Hello everyone and welcome to your lesson on using accurate personal accounts in newspaper articles.

I'm Miss Sutherland and I'll be teaching you today.

Our learning outcome for today is to be able to include relevant and realistic personal accounts in my writing.

And here are our key words for today.

They are witness.

A witness is someone who sees an event, typically a crime taking place.

Gravitas.

Gravitas means seriousness and solemnity.

Tone.

Tone is the feeling that a piece of writing gives.

And concise.

Concise means giving a lot of information in a brief and clear manner.

Pause the video and reread and make note of any words you need to.

So in today's lesson, we'll first be learning a little bit about the main body of an article because this is where our personal accounts must go.

And then we'll have a go at writing the main body of an article, including writing an accurate and effective personal account.

So let's start off learning a little bit about the main body of an article.

So we're going to focus on writing the body of our article today.

The body of the article is where we give all of the information that isn't in our opening paragraph.

This includes details of the story, any facts and evidence, and interviews from different relevant viewpoints.

The information in the body of the article should be ordered from most to least important.

So you'd start off describing some really key details of the event and then as you go further through the paragraph, there will be less key information but still interesting information about the story.

Let's go through the article structure so we can see how the main body fits in.

So let's take the article "A Roaring Mistake." It's a made up article about a zookeeper that got caught in an accident.

Let's begin.

"A Roaring Mistake.

Unfortunate error leaves zookeeper fighting for her life.

Yesterday morning, a savage and brutal tiger attack left an innocent, well-loved zookeeper in the most desperate fight for her life.

London Zoo was forced to shut up shop early when dedicated worker Hana Ahmed, 28, entered what she believed was an empty tiger cage.

However, Hana was shocked to be met with the unstoppable force of a 35 stone tiger, Owen." So what we've got here is the headline, the subheading and the opening.

Remember, the opening contains the main details of the event.

For example, the who, the what, where, when, and why of the event.

The next section after the opening is the bit we're focusing on today.

We are focusing on the main body.

So let's read a sample of an article body for "A Roaring Mistake.

Early reports suggests that Ahmed was planning on cleaning the cage before the terrifying tiger attacked.

The zookeeper howled in pain in front of horrified visitors.

Other employees reportedly witnessed the gruesome mishap, yet did not bother to intervene to save their colleague.

Ahmed battled bravely to break free for more than 40 seconds before the animal finally let go.

She was then rushed to nearby Princess Alexandra Hospital.

One unlucky zoo visitor heard Ahmed's desperate screens.

"It was so scary and loud.

I know she was seen to straight away, so hopefully she'll be okay."" Let's go through the components of this main body paragraph.

First of all, it gives the more information about how the event happened.

So we know now from reading this that the attack happened because she was planning to clean the cage of the tiger.

The body paragraph also gives details about what occurred at the scene at the time of the event, including what witnesses did.

So we learn that the zookeeper howled in pain and that some other people witnessed this but were probably too scared to intervene.

The body paragraph also tells us the outcome of the event or crime, and the outcome here is that she was taken to hospital.

Finally, the body paragraph includes a quote from an interview with a witness or person related to the key event or person involved.

So for example, we have here a witness statement from a zoo visitor.

"It was so scary and loud, I know she was seen to straight away she'll hopefully she'll be okay." Now we write that as a direct quote from an interview.

Let's check your understanding of the features of a main body paragraph.

What detail is not included in the main body paragraph of an article? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said the background information about the person involved is not included in the main body paragraph.

Background information is considered least important.

Therefore that's going to go at the very end of the article in what we call the tail.

However, what the witnesses did must be included in the main body paragraph 'cause that's considered a main detail.

And a quote from an interview with a relevant person must also be included in the main body paragraph as that is also another essential detail of the story.

Well done if you got that right.

When citing your quote from an interview, you can include a range of different viewpoints.

So let's think about this.

If you were writing an article about the death of Julia Stoner, who could you interview for a quote regarding that event? Remember, it's likely to be someone who knows her quite well or was there at the time of the event.

Pause the video and have a think.

You may have said you could include an interview quote from Julia's twin sister Helen, her stepfather, Dr.

Roylott.

Those two people were both there at the time Juliet passed away.

You could also get creative and include a quote from her fiance, her colleague or her doctor.

I now want you to think about how the tone of the quote might change depending on who you interview.

How would Helen's quote differ from the quote of her colleague or doctor? Pause the video and have a think.

Let's go through the likely tone of each person's interview quote.

Her twin sister Helen might include a quote with an agonised tone since she's lost her beloved sister and she's talked about how that's haunted her.

Her stepfather, Dr.

Roylott, might convey an upset tone since he's going to appear to be mourning his stepdaughter.

A quote from her fiance might also include an agonised tone since he's lost his partner.

If we were to interview her colleague, there might be a similarly upset tone but less agonised since the person's not directly related to her.

And her doctor might give an informative tone because he might be the person to shed light on how she may have died.

Adding an interview quote the main body is a good thing to do.

Most good articles do this because it adds gravitas to your article.

It adds a serious tone to the article and helps the reader really understand the extent of how this event has affected people.

Which of the below statements is true regarding interview quotes in articles? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said it's true that you can interview various people related to your event and they may have different feelings about the event.

As we've just seen, we could interview Julia's sister, stepfather, doctor or colleague, and they'd all have different feelings about the event.

It is not true that we can only interview one person related to our event.

A lot of articles may include two witness statements.

And it's also not true that we can interview various people, but they must have the same feelings.

In fact, to vary the information given in the article and to keep the tone unbiased, you might want to interview various people with different feelings.

I now want you to match the article quotes to the viewpoint and tone.

So what you need to do is read the quote and decide who may have said that and what kind of tone that quote gives.

What feeling that quote conveys.

Pause the video and have a go at that task.

Let's go through some answers.

The witness of the tiger attack may say, "I could hear a lot of shouting, but then we were quickly ushered out towards the exits." The expert might say, "Attacks such as this are rare.

The sheer force of a tiger is enough to cause fatal consequences." The expert quote gives information and facts, whereas the witness quote conveys shock at the event.

The manager quote would be, "We are deeply saddened by this news and would like to reassure you that all policies are currently under review." And lastly, the another colleague of Hana, "We are all praying for Hana.

She's someone who loves her job and is definitely a fighter." The witness quote you could say conveys a confused tone.

They didn't understand what was happening.

The expert quote conveys an informative tone due to the facts they are giving about tiger attacks.

The manager quote gives a reassuring tone because they're trying to convince the public that the zoo is safe.

And finally, the quote from Hana's colleague gives an emotional or sad tone because they seem to be close and she's devastated about Hana's accident.

Well done on that task everybody.

Now let's move on to write the main body of our very own article.

You are going to write the main body of your article reporting on the death of Julia Stoner.

Let's look over an example opening to see where we follow on from.

So let's say this was the article opening, and you need to write the section after this.

The opening might go something like, "Julia Stoner, 30, of Stoke Moran died a suspicious death at her family estate in the early hours of Thursday morning.

There is speculation that there are sinister intentions behind her death, but investigations are ongoing." I now want you to think about what information would you now need to include in your main body to include all of the details that the opening doesn't? Pause the video and have a think.

I had some great ideas and they're really going to help you in writing your main body of your article.

Which information is not relevant for the main body of an article about Julia Stoner's death? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said, Julia Stoner's school is not relevant for the main body of an article about Julia Stoner's death.

That information is not a key detail about the event so we don't include it at all in the article.

Julia Stoner's relationship status is probably important for the main body since she died just before she married, and that could be related to her death.

And her loved one's perspectives is definitely relevant for the main body of an article about her death because of course we want to know what they think about it and we want to honour their voices in mourning her.

I now want you to write your main body paragraph reporting on Julia Stoner's death.

Make sure to include under what circumstances the death occurred, the evidence that surrounds her death, who the witnesses were and what they did, and concise quotes from an interview.

You need to consider what tone you would like the quote to have.

Remember key details you might want to include are what was she doing when she died, what noises she heard upon her death, what she said when she died, and Helen's reflections on her death too.

Pause the video and write the main body of your article reporting Julia Stoner's death.

Great work on you are writing everyone.

Let's read a model answer so you can see what you have done well and what you may need to include next time.

"Early reports say that Julia was alone in her bedroom at Stoke Moran in the lead up to her death.

The 30 year old howled in pain in front of her horrified sister.

No one else reportedly witnessed her terrible demise, but her sister called for their stepfather who arrived on the scene in an effort to save Julia.

Julia reportedly called out, "It was the band, the speckled band!" Upon her death leaving her sister and stepfather puzzled.

Her sister Helen told a correspondent, "I have been lonelier than ever since my sister passed."" I now want you to reread your work.

Have you included what circumstances the death occurred under? The evidence that surrounded the death? Who the witnesses were and what they did? And a quote from an interview? Pause the video and self-assess your work.

Great job everyone.

Let's go through what we've learned today.

The main body of an article should include details of the event, including evidence, witness information and interview quotes.

Interview quotes can add gravitas to your article.

The interview quotes can be from various parties and the tone of your quote can vary depending on who provided the quote.

I've really enjoyed learning with you today.

Thank you for joining today's lesson, and I look forward to seeing you next time.