the process of improving writing to improve text flow and overall quality

the use of specific words and phrases to convey a meaning

a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

Editing paragraphs of a narrative in 'Whale Rider'

English

In this unit, pupils learn to develop speech from a film to varied speech sentence structures. In 'The Viewer', pupils will learn to think of speech sentences that develop character from a picture book.

In 'The Happy Prince', pupils learnt to develop their ability to develop character with vocabulary and speech. In this unit, pupils will learn to develop speech from a film to varied speech sentence structures.

'Whale Rider': narrative writing

making improvements to sentence structure

the way words are arranged and organised within sentences

a set of symbols and marks used to structure sentences

Match the key terms to their definitions.

Which conjunction best joins the following two clauses together? 'Thoughtfully, she caressed the smooth exterior of his shell necklace __________ she felt the calling of her ancestors. 

Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.

Check that we've used a range of different sentence types to make the text flow.

Read sentences aloud to check that they make sense.

Which of these should we do when editing sentence structure?

Check that language choices are ambitious.

Check the language matches the text type.

What should we do when making improvements to language choices?

One bright, glorious day, a young girl rode towards the sparkling sea. 

Which sentence would you most likely find in a piece of descriptive narrative writing?

Put the sections of a narrative in chronological order.

You're a girl! Go to the back!'' Koro demanded. 

''You're a girl! Go to the back!'' Koro demanded. 

''You're a girl! Go to the back Koro demanded. 

''you're a girl! Go to the back!'' Koro demanded. 

Which direct speech sentence is correctly punctuated?

'With the wind in her hair,' is an example of which of these?

a naming word for a person, place or thing

As, he looked out at the breathtaking landscape, Paikea stared up lovingly. 

As, he looked out, at the breathtaking landscape Paikea stared up lovingly. 

As he looked out at the breathtaking landscape Paikea stared up lovingly. 

As he looked out at the breathtaking landscape, Paikea stared up lovingly. 

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Editing paragraphs of a narrative in 'Whale Rider'

Lesson outcome