? Yes, well, in the first sentence, we have a simple sentence, one main clause.

In the second sentence, we've got because, our subordinating conjunction because.

Koro's eyes filled with tears, because he was witnessing a miracle.

So there, we have our adverbial complex sentence In our third sentence, as he watches courageous, spirited granddaughter connect with the symbols of their ancestors so deeply, that is also an adverbial complex sentence with our subordinating conjunction, as.

And finally, we've got Paikea was the chosen one, and she was destined to lead their people.

We've got our compound sentence there.

Two main causes joined with the coordinating conjunction, and, so we can definitely tick that third one off.

Have I used fronted adverbials here? In that moment, yes, I have.

In that moment, so I can tick that off.

Task B, now, it's your turn to write.

I would like you to indent the first sentence.

Use your success criteria and your plan to help you structure your paragraph.

I have used precise and ambitious vocabulary from my plan.

I have written show-not-tell language to convey characters emotions.

I have written a range of sentence types to improve text flow and cohesion.

I have written fronted adverbials to describe the action in the main clause in further detail.

Pause the video and good luck with writing your resolution.

Well done.

Now, I want you to read back your resolution to check it makes sense and edit any punctuation errors.

Use your success criteria to help you check that you have included everything needed in the resolution.

Off you go now.

In summary, the purpose of a resolution is to resolve the story and give the reader a chance to reflect.

Using the full range of sentence type, simple, compound, and complex, improves text flow and cohesion.

Ambitious vocabulary can include show-not-tell language that paints clear pictures for the reader.

Fronted adverbials of time, place, and manner describe the action in the main clause in further detail.

Oral rehearsal before writing helps to structure grammatically correct sentences and check for sense.

Well done, we are now at the end of this lesson.

I hope you enjoyed writing the resolution of Whale Rider.