Lesson video

Hello and welcome.

My name is Mr. Santhanam, and this is lesson eight of 10 from our "Awongalema" unit.

Today's learning objective is to write a recycled story with a vivid description.

We've been working really hard to think about all our different senses that we can describe in a story.

Hmm.

I wonder if you can use your senses right now.

First of all, what are the senses? What exactly are they? I wonder if there was someone who might be able to help me with that question.

Do you know anyone who could help me? Oh my goodness.

Gary the Chameleon, there you are.

Could you help me to remember the senses? We want to describe things today, so we really need to think about our senses.

Do you know any? Ah, Gary says that there are five senses.

Do you know five senses? Gary says that one of them is sight, what we can see with our eyes.

He also says that sound is another one, what we can hear.

Ooh, he says that touch is one, what we can feel.

He also says that taste is one, what we can taste.

And he says that smell is one too.

I wonder if we can use our senses right now to see what we can hear, what we can smell, what we can taste, what we can see and what we can feel.

Why not close your eyes right now and think about what you can hear? Ooh, I can hear someone doing work in their garden next door.

I can hear them tapping away at something with a tool.

Let's see if I can taste anything.

Hmm.

Mmm, I can taste the cocoa pops that I had for my breakfast.

What can you hear and taste? Wow, I heard some great things there.

Why not use those ideas when we come to our shared write? Let's get started with today's lesson.

Okay, so in today's lesson, you are going to need some paper, a pencil, because we're going to be doing our shared write finally, and your brilliant brain.

Pause the video now while you go and get those things.

Great, let's move on.

Okay, in today's lesson, we are going to start off with our spelling activity.

We're then going to go on to review our description toolkit and thinking more about our senses.

We're then going to step through the story map.

And finally we'll get on to doing our shared write.

And today we're going to really focus on that beginning part of our story.

First of all, let's get started with our spelling.

This week, we've been looking at words that end in "ore".

"Ore".

Can you think about any words that end in "ore"? Words that end in "ore".

Here are some words that end in "ore".

You'll notice that there is an E on the end of them, but they are still pronounced "ore".

My turn, your turn.

More.

Please can I have some more? Core.

Throw away your apple core.

Score.

What is the football score? Tore.

I tore my shirt.

Store.

Let's go to the food store.

Amazing.

Why not write down those spellings right now so that you've got them on your paper, and they're easier for you to learn? The more you write them, the more you will remember them.

Here are some sentences that have some sounds missing from them.

It is your job to fill in the sounds.

All the spellings end in the sound "ore".

Which ones do you think they are? Please, can I have some.

? "Ore".

Trow away your apple.

"Ore".

What is the football.

? "Ore".

You "ore" my shirt.

Let's go to the video game.

"ore".

Pause your video now while you fill in the blanks from your spellings.

And here are the answers.

How did you do? Please can I have some more? Throw away your apple core.

What is the spelling? What is the football score? You tore my shirt.

Let's go to the video game store.

If you got any of those incorrect, now you know next time what you need to work on.

I know that a great strategy to check my spelling is that I can look at a word, say it in a sentence so that it makes sense, write the word, cover the word, write the word next to it, and then check my spelling.

Now it's time for us to review our description toolkit.

So I know that there are five senses that we are going to be using in our vivid description today.

There is smell.

Sometimes smells are minty, fragrant, fruity.

So you might say, "Oh, Mr. Santhanam, you smell very fruity today." I know that things that I can see, sight, they can be beautiful.

Maybe they can be tall.

Maybe they can be colourful.

Those are all things that look a certain way.

So you might say, "Oh, Mr. Santhanam, you're wearing a very colourful shirt today." I know that when I describe sound, I can maybe describe sound with crashing, squawking, thundering.

Those are all kinds of sounds.

So I might say, "Oh, Mr. Santhanam, I can hear a bird squawking outside." If I want to describe taste, I can describe it as salty, delicious, sweet, all sorts of things.

So I might say, "Oh, Mr. Santhanam, this is a very delicious cake." Or I can describe what things feel like through touch.

I might say that something is rough.

Maybe it's spiky.

Maybe it's cool.

Maybe it's burning.

And I might say, "Oh, Mr. Santhanam, the sun is burning hot today." Why not write these words down to help you remember some examples of ways you can describe your senses? Now we're going to be writing about the setting today in our beginning, we're going to be describing in the "Awongalema" story about how the magic tree is empty and dead, about how the African plain is dusty and burning and hot, and there's no water anywhere.

What kind of things could we describe? Hmm.

If I want to describe the trees, if I want to describe the trees, I could say that maybe the trees were empty or sad or crooked.

If I wanted to describe the sky, maybe I would describe the sky as burning and red and cloudless.

If I want to describe the air, maybe I could say that the air was thick and hot and stale, which means it wasn't very fresh.

It was just the same hot air coming round and round.

Why not pause the video now and think about the things that you are going to describe to really put across what the setting is like, what it looks like, what it feels like, what it sounds like, maybe even what it smells like? Amazing, I can tell you've got loads of ideas that you're ready to start your shared write with.

So let's have a look at our structure first of all.

First, we're going to do our title, and I know that the title of my story is going to be.

? "Awongalema".

Next we are going to have the beginning part of our story, and this is where we're going to have a setting description while the tree is dead and asleep, and the animals have no fruit to eat and no water.

Then finally, we're going- Then we're going to write our middle part, which is where we're going to talk about the four animals going to talk to the mountain spirits, and we're going to describe each character.

Can you remember what the animals I chose were? That's right, I chose our warthog.

I chose a warthog, I chose a hyena, I chose an ostrich and I chose a snail.

And finally, we're going to do the end part.

This is where we're going to do another setting description where we're going to talk about what it's like when the tree comes alive, and everyone lives happily ever after, because they finally have some fruit to eat again.

Your challenge is, instead of choosing the same animals that I've chosen, can you choose your own animals and describe them? So remember, first we need to do our title and our beginning, which will have our setting description in it.

Think about your senses while you're doing this part.

What can we see? What can we see? What can we smell? What can we feel? And what can we hear? So let's quickly step through the beginning part of our story so we know what's going to happen in this section.

I know that there is a watering hole where the animals all gather.

There's no water in the watering hole.

The magic tree that gives them fruit is dead and asleep.

There's no fruit to eat.

It's very hot.

The ground is burning and dusty and dry.

The animals are hungry.

Maybe they are drooling because they're so hungry, and maybe their tummies are rumbling.

And that's the only part that we're going to be writing today.

Okay, it's now time for us to finally get started on our shared write.

Like always, you can watch me and do yours afterwards if you like once you've got some more ideas, or you could do it at the same time as me.

It's up to you.

Get your pencil at the ready.

You might want to have another colour to help you with the ideas that you're going to generate and then reflect on about which one to use, just like I do.

Good luck.

Don't forget when you're doing your shared write, think about what you want to say.

Say it in your head, or even say it out loud, and don't forget to punctuate it.

You need to have a question mark, a full stop or an exclamation mark at the end of every single sentence.

Once you've thought about what you're going to say, you can think about it, write it down and don't forget to read it back to make sure it makes sense.

Good luck.

Okay, I have started my story by writing the title at the top.

Don't worry if you're not sure how to spell Awongalema.

You can try and sound it out, or you can copy from me here.

I've also underlined the title because all titles need to be underlined.

I'm going to start my story by saying once there was a, now I want to describe the location, the setting of my story.

Is the setting in an icy mountain? Is it in a wild jungle? Or is it in a dusty, dry watering hole in Africa? Of course, it's in a watering hole in Africa.

So what words am I going to use to describe the watering hole? Is it empty? Dusty? Scorching? Burnt? Or bleak? Bleak means empty and sad.

What do you think? I think I'm going to go with dusty and burnt.

Once there was a dusty, comma, burnt watering hole in Africa.

All the animals there.

Were.

Now we're going to talk about how the animals feel.

How did the animals feel? Do they feel hungry? Do they feel miserable? Or do they feel desperate? Hmm.

I think I'm going to go with miserable, because that just shows you just how miserable they are.

All the animals were miserable.

I'm going to use a coordinating conjunction now.

Because.

Because.

There was no water or fruit on the trees.

In the middle of the watering hole was a magical tree, which gave fruit if you called its name.

Now I want to describe what the animals can hear.

In the air.

What can the animals here on this dusty plain? I know I'm going to say that they can hear silence.

In the air, the animals could only hear silence.

Hmm, I wonder what else they can see? I know, I will say they can see some empty trees.

They looked out across the open plain and all they could see were.

Hmm, what can they see? Let's write down some ideas.

Maybe they can see some scrawny trees.

Maybe they can see some plants that have died.

Maybe they can see some grass.

But I know that the trees, the plants and the grass are all dead.

So how am I going to describe what they can see? I know, I'm going to describe the trees, but I'm going to say the trees are empty.

Maybe they are scraggly, so they look unhealthy.

Maybe they look scrawny.

Or maybe they look twisted and old.

How would you describe the trees? They all looked out across the open plain, and all they could see were scraggly, empty trees.

We must go to the mountain gods to find out what the magic tree's name is.

Fantastic, and then I've got my beginning part here, my setting description.

Once there was a dusty, burnt watering hole in Africa.

All the animals there were miserable because there was no water or fruit on the trees.

In the middle of the watering hole was a magical tree which gave fruit if you called its name.

In the air, the animals could only hear silence.

They looked out across the open plain, and all they could see were scraggly, empty trees.

And that's when they decide they need to go.

So that's when they decide to they need to go and find out what the magic tree's name is.

So I have got some adjectives to describe the watering hole.

I have described how the animals feel.

I have described there was no water or fruit on the trees.

I've described that the air is filled with silence, that's a sound.

And I've described what I can see, scraggly, empty trees.

So with my senses, I've described sound, I've described sight and I've described touch and feeling.

I wonder what else you are going to include in your descriptions? Pause your video now while you write your own beginning with your setting description using vivid description and your senses to explain what the setting is like.

Wow, I've seen so much fantastic hard work today.

I'm so proud of all of you.

I'm sending you lots of Mr. Santhanam shine.

I can't believe how vivid those descriptions are.

I'm really getting a sense of what you can hear by the watering hole, what you can smell, what you can feel and what you can see.

I can't wait to see your character descriptions in your next part of your writing.

Until then, bye from me and bye from Gary.

Bye-bye.