Lesson video

Hi, everyone.

Welcome to another lesson with me, Ms Chu.

In this lesson, we are writing the final paragraph of our newspaper report.

This is when we tell the members of the public or our audience, what is happening now.

So some of the paragraph will be in past tense.

If we were talking about something that's happened, but some of it will be in present tense and potentially future, depending on what you're going to say.

So when you're ready, let's begin.

Quick reminder as to what you need.

Thinking heads, obviously Sweat Sean, something to write with, piece of paper, book, anything you like, but you need to make sure that you're ready for this lesson.

So pause the video and go and get these things.

The agenda for today, let's warm up with that writing.

Look at the success criteria.

What do we need to be successful? Then look at our planning from the previous lesson.

And then I will do a little bit of shared writing for you.

What's our writing warm up today? Let's look at what's happening now.

We have pictures here of what could happen after an event so they could close off roads, they could be clearing up the debris, so all of the massive then made from the crash scene.

I've got my bullet points to remind me, I've got crash clean up road closures, and Oxford Circus is just the place in which the place happened.

You can choose where your event happened.

We're going to use those ideas to help us to structure what is happening now.

I would like us to use a sentence scaffold at the bottom to say what a sentence about what's happening now.

Remember to use present tense.

We're saying what's happening now.

Present tense, not in the past, present.

Today, Oxford Circus remains closed as an, I will say my sentence.

Today, Oxford Circus remains closed as the streets, are being cleaned.

Today, Oxford Circus remains closed, as the investigation continues.

I would like you to pause the video.

You are now going to say your sentence.

Think of what you're going to say, and then I'd like you to pause the video and say it to the screen.

Brilliant.

Now I'd like you to write a sentence about what's happening now.

You can write out your sentence that you've just said, remember your capital letters, your commas, your full stop.

If you are using the sentence scaffold that I've got at the bottom, today, Oxford Circus remains closed as police investigate further.

Well that is a complex sentence, okay.

You don't have to use the sentence scaffold here.

You can use, you can write a simple sentence, a compound sentence, or if you'd like to, you could choose to write a complex sentence off you go.

Success criteria.

What is our success criteria today? Let's have a look, number one time conjunctions to sequence the events in chronological order, detailed facts, no opinions.

Use of brackets for additional information, journalistic sentence starters and the past and present tense because we will be talking about things that have happened and we will be talking about things that are happening now.

Planning.

Let's look at our planning from a previous lesson.

Here are some notes that I made from before.

I've written them in bullet points with my key information only, the information that I need for my last paragraph.

I don't need anything else I don't have on my plan.

What have I got on this part of my plan? Bullet point number one, suspects identified, great.

I want to write about that.

Number two, Robert Fisher, aged 33 and Douglas Washington, aged 47 brilliant I'm going to use that.

Spent night in police custody.

Oxford Circus closed - clean up.

Brilliant.

What else have I got on my planning? No serious injuries, great.

I want to mention that.

Damage to vehicles and people taken to hospital.

Last part of my planning not yet confirmed identity - Spiderman.

So we don't know who he is.

You know, he's Spiderman, but he's got a mask on and he's got his outfit.

We don't know who he is.

We are appealing to the public or to the witnesses for any information they have, great.

We want to put that on our newspaper report.

We are, the police are appealing.

So we want to mention the police are appealing.

Shared writing.

I've got my plan.

I've got my success criteria.

How am I now I'm going to make those notes into a paragraph or sentences that make sense? Let's have a think.

My first bullet points as suspects identified, I've given the names.

He said that they spent a night in police custody and I've said Oxford Circus closed - clean up.

To me, there are two main points that I want to separate them.

I just want to focus on one at the moment.

I want to talk about the suspects, okay.

Let's start with that.

So I could say the suspects were identified as I'll give the names or I could change some of the language choice or I could choose a different word.

I could say the renowned criminals.

I think that sounds better.

Then maybe I could use a relative clause here.

What happened to him, he spent the night in police custody, have been identified, have been identified, as, who are they? Robert Fisher you can just make up any name aged 33 and giving extra information and Douglas Washington, aged 47.

Let's read over.

And when no one can knows about who spent the night in police custody have been identified.

I might want to put in when in, this morning as Robert Fisher, aged 33 and Douglas Washington folds up.

Okay, I'm happy with that.

The second part of my notes is about Oxford Circus.

Now maybe I could now say what's happening today.

So I'm going to use present tense, today lets hope it's not, right? Today, Oxford Circus are going to close it's accurate it's close they are cleaning up because they remain closed as maybe cause we've already done that in our warm up to might as well use up to date remains, remains close.

As the clean up operation continues, through the whole paragraph.

The renowned criminals, who spent the night in police custody have been identified this morning as Robert Fisher aged 33 and Douglas Washington aged, check the spelling, 47.

Today, Oxford Circus remains closed as the cleanup operation continues.

Really happy with that.

Now it is your turn to write this paragraph.

You need your success criteria and your plans off you go.

How do we start the next part of our paragraph using the plan that we've got here? No serious injuries, damage to vehicles and people taken to hospital.

To me that there are three point step.

So we want to start off with the first bullet point.

Three separate points.

The first bullet point is no serious injuries.

I could write, although it appears and I'm going back to my present tense, that no one suffered serious injuries, writing a complex sentence that was much adjoining like two bullet points.

There was much damage to vehicles a number of people were taken to hospital with shock.

We've actually combined all of those points, the three points, and I've decided to combine them into a complex sentence.

Although it appears no one suffered serious injuries, there was much damage to vehicles.

And a number of people taken to hospital with shock.

And I could give extra information, yeah.

Number of people were taken to hospital with shock and minor injuries No one suffered serious or major injuries.

There was much damage to vehicles and a number of people were taken to hospital with shock and minor injuries.

Happy with that, I've got my facts.

My brackets I've used my pill arm.

I've used a bit of I've used present tense, it appears, a number of people were taken and got a bit of past tense, great.

Happy with that.

Fantastic, now it's your turn to write again.

Use your success criteria and have your plan right next to you to write the next part of your final paragraph.

Good luck.

Finally we are on to the last part of our final paragraph of the newspaper report.

Let's call a plan I've got three bullet points there.

Let's read them over.

Not yet confirmed identity Spiderman appeal for witnesses information.

Okay.

Let's think about who it is, that's not yet confirmed their identity.

So, say it's the police.

So let's put them in, the police have not yet confirmed the identity of Spiderman.

We could say the masked hero like Spiderman, and are now, what are they doing? They are launching, a public appeal, for witnesses to come forward.

That's what they want them to do.

With any information that's on my plan they might have about Spiderman, but we won't put that in because that's repetitive.

So we're just say with any information they might have, I've got my facts.

I've got my tense, right? Let me check my tense.

The police have not yet confirmed the identity of the masked hero Spiderman and are now launching a public appeal for witnesses to come forward.

It's got all the right tense.

Brilliant, I'm happy with that.

And finally, the last part of your paragraph, use your success criteria and have your plan next to you.

Good luck and enjoy.

Now we need to read back all writing, because we need to check that it makes sense.

But we've got to make sure we've got the purpose, right? Is it a factor newspaper report, hopefully.

We need to check up our punctuation.

Check the vocabulary that we've used is it precise, is it accurate for this type of text type check the spelling errors and get a sense of what the reader will feel.

Pause the video and have a go at doing that.

Now I would like you to check your success criteria.

So have this now and your writing.

And I would love you to just go through and see if you've got each of the things in your writing.

Tick them off, have you used time indexes you might not have in this paragraph.

Have you used detailed facts, brackets, journalistic sentence starters? Have you used the correct tense? That's the most important part about this last paragraph is the tense, because that's the part that's really difficult to work out.

Have you got the correct tense, go through now and tick, tick, tick.

And well done.

You should be so proud of yourself because in this lesson you have finally, you finished writing your newspaper report.

You have used the success criteria to help you you've used your planning, and you've looked at some shared writing, and you've written your own final paragraph of your newspaper report.

You are done with your newspaper report.

Well done.

Congratulations, you've come to the end of the lesson.

This is your chance now to share your learning with the parent or carer, they will be super proud of you too.

And I look forward to teaching you next lesson.