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Peer editing a non-chronological report about pandas

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In this unit, pupils use extensive research from a range of sources as another technique to strengthen writer's credibility.

In 'Wild Cats: Non-Chronological Report', pupils were introduced to using the passive voice to maintain writer's credibility. In this unit, pupils will use extensive research from a range of sources as another technique to strengthen writer's credibility.

Pandas or Antarctic animals: non-chronological report

What punctuation needs to be added to this sentence? 'As a consequence of this pandas are now very rare.'

Which fronted adverbial could join these two sentences? Pandas eat lots of bamboo. They struggle to digest it. 

What punctuation could be added to this sentence? The giant panda a much-loved mammal is native to China. 

What co-ordinating conjunction could be added to join these two sentences? Pandas now live in mountainous areas. They once lived in lowlands as well. 

Habitats have been destroyed. Pandas are very rare. 

Habitats have been destroyed. As a result, pandas are very rare. 

Because habitats have been destroyed, pandas are very rare. 

Pandas are threatened by several different problems. 

You've got to feel sorry for pandas these days. 

Which sentence uses vocabulary most appropriately for a non-chronological report? 

Pandas are well-known animals they have distinctive colouring. 

Pandas are well-known animals. They have distinctive colouring. 

Pandas are well-known animals, they have distinctive colouring. 

Pandas from the family Ursidae are native to China. 

Pandas (from the family Ursidae) are native to China. 

Pandas (from the family Ursidae are native to China). 

You'll never believe how much bamboo pandas eat.

Pandas consume bamboo in vast quantities. 

Which sentence has an appropriate tone for a non-chronological report?

Which phrases are appropriate to use in a non-chronological report to describe bamboo? 

Pandas have a white fur. As a result, they can camouflage in snow.

Pandas have a white fur. As a result they can camouflage in snow.

Pandas have a white fur. As, a result, they can camouflage in snow.

Because pandas struggle to digest bamboo, they must eat a huge amount. 

Pandas struggle to digest bamboo because they must eat a huge amount. 

Pandas struggle to digest bamboo. As a result, they must eat a huge amount. 

Pandas must eat a huge amount of bamboo. They struggle to digest it.

Which passages use cohesive devices correctly? 

This lesson will soon be taken down.

Peer editing a non-chronological report about pandas

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