Hello, everyone.

It's lovely to see you here today.

My name's Dr.

Clayton.

I'm going to guide you through your learning journey today.

Today's lesson's called, Planning an extended response.

We're gonna be talking through how to conceptualise the question, how to pick a comparative poem, and then we're going to talk through how to create effective thesis statements and analytical paragraphs before creating a multi-paragraph outline.

Now you'll need a copy of the AQA Worlds and Lives anthology with you today, so make sure you have that with you.

So if you're ready, grab your pen, laptop, whatever you use for this lesson and let's get started.

So by the end of the lesson, you'll be able to effectively plan an extended response.

So we have four words today we're going to focus on as our keywords.

They'll be identified in bold throughout the lesson.

Now try to put 'em out to yourself, so can see them being used in context.

Now, two of those words refer to the technical process of writing.

We have thesis and analytical.

The thesis statement of your essay offers a concise summary of the main point or claim of the essay.

And when we refer to analytical paragraph.

Refer to a paragraph that sets on your argument after you've carefully studied and considered the text.

Our other two words are concepts will be considering throughout the lesson in relation to the question.

When we talk about belonging or sense of belonging, we mean the feeling of being happy or comfortable as part of a particular group.

And when we talk about something being immersive, we mean it seems to surround the reader.

So, feel completely involved.

So I'll just give you a few moments to write down those key words and their definitions.

So pause the video and write them down now.

Fantastic.

Let's get started with the lesson.

So, we have two learning cycles in our lesson today.

For our first learning cycle, we're going to consider the question, compare the way poets present ideas about belonging in, "A Wider View" and in one other poem for the Worlds and Lives anthology.

And think about how we might approach the question and then talk through which poems from the anthology we might compare with, "A Wider View" and what the similarities and differences are to how they approach the theme of belonging.

For our second learning cycle, we're going to talk through what the components are for an effective thesis statement and effective analytical paragraphs before creating a multi-paragraph outline to answer the question, compare the way poets present ideas about belonging in, "A Wider View" and in one of poem for the Worlds and Lives anthology.

So the first thing we're going to do is talk through how to approach the question.

So essentially understand what the question is asking of you before we can start planning your response.

So the question is, compare the way poets present ideas about belonging in, "A Wider View" and in one other poem for the Worlds and Lives anthology.

So the first thing I'd like you to do is read through the question and decide which word we need to zoom in on, not to decide an appropriate comparative poem.

And if you went through this with someone else, you might talk through ideas together.

Going through this by yourself, you might just think about your ideas.

So pause the video, decide which word we need to focus on from the question.

Excellent work, everyone.

The correct answer is belonging.

This gives us the theme of the question and shows us what we need to focus on.

Now, belonging is one of our key words.

Means this objective feeling that wants an integral part of their surrounding systems. So we now know we first need to think about how Seneviratne needs, "A Wider View" considers a concept of feeling that your integral and important part of your surroundings, but also which other poems in the anthology or to consider those ideas a feeling as if you belong somewhere.

So now we're going to think about which poems we might consider for our comparative poem.

So what I'd like to do, it's discuss which other poems in the Worlds and Lives anthology consider the theme of belonging.

So which of the poems consider the idea that you're feeling as if you're an integral part of your surroundings? Do the speakers feel happy and comfortable where they are? Pause the video, take a few moments to consider.

Some great ideas there on.

Now, let's have a look at our pupil Laura's ideas.

So Laura said we might think about Berry's, "On an Afternoon Train," which is about the speaker and the Quaker having a conversation about migration on a train.

We might also think about Mundair's, "Name Journeys," which is about the speaker's migration from India to Manchester.

We might think about Khan's, "Pot," which is about colonial acquisition and how pot has been taken from its home in order to be displayed in the museum.

We might then talk about Berry's, "Homing," which is about the speaker trying to connect to our ancestor through voice and place.

We might consider Parker's, "The Jewellery Maker" which is about the workshop and the creative process of a jewellery maker.

We might also think about Nichols', "Like an Heiress," which is about the speaker returning home and find that things have changed.

So before we start to think about which of those poems we might want to compare, let's just take a moment to establish how Seneviratne sees, "A Wider View." Consider the theme of belonging so we can see how the other perms are considering the theme in a similar or different way.

So what I'd like you to do is this how Seneviratne explores the theme of belonging in, "A Wider View." So pause the video, take a few moments to consider.

Excellent work, everyone.

They might have said, Seneviratne suggests the sense of belonging is created for the speaker due to their connection to their ancestor.

You might remember the metaphysical language throughout the poem and how it seems that the past and present are colliding and the speaker and our ancestors are sharing the same temporal space.

You might also remember the speaker and our ancestors share the same physical space.

You might recall the specific place names throughout the poem.

Now the speakers following in the literal footsteps of her ancestor, but walking the same path through Leeds as her her ancestor did.

So now that we've thought about how Seneviratne connects the theme of belonging with a connection to one's heritage and through a shared sense of place.

We can now think about how the other poems we mentioned consider belonging in similar or different ways.

Now we're going to talk through two poems at a time.

And I'd like you to start with Berry's, "On an Afternoon Train," and Mundair's, "Name Journeys." I'd like to think about how these two poems consider ideas of family and heritage and a sense of place.

If going through this, someone else, you might talk about ideas together.

If going through this by yourself, you might just think about ideas.

So pause the video, discuss how these poems consider ideas of family and heritage and a sense of place.

Welcome back, everyone, some great discussions there.

Let's talk through what you might have said about the poems together.

So, let's start with, Berry's, "On an Afternoon Train." Now in terms of family and heritage, we might say that one difference between Seneviratne's, "A Wider View" and Berry's, "On an Afternoon Train".

So they find their sense of connection of belonging through different people.

So both poems end on the word us, which shows the speakers extend themselves part of a collective.

But the speaker of, "A Wider View" finds this through her ancestor.

While the speaker in an afternoon train finds this through a conversation with a stranger.

In terms of a sense of place, we do have the same specific connections to place as, "A Wider View." So the speaker references his father's banana field.

However, the speaker seems to attach a deep sense of loneliness to London through the emptiness of the streets and the dimness of the lights.

We don't know that same sense of loneliness connects to place in, "A Wider View." Now let's think about Mundair's, "Name Journeys".

Now in terms of connection to family and heritage, "A Wider View" implies our identity are connected to our heritage and our ancestors influence who we are through the use of echo in the poem.

We could interpret Mundair's, "Name Journeys" as saying something very similar through the reference to tapestries, which could suggest our identities are interwoven with those of our ancestors.

They help make us who we are in terms of a sense of place.

As we just said, "A Wider View" very much shows a deep connection to place.

While, "Name Journeys" suggests the speaker finds England a lonely and isolating experience.

They feel as if they don't fit in, they're a discordant part.

So, now let's consider the next two poems. So pause the video, consider how, Khan's, "Pot," and Berry's, "Homing" explore ideas of family, heritage and place.

Welcome back, everyone.

So in Khan's, "Pot", we don't know who the pot's creator of family is.

However, the poem does consider the importance of connection to one's heritage and family.

Through the speaker's expression of fear, their family wouldn't recognise them if they went away.

By expressing that fear, the poem acknowledges that connection to family and heritage is important.

In terms of connection to place, the pot is said to be empty in the museum, which implies it feels isolated and devoid of purpose in the museum because museum's not where it belongs, it belongs back at home.

Presumably it'll be full and satisfied.

In terms of Berry's, "Homing", we can see the same desire for a connection to a relative that we see in, "A Wider View." The speaker of, "Homing" wants to be closer to a relative and tries to do that by creating a shared voice and vocabulary.

In terms of sense of place, the speaker suggests the importance of how place affects our identity by suggesting how relative tried disguise the heritage because there were negative connotations attached to the place.

Finally, pause the video and consider how, Parker's, "The Jewellery Maker", and Nichols', "Like an Heiress," consider ideas of family, heritage and place.

Welcome back, everyone.

Now in terms of, "The Jewellery Maker," we learn the workshop has been in the family for generations and therefore that creates a connection between family and purpose.

Since the subject is continuing his family's work in terms of a sense of place, we get a deep sense of connection between the subject and the workshop through the sensory language and the references to creation, which Jesse feels alive when he's in the workshop.

Finally, in terms of Nichols', "Like an Heiress," the speaker implies she's returning home through the first to small-days, which is the Guyanese focus on.

The suggestion the speaker feels disconnected from a heritage through the use of words such as tourist.

Now this word tourist also links to a sense of place 'cause we get the impression the speaker no longer feels at home because they feel as if the place is changed in their absence.

So now for quick check for understanding around the poems we just talked about.

What I'd like to do is match the poem with the connection to the theme of belonging.

So our poems are, "A Wider View," "Name Journeys," and, "The Jewellery Maker." And a connection to theme of belonging are a sense of not belonging in a place, a sense of feeling alive in a specific place and a sense of feeling connected to family through place.

So pause the video, match up the poem with the ideas of belonging.

Now the speaker in, "A Wider View," is travelling in the footsteps of her ancestor through Leeds and feeling as if they're together.

So, there's a sense of feeling connected to family through place.

In Mundair's, "Name Journeys", the speaker feels isolated and therefore shows a sense of not belonging in a place.

Finally, "The Jewellery Maker" uses sensory language and language of creation show that a sense of feeling alive in a specific place.

So, very well done if you've got those right.

Amazing work so far, everyone.

We'll do our first task of the lesson.

What I'd like you to do is take everything we've talked about so far, discuss which of the perms you'd pick to compare to, "A Wider View," to answer the question, compare the way poets present ideas about belonging in, "A Wider View" and in one other poem from the Worlds and Lives anthology.

Now the six poems we talked about are Berry's, "On an Afternoon Train," Mundair's, "Name Journeys," Khan's, "Pot", Berry's, "Homing", Parker's, "The Jewellery Maker," and Nichols', "Like an Heiress." So think about what we've said about how each of those poems express ideas about family, heritage and a sense of place.

And think about which one will be best to compare with, "A Wider View." So pause the video, take a few minutes to consider.

Welcome back, everyone.

Now what I'd like to do is good are the ideas of two of our Oak pupils, Izzy and Sam and think about whose ideas align most closely with your ideas.

So Sam said, "I choose, "Homing," because they both show the influence of family on our sense of belonging." And Izzy said, "I choose, "The Jewellery Maker" because of the sensory connection to place." So pause a video, think about whether Sam or Izzy's ideas align most closely with your ideas.

They might have picked a completely different poem to Sam or Izzy, and that's completely fine.

The most important thing is to make sure you pick a poem that compliments, "A Wider View" in terms of theme of belonging.

And you can craft an argument on the similarities and differences and how they express that theme of belonging.

Amazing works so far, everyone Now the second learning cycle, we're going to think about how to construct effective components for an extended answer and then think about creating a multi-paragraph outline.

So now that we thought about which two poems we're going to use, we're now going to consider how to go about planning a comparison.

Some terms to extended answer, you should aim to have a thesis statement, at least three analytical paragraphs and a conclusion.

So some of writing an effective analytical essay are to gather ideas from both texts before planning, so you know which evidence you can use.

To ensure thesis statement is strong, the spine of your essay that all your single paragraph outlines should link to.

And that each electrical paragraph should be led by key idea, supported by relevant language, form and structure and context from both texts.

Now throughout this learning cycle, we're going to explore how we can create an effective thesis statement, introduce your ideas and your argument and how we can create effective analytical paragraphs are led by key idea and support by relevant language, form and structure and context from both parts.

So we're going to imagine that we are Sam for the process of talking through how to plan your extended answer.

And we're going to compare the theme of belonging in "A Wider View" and "Homing." So let's consider how we can compare and contrast the theme of belonging in both, "A Wider View" and "Homing" in relation to a sense of family and a sense of place.

So pause the video, consider where you can see similarities or differences in how these poems address those ideas.

Now for "A Wider View" we might say we can see connections across generations and how family influences our identities through the ideas of echoes through generations and how the speaker and ancestor are swept together and not occupy the same temporal space even though they exist over 200 years apart.

In terms of a sense of place, we can see the ancestor identity is connected to a sense of place in the first three stanzas and how the industrial revolution influenced who the ancestor was.

We can also see the speaker's connection to our ancestor, this shared sense of place because we can see the speaker following in the footsteps of our ancestor, but in the same path through Leeds and seeing the same locations.

For, "Homing," we can see connections across generations because the speakers using a shared language and voice as the relative in order to create a sense of connection between them.

And we see the speaker's sense of belonging being strengthened through their connection to their relative.

We can also see how the relative's identity was influenced by a sense of place because of how they felt they needed to change themselves because of where they came from and the negative associations.

So now we've thought about how these two poems consider the theme of belonging.

Let's talk about how we can create an effective thesis statement to express that.

So, what I'd like you to do is read the following two thesis statements and think about which is more effective.

So the question is how do poets present their ideas about belonging in, "A Wider View" and "Homing?" And the third thesis statement is both Seneviratne and Berry explore how a sense of belonging is strengthened by connections to family.

The former does this for a shared sense of place, while the latter explores this reviving their relative voice.

And the second thesis statement is, "A Wider View" and, "Homing" both offer explorations of the theme of belonging, which influenced by their sociopolitical context.

They use language, form and structure to explore these ideas of belonging.

Now the criteria for an effective thesis statement is number one, it should link specifically to the folks of the question.

Number two, it should introduce both poems and summarise their key ideas.

And number three, it should be supported by ideas linked to the entire text.

So pause the video, consider which of those thesis statements is more effective.

Welcome back, everyone.

Now the first thesis statement is more effective.

Let's take a moment to deconstruct why.

So it specifically links the folks of the question through the theme of belonging introduces both poems and summarises their key ideas by suggesting that this sense of belonging strengthened through a connection to family and it supports those ideas by suggesting that, "A Wider View" does this through a shared sense of place.

And, "Homing" explores this through reviving their relatives voice.

Now the second thesis statement also links the question, but it doesn't explore how the poems actually explore their idea of belonging.

This set gives vague statements about context, language, form, and structure.

So, it's not an effective thesis statement.

Now for a quick check for understanding.

So a thesis statement should a, focus heavily on contextual information, b, discuss one poem in a lot of detail, c, introduce both poems, summarise their key ideas, or d, summarise multiple themes across two poems. So pause the video and make a selection now.

The correct answer is c.

A thesis statement should introduce both poems or summarise their key ideas to introduce the reader to your argument.

So very well done if you've got that right.

Now after you've constructed your thesis statement, you then need to move on to the body of your answer.

We provide specific ideas about the text and show your analysis of the language, form and structure compliment those ideas.

Now ideally you should aim for at least three analytical paragraphs in your essay.

Now each analytical paragraph should have a topic sentence that explains the focus of your paragraph and supporting detail, which is your analysis of the language, form and structure.

Now, one way to plan this is through a single paragraph outline that can then be turned into multi-paragraph outline of your whole essay.

These are great ways of making sure constructing a cohesive argument and continue to answer the question throughout your answer.

So let's just talk through an example of a single paragraph outline.

So the topic sentences both Seneviratne and Berry use on onomatopoeia and sensory language to forge a connection between belonging and place.

Now here we have a specific idea that relates to the question of belonging.

We know that this paragraph is specifically focusing on sensory language within the poems and how that creates a sense of belonging and connection to place.

Now, for our supporting detail.

We have the word, din, from, "A Wider View." And the notice that this word transports the speaker and the reader into the past.

We also have smoke filled from, "A Wider View." And the note is this creates a sense of the past lives on in the speaker because we see how the industrial revolution affected the ancestor.

And now that in turn is influenced the speaker.

We have, thunking from, "Homing." And the note is that this transports the speaker and the reader back to the past.

And then we have, swallow from, "Homing." And the note is there's a physical sensation.

And now it suggests that ancestors nourishing and strengthening the speaker.

Now this is not only a great way of choosing the best quotations and organising your ideas, but it also allows you to make sure you're not giving more attention to one poem over the other.

Ideally, you should aim to give equal weight to the poems to create a truly comparative response that shows how both poems respond to the question.

So if you plan that your essay, you see that every paragraph has three pieces of support and detail from one poem and only one piece of support and detail from the other poem.

You can go back and adjust to make it more equal.

Finally, the concluding sentences, both Seneviratne and Berry uses immersive language to perhaps imply the past is still present and still surrounding us through our to our heritage and our ancestors.

Now, concluding sentence designed to summarise the paragraph but also gesture to why those ideas might be important, what they say about humanity and society.

Now here, the paragraphs just the past is not separate, but it says still surrounds us through our connections to our heritage and our ancestors.

And that speaks to wider ideas about time and human nature.

Now, for quick check for understanding.

So what I'd like you to tell me is why is the following an effective topic sentence? So the topic sentences, both Seneviratne and Berry use onomatopoeia and sensory language to forge a connection between belonging and place.

So is it effective because a, it mentions both parts and the techniques they use, b, it introduced the argument to the reader, or c, it includes supportive detail to emphasise its point.

So pause the video and make a selection now.

The correct answer is 'cause, it introduce the argument to the reader 'cause it tells the paragraph is going to focus on sensory language and how that forges a connection between belonging and place.

So very well done if you got that right.

Fantastic work, everyone.

We're now the final task of the lesson where I'd like you to create a multi-paragraph outline to answer the question, compare the way poets present ideas about belonging in, "A Wider View" and in one other poem of the Worlds and Lives anthology.

So in your multi-paragraph outline, you want a thesis statement introduced an overall argument about the poems and their connections, idea of belonging.

Ideally you want three analytical paragraphs for a topic sentence, supporting detail and a concluding sentence.

And then you want an overall conclusion which summarise the argument 'cause it's how the ideas within the essay might gesture to wider ideas about society and human nature.

So pause video, create your multi-paragraph outline now.

Welcome back, everyone, I really hope you found that exercise useful.

Now we're going to consider one of Sam's single paragraph outlines from his multi-paragraph outline.

And I'd like you to consider which supporting details seems outta place.

So the topic sentences, both Seneviratne and Berry use the structure their poems to explore ideas of belonging.

Then supporting detail is that both poems use in genre to create a sense of connection between generations.

And the final words of, "Homing" and, "A Wider View" are home and us.

And they both lead the reader with a sense of connection and comfort and that, "Homing" and "A Wider View" both use multiple stanzas to imply a sense of fraction and separation.

And in the concluding sentences, both Seneviratne and Berry use structural techniques in order to take the read on a journey throughout the poem that culminates in the shared connection leading to a sense of unity and belonging.

So pause the video, consider which piece of support and detail does not fit with the topic sentence and the concluding sentence.

So the correct answer is the idea that multiple paragraphs imply a sense a fracture and separation.

The topic sentence and the concluding sentence tell us that the structure creates ideas of belonging and shared connection.

But this detail is about separation and fracture, so it doesn't fit.

Now I'd like you to pause the video and think about how we might rewrite the supporting detail to fit with ideas of belonging and connection.

Welcome back, everyone.

Now potentially we could suggest the multiple stanzas in both poems imply individuality within connection because neither poem suggests the speakers are carbon copies of their ancestors mean that they're influenced by them and connected to them.

Finally, I'd like you to reread your own plan and make sure that everything is cohesive.

So pause the video and reread your own plan now.

Amazing work, everyone.

You should always see every step of the planning process is just that, a process.

You should always go back and revisit your work to make sure it makes sense, not only to you, but it should make sense to somebody else.

The hardest part of writing analytical essay is to make sure ideas are clear that someone else can understand them.

And creating a multi-paragraph outline is one way to help you do that.

Fantastic work today, everyone.

Here's a summary of what we covered.

It's important to highlight the key theme within the question.

It's important to understand how the poems you choose to compare link to the theme.

Ideally, your analytical essay will have at least three article paragraphs.

Each analytical paragraph needs a topic sentence and supporting detail.

Single paragraph outlines can help you create effective plans.

I really hope you enjoyed the lesson, everyone, and hope to see you for another lesson soon.

Goodbye.