Hello everyone and welcome to your lesson on writing a newspaper article, about Sherlock Holmes.

I'm Miss Sutherland and I'll be teaching you today.

Our learning outcome for today is to be able to create a nonfiction text that is engaging and accurate and today we'll be creating a newspaper article, all about the solved case in the adventure of "The Speckled Band." We have four keywords for today and they are autopsy.

An autopsy is an examination to reveal the cause of someone's death.

Intrigue.

To intrigue someone is to evoke their curiosity or interest.

Coaxed.

Coaxed means to persuade someone to do something and finally, venomous.

A venomous substance is poisonous and typically secreted from snakes or spiders by biting or stinging.

I'm gonna give you a moment to pause the video and jot down any definitions that you want to.

Right, let's get started with today's learning.

We have two learning cycles today.

In the first learning cycle, we are going to read a model article about the solved case in the adventure of "The Speckled Band" and we'll be annotating it to make sure we know how it is successful.

In the second learning cycle, you'll write your very own newspaper article, all about the solved case in the adventure of "The Speckled Band." So, let's begin with reading and annotating a model article.

Let's read this model article for the solved case in the adventure of "The Speckled Band" and see how it is successful.

So, "Stoke Moran's Sinister Serpent." Stoke Moran's stepdaughter died of poisonous snake bite.

The cause of Julia Stoner's death has finally been revealed by none other than renowned detective Sherlock Holmes.

On Friday, Holmes visited Stoke Moran and made the horrifying revelation that Julia's own stepfather had orchestrated a snake attack in order to poison and kill Julia.

The investigations culminated in the shocking death of Roylott himself.

Now let's begin our annotation.

What language device is used here? How many words is the subheading and why? And what do you notice about these highlighted words, horrifying and shocking.

Pause the video and answer those questions.

Well done If you said alliteration is used in the heading or headline to hook the reader into read the story.

The subheading is eight words to give a brief summary and finally, those words highlighted in purple, horrifying and shocking.

They are examples of emotive language and that is something you could also include in your opening to further hook the reader.

Let's continue reading.

Helen Stoner, Julia's twin sister was growing increasingly concerned about her own safety, so she called upon maverick Sherlock Holmes last week to help her solve the mysterious death of her sister.

Holmes wasted no time in travelling to Stoke Moran to investigate the bedrooms. "I'm glad we settle as soon as we did.

"Once we arrived in the rooms, "the impending danger was clear.

"There were a number of peculiar objects "that once connected, told me all I needed to know." I now want you to reflect on how the interview quote is punctuated.

Pause the video and discuss.

Well done, if you said the interview quote, must be punctuated with speech marks.

Let's continue.

Holmes' reports conclude that Dr.

Grimesby Roylott, Julia and Helen's stepfather coaxed a snake to climb down the ventilator to Julia's bedroom where it bits and poisoned her.

Roylott was planning to do the same to Helen, but in a shocking twist, Holmes and associate, Watson were able to turn the snake onto its master and Roylott instead enjoyed the lethal snake bite, dying instantly.

Let's zoom in to that first sentence there.

It uses a noun appositive, and we are going to learn a little bit about, noun appositives now because they're an excellent tool for your newspaper articles.

Noun appositives are really useful for newspaper articles, because they give the reader more information about someone in a concise way.

A noun appositive, gives extra information as we've said about a noun.

This sentence still makes sense without the noun appositive.

Let's take a look at an example.

Here is a noun, my car, and you could write, "My car is parked outside my house." That makes perfect sense.

However, if you wanted to give the reader a bit more information about that car, you could use a noun appositive in the middle.

You could say, "My car, a red convertible, "is parked outside my house." Bear in mind the noun appositive is punctuated either side by commas and this is how the sentence would read.

"My car, a red convertible, is parked outside my house." Let's take a look at another example.

Dr.

Grimesby Roylott, coaxed a snake to climb down the ventilator.

What could go in the middle there to talk about who Grimesby Roylott is? We could say that Dr.

Grimesby Roylott, Julia and Helen's stepfather, coaxed a snake to climb down the ventilator.

It's now your turn to have a go at creating a noun appositive.

How could you create a noun appositive here? You need to help the reader understand who Watson is.

Pause the video and have a think.

How could you add an extra phrase in there to describe who Watson is? You may have said Watson Homes associate was reportedly the first to comment on the sinister nature of the death.

Other examples may have spoke to Watson being a doctor or Watson being a lifelong friend of Holmes.

Now, which sentence uses a noun appositive correctly.

Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said the first sentence, "Helen Stoner, Julia's twin sister "was growing increasingly concerned about her own safety." That sentence uses a noun appositive correctly.

The reason being is that, first of all, the sentence makes sense without the noun appositive.

Helen Stoner was growing increasingly concerned, about her own safety makes perfect sense.

The only thing the noun appositive does is add extra information about who Helen Stoner is and that noun appositive is embedded nicely between the first noun and the explanation of what she was doing.

And of course, it's embedded within comma's either side.

Sentence B does not use a noun appositive at all.

It doesn't give any more information about who Helen Stoner is, so that's incorrect.

And sentence C, does give extra information about who Helen is, but it's not punctuated correctly.

If that sentence was to use a noun appositive correctly, it should have a comma on either side of Roylott's stepdaughter.

Well done if you got that right.

Let's continue reading the article.

The venomous attack on Julia went unnoticed by witness Helen, since Roylott was cunning enough to lure the snake back up to his room with a saucer of milk.

A chief London chemist added that the autopsy report would not have been able to detect the venom of a swamp adder as we've never had to investigate this before.

It has made us more aware of our investigative limitations at present, which we hope to develop in the imminent future.

Luckily, Holmes with his meticulous approach and sharp eye, was able to find the truth and seek justice for the Stoner family.

Roylott, whose family had been facing financial issues for many years now was receiving income from the girls' late mother.

Roylott would have to give up a considerable amount of his money if either Julia or Helen married.

"Julia died within weeks of her wedding "and Helen had just got engaged.

"So, the motive was clear," said Holmes.

The Stoke Moran property has now been sold with Helen and her husband moving away to Bristol to make a fresh start away from its sinister shadows.

I want you to now think about what type of information is revealed in this sentence highlighted to you here? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said that first sentence, talking about Dr.

Roylott's family having financial issues is background information.

It's still relevant to the event, but it's very much background information.

I now want you to think about how a conclusive tone is established in that last sentence there.

Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said a conclusive tone is established in that last sentence by giving information about Helen's future plans.

Remember we've said that a really good way to establish a conclusive tone is by talking about the future.

Now, there's a paragraph on the right here and I need you to improve it, so let's read it and see what can be done.

Sherlock Holmes remarked that this was one of the hardest cases he had worked on in his 20-year career.

He said It is sad, because the girl's stepfather was entrusted to protect them by their late mother, Roylott betrayed his duty.

You need to improve that paragraph by making sure the interview quote is punctuated correctly.

By making, by adding a noun appositive and by adding emotive language.

Pause the video and rewrite that paragraph to make it more effective to include all of those bullet points.

Pause the video and have a go.

Let's go through what you may have written.

"Sherlock Holmes, famous maverick detective," that uses a noun appositive, because it gives us more information, about Sherlock Holmes.

Remarked that this was one of the most devastating cases, he has worked on in his 20-year career.

We then have emotive language, especially with that word, devastating.

He said it is deeply regrettable, because the girl's stepfather was entrusted to protect them by their late mother.

Roylott betrayed his duty.

Again, we have more emotive language with the phrase, deeply regrettable.

That is more emotive than the word sad.

And lastly, we have the correctly punctuated interview quote.

We must have speech marks around our interview quote, just like it does on the screen there.

Great job, everyone.

Now it's over to you.

Your going to write your own newspaper article.

Here is the plan for the article, reporting on the solved case in the adventure of "The Speckled Band." I want you to pause the video and skim over that plan, just so you know all the content that you need to include in this article.

Now, which part of the article introduces the who, what, where, when, and why? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said, the opening of the article introduces the who, what's where, when, and why.

This is because the opening, must give a summary of the article story and the who, what, where, when, and why enables a summary to be successful.

The opening does not include the who, what's where, when, and why, because we know the opening comes at the very end and it must only contain the background information.

We know that the main body must include, much more than the who, what, where, when, and why.

The main body must include the interview quotes.

The main body must include a really detailed explanation of the events and the headline.

It has to be short and snappy.

It just doesn't have room for introducing the who, what, where, when, and why.

Well done if you got that right.

Which part of the article needs to be eight words or fewer? Pause the video and have a think.

Well done if you said the subheading of the article, needs to be eight words or fewer.

The opening and tail are paragraphs long, not words long.

The subheading has to be eight words or fewer to hook the reader in along with the headline.

Now, it's your turn to write your very own newspaper article, reporting on the solved mystery in the adventure of "The Speckled Band." Remember, you are reporting on what caused Julia Stoner's death and your reporting on the investigation that led Holmes to that discovery and what happened on that night.

Use your multiple paragraph outline to help structure your writing.

You've also got on the right there, all the sections you need to include and the success criteria for each section.

So, pay attention to that if you need a bit more help.

Now pause the video and write your article.

Great, job everyone.

Amazing writing.

It's now time to reread and self-assess our work.

Reread your newspaper article, reporting on the solved mystery and look at the success criteria for each section.

In the headline, you need it to be short and snappy.

You need it to use a language device.

The subheading must be eight words or less and must summarise the main story.

The opening must include the who, what, where, when, and why.

The main body must include key event details and interview quotes, and the tail must include background information and have a conclusive tone.

So, with that all in mind, does each section of your article, meet all of the success criteria? Pause the video and self-assess your work.

Great job everyone.

Brilliant writing.

Let's go through what we've learned today.

A newspaper article has five main sections with their own unique success criteria.

You can use emotive language in a newspaper article to intrigue the reader.

You need to punctuate quotes correctly, using speech marks in a newspaper article.

You can use a noun appositive in an article to give more information about a person and the conclusion of an article should include, all other background information.

Great job on all you've achieved today.

I really enjoyed this lesson.