Hi there, I'm Mr. Buckingham, and it's so good to see you here for today's lesson.

Today, we're going to take the next big step towards writing our Windrush diary entries by writing our plans.

And if we get this right, then it's going to make our writing so much easier and so much more interesting when we come to do that.

So let's make a start.

Let's see if we can do some fantastic work today.

Today's lesson is called planning the diary entries of an imagined Windrush passenger from my unit called the Empire Windrush: diary writing.

By the end of today's lesson, you'll be able to plan the structure and content of an imagined Windrush passenger's diary entries before and after arriving in London.

Now, this lesson builds on Celia story, which we've been exploring in the previous two lessons.

So if you're not familiar with that story, go back and check now.

If you did do those lessons, make sure you've got your text map of Celia's story with you now.

If you're ready, let's make a start.

Here are our keywords for today's lesson.

My turn, your turn.

Past tense, present tense, events and feelings.

Well done.

So the past tense is used to tell the reader that action happened before now and the present tense tells the reader that action is happening now.

Events are things that happen to a personal character and feelings are the emotional reactions or ideas a person has in response to events.

So here's our lesson outline for today.

We're going to be making our plan for some diary entries.

We're going to write the role as Celia.

We're going to start off planning a diary entry written from onboard the Windrush, and then we'll plan a diary entry from the shelter in London.

So we'll finish with the plan for two separate diary entries.

Let's make a start.

So we're going to start planning Celia diary entries and we'll write two entries, each covering a part of our text map.

Entry one is going to be written as the Empire Windrush leaves Bermuda, so setting out to cross the Atlantic Ocean.

So that's going to cover all of these events leading up to the Empire Windrush departing Bermuda.

Entry two is going to be written as Celia sits in the underground shelter in London.

So that's going to cover the rest of the events in our text map.

So just to make sure we're all ready to go, can you pause the video now and have a go at saying the entire text map aloud from beginning to end? Pause the video and have a try.

Well done.

Great job.

That's gonna really help you when you come to plan your diary today.

Good work.

So how will the mood for each of these diary entries be different? What will the mood be like when Celia writes entry one and what will the mood be like when Celia writes entry two? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done.

Good thinking.

So entry one written as the Empire Windrush leaves Bermuda, it's likely to be more optimistic and positive in how it describes events that have happened so far and it's likely to be looking forward to arriving in England and Celia's going to be looking forward to getting started on her new life.

So this is gonna have a really positive optimistic tone.

What about entry two? Well, this is likely to include some more negative elements because it's gonna have descriptions of the bad experiences she's had so far in England, but we know that it will finish with Celia showing how tenacious she is after that imagined conversation with her mother, really committing to making the most of her difficult situation.

So we're going to see different moods in these two different diary entries.

Well done for your ideas.

So when we write a diary entry, we'll likely include both past and present tense.

Let me show what I mean with an extract from Mrs. Begum's diary.

"Dear diary, what a joy it is to be at home at last.

I'm sitting with the fire blazing and the cat on my lap, trying to get a few minutes' peace.

I'm absolutely exhausted.

I just want to sit here on the settee for the rest of the day.

When I first arrived at school, my classroom was flooded.

There was water everywhere: on the tables, on the carpet: on my desk.

Worst of all, a pipe which was hanging off the wall, was still pumping out water.

I just sat down and wept." So you probably noticed there, that first paragraph, starting with "what a joy it is," describes what she's doing and feeling in the present tense.

So we can see is, I'm sitting, I just want, and the second does the same thing, describes what she's doing and feeling, but in the past tense.

So things she felt and did in the past.

So I've got the verbs arrived and was and sat, showing that past tense.

And we can also see that this diary entry combines things that happen, events and actions with thoughts and feelings.

So events and feelings.

So for instance, we've got an event here.

I'm sitting with the fire blazing and the cat on my lap trying to get a few minutes' peace.

Now, that's an action really, isn't there? Something which has happened, but we've also got some thoughts and feelings.

For instance, what a joy it is to be at home at last and I'm absolutely exhausted.

I just want to sit here on the settee for the rest of the day.

So a diary combines these two things, telling us about events and telling us about thoughts and feelings.

So now can you look at that second paragraph of Mrs. Begum's diary? Does it focus on events or feelings do you think? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done.

You're right, it really focuses on events here.

Mrs. Begum is describing the things that she saw at school, but we can see her feelings as well, can't we? From the fact that she sat down and wept.

We don't always have to say, do we, I was sad or I felt sad.

We can show, not tell someone's feelings by showing what they did.

Mrs. Begum wept so we know that she's sad without having to say that she was sad.

So again, the key point here is in a diary, we are combining actions and events with thoughts and feelings.

We have to try and do both.

So let's imagine Celia decides to start her diary as the Windrush leaves Bermuda and she writes two paragraphs in this first diary entry.

She's going to start by saying in the present tense what she sees and feels as the ship heads out to the ocean.

So that's our first paragraph.

Then she's going to use the past tense to explain to her diary the events and feelings from when she first saw the advert, up to getting on the ship.

So she starts off in the present tense, then she moves to the past tense.

So our plan will need to cover what we think Celia is thinking, feeling, and seeing happen, the events at each of these points.

So what might Celia see and feel as the ship leaves Bermuda? Pause the video and have a think Well done.

Really good thinking.

So what might she see? Well, she might see the wide open ocean ahead, the islands getting smaller behind her and the crests of waves on the ocean.

Maybe she'll see people onboard chatting, playing games and singing.

So some excitement there on the ship.

And what might she feel? Well, she's gonna feel exhilarated, isn't she? To finally be on the way, dismissive maybe of Uncle Jack's concerns and optimistic about the future.

Remember, Uncle Jack had said some negative things about the UK based on his experience in the war.

She might also feel thrilled to be exploring the world and impatient to get to London and start teaching.

So we've got some good positive feelings here and some things that she might see.

Really good ideas, well done.

Now, we know the events that led Celia to the Windrush from seeing the advert, all the way to getting on the ship, but how do you think she felt at each point? Can you describe your thoughts and feelings in the role as Celia for each of these sentences? So when I first saw the advert, I this.

And remember, you could try and show, not tell.

Pause the video and have a go.

Really good job.

Well done.

Let's have a go.

So I said this.

When I first saw the advert, I was filled with yearning to go.

When I realised it was so expensive, my heart sank.

When mother said she'd sell the animals, I raced over and hugged her.

When I got a ticket, I felt exhilarated.

It was really happening.

As we took the bus to the harbour, I felt nervous but optimistic.

As I looked up at the island, I wondered when I would see it again.

And finally, as I boarded the ship, I felt like my future was bright.

So I've tried to show Celia's feelings at each of these points.

So can you see how in each of these sentences we are combining an event with a feeling, doing what we must do in a diary of having both present? Really well done for your ideas there.

And as you said, we can try and show, not tell our feelings by saying what you did.

So if you look at my third example, I said I raced over and hugged her.

That shows my excitement and my happiness without me saying I felt happy.

So let's try and do some of that as well.

So now we're ready to plan our first diary entry in role as Celia.

I want you to complete the table I'm going to show you with notes to show the events that happen and Celia's feelings and thoughts about them.

So I'm going to start you off with some examples.

First of all, here's our table.

We're going to have our first paragraph showing present events and feelings as the ship leaves Bermuda.

And then our description of past events and feelings leading up to the ship departing.

So here are my examples.

Present events.

I've got Windrush steaming away from Bermuda and exhilarated to be heading to London.

I'm using notes, I'm not writing full sentences.

So I've shown something she's seeing, the Windrush steaming away and something she's feeling, exhilarated.

Here are my past events and feelings.

When I read it in the newspaper, I yearned to go.

It felt impossible because it was too expensive and I thought maybe in a few years, I'll be able to do it again.

I have used notes to show Celia's thoughts and feelings, as well as some events, like reading it in the newspaper.

So pause the video and see if you can record your notes for her present events and feelings as the ship leaves and her reflections on those past events that led up to the ship departing.

And you can start off with the ones I've given you if you'd like.

Pause the video and have a go.

Fantastic job.

Well done.

So here's an example of the completed notes for the first section of the present events and feelings as the ship leaves Bermuda, I've said this.

Windrush steaming away from Bermuda, islands getting smaller.

Things I'm seeing.

Ocean head of us, everyone chatting.

More things we see.

Exhilarated to be heading to London, ah, a feeling.

Know it won't be easy, thinking about Uncle Jack's advice.

Excited to explore the world, optimistic about seeing the mother country and thrilled by the idea of having my own class in London.

So lots and lots of feelings in this section.

Really well done if you've got some similar ones.

And now here are my completed notes for the second section, focusing on her description of the past events and her feelings and response to them leading up to the ship departing.

So I've got read it in the newspaper, yearned to go, felt impossible, too expensive.

Maybe in a few years I can go.

Spoke to mother, she said I must go and we'd sell the animals.

Couldn't believe it, hugged her, grinned ear to ear.

So there's some show, not tell there.

Queued for hours for ticket, exhilarated when got it.

Spent the next few weeks preparing, cleaning and it felt frantic.

Took the bus to Kingston Harbour.

Nervous but optimistic, hugged mother, looked at island.

And then here's a thought, when would I be back? And finally, boarded the ship, knew made the right choice.

So we've got there in that last one, an example of we've got an action, boarding the ship, with a thought, I knew I'd made the right choice.

So again, hopefully, you've managed to combine the actions and feelings really well in those notes.

Great job.

So now let's plan our diary entry, which is written from the shelter in London.

So we've planned that first diary entry that Celia writes on the Windrush.

The second one is going to be written in London.

So it's going to cover these events.

And we know that a lot happened in Celia's first day in London and a lot of it unfortunately is negative.

Now, this time, we're going to do it the other way round.

We're going to start with Celia reflecting on the past events first.

So she'll start by writing about the past events of the day and her thoughts and feelings from the ship arriving in Tilbury up to the end of her search for the room.

And then she'll describe her present situation, where she is at the end of the day, and her feelings as she sits in the shelter at night using the present tense.

So this time, we'll do past first and then present.

So what events happen between the ship approaching Tilbury and Celia heading to the shelter at the end of the day? Pause the video and see if you can remember all the events between those two points.

Have a go.

Well done, really good job.

So maybe you said these.

She heard the rumour that she wouldn't be able to teach and then she saw Tilbury and the grey sky and the brown sea.

They got off the ship where those journalists were waiting and they got on the train into London.

They searched for rooms using the local newspaper and they had doors slammed in their faces and they headed towards the shelter.

Now, I haven't put everything in there, but those are some of the key points between arriving and heading to the shelter.

Really well done for your memory.

Good job.

So how did Celia feel at each of these points? Let's see if you can describe your thoughts and feelings in role as Celia.

So when I heard the rumour about teaching, how did I feel? And remember, you can try and show, not tell your feelings by saying what you did instead of what you felt.

Pause the video and have a try.

Really good job.

Well done.

So I could say when I heard the rumour about teaching, I felt apprehensive.

When I saw Tilbury, I couldn't believe how grey everything was.

As we got off the ship, I was amazed to see journalists and photographers.

As the train sped through London, I was shocked by the bomb damage.

While we searched for rooms, I felt frustrated, but I tried to be positive.

When the doors were slammed, I held my head high, and as I trudged to the shelter, I felt deflated and defeated.

So we've matched up again actions and events with thoughts and feelings, which is what we do in a diary.

Really good job.

Now we know that as Celia sits in that shelter at night, she's feeling a bit deflated, isn't she? And you can see here the kind of bunk beds she might have been sleeping on that night because these are the real-life ones that were there at the time.

Now, 236 Windrush immigrants stayed at the Clapham South deep-level underground shelter for those first few days and weeks.

And the shelter was way below ground.

You had to go down 180 steps to get to these bunk beds.

And the immigrants' first meal in the shelter was roast beef and Yorkshire puddings.

And the really cool thing is that you can actually visit this shelter today and see these bunk beds where the Windrush immigrants would've stayed.

Now, actually in real life, we think that only men were accommodated in this shelter, but we're imagining that Celia was there as well.

So there's just a bit of context for us to help us imagine Celia sitting or laying in one of those bunks at the end of the day, reflecting on what has happened.

So what might Celia do and see and hear, imagine and feel while she's sitting in the shelter at the end of the day? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done.

Good job.

Let's start with what she might do and see and hear.

She might sit on the bunk bed, she might see row after row of bunks and no windows and no sunlight, no natural light at all.

What might she hear? Well, maybe some snores, maybe some laughter, maybe some grumbling, and maybe even trains running overhead because they're so far underground that the underground tube trains are running above their heads.

What might she imagine and feel? Well, she might be feeling, "I can't believe I'm living underground like an animal." She might be imagining her mother telling her to keep going and to prove people who rejected her wrong.

She might be feeling determined to succeed and tenacious as well.

And she might be feeling determined to find a job and a room tomorrow to get out of this underground shelter.

So there might be loads of thoughts and feelings buzzing around in her head that we can try and empathise with.

Really well done for your ideas there.

So we're ready to plan our final diary entry in role as Celia.

So we're going to again, complete the table with notes to show the events that happen and Celia's feelings and thoughts about them, as well as the things she sees and hears.

So remember, this time, we're starting off with the past events and feelings leading up to being in the shelter and then doing the present events and feelings as she sits in that shelter.

So here are my examples.

So first of all, she heard that rumour about not being able to teach.

Felt apprehensive.

What would I do in London? Notice, I'm using, I the first person.

Then the ship approached Tilbury, everyone put on their smartest clothes and there's a feeling of excitement.

So I've got, again, can you see a mixture? Of events and feelings.

Then I've got the present events and feelings.

I've said sit here on hard bunk bed, wondering if made right choice.

Again, I've got an action, the sitting, paired with a feeling, wondering if made right choice.

So use those to start you off if you like.

Pause the video and see if you can write your plan, again in note form for these feelings and events, first of all in the past, leading up to being in the shelter and then sitting in the shelter that night.

Pause the video and have a go.

Well done.

Really good job.

So here's an example of the notes for the first section, reflecting on those past feelings from earlier in the day.

So I started off with heard rumour, apprehensive, what would I do in London? Then ship approached Tilbury.

Everyone put on smartest clothes.

Couldn't believe how grey everything was.

Then got off.

Journalist and photographerss shouting.

So strange.

So she feels like it's a very strange situation, which, of course, it would've been.

Then on train, everyone looked away, past rows of tiny houses and bombed out streets and I'm feeling shocked at the destruction that's still there.

Then search rooms with Dorothy you could add.

Doors slammed, but head held high.

Knew they were just ignorant.

So I'm showing the actions that happened to them and their feelings in response.

And then finally, trudged to shelter, feeling deflated and defeated.

So we've paired up actions and events with thoughts and feelings.

So now let's look at some example notes for the present events and feelings as she sits in the shelter.

So sit here on high bunk bed, wondering if made right choice.

Rows and rows of bunks and no windows, like being an animal underground.

Everywhere snores, laughter, trains above.

No chance I'll sleep tonight.

So she's talking about what she's seeing and hearing.

Then some imagination and feelings.

Imagine my mother telling me to keep going and prove the ignorant people wrong, need to be tenacious.

And finally, determined to find a job and a room tomorrow.

Know I can make a success of this.

So at each point, we're thinking, what does she see, hear, and feel, and what are her thoughts as well? We're combining all of those together, which is what makes a good diary entry.

Really well done for your fantastic notes there.

Good job.

So summarise our learning in this lesson.

We've said that when we write a diary entry, we can use both the past tense and the present tense.

And this is because we're describing both past and present thoughts, feelings, and events or actions.

We know that we're writing two diary entries in role as Celia, one written on the Windrush and one in the underground shelter on arrival.

And we're trying to show Celia's changing feelings in reaction to the events she experiences.

Really well done for your effort in this lesson.

You've done a fantastic job and I'd love to see you again in a future lesson.

Goodbye.