Lesson video

- [Mrs. Howley] Hello there, I'm Mrs. Howley and this is Cedric and we're really excited because in this lesson, we're going to carry on writing our created stories.

Let's get ready! In today's lesson we're going to write some more of our created story, showing mood.

We're going to start with a game.

Then we're going to do some shade writing and then you're going to do some independent writing.

You'll need an exercise book or some paper, a pen or a pencil, you're boxing up from a previous lesson if you've got it and draw a brilliant brain.

Pause the video now and then you can press play when you've collected those things.

In the last lesson of this unit, we started writing our created stories.

And for my created story, I wrote the first part of the story and introduced the snail and the mood of sadness.

Now, the next part of my story is a different mood.

The mood of fear and danger.

So we're going to play a reflective my turn, your turn, using some phrases from that part of my story.

Okay.

What do you have to do, Cedric? You just copy what I do and how I say it.

Are we okay? Brilliant.

So the first one is, the bird is coooomiiiiiing! Your turn! Great.

Now the next one is the butterfly, unsure about what to do.

What am I going to do? Your turn.

Great.

Next is the moment that the butterfly has gathered all of her friends.

Now, instead of fear and danger, this time, the mood that will going to show is, can you remember when she created the cloud of beautiful butterflies Cedric? Wonder! That's right.

So I'm going to create a phrase of the bird, seeing that cloud for the first time.

What is thaaaaat? Your turn! Great.

Maybe you could try doing the reflective, my turn, your turn, with one of your teddies or someone at home, showing them the moods and the next part of your story.

So when we're writing today, each sentence we create thinking about mood, and trying to use our writer's toolkit.

We're going to think it first, then say it, theeeen punctuate it.

We're going to think it, say it, punctuate it.

Then when we're writing, we're going to think the sentence.

We're going to write it and then we're going to read it back.

We're going to think it, write it, read it back.

I forgotten.

Everything in the writer's toolkit for creating mood, forgetting the reader to feel what we want them to feel.

I wonder if Cedric can help me.

Yes, we can describe the setting.

Absolutely right Cedric.

What else can we describe? I wonder if you can remember? We can describe what the characters look like.

We call that appearance.

The characters appearance.

That's right and we can describe their thoughts and their feelings.

Thanks Cedric! And we can describe their actions.

Great.

I think I'm ready now.

So in my first sentence of the next section, I'm describing the mood of fear and danger.

This is where I'm introducing my problem.

What's the problem in your story? Mine is the bird coming to eat the snail.

But don't worry Cedric, it's just in my story.

So I'm going to start my sentence with, certainly, because I want to show the change in mood.

Cedric likes that.

Certainly a bird spotted snail.

Hang on a minute.

I want to put in an adjective, a describing word.

Certainly a giant bird spotted snail and opened it's sharp beak.

Certainly a giant bird spotted snail and opened it's sharp beak.

Capital letter.

Certainly a giant bird spotted snail and opened it's sharp beak.

Full stop.

Okay, so I'm going to start with my capital S or Suddenly.

Sudden L Y, Suddenly a giant, that's with G I A N T.

Suddenly a giant bird.

B bird.

Bird.

Suddenly a giant bird S P O T T, with ED at the end.

Spotted, suddenly a giant bird spotted Snail.

Now it is a capital S, because it is his name.

Snail.

Suddenly a giant bird spotted Snail and and opened, it's my past tense verb again opened ED.

Opened its its its sharp, S H A R P, sharp, Suddenly a giant bird spotted Snail and opened its sharp beak.

Full stop.

And then I am going to add my sentence, to give a bit of extra detail for the reader, to show that mood of danger.

Capital H, he thought, he, he thought he looked ED.

He thought he looked delicious, delicious.

He thought he looked delicious.

Full stop! Now it's your turn to have a goal at describing the action in your story in the next parts.

Maybe you've got change of mood here as well? Use your boxing up to help.

You might want to start this section with the word suddenly, like I did so I've included in the box there for you, with a, was, were and the.

Pause the video now and write your action sentence.

Now I'm going to use the writer toolkit to get the listener, or the reader, to feel that fear and I'm going to describe butterfly's thoughts, who's watching.

What might she say? Oh no, thought butterfly.

What am I going to do? Oh, no thought butterfly.

What am I going to do? I've got two sentences there.

Oh no, thought butterfly.

Capital letter! Oh no, thought butterfly.

Full stop! And my next sentence.

What am I going to do? Capital letter.

What am I going to do? Full stop.

So now my character's thoughts, 'Oh no!'.

With an exclamation mark.

Thought Butterfly, capital B, because it is her name, Butterfly.

Full stop! Because that's that cause.

Oh no, thought Butterfly.

And capital letter for our next sentence.

What am I going.

What am I going to, one of our tricky words, do? That is a question so I've used a question mark.

What am I going to do? Why don't you try adding some of the characters thoughts to your story now.

I've put some useful words in the box for you, such as the word thought.

Pause the video now, have a go, then press play, when you're ready.

Using my boxing up, that I did in a previous lesson, I've noticed that the mood changes now to a mood of wonder.

A moment of, wow.

I wonder if the mood changes in your story yet.

So now I'm going to describe the character's appearance to show that mood of wonder.

So I'm going to describe what butterfly does.

So she flutters her wings.

Oh, let me put a describing word in adjective.

She flitted, flitted, past tense, her beautiful wings quickly, while calling her friends.

She flitted her beautiful wings quickly while calling her friends.

Capital letter.

She flitted her beautiful wings while calling her friends.

Full stop! Capital S.

She, one of our tricky words.

She fluttered, F L U T T E R E D an ed on the end, flattered her beautiful, B E A U T I F U L, wings, W I N G S.

S on the end for plural, wings.

She flitted her beautiful wings quickly, while, one of our WH words, while calling, C A L L I N G, calling her friends, friends.

She flitted her beautiful wings quickly while calling her friends.

Full stop! And I'm going to add my extra sentence now, to show wonder and appearance.

They, one of our tricky words, M A lots with diagraph A D, made a cloud of, they made a cloud of dazzling dazzling colour.

Full stop! They made a cloud of dazzling colour.

Now you can try describing the characters appearance to show the mood, that's next in your story.

Maybe you want to describe somebody looking really sad or somebody looking really scared or something amazing, like I did in mine.

Pause the video now and have a go.

Cedric reminded me that I also need to include character's feelings.

I think in the next part of my writing, I'm going to talk about how amazed the bird was by what he saw, because that helps to show that wonder and then how happy Snail is when the butterfly is really kind to him and they become friends.

Watch me write my next few sentences and then you can get ready to write your next few sentences using character's feelings.

Okay! Capital T, The, one of our tricky words, The bird, the bird was, another tricky word, the bird was amazed.

Full stop! The bird was amazed.

He, capital H.

He forgot all, all.

He forgot all about, about.

Capital S for Snail, because it is his name.

He forgot all about Snail and flew off.

Full stop! He forgot all about Snail and flew off.

Now we've got the mood of kindness and happiness.

So capital S for Snail and because it's the start for sentence.

Snail, Snail was, that's that tricky word again.

Snail was so happy.

One of our words ending in Y, making an E sound.

Snail was so happy because Butterfly, capital B for Butterfly, because Butterfly, Butterfly had, H A D had been kind.

Full stop.

Snail was so happy because Butterfly had been kind.

They became the best of friends, capital T.

They became, B K split diagraph and they became the B E S T best of, they became the best of friends.

I'm adding an S on to that for my plural.

Full stop.

They became the best of friends.

Okay.

It's over to you now.

Have a go at writing the next section of your writing, including character's feelings.

Now, I will have written up too about section four on my boxing up.

If you can get to around there as well, great, because we can finish the story in the next lesson of this unit.

When you're writing, don't forget capital letters, finger spaces, full stops, and try your best with his spelling, using our phonic strategies.

Pause the video now, have a go and then press play again, when you're ready.

How did you get on? But remember to read your writing back, and then you can check that it creates the mood you want it to, but you could also look for any mistakes.

Remember, mistakes are beautiful.

It really doesn't matter if things get tricky.

That's the only way that the learning gets sticky.

What fantastic work we've done today? We cannot wait for the next lesson of this unit, when we finish our created stories.

Have a brilliant day and enjoy the rest of your learning.

Bye.