Lesson video

Hi everybody, and welcome to our lesson.

Today, we're going to be writing the conclusion of our non-chronological report about tigers, and I'm really looking forward to seeing how we all get on.

In our lesson today, we will be using our plans to write the conclusion of a non-chronological report about tigers.

Here are some of the key words we'll be using.

Conclusion, general information, purpose, summarise.

Well done.

A conclusion is the closing paragraph of a non-fiction text.

General information is the most basic and necessary information.

Purpose is the aim of the text.

To summarise is to sum up or conclude the main body of the text.

Today, we're going to be writing the conclusion of a non-chronological report about tigers.

First of all, we're going to be preparing to write, and then we will be writing our conclusion.

Non-chronological reports often follow the same structure.

They have an introduction, which is the first paragraph that encourages the reader to read on, they have sections of paragraphs of information which are related to a particular aspect of the subject, and then they have a conclusion, which is the last paragraph that summarises the key information of the text.

So far in our unit, we've already written our introduction, section one, which is our diet section, section two, which was the adaptations section, and now, today, we are writing our conclusion.

Order the parts of our non-chronological report about tigers, and pause the video while you do that.

Great work, everyone.

Well done if you spotted that the first part was the introduction.

Next was section one, which is the diet section.

Section two was the adaptations section, and our final section is the conclusion.

The conclusion is the final paragraph of a non-fiction text that summarises the key information in the report.

The conclusion follows a clear structure.

First of all, we have our subheading, then an introductory sentence, general information, and the concluding sentence.

The introductory sentence introduces the paragraph and summarises the key information of the report so far.

The general information gives the reader some necessary information about the topic, and the concluding sentence ends the report.

The purpose is the aim of the text, and the purpose of the conclusion is to summarise the key information of the report and give the reader some general information.

We keep the information general, both in our introduction and in our conclusion.

The specific facts were saved for the sections on the diet and adaptations.

True or false? The purpose of the conclusion is to summarise key information in the report.

Pause the video while you do that.

Well done if you spotted that this is true.

Now take a moment to read A and B, and decide how to justify your answer.

Pause the video while you decide.

Well done if you spotted that the correct justification was B.

The conclusion should summarise the key information in the report, and steer readers towards the future of the subject.

Now it's time for your task.

Sort each fact into the appropriate section of a non-chronological report.

Let's read them together to start with.

"Tigers are currently classed as endangered." "Tigers eat other animals." "Tigers' stripes camouflage them when hunting." "This report will inform you about tigers' adaptations and diets." Pause the video now while you sort each fact into the appropriate section of a non-chronological report.

Brilliant work, everyone.

Well done if you spotted that the introduction should include, "This report will inform you about tigers' adaptations and diets." "Tigers eat other animals" was appropriate for the diet section.

"Tigers' stripes camouflage them when hunting" is appropriate for the adaptations section, and "Tigers are currently classed as endangered" is appropriate for the conclusion.

What a brilliant start to our lesson.

Now we're going to move on to writing the conclusion.

When we write, we always try to do these things.

We plan and say each sentence before we write it.

We use punctuation where we know the rules.

We showcase each sentence type we know.

We write letters neatly on the line in joined handwriting.

We use spelling strategies to help spell words accurately.

And finally, we check and improve our writing when we think we've finished.

Here are our success criteria for today.

Success criteria really help us as writers, because it's a really useful checklist full of ideas of things that we should make sure to include in our writing to make it as effective and successful as possible.

Let's read these through together.

I have followed the appropriate structure for my conclusion.

I have summarised the key information in the report.

I have included general information for my reader.

I have included a sentence that steers the reader to the future.

Now we're going to write the conclusion.

It's really, really important that you use your plan to write the conclusion.

We did some really excellent thinking around what to include in our conclusion during our planning lesson, so we need to have our plan with us so that we can build on those ideas today.

We can build on our ideas from our plan when writing today.

If you have an idea of something that's not in your plan, but you want to build on from it, or add something else, you can absolutely do that.

That's really, really important, and a really excellent part of the writing process.

Make sure that you've got your plan with you ready for writing.

Firstly, we are going to start with our introductory sentence.

Remember that this introduces the paragraph, and it summarises the key information.

Make sure you've got the relevant part of your plan.

Here's my plan.

It's got the subheading, it's got some different ideas for how I'm going to open my introductory sentence, and some language I want to make sure that I use.

I'm going to be using my plan throughout the next shared write to help me keep on track of my ideas and build on ideas from my plan.

Okay, everyone, so now I've stuck in my success criteria.

I'm gonna begin by writing my subheading, which is just the word conclusion.

And I use my ruler to underline that, and then we're good to go.

So I'm ready now to start with my introductory sentence, which is going to help summarise what we've learned so far in the report.

So I'm gonna make quick reference back to the topic of my two main sections, which was the diet and the adaptations.

Now, on my plan, I've got a couple of openers, I've got in conclusion or to conclude.

I'm gonna go with to conclude.

Remember my indentation in from the margin.

So to conclude, and I need a comma after that opener, to conclude.

On my plan, I've got the word apparent or evident.

I'm gonna go with evident.

It is evident that tigers' diets or their feeding habits and their unique adaptations make them truly intriguing animals.

So to conclude, it is evident that, that tigers, I'm gonna go with tigers' feeding habits, tigers' feeding habits.

Now, who do the feeding habits belong to? Well done, they belong to the tigers.

So tigers, apostrophe, for plural possession.

Tigers' feeding habits, and their unique adaptations.

Unique, that's a tricky word.

It's a French word.

Oh, unique, Q-U-E, unique adaptations.

The word adapt is in adaptations.

Now, they're unique adaptations.

I could say make them truly intriguing animals.

I'm gonna go though with the word render.

Render, that means the same thing as make, it's a synonym.

Render them truly, truly intriguing.

Now let's spell this word together.

Int, I-N-T, riguing.

Now, that rig sound is actually another French word.

So it's I-G-U-I-N-G.

Okay, that intriguing animals.

Let's reread our introductory sentence together.

To conclude, it is evident that tigers' feeding habits and their unique adaptations render them truly intriguing animals.

Great.

I think that's a nice summary of key information in my report, in my introductory sentence.

Now I've said that they're intriguing animals, but I'm actually going to include some information now about the threats to their population.

So I need a formal fronted adverbial, meaning but, so synonym for but.

So I could go with however, or I'm gonna go with despite this.

So despite this, and I'm going to tell my reader about how they're facing lots of threats to their population.

So despite this, tigers are facing, that present tense, that present progressive tense, are facing multiple.

So not just one, but lots of threats, threats to their population.

Let's reread this sentence now, population.

Despite this, oh, what do I need after a fronted adverbial? I need a comma.

Thank you for pointing it out.

Despite this, comma, tigers are facing multiple threats to their population.

Great.

Now I think my reader's gonna want to know what some of these threats are.

So I'm gonna go with, for example, comma.

Now, you might have lots of ideas on your plan of which things are threatening tigers' populations.

I'm gonna go with deforestation.

For example, comma, deforestation.

Now, this is a word that not all readers might know the meaning of.

So I'm going to tell my reader what deforestation means using parenthesis, inside brackets, deforestation, cutting down of trees, cutting down of trees.

And what does that, what impact does that actually have on the tigers? It actually means that they then lose their habitat, 'cause we know they create dens inside trees and forests.

So when the trees in the forest get cut down, this deforestation has lead to habitat loss, loss.

Let's reread this sentence.

For example, comma, deforestation, cutting down of trees, has led to habitat loss.

Can you spot what I've missed out from my sentence? Well done.

My parenthesis here is cutting down of trees to explain the word deforestation.

Now I remembered my first bracket, but I've forgotten my second one.

Remember, brackets always come in pairs, and they go around the parenthesis.

That looks much better now.

I'm also gonna give another example of a threat to tigers' population.

So here's a great opportunity for me to use a formal and fronted adverbial, so a formal synonym for and.

I could do also, I could do in addition to this, I could do furthermore.

I'm gonna go with furthermore.

So furthermore.

Now, I forgot my comma after despite this, so I'm not gonna make the same mistake again.

Furthermore, comma, after my fronted adverbial, I'm gonna talk about poaching.

Poaching, now this is another word that maybe not all our readers will be familiar with.

I don't want to use brackets for parenthesis again, 'cause that's a bit repetitive, so I'm going to give my explanation of poaching in a which relative clause.

Poaching, comma, which is the illegal, that means it's against the law, illegal hunting of wild animals, of wild animals.

And remember, I use my comma around my which relative clause, has decimated.

I'm gonna go with decimated, 'cause it's a really strong word.

Decimated means like totally destroyed, has decimated.

Remember, I want my reader to have strong feelings here about the impact of poaching, so I'm using strong language, has decimated tigers' population size in the wild, size in the wild.

Now let's reread this sentence together.

Furthermore, poaching, comma, which is the illegal hunting of wild animals, comma, has decimated tigers population size in the wild.

Now, who does the population belong to? You are right, it belongs to the tigers, so I need an apostrophe after the word tigers to show that plural possession.

Now I've given some general information to my reader about my tiger, the threats to these tigers.

Now it's time for me to have a concluding sentence that steers my reader to the future.

So I've told my reader about these very distressing threats that are affecting tigers' population.

Now I need to tell them what to do about it to help change the future.

So I'm going to go with, again, my strong language, and really tell my reader how important it is for them to take some action.

So I'm gonna go with, it is therefore crucial that humans respond by campaigning for an end to poaching.

So it is therefore.

Now, I've used the word vital in other paragraphs, so I'm gonna go with crucial.

Crucial that humans respond by campaigning for an end.

Another thing they might do is support charities which tackle poaching, by campaigning for an end, oh, an end to poaching, and make lifestyle choice, because I've talked about poaching, I also wanna talk about deforestation, and make lifestyle choices, move my page up, to end deforestation, make choices to end deforestation.

Great, now I need to finish with a full stop.

Let's read this final sentence together.

It is therefore crucial that humans respond by campaigning for an end to poaching and make lifestyle choices to end deforestation.

So with that, I know now that I have included a sentence to steer my reader to the future.

Let's finish by rereading the whole thing.

To conclude, it is evident that tigers' feeding habits and their unique adaptations render them truly intriguing animals.

Despite this, tigers are facing multiple threats to their population.

For example, deforestation, cutting down of trees, has led to habitat loss.

Furthermore, poaching, which is the illegal hunting of wild animals, has decimated tigers' population size in the wild.

It is therefore crucial that humans respond by campaigning for an end to poaching and make lifestyle choices to end deforestation.

So I've got an introductory sentence, general information, and a final sentence that steers my reader to the future, so I've also used an appropriate structure for my conclusion.

Thank you so much for your help, everyone.

Thank you so much for all of your help just now.

Now it's your turn.

You're going to use your plan to draught your introductory sentence.

If you would like to, you can use my sentence opener, in conclusion.

Pause the video now while you do that.

Well done, everyone.

I'm sure you've got a fantastic introductory sentence written down.

Here's my introductory sentence.

In conclusion, it is apparent that tigers' carnivorous diets are varied, and their distinctive physical adaptations are vital to their survival.

With this sentence, I've summarised the key information in the report, because I've referred to tigers' diets, and I've referred to their adaptations.

If you are happy with your introduction, your introductory sentence, you can now check off this part of your success criteria.

Now we're going to move on to the general information section, where we give our readers some necessary information about the topic.

Make sure you've got the relevant part of your plan in front of you.

Here's my part of my plan.

In my plan, I wrote down about the fact that tigers are facing multiple threats to their existence, and I've mentioned some examples such as habitat loss, poaching, and conflict with humans, and about how now they're classed as the world's most endangered cats.

Take a moment to reread this general information section on your plan before we start to write.

Now it's time for you to use your plan to draught your general information.

If you've just been writing about how interesting, or important, or well-adapted tigers are, so if you've been writing about them in a really positive way in your introductory sentence, you might want to use a but formal fronted adverbial to show now a contrasting view, which is actually showing how threatened tigers are.

You might want to use a word such as however, or despite this, or in spite of this.

Take a moment now to draught your general information using your plan, and pause the video now while you do that.

Brilliant work, everyone.

Here's my example of my general information.

Let's read it through together.

However, tigers currently face many threats to their existence, such as habitat loss due to deforestation, cutting down of trees, poaching, which is the illegal hunting of wild animals, and conflict with humans.

As a result of these pressures on their population numbers, tigers are now the world's most endangered cats.

So hopefully you can see there how I've taken my plan, which was just consisting of some words and phrases, and made these into full sentences.

Here, I've included general information for my reader, but I've also want to just draw your attention to some of the cohesive devices I've used here.

Especially now as we're coming to the end of this unit, I think it's a really nice opportunity for us to showcase some of the learning we've been doing.

So I've got some formal fronted adverbials, I've got however.

I've also got a fronted adverbial of cause, with as a result of.

I've also included some parenthesis, marked using brackets, and I've used a relative complex sentence, and I've just drawn your attention to my which relative clause.

So in these couple of sentences, I've woven together lots of the cohesive devices that we've been learning to use throughout our unit so far.

I wonder whether you can spot any cohesive devices that you've used in your paragraph so far.

And now this brings us on to our concluding sentence, which ends our report.

Make sure you've got the relevant part of your plan.

Here's my plan.

So I've got my opener, in order to address these conservation issues, and I've got some ways to call my reader to action, so telling them to campaign for an end to poaching, and to make environmentally-friendly lifestyle choices.

Now it's time for you to use your plan to draught your linking sentence, but you can use my opener if you would like, in order to effectively respond to these conservation issues.

Pause the video now while you do that.

Brilliant work, everyone.

Well done.

Here's my concluding sentence.

Let's read it together.

In order to effectively respond to these conservation issues, humanity must take action in the form of campaigning for governments to prevent poaching and making environmentally-friendly lifestyle choices, like reducing consumption of palm oil to reduce deforestation.

So now with this final sentence, I follow the appropriate structure for my conclusion.

I've got an introductory sentence, general information, and then a concluding sentence, and I've also included a sentence that steers my reader to the future and calls them to take action.

Now it's time for you to check your writing and make any edits or improvements that you might like to make.

Then, when you're happy with your edits, rewrite your sentences as a full conclusion with a subheading, and use the success criteria to help you.

Pause the video while you do that.

Great work, everyone.

Here is my conclusion.

Conclusion.

In conclusion, it is apparent that tigers' carnivorous diets are varied, and their distinctive physical adaptations are vital to their survival.

However, tigers currently face many threats to their existence, such as habitat loss due to deforestation, cutting down of trees, poaching, which is the illegal hunting of wild animals, and conflict with humans.

As a result of these pressures on their population numbers, tigers are now the world's most endangered cats.

In order to effectively respond to these conservation issues, humanity must take action in the form of campaigning for governments to prevent poaching and making environmentally-friendly lifestyle choices like reducing consumption of palm oil to reduce deforestation.

Now with my paragraph, I have made sure to follow the appropriate structure for my conclusion, I've summarised the key information in my report, I've included general information from my reader, and I've included a sentence that steers my reader to the future.

Take a moment now to reread your full paragraph, and make sure that you've met all of your success criteria.

Well done, everyone.

That now brings us to the end of our lesson, where we've been writing the conclusion of a non-chronological report about tigers.

The conclusion is the final paragraph of a non-chronological report.

The purpose of the conclusion is to summarise the key information of the report and provide the reader with general information.

A range of different cohesive devices ensures that writing flows and a reader remains engaged.

Success criteria can be used when writing to help make writing successful.

Well done, everyone.

I'm so impressed with the writing that we've produced today, and hopefully you feel like we are really drawing together lots of the writing skills we've been using throughout this unit.

Well done.