Lesson video

Hello, welcome back to unit 24, lesson number five, Avoiding Fragments with me Mr. Halpin.

Hope you're feeling good, let's go.

Today, you will need a pen, some paper, and to engage your brain.

Please pause your video if you need to collect any of these equipment now.

Resume when you are ready.

Ready? Perfect.

Today's session will look like this.

We're going to recap some ideas from previous lessons, we're going to look at avoiding using fragments, we're going to move on to punctuating speech, you're going to create another piece of fantastic writing, and then take your quiz.

Sound good? Let's go.

Which of these is a run-on sentence? You can pause your video here and read the options to yourself, or you can listen to me read them aloud.

Option number one.

Beth was unkind to Tom and Beth hurt his feelings.

Option two.

The room was stuffy.

It smelt funny.

Option three.

My bag was in my locker.

My bag had my homework in it.

Option four.

Dave slipped.

He fell.

On the count of three, you can point to your screen or shout out loud.

One, two, three.

Option number one.

Well done if you yelled that at your screen.

Correct start.

Remember, when you list two things a subject did in one sentence, you only name the subject once.

Let's look at this example.

Fatima baked a cake and she coated it in chocolate.

Who or what is the subject of this sentence? Fatima.

Well done.

Do we name Fatima again in the same sentence? Yes we do.

With the word she.

To fix this run-on, we place a full stop after the word cake and a capital letter on the word she.

This is no longer a run-on sentence.

Moving on.

We're going to look at punctuating speech.

And there are a number of rules when it comes to punctuating speech.

On the screen, there's an example of punctuated speech.

I'm going to take you through step by step what you must do to punctuate speech correctly.

Look at the example.

Jo said, "The snow is cold." The first thing you do is introduce the speaker, Jo said.

What you must do next is place a comma after introducing the speaker.

Then you open your inverted commas, you put a capital letter for the first word of the speech, you then write the speech, you punctuate the speech at the end, full stop, question mark, exclamation mark, for example, then you close the inverted commas.

You've successfully punctuated speech.

Think you've got it? Good.

Your turn now.

I would like you to pause the video here and punctuate these sentences.

Be careful with the speech.

Resume your video when you are ready.

How was that? Let's have a look at your answers.

Did they look like mine? Brilliant work if they do.

Remember, introduce the speaker, comma, open inverted commas, capital letter, write the speech, punctuate the speech, close inverted commas.

Excellent work.

Well done.

Which of these sentences is punctuated correctly? Pause your video and read the options to yourself, or listen to me read them aloud.

Kate said, "Being a student is tough." Pally said "being a student is tough." Harriet said, "being a student is tough." On the count of three, point to your screen, or shout out the right answer.

One, two, three.

Brilliant.

Kate is the correct answer.

Let's look at why.

Kate said, we've introduced the speaker.

Comma, after the speaker.

Open inverted commas, capital letter, being, write the rest of the speech, being a student is tough.

Punctuate the speech, full stop.

Close inverted commas.

Excellent work if you got that one correct.

Well done.

Moving on now to avoiding fragments.

Hopefully, you remember that a complete sentence must contain a subject, a verb, and express a complete idea.

It must make sense.

If it has any of these elements missing, it is a fragment.

The following sentences are all complete: The cat sat on the mat.

It was raining.

Although he was late, Mr. Brown walked slowly.

Number one.

The subject, the cat.

Verb, sat.

On the mat.

The cat sat on the mat.

This sentence contains a subject, a verb, and expresses a complete idea.

It is a complete sentence.

Number two and number three also contain subject, verb, and express a full idea.

They are all complete sentences.

If any of these elements are missing, it is called a fragment.

Let's have a look at these examples: Waves on the shore.

Went to the chip shop.

Although she liked swimming.

Do these have all of those ingredients for a complete sentence? Subject, verb, and express an idea in full? I don't think they do, do they? Waves on the shore is missing a verb.

Went to the chip shop is missing a subject.

Although she liked swimming is not a complete idea.

These are all examples of fragments and we should avoid using them.

Over to you now.

Do you think you can avoid using fragments? I have a table for you to complete.

Can you find subject, the verb, and figure out if it expresses a full idea to find out whether these sentences are complete? Remember, if any of these elements are missing, it is a fragment.

Pause your video now to complete this table.

Resume your video when you are ready.

All done? Wonderful.

Let's have a look at your answers.

Do they look like mine? Brilliant work if they do.

Well done.

Which sentence is complete? Pause your video to read the answers yourself or listen to me read them aloud.

Ran through the woods.

I swam.

Thought you would do well.

On the count of three, point to your screen, or shout out loud.

One, two, three.

I swam.

I swam contains a subject, verb, and expresses an idea in full.

Excellent work if you got that one.

Well done.

Writing time now.

Another opportunity for you to create some fantastic writing.

In this unit, you're writing a story based on a sequence of images.

You need to be accurate because you're aiming to meet some writing checks.

Here are your writing checks for today.

Check number one, I have used complete sentences.

Check number two, I have punctuated speech correctly.

Check number three, I have written in the past tense.

Remember to keep these checks in mind when you are planning your writing.

As always, you need to make sure that your writing is realistic and believable.

One way you can do this is by telling what you know happened.

Writing in the past tense.

Here's your first image.

Pause your video and have a good look at this image.

Think about who and what you will write about.

Subject? Bao.

Verbs? Walked, looked, perhaps? Here's image number two.

Pause your video and have a think about who and what you will write about in this image.

Our subject? Bao.

Verbs? Held, decided, perhaps? Remember to include the speech in your writing.

"I like this one." The final part of this sequence.

Again, pause your video, have a think about who and what you will write about.

Bao tried, pulled, perhaps? Verbs you would like to use in your writing? Here is the sequence in full now.

Feel free to pause your video to plan what you are going to write.

Resume the video when you are ready.

This sequence is incomplete.

It doesn't have an ending.

In this lesson, you will create your own ending.

Think about what must have happened after that final image.

What do you do after you've tried on something in the shop? Pause your video now to complete your writing task.

Resume your video when you're ready.

All done? Wonderful.

Is your writing like mine? Let's have a look.

Bao walked along the street.

He saw a jumper in a shop window and liked it.

He entered the shop.

He took the right size off the rack and took it to the changing room.

He tried the jumper on.

He said, "I like this one." He took the jumper to the tills and paid for it.

Did I meet all of those writing checks? Shall we see? Check number one.

Did I write in complete sentences? Subject? Bao.

Verb? Walked.

Along the street, expression of a full idea.

Yes.

I've written in full sentences.

Have you? Well done.

Check number two.

Have I punctuated my speech correctly? He said, comma, "I like this one." I have, haven't I? Have you? Superb.

I knew you would.

And check number three.

Have I written in the past tense? Should we have a look at my verbs? Are they all past tense? Yes they are.

Are yours? Incredible.

Well done on another fantastic piece of writing.

Please remember to complete your quiz.

And if you would like to share your work with Oak National, please ask your parent or carer to share your work on Instagram, Facebook or Twitter, tagging @OakNational and #LearnwithOak.

Well done.

Fantastic effort.

See you next time.