Lesson video

Hello everyone.

My name is Miss Barron and welcome to lesson seven in our unit, recycling the story of Anansi and Tiger to make it our own.

Now, you know how much I love recycling stories, and I'm really looking forward to today's lesson because today, we get to start writing our new stories down.

We are going to write the opening of our new recycled stories in today's lesson.

So, this is what the lesson is going to look like.

We are going to sing our "Action that is clear" song.

We're going to have a look at, the toolkit for action that's clear.

So we're going to have a look at things that really great writers do to make sure it's clear what happens in stories.

We're going to do the same thing when we come to write our stories.

So to write our opening, we're going to do some shared writing, and then you're going to have a go at writing one or two sentences of your own for your opening.

In this lesson, you will need an exercise book or a piece of paper to write on and a pen or pencil to write with.

And one more thing, please get your boxing up grid that you did in lesson six.

That will really help you with your writing today.

So pause the video now and go and get those things if you need to.

Fantastic job, you are now back with everything you need to start the learning today.

So let's begin.

So remember, we are working really hard learning how to make me action clear in our story telling and story writing, aren't we? So to remind us how we do that, let's first sing our action song.

Ready? Sing with me.

Let's go.

♪ You've got to show what happens step by step ♪ ♪ You've got to show what happens where and when ♪ ♪ You've got to show what happens how it looks ♪ ♪ You've got to show what happens ♪ Brilliant one more time.

♪ You've got to show happens step by step ♪ ♪ You've got to show what happens where and when ♪ ♪ You've got to show what happens how it looks ♪ ♪ You've got to show what happens ♪ Brilliant job.

Well done for joining in with me there.

Now, I really love that song because it's really useful.

It really helps me to remember, what things I need to do to make the action clear in my stories.

So let's just remind ourselves.

First, we need to say what happens in a clear order.

That's our ♪ step by step ♪ Line, isn't it? So we need to say what happens in our stories in a clear order.

We need to say, ♪ Where and when ♪ Things happen.

And we also need to show how it looks.

♪ Show how it looks ♪ Which means that we're going to add some adjectives to add details so that our readers can really picture what's happening in our story.

So those are the things that we are going to work hard on today when we write the opening of our story.

Let's first retell the opening of our stories.

So I'm going to tell mine, using my boxing up grid to help me.

Hopefully, you've got yours with you to help you too.

If not, don't worry you can use mine on the screen.

So listen to me tell the opening of my story first, and then it's going to be your turn.

Once upon a time, there was a spider called Anansi.

Now in that place, Tiger had all the stories.

They all belonged to him.

Tiger simply knew and had all the best stories.

Anansi was jealous.

He was fed up with the situation.

He wanted those stories for himself.

So he decided to trick Tiger.

He scuttled over to Tiger's cave.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his sing-song voice.

Out came Tiger and growled, "What do you want?" "Well," said Anansi, "I've come to offer you three things that you really want.

"And in return, you must give me all of your stories." Now Tiger didn't like Anansi much and thought this might be a good chance to get rid of him.

"Deal," Tiger said, and shook on it with his paw.

"You can get me a dog's bone, "a pot of gold from an ogre, and a peacock's fan.

"Get me those things and you can have your stories." So that is the opening of our story.

And that is the section that we are going to write today.

I would like you to pause the video here and retell the opening of our story so that you're ready to write it in just a few moments.

So pause the video and do that.

Okay, so let's start writing the opening of our stories.

Now, you can see I've got my boxing up grid with me.

I'm going to be looking at this section.

This section shows the opening, doesn't it? And it's going to help remind me what I want to write.

So hopefully, you've got yours with you too.

If not, you can use mine to help you.

Now, what's the first thing I want to do in my opening? I want to introduce our main character.

So, I'm going to start my story with the sentence, "Once upon a time, there was a spider called Anansi." "Once upon a time, there was a spider called Anansi." Now, can you say that with me? Once upon a time, there was a spider called Anansi.

You're probably going to start your story in the same way.

Let's count it on our fingers, ready? Once upon a time there was a spider called Anansi.

That's 10 words.

Now you can see I've already written a story opener.

"Once upon a time." So, "Once upon a time there." 'There' is a tricky word, isn't it? Watch me write.

There.

T-H-E-R-E spells there.

Was, another tricky word.

"There was a spider." Watch me write spider.

Although I think you know how to spell it by now.

Spider.

"Once upon a time, there was a spider called." Now called is a tricky word too.

"Called Anansi." Anansi.

Now, Anansi needs a capital letter because it's his name, all names start with capital letters, don't they? So capital A, Anansi.

Sound it out with me.

nuh-ah-nuh-suh-ee.

And then the ee sound on the end of Anansi is an I.

Anansi.

Once upon a time, there was a spider called Anansi.

Now that makes sense, doesn't it? And I've got my capital letter and my full stop at the end.

Let's check it's 10 words, shall we? "Once upon a time there was a spider called Anansi." Brilliant so there's my sentence.

Actually, I think there's something I would like to add to that to improve it.

I would like to add an adjective before the word spider to say what kind of spider Anansi was.

Could you help me out? What kind of spider was Anansi? Hmm, what objective could you use? Could you give me a word.

Go and tell me to your screen now.

Brilliant suggestions.

I heard clever.

He's definitely clever, isn't he? Because he uses his brain, his cleverness to trick people into getting what he wants.

I heard cunning.

Now, if you're cunning, it means that you use your cleverness to do bad things usually.

So he's definitely cunning.

And I heard trickster, and we know Anansi is definitely a trickster.

This story is all about the tricks that he plays.

So clever, cunning, trickster.

Hmm, have a think about which one of those ideas you would like for your story or maybe you have a different one.

I'm going to choose the word trickster, the adjective trickster, because this story is all about tricks.

So, watch how I write it.

I'm going to put almost like a little hat here, a triangle without a bottom.

And this is going to show that I'm going to write my word in here.

So a trickster sound out, let's break it down into two.

So 'trick' first, sound that trick with me, tuh-ruh-ee-kuh trick.

Now the kuh sound at the end is spelt C-K in trick trickster, suh-tuh-ah trickster, there we go.

Once upon a time, there was a trickster spider called Anansi.

I like my sentence more now.

Now it's got that adjective to tell me what Anansi is like.

So what's my next sentence going to be? I'm going to say how Anansi feels towards Tiger.

So I'm going to say he was hmm, with Tiger.

Who had all the stories.

Can you give me a feeling word? How do you think Anansi feels towards Tiger? Who has all the stories gone? Go and tell me to your screen now.

Fantastic suggestions, again.

I heard jealous, fed up and annoyed.

He could be feeling any one of those things.

Jealous, fed up, annoyed.

I think he's.

I'm going to choose fed up for mine you might like one of the other options or you might have a different idea of your own.

So my sentence is going to be, "He was fed up with Tiger, who had all the stories".

He wants the stories for himself, doesn't he? So capital H he.

One of our tricky words.

He was fed up.

You can help me sound that one out fed up, fuh-eh-duh Fed up, uh-puh up.

He was fed up with wuh-ee-N with Tiger.

Tiger has a capital letter because it's his name.

Tiger, he was fed up with Tiger, who had all the stories.

Watch me write who.

Who huh-ah-duh had.

You had all the stories.

Watch me write stories.

Stories ends in I-E-S.

He was fed up with Tiger, who had all the stories fullstop.

So there's my first two sentences.

Once upon a time, there was a trickster spider called Anansi.

He was fed up with Tiger, who had all the stories.

Now I would like you to write your first two sentences.

Okay, fantastic.

Now we're ready to write our next sentence.

So our next sentence is going to say what Anansi did.

I'm going to start, one day he decided to.

What did he decide to do? Can you tell me, go and give me some ideas? What did he decide to do? Tell me at your screen now.

Some brilliant suggestions again, let me tell you what I heard, I heard play a mean prank on Tiger.

Now, prank is another word for trick.

I heard trick Tiger out of all his stories.

And I heard steal all of Tiger's stories for himself.

I like all of those ideas because they all make him sound like a mean clever trickster.

So we had play a mean prank on Tiger.

Trick Tiger out of all his stories, steal all of Tiger's stories for himself.

I think I'm going to choose the first one.

Play a mean prank on Tiger because I like the word mean it makes him sound mean as well as clever.

So my sentence is going to be, "One day, he decided to play a mean prank on Tiger".

You might like one of the other options, or you might have a different idea.

If you do keep it in your head for when you come to write your sentence.

But for now, help me write mine.

One day, capital letter.

One day, he decided to, he decided.

Now watch me write 'decided', decided, sounds like it has an S in it because it's got the suh sound, but it's actually a C.

One day he decided to play puh-luh-ah play a mean.

Sound out that 'mean' with me.

muh-eh-nuh, mean.

Prank, you can sound up prank with me.

One day, he decided to play a mean prank.

Puh-ruh-ah-nuh-kuh, prank.

One day he decided to play a mean prank.

Prank meant tricked into.

On Tiger, and again Tiger has a capital letter because it's his name.

Full stop at the end of my sentence.

"One day, he decided to play a mean prank on Tiger." Now I wonder what your sentence is going to be there.

Your turn to write your sentence.

So you're going to start, "Once upon a time, there was a hmm, spider called hmm." So choose from the words in pink for your adjective to describe what Anansi is like.

You might want to choose one of those words, or you might have a different idea.

And then your next sentence, "He was hmm, Tiger who had all the stories." So how did he feel towards Tiger? Are you going to choose jealous or fed up with? Annoyed with, or do you have a different idea of your own? So pause the video now and write your first two sentences.

Your turn now to write this sentence.

So you're going to start, "One day, he decided to.

." And then you're going to finish that sentence.

So you might choose one of the ideas in the blue boxes.

Those are the ideas that we talked about when I was doing my sentence, or you might have a different idea.

Pause the video now and write your sentence.

We are ready for our next sentence.

So now we are going to write a sentence to say how he went to Tiger's cave.

So which verb are we going to choose? He, hmm to Tiger's cave.

He, hmm, what did he do to get there? Did he walk? Did he creep? Nope, don't know that.

So now we're going to write our next sentence to say how Anansi went to Tiger's cave.

So instead of 'went', I want to use a different verb, a more exciting verb.

What could I choose? Wonder if you've got any ideas.

He hmm to Tiger's cave.

How did he get there? Another verb instead of 'went', good, tell me your ideas now.

Oh, brilliant choices.

So I heard, 'scuttled' 'scurried' and 'crept'.

Now 'scuttled' and 'scurried' are both from our story aren't they? Fantastic words.

'Scuttles' that's how a spider moves.

'Scurried' means to move really quickly.

'Crept' spiders are very silent aren't they? We don't hear them, so he could have crept there.

Now you might want to choose one of those options, or you might have a different idea.

I'm going to choose the word 'scuttles'.

I like scuttled.

I can just imagine the sound of his legs scuttling along the jungle floor.

He scuttled to Tiger's cave.

So capital letter.

He scuttled, watch me write 'scuttled'.

In fact, you can help me spell it.

I think that sounded out.

Suh-kuh-uh-tuh-luh-duh.

Now there's two T's in the middle of scuttles and they duh sound at the end, is spelled ed because it's a verb in the past tense.

He scuttled to Tiger's, to Tiger's cave.

He scuttled to Tiger's cave.

I wonder which verb you are going to choose for your sentence.

Now let's write our next sentence.

He's going to call Tiger out of his cave.

So the sentence is going to be, ♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his hmm voice.

What kind of voice did he call in? Can you give me some ideas? Tell me to your screen now, what kind of voice did he call his name in? Amazing suggestions.

I heard sing-song, voice.

I heard you say creepy voice.

Maybe Anansi has a creepy voice.

And I heard you say happy voice, happy voice.

It does sound quite happy when he says it, doesn't he? ♪ Oh Tiger ♪ But I think sing-song works best.

I think he does it in a sing-song voice.

So that's going to be my choice.

You might like one of the others or you might have a different idea.

Keep it in your head if you do.

So my sentence is going to be, ♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his sing-song voice.

Say that with me, ♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his sing-song voice.

Let's count it on our fingers.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his sing-song voice.

That's nine words.

So, ♪ Oh Tiger ♪ Is going to go in what we call inverted commas, because it's what he says.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ Close my inverted commas there because he stopped speaking.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his.

Now I said, sing-song, voice, didn't I? So sound out with me, sing-song.

Sing, suh-ah-nuh-guh, sing, sing-song.

Now sound that song with me, suh-ah-nuh-guh, song.

sing-song.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his sing-song, voice.

Watch me write voice, voice.

And then full stop at the end of my sentence.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his sing-song voice.

Now how did he get to Tiger's cave? He hmm to Tiger's cave.

Now you might choose one of those words.

Scuttles, scurried, crept.

Those are the suggestions you gave me when we were doing my sentences or you might have a different idea.

And then you're going to write another sentence.

♪ Oh Tiger ♪ He called in his.

So you might choose gleeful, gleeful means really happy.

Gleeful, sing-song or creepy voice.

Which one of those do you like or do you have a different idea? Pause the video now and write those two sentences.

And finally, you are going to have a go at writing two last sentences on your own.

These sentences are going to be enrolled as Anansi.

They are going to be what Anansi says to Tiger to try and trick him out of his stories.

So the first sentence, I will get you three things you really want if you give me all your stories.

So those gaps in that first sentence are for you to have a go at writing the words, three things on your own, I've given you the rest of that sentence in your next sentence, I will get you a hmm, hmm and hmm.

So what are the three things that Tiger tells Anansi that he wants him to get for him? What are the three things Anansi promises he will get him.

So I would like you to have a go at writing those two sentences now on your own.

And I've given you the word ogre at the bottom of the page to help you.

The rest of the words I want you to have a go at yourself.

So pause the video now and write those two sentences to finish the opening of your story today.

Fantastic job having a go at those sentences on your own.

So now you've written the opening of your story.

The last thing that you need to do, is to reread and edit what we've written today like all good writers.

So first I would like you to read back your work, then think about Sad, Swap, Add, Delete.

Is there anything that you would swap? Any words that you might like to add? Remember I added a word, didn't I? My first sentence, I added adjective trickster.

You might like to add some more words in some of your other sentences.

And finally, is there anything that you would delete, anything that you would take out that you think doesn't work? And the last thing is to five finger check your work.

So check it makes sense.

Check for full stops and capital letters.

Check your spellings and make sure that you have finger spaces.

So pause the video now and do a final read and edit of your opening.

And that brings us to the end of our learning today, writing the openings of our recycled versions of Anansi and Tiger.

In lesson eight, we are going to write the first trick that Anansi plays.

We're going to write how he tricks dog into giving him his bone.

So, let's sing the song that reminds us of that trick.

Shall we? So sing myself and my story and then you can have a go at singing the verse for your story.

So ready.

Let's see if we can remember it.

Join in with me.

♪ He's got to through the jungle ♪ ♪ He went to play a trick ♪ ♪ Oh dog I hear you love to play ♪ ♪ Go and fetch the stick ♪ ♪ Dog wagged his tail ♪ ♪ He ran after the stick ♪ ♪ And while he was running ♪ ♪ Anansi grabbed his bone oh ♪ Right, sing it with me one more time and then you can sing it for your verse.

Ready? ♪ He's got to through the jungle ♪ ♪ He went to play a trick ♪ ♪ Oh dog I hear you love to play ♪ ♪ Go and fetch the stick ♪ ♪ Dog wagged his tail ♪ ♪ He ran after the stick ♪ ♪ And while he was running ♪ ♪ Anansi grabbed his bone oh ♪ So that was my verse for how Anansi tricks dog in my story.

Now you can sing your verse for how Anansi tricks dog in your story.

Am going to invite that trick in lesson eight.

Until then, bye.