Lesson video

Hi everyone and welcome to our lesson today.

Today we're going to be putting into practise loads of the work that we've been doing in our previous lessons with drama and reviewing speech punctuation, where today we're going to be planning the third part of the build-up of "The Highwayman." In your lesson today, you'll be using your knowledge of stanzas five and six of "The Highwayman" and speech punctuation to plan the third part of the build-up.

Here are some key words we're going to be using, purpose, dialogue, speech first, speech second.

Well done.

The purpose is the aim of the text.

Dialogue is when two or more characters are speaking in a text.

A speech first sentence is a speech sentence that includes direct speech first before the reporting clause.

A speech second sentence is a speech sentence that includes direct speech second after the reporting clause.

Today we're going to be planning the third part of the build-up of "The Highwayman." We're gonna start with reviewing the purpose and structure of this part of the build-up, and then we're gonna move on to planning part three of the build-up.

Throughout this unit, we've been basing our writing on Alfred Noyes' narrative poem, "The Highwayman." "The Highwayman" is set in rural England in the 18th century.

Here's a summary of our writing so far.

Stanzas one and two describe the setting and the Highwayman, and these form the basis of our setting and character description.

We've already written this part.

Stanzas three and four were about Bess and Tim.

They formed part one and part two of the build-up, and we've already written these as well.

Now stanzas five and six describe the couple speaking and the Highwayman leaving.

And this is part three of the build-up.

This is what we are going to be using as the basis of our planning today.

Stanzas five and six of the poem form the basis of what? Pause the video while you decide.

Well done if you spotted that stanzas five and six form part three of the build-up.

Let's review stanzas five and six of "The Highwayman." Let's read it together.

"'One kiss, my bonny sweetheart, I'm after a prize tonight, but I should be back with the yellow gold before the morning light, yet if they press me sharply, and harry me through the day, then look for me by moonlight, watch for me by moonlight, I'll come to thee by moonlight, though hell should bar the way.

' He rose upright in the stirrups.

He scarce could reach her hand, but she loosened her hair in the casement.

His face burnt like a brand as the black cascade of perfume came tumbling over his breast; and he kissed its waves in the moonlight, o, sweet black waves in the moonlight! Then he tugged at his rein the moonlight, and galloped away to the west." Pause the video now while you match the words to their definitions.

Well done if you spotted that stirrups are loops for a horse rider to put their feet in attached to the saddle.

A casement is a window.

A cascade is a waterfall.

A brand is a hot iron or poker.

Scarce means barely.

Breast means chest.

A rein is a long narrow strap for a horse rider to hold onto and guide the horse with.

And galloped is a horse running fast.

Well done.

Now there's so much language in stanzas five and stanzas six that is quite unfamiliar because remember this poem was written in the 18th century, so lots of the language used at that time is very different or unfamiliar nowadays.

Have a moment to think, what do you think is the purpose of the build-up? You could use this scaffold to help you.

I think the purpose of the build-up is to.

The purpose of the build-up is to introduce key characters and storyline, to increase the tension of the plot, and to give clues about what will happen later in the story.

We also want to keep our reader engaged so that they want to keep on reading and find out more.

Which of these are the purpose of the build-up? Pause the video while you decide.

Well done if you spotted that in the build-up, we need to keep the reader engaged, introduce key characters and storyline, and also, give clues about what may happen later in the story.

In part three of build-up, we will write about the following two events.

Firstly, we're going to include dialogue between Bess and the Highwayman.

So that's the conversation between the two main characters.

We're also going to describe the Highwayman leaving.

So this is basically what happens in stanzas five and stanzas six of the narrative poem.

Dialogue is spoken words between two or more people in a text.

Dialogue can be written in the form of speech first or speech second sentences.

And we've been reviewing these sentences in our prior lesson.

Match the direct speech sentence types to their examples, and pause the video while you do that.

Well done if you spotted that our speech first sentence was, "'I'll be back by the morning light,' promised the Highwayman as Bess frowned with disappointment." We know this is a speech first sentence because the speech, the direct speech, comes first before the reporting clause.

The speech second sentence is, "As Bess frowned with disappointment, the Highwayman promised, 'I'll be back by the morning light.

'" We know this is a speech second sentence 'cause the direct speech comes second after the reporting clause.

Now it's time for your task.

Read the model of part three of the build-up, then find and copy one example of a synonym for said.

So a word that means the same thing as said.

Then find and copy one example of a speech first sentence, and finally, find and copy one example of a speech second sentence.

But first, let's read the model of part three of the build-up together.

"As the Highwayman finally leapt onto his stallion, he explained to Bess, 'My dearest love, I must leave now, but have no fear, I'll return before dawn.

' 'I shall watch for you by moonlight,' promised his beloved, blowing him one final kiss.

She put on a brave face as she tried to ignore the knots in her stomach and the tears burning her eyes, desperate to flood down her cheeks.

Turning to wave a final goodbye, the Highwayman gathered his steed's reins and reluctantly departed.

Once again, only the sound of galloping hooves could be heard as the love-struck robber disappeared over the horizon." Now pause the video while you complete your task.

Okay everyone, so one example of a synonym for said, you could have either written explained or promised.

Either of those is correct.

One example of a speech first sentence was, "'I shall watch for you by moonlight,' promised his beloved, blowing him one final kiss." And an example of a speech second sentence was, "As the Highwayman finally leapt onto his stallion, he explained to Bess, 'My dearest love, I must leave now, but have no fear, I return before dawn.

'" Well done everyone.

Now that we've covered the purpose and structure of part three of the build-up, we're now gonna move on to planning part three of the build-up.

We're now going to plan the dialogue between the Highwayman and Bess.

You can decide who spoke first and what was said as long as it is based on the content of stanza five.

So let's remind ourselves of stanza five and reread it together.

"One kiss my bonny sweetheart, I'm after a prize tonight, but I shall be back with the yellow gold before the morning light; yet if they press me sharply, and harry me through the day, then look for me by moonlight, watch for me by moonlight, I'll come to thee by moonlight, though hell should bar the way." Now let's just take a moment to review the dialogue that we use in our previous drama lesson.

So what did the Highwayman say? What did Bess say? And how did they say it? So thinking back to our last lesson where we adapted stanza five and used it as the basis to come up with a conversation between Bess and the Highwayman.

Let's think back to that.

Think about what they said to each other and how they spoke to each other and how they were feeling as they were speaking.

Take a moment to have that thinking back, and if you have got the partner that you worked with in our drama lesson, take a moment to speak with them and remind yourselves of the dialogue that you created between these two main characters.

Now that we've reminded ourselves of this dialogue, we're going to use this information to help us plan our written dialogue now.

Here's the planning format that we're going to use for this section.

So the first section of our writing, the first paragraph, is going to be the dialogue paragraph.

And this is gonna be where Bess and the Highwayman speak to each other and everything that happens within that conversation.

So it's not just going to be two speech sentences, we're also also going to include some additional information around what happened as they were speaking to each other and while that conversation was taking place.

Then the second paragraph of our writing is the second section here where the Highwayman leaves.

That's gonna be the next paragraph after the dialogue paragraph.

And we're gonna describe him leaving, how he felt as he left, how he left, and how Bess felt as he left as well.

We're going to use our speech first and our speech second scaffolds to help us with the dialogue section.

Now it's time for your task.

You're going to use the scaffolds to help you plan dialogue between Bess and the Highwayman.

Now remember, we've already done all of the hard thinking about this in our previous drama lesson and also our reviewing speech sentences lesson.

So now you're just thinking back to all the previous learning you've done, and you're using that knowledge to write down some dialogue between Bess and the highwayman.

Pause the video now while you complete your task.

Okay, everyone, now everybody's dialogue is going to be a bit different because we have worked to dramatise stanzas five in our previous lessons, and everyone had something a little bit different to say when they were in character as Bess or the highwayman.

Now we're applying that knowledge to our planning lesson today.

Here is my example of speech sentences and dialogue between the two characters.

Remember, it's not going to be the same as yours, but what we can check is making sure that we have properly punctuated both of our speech sentences.

So I decided to lead with Bess speaking first.

And for my Bess, she says, "'At last, you're here!' exclaimed Bess as she breathed a sigh of relief." Now I've used the synonym exclaimed, so therefore, I've used an exclamation mark for the end of her direct speech.

I've also used a contracted word, you are, you're, because often whenever we speak, we speak in a more informal way than the narrator's language.

So I wouldn't use contracted words in the narration parts of the story, but I can use maybe a couple of contracted words in the direct speech but to show that degree of informality there.

And I've also used some show-not-tell in my adverbial subordinate clause, "as she breathed a sigh of relief." So I'm telling my reader that she was feeling quite anxious and worried while she was she was waiting for the Highwayman to arrive at the inn.

Up next, I've taken a new line to introduce the Highwayman.

Now I refer to him as her love, not the Highwayman, not the robber, not the horseman, even though all of those are correct, but I'm gonna use her love as a way to refer to the Highwayman.

"Her love replied," so she spoke first.

And my synonym for said is replied to show there's a conversation between the two going on.

"I must leave again soon, but I will return tomorrow." Now I have used a speech first sentence for Bess and a speech second sentence for the Highwayman, because I want to show off that I can use both of those.

If you have only used speech first or you've only used speech second, why not have a go at doing one of each to showcase that you can show that variation in sentence type? Now we've planned our dialogue and the next step for us is to describe the Highwayman leaving.

So take a moment now to think our characters have spoken to each other.

The next section of the writing, the next paragraph, is going to be about the Highwayman leaving.

How could we describe that? How is he feeling? How was Bess feeling? Can we use some show-not-tell? Have a moment to have a think and maybe have a conversation with a partner if you've got one.

We could consider all of these things, show-not-tell, what the Highwayman did, and Bess' reaction.

Here's some of my ideas.

So I might use an adverb like reluctantly or "with sorrow etched on his face" or "with a heavy heart." These are three examples of adverbs of manner I could use to describe how he left.

I can just say what he did.

"He turned and galloped away," or "he slowly departed from his love." Departed means left.

Or I might think about Bess and her reaction.

"Bess' eyes stung with tears.

Her shoulders slumped with despair." So lots of opportunities for show-not-tell here.

We might also use some personification, "A sob threatened to erupt from her chest." That word erupt almost makes it sound like a volcano about to erupt.

This huge sob getting ready to burst out from her chest as she watched him leave.

Now these are my ideas, and I bet you've got loads of your own amazing ideas as well.

I want you to add your favourite ideas for describing the Highwayman leaving to your plan, and pause the video while you do that.

In my plan, I've decided to take a few of these ideas and add them in.

With a heavy heart, now, I've written this with a capital letter and a comma 'cause I'm definitely gonna use it as a fronted adverbial.

I'm gonna refer to the Highwayman as a love struck robber and explain how he turned and galloped away on his horse.

And then when I'm thinking about Bess, I want to include some show-not-tell.

So I'm gonna describe how her shoulders slumped in despair, and, so I'm gonna use a compound sentence, a sob threatened to erupt from her chest.

I like that personification I used for the sob threatening to erupt from her chest, 'cause the sob is just a big cry.

It's not actually something that can threaten you, but we can personify and make it have those human attributions.

Take a moment to read what you've written in your plan.

Have you got some show-not-tell? Have you clearly explained to the reader that the Highwayman left? And have you explained to the reader how best reacted to that? Well done if you have.

Well done everyone.

That now brings us onto the end of our lesson, where today we've been planning the third part of the build-up of the Highwayman.

The purpose of the build-up is to keep the reader engaged and share more information about main characters and their related storylines.

Dialogue can be used to convey characters emotions and thoughts as well as move the story forward.

Dialogue can be written in the form of speech first and speech second sentences.

Correct punctuation must be used when writing speech sentences.

I hope you're feeling really proud of the plan that you've come up with today, and you really feel like the previous lessons where we've been using drama and reviewing our speech skills has really helped you with planning.

Well done everyone.