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Hello everyone.

My name is Miss Weerasekera and welcome to lesson nine in our unit about our discussion text.

We are deciding whether Ganesh cheated or not when he was supposed to travel around the world.

We've already written our introduction and in today's lesson it's going to be time for us to write the three points for, which means the three points that we think Ganesh did cheat.

We have a fantastic boxing up.

We've looked at another piece of writing already to help us.

So we're really going to try and use our toolkit today and include all of the things that we can in this section.

Let's get started.

In today's lesson, we're going to need a piece of paper, a pencil or pen, and of course our brain to write our amazing four points for our discussion.

If you have the piece of paper or the exercise book that you are writing your introduction on, it would be great if you could get that too, 'cause we can just carry on from there.

If you don't have it, don't worry, you can start fresh today.

Pause your video now and go and get the things that you need and then press play when you are ready.

We're going to start off today with an oral game and this is called for and against.

We're then going to recap our boxing up plan to make sure we know exactly what we're including in our four points today.

We're then go to write those one at a time and I go to model them, then you will get a chance.

And finally, you'll go to have a challenge task to complete.

So for or against, I am going to be showing you some questions and I'm going to be showing you lots of different points that people have made about it.

Some of them are four.

They agree with the question I think it should happen and the others are against, okay? So I want you to look at them and when I read them to you, you need to decide in your head is that for the question or against the question, yes or no.

Okay, and then we'll have a look together.

So the first question is, should Jack have sold the cow for beans? So if this is a story from "Jack and the Beanstalk".

In "Jack and the Beanstalk", his mother, I think they quite poor and they don't have much money.

So his mother says, okay, we really need some more money.

Take our cow where we normally get our milk from and you're going to go to town and you'll go to sell it for this much money or you're going to get these things for it.

And she's very specific, she's very serious.

She says, make sure you get a good price for that cow because it's our last chance, okay? So Jack takes the cow to the market and then a mysterious person tries to sell him some magic beans and said, "I will have a cow and you can have these magic beans." And Jack says, "Okay, that seems like a good deal to me." And takes the magic beans back to his mother and she is furious.

She says, "What are we going to with magic beans? Our cow would have been better than this.

You didn't listen to my instructions." And she throws them out the window.

What happens after that is obviously very exciting because the beanstalk grows and Jack climbs the beanstalk and a giant man, and there's gold and he gets the gold and he runs away and they end up happy in the end, okay? But our question is, right to the beginning, should Jack have sold the cow for beans? Was that a good idea, for, was that a bad idea, against, okay? I'm going to read you the points and you decide each time for or against.

Jack was given specific instructions which he didn't follow.

It's that point.

So yes he should have sold the cow or no, he shouldn't.

A cow is worth much more than beans, should have sold the cow shouldn't.

Sometimes you have to take a risk for good things to happen.

For, against.

They ended up with far more because of the beans.

Jack is trusting and that is a good quality.

And Jack didn't think about the consequences.

So I want you to pause here and have a think about which ones are for.

I say, yes, he should have sold the cow for the beans.

And which ones are against saying, no, that's a bad idea, he should not have sold that cow for the beans.

Press play when you have figured out which ones are which.

Okay, let's have a look together.

So for, saying yes it was a good idea to sell the cow for the beans.

They ended up with far more because of the beans.

Sometimes you have to take a risk for good things to happen.

And Jack is trusting and that is a good quality.

The points against saying, no, it was a bad idea, a, a cow is worth much more than beans.

So he shouldn't have sold it for them.

Jack was given specific instructions, which he didn't follow.

He was told not to sell them for something silly.

So he didn't follow the instructions.

And finally, Jack didn't think about the consequences.

He was only really thinking about himself and being impulsive when he did it.

He wasn't thinking about his mother and the fact that they really needed the money.

So finally, I'd like you to make your decision.

Which side are you on? Are you for or against? Do you think he should have sold the cow for the beans or shouldn't? What do you think? Interesting, okay.

Next one should Ganesh have travelled in his mind.

So this time we're saying, did he make the right decision to travel in his mind or was it wrong? Okay, so for, yeah, it was a good thing to do.

Against, no, he should have actually done the race properly and run like Kartikeya did around the world.

Okay, so I'm going to show you the different points again.

So then for, yeah, he did the right thing, against, no, he shouldn't have done that, okay? He should have physically travelled.

He didn't get to experience the world properly.

He was able to describe the same things as Kartikeya.

It was a sneaky way to win the competition.

It was a clever way to win the competition.

It was a fast, effective method.

Okay, so you're going to decide which points are for saying it was good that he travelled in his mind.

Which points are against saying no, he should have actually gone there properly.

Pause and then press play When you have figured it out.

Let's see which points are for, yes, he was fine, he can travel in his mind.

So it was a fast and effective method.

He was able to describe the same things as Kartikeya.

So what's the difference.

And it was a clever way to win the competition.

And then against saying, no, it wasn't fair that he travelled in his mind is he didn't experience the world properly.

You might have read about it and could describe it, but it's not the same as actually being there.

The second says it was a sneaky way to win the competition, okay.

He wasn't really honest about it.

It was clear that you were supposed to actually travel and he didn't.

And the last one said he should have physically travelled.

They use the word travel.

It was a race around the world that does probably mean you should move your body and do it.

What do you think? Was it fine for Ganesh to travel in his mind? Or do you think he made the wrong choice? Fantastic.

Now that is what you're going to include in your conclusion today, your decision.

Yes, he was a cheat.

Nope, he wasn't a cheat.

Okay, we're now going to recap our boxing up plan to look at the three points for our question.

Let's have a recap of our boxing up plan before we start writing.

So in our last lesson, we wrote about the introduction and we introduced the judge.

He introduced the question about did Ganesh cheat.

And we also introduced the fact that it was going to be a balanced argument and be able to see both sides before a decision was made.

The whole point of that was to inform the reader about what to expect with what was coming.

So our next section that we're writing today is going to be our three points for the arguments.

I said, did Ganesh cheat? And it's going to say, this is for.

So he agrees that saying, yes, he did cheat.

And our three points are, it said that he should travel, and he didn't actually move.

He misled his brother on purpose by describing things in such detail as if he was there.

And that he waited until after his wedding to Buddhi to come clean, which suggests that he knew that perhaps he wouldn't have won, if he had said so at the time, okay? We want to be very persuasive and convincing for our reader in this one, We want to try and persuade them that they would agree with all points for, Okay? So that's what we're going to do today.

And then in our last lesson should be a big, we will do our against points and also our conclusion, but just this box today.

Let's recap what makes a balanced discussion and the things that we need to include.

The balanced argument or discussion provides the audience or the reader or the listener with different points of view on an issue.

It gives some information for and against an argument.

If there's a question post, it we'll get both sides rather than just giving one.

And that is what we are doing.

The things we need to include.

We need our introduction where we introduce the topic or question to be discussed and we did that in our last lesson.

This is our focus for today.

So our arguments for, we're going to put across all of the information, which for us is three points that support the question.

Our argument against we're going to put across all of the information that disagrees with the question which we'll do in our next lesson.

And finally the conclusion where we will give our own opinion or weigh up the evidence and say what we think, and then what we think they should do next, okay? And that will also be in our last lesson.

So quick recap of our toolkit.

We've just gone over the structure previously.

We want to use generalizers.

So in the first paragraph, our introduction and our last paragraph, our conclusion.

We might use, I think, apart from that, we're going to try and use generalizers and not to use I, okay? So in this paragraph, we're writing today are three points for, we're not going to say I think, we're going to be talking more generally about what people may think.

We want to use a range of openers to structure our writing, but also to make it interesting to read.

We're going to use present tense for our opinion, so many people think that, but we're going to use past tense when we refer to events in the story.

So when we say Ganesh misled his brother, we're talking in the past tense.

Finally, I'd love for us to use some of our conjunctions to add detail and extend our sentences when, if that, because are our main ones.

So we'll try and fit those in there today.

We're now going to write the points for the questions.

We've got three sections to go through.

I will model them first and then it will be your turn to have a go.

For point one, this is our point when we're saying that the point of it was to travel, it said travel and he should have physically moved, and he didn't.

So we've got four sentence steps.

The first one is just introduce that this is the for bit that we're writing.

So there are three main points for why Ganesh did cheat.

Then we introduced the first point, firstly, in the competition, it said that he should travel.

We know that Ganesh just stayed in his office, therefore hm hm hm, okay? Our point two says, secondly, to introduce it.

And then it's going to use another one, got to try and use clearly as an opener.

And then point three says thirdly, and then it's going to use this proves that as another opener.

Within that, we're going to try and use our subordinating conjunctions and some other openers if they work.

I'm going to model point one to you now, and then it will be your turn afterwards, right? To get started we're going to write our unit and our lesson number.

So we've got unit 12 lesson nine.

I'm sorry about my cloth plaster, I've got a cut on my finger.

So I'm just trying to protect it.

And then our learning objectives which is to write a balanced discussion.

Okay, so to start off with our full section, we are going to introduce it.

So we're here to start with, there are three main points for this discussion that prove, instead of prove I'm going to put suggest, 'cause we don't want to say either way, what we think has happened yet.

So that suggests Ganesh did cheat by.

I don't know what he did to cheat.

Yeah, travelling the world in his mind by not actually moving around the world by not actually running the race.

Hey that's a fast one.

Now we're going to use a first openers.

So we're going to say firstly, for first point.

And our first point is this one.

So about travelling, I'm going to say generalizers, so most people believe that to travel, you should physically move from, what could we say, from one place to the next, from one place to another, it's up to you.

Or just move from your sofa and get up, move from one place to another.

We know that Ganesh, what did Ganesh do in the story? Did he move from one place to another? Okay all right, he just stayed in his sofa.

You could say, we know that Ganesh did not move.

We know that Ganesh did not run around the world.

We know that Ganesh stayed on his sofa and read.

You can choose what you would like to put there.

We know that Ganesh remained on his chair and read.

Next opener, therefore he cheated.

I'm going to use my subordinating conjunction to add more detail.

Because he did not actually.

Did not actually what? Take part in the race, physically move.

Therefore he cheated because he did not actually move.

That was our first point.

Great, it's now your turn to write your point one.

Off you go press pause, and then press play when you're ready to continue.

Okay I now go to model point two for you now.

Point two is when we say that Ganesh deliberately misled his brother by describing it in detail as if he was there.

I'm there to model it then you can have a go after.

Time for us to do our second point.

And for this, we are going to start with, secondly, to help her structure what we are writing.

So I'm going to write here.

Start a new line.

Secondly and I'll have to put my own comma.

Secondly, it's this idea that he misled Kartikeya by describing it.

Secondly, Ganesh misled his brother on purpose by, we could we say by describing the journey, by telling him about what happened in the journey and what you saw.

Okay, up to you.

Ganesh misled his brother on purpose by describing the journey as if, as if what, as if he actually went, as if he was there.

It's up to you.

As if, let's say he was there.

Our next has clearly Kartikeya would not have believed that Ganesh had won if.

There's my subordinating conjunction, if he had not pretended to go on the journey.

Okay, fantastic.

Brilliant, your turn pause here, write your second point and then press play when you are done.

Okay, point three, our final part that we're writing today, I'm going to model this to you now.

This is our final bit where we're saying that Ganesh got married before he told Kartikeya how he won the competition, and that means that he was being a bit sneaky.

Perhaps he knew it wasn't the right thing to do.

I'm going to model it then it will be your turn.

Our last point is going to be this one.

So after, okay.

So he only told him after he was married.

So we're going to say here, thirdly is going to be all opener.

Ganesh waited until after his wedding so that he could host the feast and charm Buddhi.

Okay so Ganesh waited until after his wedding.

I'm go to actually add a little bit more extra information here.

So after his wedding to tell Kartikeya so that he could host the feast and charm Buddhi.

I'm going to say here, a generalizer, many people would see this as a sign of guilt because using our subordinating conjunction, Ganesh knew he would not have won the competition if he told Kartikeya straight away.

So sweet that one straight way.

All right to use this sentence starter this proves that Ganesh did cheat because he waited until.

What did he wait until? Until he was married, until he had the price, until it was too late.

Too late to admit the truth.

Okay, there we go.

So we have done, he should have travelled and he didn't.

He misled his brother by describing the journey and he went off to the wedding.

So you get off three convincing points.

We've included subordinating conjunctions, openers, and generalizers.

So we're doing really well with our toolkit.

Amazing, okay.

Time for you to write your point three, pause it, and then press play when that is finished.

Okay so, time for you to make sure that you're really happy with that section of your argument.

And it's really persuaded the reader with three really strong points.

I'd also like you to check your spelling, punctuation, and grammar.

Sometimes it can be useful as I always say, get your microphone, read out loud 'cause it can help you just spot mistakes and spot things that are missing.

I'd like you to pause now and do all of that and make the changes you need to make and then press play when you're really happy with this section of your discussion writing.

I am so impressed by what we have got so far, very convincing.

We're really going to have to work hard in our next lesson to give the balanced part of the against side because at the moment I think everyone would be very convinced that he was a cheat because we've been so convincing.

So in our next lesson, we will give the points for the against to say that he wasn't cheating and we'll try and create that balanced argument before we give our own point or perspective in the conclusion.

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I hope to see you in our next lesson.