Lesson video

Hi, everyone.

I'm Mrs. Howley, and this is Cedric, but he's fast asleep, and we need my snail helper.

We've got lots of writing to do.

Can you help me wake him up? Can you shout, "Wake up, Cedric" after three? Ready, one, two, three.

Wake up, Cedric! Oh.

Thank you.

Big yawn, Cedric.

I'm ready to go.

In this lesson, we're going to finish off writing Ma Liang's diary.

We're going to start with some spelling.

Then we're going to do some shared writing, and then it will be over to you to do some independent writing.

You will need a piece of paper or an exercise book, a pen or a pencil, and, of course, your brilliant brain.

If you need to collect any of those things, press pause now, and then press play when you're ready.

Have you got your thinking caps on? Because in this unit, we've been revising some spelling work we've done before.

I wonder if you can spot any of the tricky bits in these words.

Happy, we've got two ps, and then a y making that e sound, the same in funny.

Then we've got our question words that start with the wh grapheme, where and when.

Then we've got that are string, care.

And then, of course, we've got our plurals, some ending s, cats, and some where it ends up making a two syllable word, lunches end in es.

Well done.

And then finally, we've got one of our tricky words, which I'm sure you will use in your diary writing today.

So, what I'd like you to do now is look at the words, say them in a sentence, then have a go at writing them down without peeking, and then check the spelling, pause the video now and give it a go.

Today is the last lesson of this unit on diary writing.

And I've been so impressed and so Cedric with how well we've been using the toolkit for writing a recount.

We've been using our time words.

Because it's a diary, we've been writing using words like I and me, and we've had thoughts and feelings.

But I think it might be good to have a reminder of what a diary is all about, and the best way do that is to sing our diary song.

Are you ready? Can you join in with me and Cedric ♪ Diary, diary, let me write in you ♪ ♪ Thoughts and feelings, things that I say and do ♪ ♪ It's good to remember what happened ♪ ♪ So when I'm old and grey ♪ ♪ My grandkids can read in my diary ♪ ♪ The things that I did today ♪ When we're writing the final section of Ma Liang's diary in this lesson, we're going to think a sentence, we're going to say it, and then punctuate it.

When we're writing, we're going to think it, write it, then read it back.

This is where I'd got up to with my writing in the previous lesson.

I've already written the introduction, the first event, the second event, and I've started writing about the third event.

Then, the greedy king called me to the palace.

He told me to draw him riches, but I had an idea.

So, in my next sentence, I want to tell the reader exactly what's going on.

I need to retell the events clearly.

What did he do? He drew a sea, that's right.

I drew a sea.

I could use the conjunction and, I drew a sea, and they sailed off, full stop.

Capital letter, I drew a sea, and they sailed off, full stop.

I drew a sea, and they sailed off.

I am going to do another sentence, Cedric.

That's a good idea, with next, one of my time words.

Next, I drew.

What did he draw next? He drew a.

Next, I drew a giant wave.

What did the giant wave do? Next, I drew a giant wave, which destroyed the ship.

Capital letter, next I drew a giant wave, which destroyed the ship, full stop.

So I, capital I, I drew.

I drew a, one of our tricky words, I drew a sea.

I drew a sea, using a conjunction now to join two clauses.

I drew sea, and they.

They sailed, ss ay ll, past tense, ed.

I drew a sea, and they sailed off, full stop.

I drew sea, and they sailed off.

Now I've got my capital N for next, my time word.

Next, I drew, using the past tense, d ruh ew.

I drew.

Next, I drew a giant, not just a wave, but a giant wave.

Next, I drew a giant wave.

Next, I drew a giant wave, which, which.

Next, I drew a giant wave, which destroyed, dee stroy, past tense again, which destroyed the, one of our tricky words, the shh ip, ship.

Next, I drew a giant wave, which destroyed the ship, full stop.

So now, why don't you have a go at writing some information about the third event using some time words maybe on some feelings? I've put some tricky words in the box for you, suddenly, my, I, was, what, the, and a.

Pause the video now and have a go.

We've written about the third event.

What came next on our recount map? Let's check.

The conclusion.

So, I need to tell the reader what happened to the king.

So, the king was never seen again.

Capital letter, the king was never seen again.

Then I need to put some feelings in.

I felt so pleased.

I felt so happy.

I felt so relieved.

I felt so relieved, because.

Going to use a conjunction there to explain why I felt so relieved.

I felt so relieved, because I had my paintbrush back.

Capital letter, I felt so relieved, because I have my paintbrush back.

Then I'd like a final sentence to say how I feel now.

Looking back, now I can help the people every day and live a happy life.

Now I can help the people every day and live a happy life, full stop.

So, the king was never seen again.

Capital T, the, one of our tricky words, kah ing.

The king was, that's one of the words we just have to know.

The king was never.

The king was never ss een, seen.

The king was never seen again.

The king was never seen again, full stop.

The king was never seen again, full stop.

Now my feeling sentence.

I felt so relieved is the first part of my sentence.

I ff elt.

I felt so relieved.

I felt so relieved.

I'm not going to put a full stop there, because I'm going to add on another clause using the conjunction because.

I felt so relieved, because I ha ad, had, my.

Because I had my paintbrush, pah aint br rush, paintbrush.

I felt so relieved, because I had my paintbrush back, ba ack, full stop.

I felt so relieved, because I had my paintbrush back.

Now I've gotten now, capital N, now.

Now I can help.

Now I cah an.

Now I can ha eh ll pah.

Now I can help the, one of our tricky words.

Now I can help the people every, every.

Now I can help the people every dah ay, every day, and, and live, and live a happy, one of our words ending in y making that e sound, happy ll ife, split diagraph, happy life.

Now I can help the people every day and live a happy life.

Have a go now at writing your conclusion for Ma Liang's diary.

Can you include some thoughts and feelings about how he felt about the events that day? Pause the video now and give it a try.

How are you getting on? Now it's the chance for you to finish off Ma Liang's diary.

If you need to, maybe edit it, add in some more thoughts and feelings.

Have a look at your boxing up or your recount map if you've got those handy, or if you finished yours off, why don't you write a diary of one of the days you've had this week? Remember to include what you did, what you thought, and what you felt.

Pause the video now and have a go.

We've been so busy with our diaries this week.

I'm going to have to put them down, Cedric, because we deserve a cheese cheer.

Get your cheese graters ready.

Great, great, great, great, great, great, great, great job! What a great job.

We've learnt so much, and I hope you carry on writing your diary including what you've done, your thoughts, and your feelings.

I would love to see your diary entries, oh, and so would Cedric.

If you'd like to share your work, ask a parent of a carer to do this for you.

Hopefully we'll see you soon.

Bye.