Lesson video

Hello, super super storytellers.

Welcome to this English lesson.

This is lesson six of unit four and my name is Miss Cashin.

In today's lesson, we are going to be boxing up for purpose.

That means that we are going to be thinking about the opening of our story, Bobby yakka, which we had in lesson one of this unit.

And we're going to be thinking really carefully about how that opening hooks the reader in so that they want to read more.

Later in this unit you're going to be writing your own openings for this story so this will really help us.

Let's have a look at what we're going to do in our lesson.

In our lesson we're going to start by looking at some punctuation and we're going to do a punctuation activity.

Then we're going to listen again to the opening of our story Baba Yaga.

Then we're going to box up the opening of story, which means we're going to think carefully about all the different things that happen in that opening and what the mood of the story is as we go through.

These are the things that you're going to need for our lesson day.

You are going to need an exercise book with some paper and some plain paper would be perfect for our activity today if you have any.

You're going to need something to write with so a pen or pencil and you're going to need your brain.

First to think about punctuation, then so that we can think about the opening the story and then so you can think about lots of different words to describe the mood of the story.

So if you need any of those things you can pause the video now and go and get them.

You are all ready for our lesson now.

Fantastic.

Lets have a lot at our punctuation learning for today.

We are going to be learning about the possessive apostrophe.

Let's try to say that again, possessive.

Possessive.

Fantastic.

We're going to be learning about the possessive apostrophe.

The possessive apostrophe tells us when something belongs to us, when we possess it.

So let's see if we can find the possessive apostrophe in our sentence.

Here's my sentence.

I'm going to read it and you can follow with your magnet eyes.

Put your magnet eyes on the first word.

Here we go.

Olga's house was small but pretty.

And I've got a picture of a cottage a bit like Olga's house there.

I'm going to read it again.

Olga's house was small but pretty.

Can get your finger and can you find where the apostrophe is? I can see a full stop at the end of the sentence.

There's a capital letter at the beginning.

Where is the apostrophe? Did you find it? It is between the A at the end of Olga and the S, Olga's house.

This is a possessive apostrophe 'cause it tells us that the house belongs to Olga.

Let's practise saying that.

Olga's house.

Fantastic.

Let's go and look at our next sentence.

Oh I wonder who this character might be in our story.

Who do you think it is? Should we see? Here's my next sentence and it's got a possessive apostrophe in it somewhere.

I'm going to read it so put your magnets eyes on the first word.

Her mother's dress was perfect for working the fields.

This must be a picture of Olga's mother.

Her mother's dress was perfect for working fields.

Get your finger ready.

Can you find where my apostrophe is? Did you find it? It's in the word mother's and it's just before the S.

Her mother's dress was perfect for working the fields.

This means that the dress belongs to her mother, it's her mother's dress.

She possesses the dress so it's a possessive apostrophe.

I've got one more sentence.

I am a bit nervous though because I'm looking at this house and I'm thinking this might be a sentence about Baba Yaga.

I'm hoping it's not too frightening.

Put your magnet eyes on the first word.

She was terrified of the witch's house.

I would be terrified as well.

I'm going to read it one more time.

She was terrified of the witch's house.

Get your finger.

Can you find the apostrophe? Did you find it? It's in the word witch's and it's just before the S.

She was terrified of the witch's house.

Because it's a possessive apostrophe this means the house belongs to the witch.

It's the witch's house.

So I've got my possessive apostrophe there to show who the house belongs to.

Here's your punctuation activity for today.

Copy the sentences and add a possessive apostrophe.

I've got three sentences here but I haven't put an apostrophe in any of them so you need see where they need to go.

Remember when we have a possessive apostrophe it always goes before the S.

I am going to read the sentences but you can read them yourself when you go and do this independently.

So my first sentence says, Olgas mother felt worried.

The next sentence, she tidied away Sergeis his toys.

And my last sentence says, the witchs nose was a long and crooked.

Fantastic superstars you can pause the video now and go and add the possessive apostrophes to these sentences.

Well done for putting those possessive apostrophes in.

Let's see where they needed to go.

So Olga's mother felt worried.

She's Olga's mother so it goes just before the S in Olga.

She tidied away Sergei's toys.

So my possessive apostrophe goes just before the S in Sergei because the toys belong to him.

And the last one, the witch's nose was long and crooked.

It's the witch's nose so my apostrophe goes in the word witch's, just before the S again.

You can pause the video now to check that you've got yours in the right place.

Well done superstars, let's look at what we're doing next in our lesson.

We're going to listen to the opening of the story one more time to remind us everything that happens before we go and box it up.

I've got my story map here to help me to remember the opening of the story.

So after you've listened to me before you move on to the next part of the lesson, you could go and talk through the opening with your own story map that we made in lesson two of this unit.

So, here I go.

Once upon a time there lived a girl.

She lived in a cottage on the edge of the forest.

Her name was Olga.

Her little brother was called Sergei and she lived with her mother and her father.

One day, her mother and father were about to go and work in the fields.

Her mother said to her, "Stay in the garden, Never go to the forest or the witch Baba Yaga will get you and will eat you and your little brother up.

One day, Olga was bored in the garden, just with Sergei.

She decided to leave her garden, go through the gate, through the field and into the forest.

While she was there she began to pick flowers for her mother and her father.

At that moment, three big black, geese swooped down and picked up Sergei.

So that is the opening of this story and it leaves us at a real point of drama because we don't know what's happened to Sergei and we don't know what Olga is going to do.

So let's look at what we're going to do with the opening of this story next.

We're going to box up the opening of the story now and think about all the different things that happen in that exciting opening.

So you're going to watch me do it and then you can have a go at boxing up the opening independently.

So when you box up the opening of the story, you're going to divide your piece of paper into 10 boxes.

So I've got five boxes for pictures, one, two, three, four, five.

And then I've got five boxes for my key words and phrases that I'm going to be thinking about.

One, two, three, four, five.

And when I finished my boxing up, I will have a really good idea of what happens in the opening and how the mood changes.

And how it hooks the reader in by changing that mood through the opening.

So when we comes to our writing, we'll be in a really good position to start.

So I've done my pictures already and you can do your own pictures when you go and do this, or you can do something similar to mine.

So at the beginning, I've got my setting, I've got the cottage.

I've got mother, father, Olga and baby Sergei.

And I've already put in some mood words there, which are calm, peaceful.

So I think it starts off with a really calm and peaceful mood.

Here, Olga's mom is telling her, never go to the forest.

"Stay in the garden or the witch Baba Yaga will come and get you and will eat you and your little brother up." And Olga looks, she's very serious, she's a bit bored.

We know that she doesn't listen to what her mom says.

So I think the mood here changes.

I think the mood here is a bit more tense.

It's a bit more tense because we know that there's a witch who might hurt Olga.

I think that I'd be a bit worried at this point as well because I'd be thinking well if they've brought up the witch Baba Yaga and maybe something's going to happen so I'm going to say worried as well.

Here's the next bit of the story.

This is Olga here with Sergei in her garden and we can see she's really, really, really, really bored.

So I think I am feeling a bit nervous at this point in the story because I know that Olga is bored so I'm worried about what she's going to do.

So I'm going to get nervous here.

Here is when Olga has left her house, she's gone through the gate, out of the field and in to the forest.

I think here I would be feeling a bit stressed.

I'd be thinking, oh my goodness, she's left.

I'd be feeling really stressed about what's going to happen next.

I actually think that here I'm going to put curious in.

'Cause I'm really curious to know what Olga's going to do.

I don't think that the story is going to end with just her being bored in the garden.

So I'm thinking what's going to happen here.

Right this next bit, I'm definitely quite stressed but I'm also excited and wondering what is going to happen now that she's left her home.

So being a stressed but a bit excited as well.

Okay.

This is the moment when baby Sergei is snatched by one of the three big, black geese and Olga, oh my goodness she doesn't know what to do.

So I as the reader am definitely shocked.

Sh oo kk, shocked.

And I also think that I'm really quite upset.

I never thought that something this bad would happen.

Up ss et.

Upset definitely.

So I've got two words in each box to describe how my mood has changed.

And we can see how I start being calm and peaceful.

Get a little bit more tense, a bit worried.

I'm nervous here but I'm also curious about what's going to happen.

I'm a bit stressed here, but I'm excited.

But by this point I'm really shocked.

I'm really upset about what's going to happen and I'm definitely going to want to read more.

Now that you've seen me box up the opening of this story it's time for you to have a go.

You've seen my mine, you've seen my picture so you've got some ideas there.

But I've put in the box that I've got on this slide, all the different things that happen so that you can remember how to break up that opening.

So we have the setting at beginning, mom talks to Olga.

Olga is bored,.

Olga leaves and then Sergei is snatched.

I only put two words in my boxes.

You might have more than two words particularly if you think there's a bit which is especially exciting or especially stressful.

And you might think about lots of other words that you could have to describe the mood at that point in the opening.

So you can pause the video now and go and create your own boxing up of the setting.

Well done for completing your box up plan.

In the other lesson in this unit when we start to write our own openings for this story, this is really going to help you.

So you've done an amazing job.

I've got a challenge for you here.

You might write down this challenge.

You might say it out loud.

You might have a really careful think about it.

I will be so impressed though if you've got the energy left for a challenge at the end of our lesson today.

Here's my challenge question.

How does this opening hook the reader? It's like, if there's a fish and they hook it in it can't get away.

I don't want to read this getaway from my story after they've read this brilliant opening, I've given you a sense it starts here as well.

This opening hooks the reader by how do you think this opening hooks the reader? Do you think it's exciting? Is it a bit stressful? Is it a bit frightening? Is it shocking? How do you think the reader is hooked by this opening? So pause the video now, see if you can have a go answering my challenge question.

Well done for completing your challenge.

Absolutely amazing job.

Here's what I thought.

This opening hooks the reader by quickly getting into the action.

When Sergei is snatched away, we already know about Baba Yaga and we want to know how Olga will try to save him from the terrifying witch.

So I thought because we really quickly get into some action and because we already know about Baba Yaga really quickly, that makes me really care when Sergei is snatched.

I wonder what you thought about this though.

I would love to see some of the learning that you've done today.

Especially some of the words that you had in our box up plan because I'm sure that you had some brilliant ones that I didn't think about.

So I'd love it if you could share your work with Oak National.

If you'd like to, please ask your parents or carer to share your work on Instagram, Facebook, or Twitter, tagging @OakNational and #LearnwithOak.

It would be brilliant to see the fantastic learning that you've done.

Okay, super story tellers I hope that I will see you for other lessons in this unit when we're going to start to write some of those openings ourselves.

Bye.