This lesson is all about revising accurate descriptions.

Hello, my name is Mr. Young and I'm going to be teaching you in today's lesson, so let's get started.

So today's learning outcome is a very clear one.

So hopefully by the end of today's lesson you should be able to recall and practise how to write a technically accurate description.

And as always, we'll have some important words, which are our keywords.

So do pause the video if you'd like to spend a little bit more time with any word and its definition.

But today's keywords are as follows: revision, perpetual, ruthless and bustling.

So welcome to today's lesson on revising accurate descriptions.

And we are going to have two very clear learning cycles as part of today's learning.

So our first learning cycle is going to be all about revising sentence types, so the different sentence types there are and the different rules that dictate their usage.

And then we're gonna move on to learning cycle two, where we're going to revise accurate punctuation.

So we're gonna look at punctuation types and again, the rules that would dictate how we use those different things in different elements of our dystopian description.

So let's get started with learning cycle one.

Okay, so let's begin learning cycle one with a quick discussion question.

Your question is as follows: so what is meant by the term revision? Pause the video, have a quick discussion and then do push play when you'd like to continue.

Okay, some really nice discussions taking place there to kick us off on learning cycle one.

And I'd be super impressed if any group spoke about the idea of kind of looking at something again or revisiting something, which is really at the heart of revision.

So revision is the process of going over your work in order to remind yourself of material you may have forgotten, to identify any gaps in your knowledge, to check your understanding and to reinforce what you have learned.

And the word revision itself comes from a a French word which means to see again.

So today's lesson is really going to focus on revising the key content of this unit to check your understanding and to reinforce what you have already learned.

So we're now going to move on to look at specific sentence types.

So my question for you is as follows.

So what are the different sentence types? Pause the video, have a quick discussion and then push play when you'd like to see some feedback.

Okay, some really nice discussions taking place there identifying different sentence types that we might come across in our writing, and we'll look in a bit more detail at those now.

So firstly, it's important to remember that sentences are made up of clauses.

The number of these and their type tells us what type of sentence it is.

So for example, we have some sentence types on the board here, which I heard as part of your discussion, and those are simple, compound and complex.

So a simple sentence has a single clause with a subject and verb.

A compound sentence has two independent clauses joined by a conjunction.

And a complex sentence is a combination of a main clause and a subordinate clause.

So my task for you is as follows, can you think of any dystopian examples of these sentences? Pause the video, have a go at the task and then do push play when you'd like to see some feedback.

Okay, great job on that task, and really nice work if you are able to identify anything similar to what is on the board now.

So for example, we have some examples of how those sentence types could be used in a dystopian setting.

So a simple sentence could be, they hid carefully in the deserted city.

So a single clause, single subject and a single verb.

A compound sentence could be, they hid carefully in the deserted city and the drones approached.

So two independent clauses that make sense there, joined by the conjunction of and.

And a complex sentence: as the drones approached, they hid carefully in the deserted city.

So we've got that subordinate clause at the beginning followed by the main clause.

So well done if you identified anything similar in that task.

Okay, quick check for understanding for me then please.

So complex sentences are usually longer than simple sentences, true or false? Pause the video, have a go and then push play when you'd like to continue.

Okay, great job if you identified it as true.

They usually are longer than simple sentences.

But let's add a layer of complexity to that check for understanding and try and justify our answer.

So how could we justify the answer? Is it A: complex sentences contain detailed descriptive information which usually makes them longer? Or is it B: complex sentences are usually longer as they contain a main clause and a subordinate clause? So pause the video, have a go at the task and then do push display when you'd like to see some feedback.

Okay, great job if you identified it as B: complex sentences have a main clause and a subordinate clause, so this usually makes them longer than a simple sentence.

So well done if you picked up on that.

So in addition to simple, compound and complex sentences, we also have the following sentence types and they are as follows: so we have interrogative sentences, we have exclamative sentences, and we have declarative sentences.

So let's take a look at how each of these works.

So we've got a table on the ball in front of us.

And firstly what I'd like you to do is the following: so I would like you to discuss this question please, so can you remember the definition of each of these types of sentences? Can you remember the definition of interrogative, exclamative and declarative sentences? So pause the video, have a go, and then push play when you'd like to see some feedback.

Okay, so really nice work on this recall task and I'll be super impressed if anybody identified the following.

So an interrogative asks a question, an exclamative expresses emotion in an exclamative and a declarative conveys facts, explanation or information.

So well done if you picked up on those.

So let's add another layer of challenge to this then please.

So my next discussion task is as follows: so can you think of a dystopian example for each of these? So again, pause the video, have a go at the task and then do push play when you would like to continue.

Okay, great job on that task.

Well done on matching your grammatical knowledge with your knowledge of dystopias to create some examples.

So I've got some examples on the board now.

Don't worry if yours aren't exactly the same as this, as long as you have used the dystopian context to create each of these sentences, that is absolutely fine.

So the example of an interrogative that I have is how had the earth become such a toxic wasteland? An example of an exclamatory was, "The power police are closing in on us," he screamed.

And an example of a declarative is, the ground was strewn with rubble and debris.

Well done for all of your examples that you've put into that task.

Okay, so a quick check for understanding then for learning cycle one, the sky was a toxic mess of smoke and fumes.

What sentence type has been used here? So pause the video, have a go at the task and then push play when you'd like to continue.

Okay, great job if you identified it as a declarative sentence.

It presents facts or information.

It's presenting us information about the sky.

It's not an exclamative because it does not really contain any emotion.

It's not an interrogative because it doesn't really ask a question, and it isn't a complex sentence because it does not contain a subordinate and a main clause.

So well done for identifying that.

Okay, so we have moved on to our practise task then for learning cycle one, and it is as follows.

So using the sentence status below, I would like you to complete this descriptive paragraph using an example of each of the following sentence types.

So I would like you to use a declarative, an interrogative, an exclamatory, a simple compound and complex sentence in your piece of writing.

So really challenging task, really looking forward to seeing how you get on with this.

So your sentence starter is as follows: the surveillance drones buzzed above them, like agitated hornets whose nest had recently been disturbed.

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Okay, pause the video, complete the task, and then do push play when you would like to see some feedback.

Okay, great job on what is a really challenging task.

You know, it's really difficult to try and get all of those sentence types into a piece of writing.

So super impressed with how you've approached it.

So let's see how you could have got on with this task.

So we have an example on the board in front of us.

An example is as follows: the surveillance drones buzzed above them, like agitated hornets whose nest had recently been disturbed.

She gazed up at the metallic sentinels and watched their mechanical wings slicing through the hazy, polluted sky.

How had it come to this, a world where their every move was scrutinised by the unfeeling eyes of technology? The dystopian city sprawled before her, its towering concrete monoliths casting shadows over the city.

The people here lived in perpetual fear.

It was a place where secrets were a rarity where even the simplest expressions of freedom were met with swift and ruthless reprisal.

The drones buzzed nearer.

"We need to run," she shouted.

Okay, once again, your piece of work doesn't have to be identical to this.

This is just an example.

So let's look at how those sentence types have been incorporated into this piece of work.

So firstly, we've got a complex sentence at the beginning.

We've got that sentence that is made up of a subordinate and a main clause.

We've got a compound sentence next.

We've got two independent clauses that are joined by a conjunction, in this case, and.

And then we have a simple sentence, just a single clause with a single subject and a single verb, so the people here lived in perpetual fear.

We also have one towards the end as well, the drones buzzed nearer.

We've got an interrogative sentence here, how would it come to this, a world where their every move was scrutinised by the unfeeling eyes of technology? So a sentence that that poses a question.

Again, we've got an exclamatory sentence at the end.

We've got, "We need to run," she shouted.

So this sentence increases the fear or the anxiety potentially of the piece.

So that is why that is an exclamatory sentence.

And finally, we also have a declarative sentence, the dystopian city sprawled before her, it's towering concrete monoliths casting shadows over the city.

So a sentence that delivers some information or explanation to us as a reader, in this case all about the dystopian city.

So well done for all of your hard work on this task, and great job for incorporating all of those sentence types into your piece of writing.

So well done.

So great job on all of your hard work so far in this lesson.

I've been super impressed by all that we've achieved so far.

And now we're moving on to our second and final learning cycle, which is all about revising accurate punctuation.

So a quick question to kick us off then at the start of learning cycle two.

So my question to you is as follows, what is the purpose of punctuation? Pause the video, have a quick discussion, and then push play when you'd like to see some feedback.

Okay, some really nice discussions taking place and a really nice energetic start to learning cycle two.

So I'd be super impressed if anybody's conversations touched on the following things.

So punctuation acts as a guide to the reader as we express our ideas.

Punctuation can tell the reader when to speed up, slow down and stop entirely.

It helps us organise and deliver our ideas in the most engaging way possible.

So it is all about making our writing as accessible as possible for our reader and our audience.

Well done if you picked up on that in your own discussions.

So again, then my next question is, what types of punctuation do you use in your writing? So once again, pause the video, have a quick discussion and then push play when you'd like to continue.

Okay, I had some really nice examples of all the fantastic punctuation types that we use every day as part of our writing.

So some examples that you might have said are as follows.

So we've got a comma, we've got question marks, exclamation marks, full stops, colons, semicolons and dashes.

So now we're gonna take a look at how each of these works and then we're gonna apply them to a dystopian context.

Okay, so we have examples of all of these punctuation types on the table in front of us.

So my first question is a recall question.

So can you recall the purpose of these punctuation types? What purpose do each of these punctuation types play in our writing? So pause the video, have a quick discussion and then do push play when you would like to continue.

Okay, some really nice conversations taking place, and I'm super impressed by all of your recall skills here, being able to recall specifically what each of these punctuation types does.

So we have some examples on the board in front of us.

So an exclamation mark conveys intense emotion, a question mark poses a question, a full stop ends a declarative sentence, a comma adds a pause between items in a list or clauses in a sentence and an apostrophe shows belonging.

So my next question for you then is to mix this knowledge with our knowledge of dystopias.

So how could you use each of these punctuation types in a dystopian context? So once again, pause the video, have a quick go at the task, and then do push play when you would like to see some feedback.

Okay, some really nice work taking place there.

Well done for applying your knowledge of punctuation to your knowledge of dystopias.

So I've got some examples on the board in front of you, so don't worry if yours aren't exactly the same as this.

You can absolutely have your own examples.

These are just some examples of how you could have approached the task.

So firstly, we could use an exclamation mark in a dystopian context in the following way.

We could say they're closing in.

Again, we could use a question mark in the following way: why must we live in perpetual fear? Again, a full stop, we could say the regimes punishments were known to be ruthless.

For a comma we could say, their clothes were ragged, dirty and worn.

And finally, for an apostrophe, we could say David's footsteps echoed too loudly.

Okay, so a quick check for understanding for me then please.

So exclamation points are great for descriptive dystopian settings.

Is that true or false? Pause the video, have a quick go and then do push play when you would like to continue.

Okay, great job if you identified it as indeed true, it is absolutely true.

The exclamation points can be really good for our descriptive dystopian settings.

So let's try and justify that answer then.

So how would we justify that statement? Is it A: characters usually feel emotions like anger, fear and violence in a dystopia and exclamations are a great way to express these? Or is it B: dystopias are full of action sequences which should include exclamation points? So again, pause the video, complete the task and then do push play when you would like to continue.

Okay, really nice work if you identified A: characters usually feel emotions like anger, fear and violence in a dystopia and exclamations are a great way to express these.

Okay, so really well done if you picked up on that.

Okay, so now we're going to look at a specific piece of student work and we're going to look at how the punctuation can be improved just to make this writing a little bit better.

So the extract is as follows: in the broken city, the crumbled streets, once bustling sensors of life, were silent.

The buildings were shrouded in darkness and were a stark reminder of a world that had fallen into chaos.

The signs of decay were everywhere.

Broken windows, dilapidated cars, dead trees.

So my task for you is as follows.

I would like you to look at this dystopian description and discuss the following question, what sophisticated punctuation could be added to this description to make it even stronger? So pause the video, have a quick discussion, and then do push play when you would like to continue.

Okay, some really nice discussions taking place there on how we could directly improve this piece of student work with the addition of some sophisticated punctuation.

And I'd be super impressed if you identified any of the following.

In this paragraph we have opportunities to add semicolons, colons and dashes, and we can see how they can be incorporated in the example paragraph that is now on the board in front of you.

Okay, so varying our punctuation by including the addition of sophisticated punctuation makes our writing clear, impactful and engaging.

Okay, our second check for understanding then for learning cycle two is as follows: what punctuation needs to be added to the following sentence in order for it to make sense? The city a grey void loomed in the distance.

Pause the video, complete the task and then do push play when you would like to continue.

Okay, great job if you are able to identify it as dashes.

We can insert dashes into this sentence.

We can put them before a and after void to add a little bit more detail about the city.

So we can say the city - a grey void - loomed in the distance.

And we can use dashes because the sentence would still make sense if we took a grey void out.

The city loomed in the distance would still make sense.

So really well done if you picked that up in your own work.

Well done.

Okay, so we have moved onto our final practise task for today's lesson then.

So I would like you to use a piece of existing dystopian writing that you may have.

And in particular, I would like you to rewrite it so that it includes an example of each of the following.

I would like you to include an example of a full stop, a comma, a semicolon, a colon, an exclamation mark, a question mark and dashes.

So good luck with this task and I'm really looking forward to seeing how you get on.

Okay, great job on that task.

It's not easy to edit and rewrite our work so I'm super impressed that all of the effort you've put into that task.

Your feedback task is as follows.

So I would like you to self-assess your work and identify where you have used an example of each of the following in your piece of written work, so where have you used full stops, where have you used commas, where have you used semicolons, where have you used colons, exclamation marks, question marks and dashes.

So pause the video, complete the feedback task and then do push play when you are ready to continue.

Okay, so we have made it to the end of today's lesson.

A big well done to all of you and all of the fantastic work that you have completed throughout today's learning.

Well done.

Okay, so let's take a very quick recap then of everything we have looked at and everything we have studied as part of today's learning.

So firstly, effective revision means that you can remember key information without using your notes.

Recalling examples of each of the sentence types will help you remember to include all of them when writing.

Practising writing precise sentences will help you recall punctuation rules.

And an effective description should use the different sentence types for specific effects.

Well done.

Thank you very much for all your hard work on today's lesson, and goodbye.