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Hi everyone and welcome to today's lesson.

Today we're going to be planning the closing of our diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." In today's lesson, you will be planning the closing of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." Here are some key words we are going to use.

Past tense.

Present tense.

Future tense.

Summarise.

Sign-off.

Well done.

Past tense tells the reader the action happened before now.

Present tense tells the reader the action is happening now.

Future tense tells the reader the action will happen in the future.

Summarise is to sum up or conclude the main body of a text.

A sign-off is when the writer signs their name at the end of a piece of writing.

Today we are going to be planning the closing of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." We're going to begin by learning about the linguistic features of this part of the diary entry.

Then we're going to move on to planning the closing.

This diary entry can be structured like this.

We have an opening.

A main body part one, which describes dragon training.

Mean body part two, which also describes dragon training.

And the closing.

So far in our unit, we've already written the opening, the main body part one, and the main body part two.

In today's lesson, we are planning the closing paragraph.

The purpose of the closing is to summarise the day's key events and the character's thoughts and feelings.

We keep the information in the closing general.

Specific details have already been shared earlier in the diary entry.

The closing is not the place to introduce new information, but rather to summarise what we've already discussed.

We also kept our information in the introduction general.

In many ways, the closing is a similar structure and reflection of the opening.

We can use this visual to help remind us that we want to keep our information in the closing general.

True or false? Information in the closing of a diary entry should be specific.

Pause the video while you decide.

Well done everyone if you spotted that this is false.

Now pause the video again while you decide how to justify your answer.

Brilliant work if you spotted that the correct justification was A.

Information in the closing of a diary entry should be kept general.

Specific details are included in the main body paragraphs.

We can use a checklist approach to help us include appropriate information in the closing.

In this paragraph, we want to include a summary of the day's events.

We also want to record our current thoughts and feelings.

And finally, we want to think ahead to what will happen next.

What implications does this have for our use of tense in the closing? Take a moment to have a little think or discuss your ideas with a partner.

Well done if you spotted that because of what we need to include in the closing, we will need to use a mixture of past, present, and future tense.

We will need to shift between past, present, and future tense in our closing.

Put each bullet point below into the appropriate tense section on the table.

Summarise the day's events.

Current thoughts and feelings.

Thinking ahead to what will happen next.

Take a moment to think about which section of the closing is appropriate to use past tense, present tense, and future tense.

Pause the video while you decide.

Great work, everyone.

So when we summarise the day's events, we will write in the past tense.

This is because we are going to write about things that happened already.

When we are writing about our current thoughts and feelings, we will use the present tense.

That's because we are recording what we are thinking and feeling right now.

When we are thinking ahead to what will happen next, we are writing in the future tense.

That's because these events haven't happened yet.

Now it is time for your first task.

Sort the sentences into whether they are written in the past, the present, or the future tense on the table.

Let's read these sentences through together first.

How will I do it all again tomorrow? I'm shaking still as I write this.

To sum it all up, today was a total nightmare.

All of these sentences are appropriate to use in the closing paragraph, but it's your task now to decide whether they're written in the past, the present, or the future tense.

Pause the video now while you complete your task.

Brilliant work, everyone.

Now let's check our answers.

Past tense was this sentence.

To sum it all up, today was a total nightmare.

The present tense sentence was, I'm shaking still as I write this.

And the future tense sentences were, how will I do it all again tomorrow? Great work.

Now it's time for the second part of your task.

So we've agreed which tense each sentence is written in, now you need to circle the verbs in each sentence which indicate whether the sentence is written in the past, the present, or the future tense.

Pause the video while you do that, but remember quickly before you start, a verb is a doing, a being, or a having word.

Pause the video now while you complete your task.

Brilliant work, everyone.

So in the first sentence, today was a total nightmare, this is an example of an auxiliary verb.

It tells us when the event happened.

Was shows it was in the past tense.

I'm shaking.

I am shaking as I write this.

Shaking is in the present progressive form, write is in the present tense.

They tell us that this sentence is reflecting what is happening right now.

And finally, how will I do it all again tomorrow? Will is an example of the auxiliary verb to be, thinking ahead to what hasn't happened just yet but what might happen in the future.

Well done for completing your task.

What a brilliant start to our learning today everyone.

Now that we have discussed the linguistic features and really, really solidified our understanding of tense and how we'll be using it in this closing paragraph, we're going to move on to planning the closing.

When we write a plan, we use notes.

Notes are concise and they capture the most important information.

For a diary entry, this is the key events in chronological order, so time order, as well as thoughts and feelings.

The purpose of notes is to help the writer summarise and organise key information for future use.

We do not write in full sentences.

The reason for this is that when we come to writing, we need to be able to build on our ideas in our plans and adapt these into fuller sentences during the writing process.

We use bullet points when note taking and they look like this.

What will a written plan for your diary entry include? Pause the video while you decide.

Well done if you spotted that in your diary entry plan you need to include bullet points for notes and you need to include records of key events as well as thoughts and feelings.

Remember in our plan, we do not write full sentences with capital letters and full stops.

The only capital letters we would see in our plan would be those for proper nouns such as names and we do not include unnecessary information.

That's because when we come to writing, we can build in and add further detail with those initial ideas in our plans.

Let's remind ourselves of what happened at dragon training in chronological order, because remember, in the closing we are going to be summarising these key events.

We also need to remember how Hiccup felt at each point because we are writing in character as Hiccup from the first person perspective.

Firstly, Gobber, the dragon training teacher, welcomed the students to the arena.

Hiccup felt stressed and apprehensive.

Secondly, the other students teased Hiccup for not helping defend Berk during the last dragon attack.

At this point, he felt humiliated, resentful, and angry.

Then Gobber explained which types of dragons would be behind the enclosure doors.

When he did this, Hiccup felt very panicked and fearful.

This formed the basis of main body paragraph one.

Then let's think about what happened after that.

Gobber released the Gronckle.

It flew around the arena and the students tried to defend themselves with shields.

During this event, Hiccup felt panicked and horrified.

The Gronckle then cornered Hiccup and was about to attack.

Hiccup felt petrified and really feared for his life.

Then Gobber saved Hiccup and told him off.

The other students laughed at Hiccup.

This made him feel humiliated, resentful, and angry.

And these three events formed the basis of main body paragraph two which we've already written.

Now the purpose of the closing paragraph is to do all of these.

We want to summarise the day's events, describe our current thoughts and feelings in character as Hiccup, and think ahead to what will happen next.

Let's list some adjectives to describe Hiccup's day because these will be really helpful to us when we are summarising overarching thoughts and feelings about the day.

Pause the video while you do that.

Well done.

You'll have a whole list of adjectives, but here are some of my ideas, and feel free to magpie some of them if you would like to.

Disastrous.

Humiliating.

Horrendous.

Nightmarish.

Awful.

Terrible.

Now that we've discussed some adjectives we could use to summarise our day, let's look at the planning format we will use for our closing.

It's got four different sections.

Firstly, how can we summarise the day? Then we want to describe our current thoughts and feelings.

So remember when we're summarising, we're using the past tense.

When we're describing our current thoughts and feelings, we are describing the present tense.

Then what is likely to happen next and how do you feel about that, that's looking ahead to the future, so we're using the future tense.

And at the end we are going to write our sign-off.

Remember the sign-off is when the writer signs their name and says goodbye to the diary at the end of the entry.

Now it's time for you to complete your plan.

Remember to use bullet point notes for the closing and write in the correct tense using the first person perspective because you are writing in character as Hiccup.

Pause the video while you complete your task.

Brilliant work, everyone.

Now I'm sure you have got some amazing ideas in your plan.

I've decided to show you my plan so that you can see some other ideas.

If you would like to magpie any of my ideas, you can do that.

But remember, it's really good for us to have lots of different ideas so that our writing is varied and unique to us.

So how can you summarise your day? Let's read through what I've written down together.

To sum it all up, I've used that with a capital letter and a comma because that's how I would like to open my sentence.

I can safely say that, the worst day of my life, like a nightmare I wish I could wake up from.

I've used that simile there, like a nightmare, to describe my day.

When I was describing my current thoughts and feelings I've written, humiliation is still radiating through me.

I can't stop my hands trembling.

So I've used some show not tell here.

And I keep reliving it.

So I'm sharing my thoughts as well that I keep reliving the day.

I remembered that I need to write in the present tense here, 'cause I'm talking about my current thoughts and feelings.

What's likely to happen next and how do I feel about it? Dread is sitting like a stone in my stomach.

Again, I've got an example of a simile here.

I can't face going back.

How will I do it all over again tomorrow? Remember, I can frame my thoughts and feelings by using rhetorical questions as well.

And finally, my sign-off.

For me, Hiccup is writing his diary entry before he goes to sleep that night.

So I've written, I'd better get some sleep.

I've used a contracted form of I had to make I'd, and I've used my apostrophe there correctly.

Night, Hiccup.

Remember, I am writing as Hiccup, so I need to sign Hiccup's name not my real name.

Take a moment to read back through your plan and check that you have written in the correct tense.

You can also take a moment to add to your ideas or magpie any of my ideas to your own plan if you would like to.

Well done, everyone.

Great work, everyone.

That now brings us to the end of our lesson where today we have been planning the closing of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." The purpose of the closing is to summarise the day, discuss current thoughts and feelings, and look ahead to the future.

The content of the closing requires the writer to shift between past, present, and future tense.

Plans should be written in note form using bullet points.

And ideas in our plans can be built upon when we come to writing.

Well done for all of your hard work today everyone.

And I'm really impressed with the level of technical skill it takes to shift between different tenses within one paragraph.

I hope you're feeling really proud of yourself.

And I'm looking forward to seeing you again very soon.