Lesson video

Hi, everyone, and welcome to our lesson today.

Today is the final lesson of our unit where we've been writing a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." In today's lesson, we will be using a plan to write the closing of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." Here are some key words we're going to use, general, closing, summarise, well done.

General facts include the most basic necessary information.

The closing is the final section of a piece of writing.

To summarise is to sum up or conclude the main body of a text.

Today, we are going to be writing the closing of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." We're going to begin by preparing ourselves for writing, then we're going to move on to writing the closing.

This diary entry can be structured like this.

We have an opening, the main body part one, which describe dragon training, and the main body part two, which also describe dragon training, and the closing.

Earlier in this unit, we already wrote the opening.

We also have already written our main body part one and the main body part two.

We've previously planned the closing paragraph, so today, we are going to write the closing paragraph, and this then will signify the end of our diary entry and this whole unit.

The purpose of the closing is to summarise the day's key events and the characters' thoughts and feelings.

We keep the information in the closing general.

Specific details have been shared earlier in the diary entry in those main body paragraphs.

We can use this scaffold or visual to help us remember that in the closing we keep the information general, just like we did in our opening.

We can use a checklist approach to help us include information that's appropriate for the closing.

We want to summarise the day's events.

We also want to describe our current thoughts and feelings, and we want to think ahead to what will happen next.

This means that we need to shift between the past tense, the present tense, and the future tense when we write the closing.

True or false, the closing of a diary entry should be written in the past tense only? Pause the video while you decide.

Well done, if you spotted that this is false.

Now pause the video again while you decide how to justify your answer.

Well done, if you spotted that the correct justification was a, let's read it together.

"The closing should include past tense, "when writing about past events, "and present tense "when writing about current thoughts and feelings.

"It should also include future tense "when considering what will happen next." Key linguistic features of a diary entry include all of these.

Let's read them together.

Tell, show-not-tell, contractions, using apostrophes, fronted adverbials of time, a range of sentence types.

By this we mean simple, compound, and complex sentences.

The purpose of these linguistic features is to create an informal tone and to help the writer recount the day's events in chronological order.

Using a range of sentence types improves text flow or cohesion.

Match the sentence types to their definitions and pause the video while you do that.

Well done, if you spotted that a simple sentence is a sentence formed of one main clause.

A compound sentence is a sentence formed of two main clauses joined by a coordinating conjunction.

A complex sentence is a sentence formed of a main clause and any other type of subordinate clause.

Now, it's time for your task.

Match the sentence types to their examples.

So we've just defined different types of sentences, but now can we identify examples of each type? Let's begin by reading through these example sentences first.

"I want to make dad proud, "but I'm just not cut out to be a Viking." "As I sit here, I keep reliving moments from today." "Sitting here now, "I'm filled with dread "about showing my face there again tomorrow." "How am I going to go through this again tomorrow?" "We have another day of training tomorrow, "which means I'll be faced with more humiliation." All of these sentences are appropriate to use in the closing paragraph, but now it's your task to see whether you can identify their sentence type.

Pause the video while you complete your task.

Well done, if you spotted that a simple sentence was, "How am I going to go through this again tomorrow?" The compound sentence was, "I want to make dad proud, "but I'm just not cut out to be a Viking." This is because we've got the but coordinating conjunction showing two contrasting ideas and linking those two main clauses together.

The adverbial complex sentence was, "As I sit here, "I keep reliving moments from today." We know this because it begins with that subordinating conjunction, as.

The relative complex sentence was, "We have another day of training tomorrow, "which means I'll be faced with more humiliation." We know this is a relative complex sentence because it's got the which relative clause.

Which is the relative pronoun here, And finally, we've got the non-finite complex sentence, "Sitting here now, "I'm filled with dread "about showing my face there again tomorrow." We know this is a non-finite complex sentence because it begins with the verb in the progressive verb form, sitting, and I know it's in the progressive verb form because it's got that ING suffix.

What a brilliant start to our lesson today, everyone, well done.

Now that we have prepared ourselves for writing, we're going to move on to writing our closing paragraph.

When we write, we always try to do these things.

We plan and say each sentence before we write it.

We use punctuation where we know the rules.

We showcase each sentence type we know.

We write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting.

We use spelling strategies to spell words accurately.

We check and improve our writing even when we think we have finished.

Here's the success criteria for your writing today.

Let's read through them together.

"I have used linguistic devices to create an informal tone.

"I have summarised the day's events "and shared my thoughts and feelings.

"I have used a range of sentence types.

"I have written in the correct tense." We're going to use our plan to write the closing of the diary entry.

When we are writing, we can build on our ideas from our plan.

Make sure you've got your plan with you, ready for writing.

If you need to go and get your plan, pause the video now while you do that.

Well done, everyone.

Before we begin writing, let's take a moment to review our planning.

I will recap my plan, and then you'll have some time to go back and review your planning.

So in my summary of the day, I've included, "To sum it all up, I can safely say "that today's been the worst day of my life.

"It was like a nightmare I wish I could wake up from." Here you can see how I'm building these basic ideas into fuller sentences.

My current thoughts and feelings are that, "Humiliation is still radiating through me, "I can't stop my hands from trembling, "and I keep reliving all of it." What's likely to happen next and how do I feel about it? "Dread is sitting like a stone in my stomach.

"I can't face going back.

"How will I do it all over again tomorrow?" And my sign off, "I'd better get some sleep, goodnight, Hiccup." Take a moment to reread through your planning.

Can you spot any areas that you could add something or make a small edit to make it even better before we begin our writing? Pause the video while you do that.

Great work, everyone.

Now that we have read our success criteria, we've reviewed our plans, we've prepared to write, now, we're ready to write.

Firstly, I'm going to show you how to draught the closing paragraph.

Throughout, you will help me check that I've used my success criteria or that I've met my success criteria accurately.

Okay, everyone, so as you can see, I've stuck in my success criteria, and I'm ready to write my closing.

So to begin with, I need to remember to do my indentation from the margin.

I'm going to go with a non-finite subordinate clause to open a non-finite complex sentence.

So, what am I doing? My progressive verb I'm going to choose here is sitting.

I am sitting here in my bedroom, so indenting in, I'm gonna go with, "Sitting here in my bedroom." Now, I am the one doing the sitting, so I need to also be the subject of the main clause here.

I'm now gonna tell my reader how I am feeling, as I'm sitting here in my bedroom.

"I feel so embarrassed and ashamed." So I'm telling my reader, I'm telling my diary how I feel.

Full stop.

Now, I would like to use, I'm gonna record now another thought here, but this time, I wanna give it in the form of a rhetorical question.

So what kind of questions might be racing through my mind? I'm gonna go with why.

"Why am I always "so useless?" To really capture that feeling of sort of despair that Hiccup has.

And I've got to remember my question mark at the end of my rhetorical question.

Let's just go back and reread these two sentences and make sure they're punctuated properly.

"So sitting here in my bedroom." Remember in a non-finite complex sentence, I always use a comma to separate the non-finite subordinate clause from the main clause, no matter which way 'round they are.

"So sitting here in my bedroom, "I feel so embarrassed and ashamed.

"Why am I always so useless?" "I really want to make dad proud," and I'm gonna go for a compound sentence here.

There's one positive point I really want to make.

Oh, I really want to make who proud? "I really want to make dad proud, but." What's the negative? "I just don't think I'm good enough to be a Viking." Remember, when I use a contracted word, I've got to remember that apostrophe for the omitted letters.

"Think I'm good enough." "I'm good enough to be a Viking," and Viking needs a capital V because it's a proper noun.

Okay, now, thinking ahead to tomorrow, how does it make me feel when I think about going back to training tomorrow? So I'm gonna go with, "The thought of going back to training tomorrow." How does it make me feel? Maybe you could help me with some words here.

"The thought of going back to training tomorrow "makes me feel," hmm, could think dreadful, awful.

I'm gonna go with sick.

"Makes me feel sick," full stop.

"I can't handle another day of embarrassment," another contracted word, and again, informal language.

"I can't handle another day of embarrassment." Now, I think I could end this sentence with an exclamation to really show my sense of desperation at this point.

Full stop, oh, sorry, exclamation mark.

Now, let's reread this main paragraph here, this closing paragraph.

"Sitting here in my bedroom, "I feel so embarrassed and ashamed.

"Why am I always so useless? "I really want to make dad proud, "but I just don't think I'm good enough to be a Viking.

"The thought of going back to training tomorrow "makes me feel sick.

"I can't handle another day of embarrassment!" So I've got a non-finite complex sentence here.

I've also got a compound sentence, and I've got some simple sentences.

I have used a range of sentence types.

I'm gonna tick that one off.

I have summarised the day's events and shared my thoughts and feelings.

I'm gonna tick that one off.

I have used linguistic devices to create an informal tone.

I have used a rhetorical question.

I have used contracted words.

I've used informal vocabulary, and I have used an exclamation, so I can tick this off.

I'm going to now finish my final sign off, and then I can just double check my tense.

So I'm gonna say now, 'cause I'm sittin' here in my bedroom, it's bedtime.

I'm gonna say, "Anyway," again, informal tone, "I should try and get some sleep.

"Maybe things will feel better in the morning." "Feel better in the morning, "goodnight." And on the line below that, I'm gonna sign my name, "Hiccup." Remember, I need a capital H for hiccup.

Now, let's reread our entire piece.

"Sitting here in my bedroom, "I feel so embarrassed and ashamed.

"Why am I always so useless? "I really want to make dad proud, "but I just don't think I'm good enough to be a Viking.

"The thought of going back to training tomorrow "makes me feel sick.

"I can't handle another day of embarrassment! "Anyway, I should try and get some sleep.

"Maybe things will feel better in the morning.

"Goodnight, Hiccup." So here I have got a mixture of present tense and future tense, looking ahead, so I can say that I've written in the correct tense also.

Thank you so much for your help with writing the closing paragraph.

Thank you so much for your help just now, everyone.

Now, it's your turn.

Using your success criteria and your plan to guide you, draught the closing of your diary entry.

Make sure that you reread each sentence as you write it, and check for edits and improvements you can make.

Pause the video while you complete your task.

Great work, everyone.

Take a final moment to double check that you have met all of your success criteria.

Here's another example of a potential outcome.

Of course, this is going to be a little bit different to what you've written, but here's just a different model example.

Let's read through it together.

"Writing this now, "I still can't shake off the humiliation and shame.

"Why am I so useless? "I so desperately want to impress dad, "but I just don't think I'm cut out to be a Viking.

"When I think about going back to training again tomorrow, "I feel nauseous.

"I have a terrible feeling about tomorrow, "which I just can't ignore.

"I can't face the embarrassment for a second day in a row! "Anyway, I'd better get some sleep.

"Maybe by some miracle "things won't seem so bad in the morning.

"Night, Hiccup." Take a moment to reread your writing one last time and see whether there are any edits or additional ideas you can add in.

Pause the video while you do that.

Great work, everyone.

Well done, everyone, that now brings us to the end of our lesson, where today, we've been writing the closing of a diary entry based on "How To Train Your Dragon." The closing is the final paragraph of a piece of writing.

The purpose of the closing is to summarise the day, log current thoughts and feelings, and look ahead to what will happen next.

Writers need to shift between past, present, and future tense when writing the closing.

We should always use our success criteria and plans to support us when writing.

I hope you're so proud of your writing outcomes from today and for the outcomes you've produced throughout this whole unit, and I hope you've enjoyed it as much as I have.

Well done, everyone.