Lesson video

Hi, everyone and welcome to today's lesson.

Today we're going to be using our planning to write the second part of the main body of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon".

In today's lesson, you're going to be using a plan to help you write part two of the main body of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon".

Here are some keywords we're going to use: relative complex sentence, relative clause, non-finite complex sentence, non-finite clause.

A relative complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and a relative subordinate clause.

A relative clause is a type of subordinate clause that starts with a relative pronoun.

A non-finite complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and a non-finite subordinate clause, and a non-finite clause is a type of subordinate clause that can start with a verb in the progressive tense.

Today we're going to be Writing part two of the main body of a diary entry.

Firstly, we're going to be Preparing to write, then we're going to move on to Writing part two.

This diary can be structured like this: We begin with the opening.

Then we've got the main body part one and the main body part two, which are all about describing dragon training.

And finally, the closing.

So far in our unit, we've already written the opening and the main body part one.

Today we are going to be writing the second part of the main body.

The purpose of the main body is to recount the day's events and describe the writer's thoughts and feelings.

We keep the information in the main body paragraphs specific so that particular details of the day's events can be recorded.

We can use this visual to help us remember that we want to keep our information here specific.

Key linguistic features of a diary entry include: tell, show-not-tell, contractions, fronted adverbials of time, a range of sentence types.

In our last lesson, we learned about simple, compound and complex sentence types.

The purpose of these linguistic features is to create an informal tone and help the writer recount the day's events in chronological order.

Using a range of sentence types enhances text cohesion or flow.

Match the sentence types to their definitions.

Pause the video while you do that.

Well done if you spotted that a simple sentence is a sentence formed of one main clause.

A compound sentence is a sentence formed of two main clauses joined by a coordinating conjunction.

And a complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and any type of subordinate clause.

A complex sentence is formed of a main clause and any type of subordinate clause.

A main clause contains a verb and it makes sense on its own.

A subordinate clause also contains a verb, but it does not make sense on its own.

We learned about adverbial complex sentences when planning part two of the main body.

Now let's learn about relative and non-finite complex sentences.

A sentence that contains a relative clause joined to a main clause is called a relative complex sentence.

Let's read this sentence together.

"The dragon swooped around the arena." This is an example of a main clause.

At the moment it's written as just a simple sentence.

"which roared deafeningly,".

This is an example of a relative clause.

It begins with the relative pronoun, "which".

Now we can join these two clauses together to form a relative complex sentence.

Let's read it together.

"The dragon, which roared deafeningly, swooped around the arena." The relative clause adds extra detail about the noun before it.

So in this sentence, "which roared deafeningly" gives us extra detail about the noun, which is the dragon.

Here we've got a scaffold that shows how the relative clause can interrupt the main clause.

When we do this, we have to use a pair of commas either side of the relative clause to separate it from the main clause.

We can use the pronouns "who" or "which".

Alternatively, a relative clause can also go after the main clause to form a relative complex sentence.

Let's read this example of a main clause.

"We were greeted by Gobber." Here is a relative clause: "who led us into the arena." Let's join them together to form a relative complex sentence.

"We were greeted by Gobber, who led us into the arena." In exactly the same way as in the last example, the relative clause adds extra detail about the noun before it.

So "who led us into the arena" is extra information about Gobber.

Here we can see this scaffold, where we can have a main clause and a relative clause going after it.

The relative clause can go after the main clause also.

We also need to remember to use a single comma to separate it from the main clause.

We can still use our relative pronouns, "who" and "which".

Now it's time for your first task.

Underline the relative clauses in these relative complex sentences.

Firstly, let's read them through together: "The Gronckle, which had pungent breath, bared its fangs at me." "The other students, who love teasing me, sneered at me when Gobber had to save me." "I wish I could just relax my mind, which is still full of flashbacks from today." Pause the video while you complete your task.

Well done, everyone, In sentence one, "which had pungent breath" was the relative clause, beginning with "which" as the relative pronoun, "who loved teasing me" was the relative clause in our second sentence, using "who" as the relative pronoun.

In both of these examples, the relative clause interrupted the main clause, but in our final sentence, "which is still full of flashbacks from today," the relative clause goes at the end of the sentence.

It begins with the relative pronoun "which".

A sentence that contains a non-finite clause joined to a main clause is called a non-finite complex sentence.

Let's read this sentence together: "The Gronckle was released, roaring in thunderous rage." Here our sentence begins with the main clause, "The Gronckle was released", and is followed by subordinate clause, "roaring in thunderous rage." We can also switch around the order of the clauses.

"Roaring in thunderous rage, the Gronckle was released." In this example, the subordinate clause comes first and is followed by the main clause.

So we can see here that the non-finite clause can come before or after the main clause.

The non-finite subordinate clause begins with a verb in the progressive form.

So here we know that it's in the progressive form because it finishes with the ING suffix.

In this example, the progressive verb is "roaring".

We also always use a comma to separate the non-finite clause from the main clause no matter whether the non-finite clause came first or second, we always use a comma to separate them.

Now it's time for your second task.

Underline the non-finite clause in each of these non-finite complex sentences and circle the progressive verb.

Remember, we know that it's in the progressive form if it ends with the ING suffix.

Let's read the sentences through together.

"Brandishing our shields, we tried desperately to protect ourselves." "I rushed forwards, grabbing a heavy sword." "Snarling in rage, the vicious Gronckle cornered me." Pause the video while you complete your task.

Well done, everyone.

In sentence A, "Brandishing our shields" was a non-finite clause, and the progressive verb was "Brandishing".

In sentence B, "grabbing a heavy sword" was the non-finite clause with "grabbing" as the progressive verb.

And in C, "Snarling in rage" was the non-finite clause with "snarling" as the progressive verb.

In A and C, the subordinate clause came first, but in sentence B, the subordinate clause came second.

Great work, everyone.

Now we are going to move on to Writing part two of the main body of our diary entry.

When we write, we always try to do these things.

We plan and say each sentence before we write it.

We use punctuation where we know the rules.

We showcase each sentence type we know.

We write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting.

We use spelling strategies to spell words accurately and we check and improve our writing when we think we have finished.

Here is the success criteria for our writing today.

Success criteria act as a really useful guide to help us remember what to include to make our writing the best it can be.

Let's read through the success criteria together.

I have used linguistic devices to create an informal tone.

I have shared my thoughts and feelings.

I have used three types of complex sentence, so adverbial complex, relative complex, and non-finite complex.

You are going to use your plan to write the second part of the main paragraph of your diary entry.

You're going to build on the ideas from your plan when you write today.

Make sure that you've got your plan with you, ready for writing.

If you need to go and get your plan, pause the video now while you do that.

Before we start writing, let's take a moment to review our planning of part two of the main body.

Here's my plan, and you should have your plan now in front of you.

We'll look through my plan first and then I'll give you some time to look through yours.

So our plans were separated into three sections.

What happened, a description of the action, and the thoughts, feelings and questions for each part of the paragraph.

So firstly, "Gobber released the Gronckle into the arena.

At that moment, he released a raging, demonic beast.

The monster swooped and swirled around the arena.

Time seemed to stand still.

I watched in horror, it circled above my head." So all of these ideas are in note form and today I'm going to be drawing them together to create full sentences in my writing.

"Then the Gronckle cornered me.

It furiously narrowed its eyes on me, locked its gaze on me.

It cornered me.

It had pungent breath and razor sharp fangs.

I tried to run, but I was frozen like a statue.

I thought I was going to die.

Finally, Gobber saved me, at that moment or out of nowhere." I'm gonna use one of those two fronted adverbials of time here.

"Gobber captured the monster, relief washed over me, but it was replaced with shame and humiliation.

I'll never live this down.

What will Dad say?" Take a moment now to reread your plan and add any further ideas you want to before we come to writing.

Well done.

Now today I'm going to show you my model of my piece of writing, and you are going to help me see how it's met the success criteria before you go off and re write your own paragraph.

Let's begin by reading my model first.

"At that moment, Gobber released a monstrous, murderous beast from its cage.

the Gronckle! Bursting into the arena, the enraged dragon narrowed its eyes at us and let out an ear-splitting roar.

When the beast locked its eyes on me, my blood ran as cold as ice.

Within seconds, the dragon had me cornered.

How was I going to escape The raging beast, which had putrid, foul-smelling breath, towered over me with bared teeth.

This was it.

My time to die.

At the last second, Gobber hooked the dragon by the mouth, shoving it back into its cage." So now you're going to help me spot where I've met my success criteria.

So success criteria one: I've used linguistic devices to create an informal tone.

So here I'm thinking about any vocabulary choices or contracted words or exclamations that help create that informal tone.

Let's have a look.

Here, I have got some.

So "dot-dot-dot, the Gronckle! Exclamation mark." "How was I going to escape?" There's a nice example of a rhetorical question as well.

So that helps me meet that informal tone.

Number two: I've shared my thoughts and feelings.

So, "Bursting into the arena, the enraged dragon narrowed its eyes at us and let out an ear-splitting roar.

When the beast locked its eyes on me, my blood ran as cold as ice." So there's some show-not-tell and a metaphor, "my blood ran as cold as ice." "The raging beast, which had putrid, foul-smelling breath, towered over me with bared teeth." So I'm describing what happened.

"At the last second, Gobber hooked the dragon by the mouth and shoved it back into its cage." There I shared some thoughts and feelings and a recount of what happened.

And finally, number three: I've used three types of complex sentence.

So, I have got a "when the beast locked its eyes on me, my blood ran as cold as ice." That's an adverbial complex sentence.

"Bursting into the arena, the enraged dragon narrowed its eyes at us and let out an ear-splitting roar." That "bursting into the arena" shows a non-finite subordinate clause, a non-finite complex sentence.

"The raging beast, which had putrid, foul-smelling breath, towered over me with bared teeth." There's an example of a relative complex sentence.

And, "At the last second, Gobber hooked the dragon by the mouth, shoving it back into its cage." There's another example of a non-finite complex sentence.

So I've used three types of complex sentence in my writing.

Thank you so much for your help with helping me find where I've met my success criteria.

Now it's your turn.

Using your plan and your success criteria, write part two of the main body of your diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon".

Pause the video while you do that.

Well done, everyone.

Take a moment to read your writing back and check that it meets your success criteria.

Here's another example of a paragraph we could have written.

Let's read it through together: "As Gobber opened the gates, a fierce, wild Gronckle was unleashed into the training grounds.

Scanning us with its fearsome eyes, it swooped in with a deafening screech.

Panic gripped me as I realised I was the target.

With each beat of its powerful wings, the Gronckle closed, in trapping me against the arena wall.

The beast's breath, which was foul, made me gag.

It seemed like my final moments had arrived.

At the last moment, Gobber intervened, calming the creature and guiding it back to its pen." If there are any parts, words, or phrases or openers in this piece of writing that you would like to magpie for your own, you can do that now.

in that piece of writing, I used a range of linguistic devices to create an informal tone.

I shared my thoughts and feelings and I used three types of complex sentence.

Take a moment now to double check that you have met all three of your success criteria.

Great work, everyone.

Well done, everyone.

That now brings us to the end of our lesson, where today we've been writing part two of the main body of a diary entry.

Diary entries have a range of linguistic features that enable them to achieve their purpose.

Using a range of sentence types enhances text cohesion.

A relative complex sentence contains a main clause and a relative clause.

A non-finite complex sentence contains a main clause and a non-finite clause.

We should always use our plans and success criteria to guide us when writing.

I've been so impressed by the standards of the writing that have been produced in our lesson today.

Well done, everyone, and I'm looking forward to seeing you again very soon.