Lesson video

Hello, wonderful storytellers.

It is me Ms. McCartney, and I am really looking forward to our lesson today because we are going to do some writing together that creates a mood to move our reader.

There was lots of moves.

Then I cannot wait to get started with today's lesson.

So make sure you have got your wonderful creative brains ready.

Storytelling superstars, to make sure that you are prepared for today's lesson.

You will need three things, a piece of paper or something to write on.

A pencil or something to write with and your wonderful brains ready to create a wonderful mood.

If you need to go and get any of those things, pause your video now.

Okay, now that we are prepared, let's have a look at what we are going to be learning today.

We are going to start with a spelling activity.

We are then going to play a freeze frame game that might give you a clue about what a freeze frame is.

We are then going to complete a shed write together.

And at the end of the lesson, we will edit our writing.

Let's get started with our spelling rule.

We are going to be adding the suffix is 's' and 'es' today to change nouns from plural.

Nope, to change nouns from singular, where there is only one to plural, which means more than one.

Now we looked at this rule in lesson six of unit 10, and we are going to be building on our knowledge today.

Shall we have a look at some examples? Excellent, we have got the noun fuss, which is singular.

And I have added a suffix to create the plural fusses.

And I have added the 'es' suffix.

Let's have a look on next word.

We have got fish and the plural of fish is fishes.

We have got the word cross the noun cross, and the plural is crosses.

We then have the word leap, and I am going to add a suffix to create the plural leaps.

Now I would like you to have a little look at those words and tell me if you can notice any patterns where we add 'es' or just 's'.

Excellent, I could hear some people telling their screens that where our words, fuss and cross end into 'ss' two ss, we had to add 'es'.

So let's have a look at our rule a little bit more, if any of our words end in sh, ch or ss with two ss or one s we need to add the suffix 'es'.

Now have a look at the word leap that does not end in sh, ch or ss.

So we just need to add the suffix 's' when we are turning a singular into a plural, okay? Let's have a little look and hand over to you to practise now.

You need to decide if these words require the suffix 's' or 'es' to turn them from singular to plural.

These are your words.

Now my top tip is, remember if our word end in s, or two ss or ch, or sh you must add the suffix 'es'.

If it does not, you need to add the suffix s.

Pause your video now, and write these words down with that suffix.

Okay, I would like you to point to the two words.

There are only two words on our screen that need the suffix 's'.

Can you point those two words now? Fantastic, I can see learner's pointing to stomp and jump because they do not have a ch, they do not have sh and they do not have a ss.

So therefore we just need to add the suffix 's'.

All the other words, guess, perch, confess, and express.

They all need the suffix 'es'.

You can see the correct spellings now.

I would like you to pause the video, give yourself a big tick if you've got it right.

And if you didn't, that is also fine, because you can fix it and learn from your mistake.

Pause your video now to check your spellings.

Brilliant, I wonder if today, when we do our shared writing, you will be able to use any of these words, because I chose them, because I think you might be able to.

Okay, let's have a look at your last little task before we move on to our main learning.

Can you create two sentences about our story, the marriage of Ganesh using the root words below and their suffix.

So you need to add the suffix 's' or 'es'.

So my example is, when Ganesh confesses.

So when he tells the truth Kartikeya stomps with rage, I've actually been really sneaky.

And put two of my plurals in there that need an 's' and an 'es'.

Pause the video now you complete your task.

Fantastic everybody.

Right, let's move into the main part of our lesson, where we are going to be doing some writing, to create a mood that moves our reader, okay.

To help us to prepare for creating mood today, we are going to create a game, or we're going to play a freeze frame game.

So when I shout out one of the words, for example, anger, you have to show me with your face and your body, an angry action.

So miss McCartney for an angry action would screw up her face and clench her fists.

So for example, anger, okay? So have a few seconds to look at all of the words on the screen, and then we are going to play the game.

And I'm going to try and guess the emotion from your face, I hope it will match with my batch.

Okay, Let's start with shock.

So I'm going to count to three, and I want you to do your shock face one, two, three, shock.

Fantastic, everybody let's do a determined face.

So after three, one, two, three, I'm not sure if mine was the best, but I can see some really good ones where people are looking determined.

And actually some people are stood up with their body really, really firmly rooted to the ground because they are determined.

Okay, let's do two more.

And then I'm going to guess the one that you do, I would like you to do terror.

So one, two, three terror.

Okay, I was so scared.

I covered my eyes, but I could still see you.

Fantastic, everybody, lots of people did terror in a similar way to I did shock.

Okay, last one, this time, I would like you to think about how you would show wonder in an action, wonder.

Okay, One, two, three.

Oh, I saw some really, really strong actions.

Okay, I would like you now to think of your own mood or emotion, and then you are going to perform it to the screen on three.

And I'm going to try and guess.

Show me thinking figures as if you're ready.

Okay, lots of people have got that thinking fingers.

Okay, one, two, three, go.

I think I can see some people that are really happy.

I think I can see some people that are worried.

I think I can see some people that are really exhausted and sleepy.

Well done everybody, we have started to think about that actions that we can do with our bodies to show mood.

And we can write about those today.

So well done.

Okay, today you will need your boxing up plan that we competed in unit 10, lessons six, and you can see my example that we talked through together on your screen.

So make sure you have got your boxing up plan.

If you need to go and get that pause your video now.

Okay, so we are ready to move on to our writing.

In our writing today, we are going to write all about the library scene and we are going to create a mood of real excitement, but also a little bit of tension between the brothers.

Now tension, if you go like this, you can feel tension, your hands get a little bit hot.

So things start to feel a little bit hot.

In a room it's not an argument, but there's tension.

So I am going to stop presenting my screen now, because we are going to write on paper.

But before I do, we are just going to remind ourselves what happens in the library.

Can you tell me in three actions, what happens in the library? So these are my three actions, fight.

And then I'm going to have Rex, and then I'm going to have this one for Ganesh asking if he can race in his own way, because I know the end of the story, and I know he's being really cheeky.

Can you show me your three actions that represent what happens in this scene, go.

Oh, I can see some mango eating, fantastic, brilliant.

Okay, so we are going to start our writing now.

Make sure you've got your plan and I will see you in a second.

Okay, wonderful writers.

We are going to be writing all about the library scene today and creating a really excited mood where there is also some tension.

Now you can see on my piece of paper, I have written down my tool kit to help me create a mood that moves our reader.

So we need to think about our actions, the appearances of our characters and thoughts and feelings.

Now, I would recommend writing down your toolkit at the side as well, because I am going to tick off when I have completed something from my toolkit.

So pause your video now and write down that toolkit.

Brilliant everybody, so I would like you to think now, what is the first thing that happens in the library scene with respect to your screens.

Fantastic, Ganesh is eating his mango.

So let's start our sentence as Ganesh, now Ganesh is a proper noun, it is a name.

So it needs a capital letter.

As Ganesh was, we are writing in the past tense, was eating now.

All I want you to think about it.

Different word you could use instead of the verb eating, you might say jumping, you might say, what else might you say? Can you think about it now.

Brilliant, and underneath my toolkit.

I am going to write any words to help me.

So can you write down the words that you will use to describe what's Ganesh was doing.

So pause your video now and write down your word, because you can use this later.

I am doing my writing now, you will do your writing after, and these notes will help you.

As Ganesh was eating his mango, Kartikeya again, a proper noun, cause it's his name.

So it needs a capital letter, Kartikeya.

Right, we are going to put in our first bit of action now I want you to think about what was Kartikeya doing when he came into the room, was he skipping? Was he so excited that he knocked into the table? Have a think now about how Kartikeya came into the room and how we can put that into an action for our mood.

Brilliant, I can hear some different idea.

So down here, you can write your idea.

I'm going to write Kartikeya almost fell over.

He was so excited, he almost fell over.

Make sure you have your idea now down here, because this is Miss McCartney's idea.

As Ganesh was eating his mango , Kartikeya rushed into the, can I fill library here? Yes, I can.

Library, now library is a tricky word.

It's got this extra 'a' that we don't really hear here.

So make sure you take note of that.

Kartikeya rushed into the library and almost fell over.

Okay, fantastic, so I'm going to give myself a little tick next to action.

Because I have already started to create my mood.

I haven't said he was really excited, but I've given my reader a clue because he almost fell over.

Okay, now let's think about his appearance.

What did he look like? That can help us create an excited mood? What do you look like? If you are excited, whisper to your screen now? Oh, I had somebody say he had his hands waving above his head.

Can you pause your video.

I'm writing your idea down here, please.

Okay, I'm going to use my idea.

So as Ganesh was eating his mango Kartikeya rushed into the library and almost fell over.

I'm going to just make my piece of paper a little bit.

Above his head, his hands were waving and flapping.

Okay, so I given him my reader, a clue through Kartikeya's appearances that he is really excited.

Okay, I am going to do a bit of speech now and I'm going to say, "Brother! We both want to host a feast for buddhi.

So let's fight." Okay, I am going to think now, this is what Kartikeya is saying, "Brother! We both want to host a feast for buddhi.

"So let's fight." How would he say that? I'm not going to say, said Kartikeya.

What words can I use to give my reader a clue that, there is some tension that actually Kartikeya is very excited, but he is also getting a little agitated.

We could have the word exclaimed.

exclaimed like an exclamation mark.

We could say burst, he burst out or he shouted.

I'm going to use the word exclaimed.

Write down your words on your list that you will use by pausing the video, okay.

"Brother! We both want to host a feast for buddhi.

"So let's fight," exclaimed Kartikeya, wow, okay.

Brilliant, now I want to know.

So I've written about Kartikeya's thoughts, because he said them out loud so I can give them a big tick.

I want to know how Ganesh feels right now.

So I'm going to read it to you again.

I want you to think about how Ganesh would feel after Kartikeya has said this.

As Ganesh was eating his mango, Kartikeya rushed into the library and almost fell over above his head, his hands were waving and flapping.

"Brother! We both want to host a feast for buddhi.

"So let's fight," exclaimed Kartikeya.

Okay, what could I do now, to show Ganesh's feelings about fighting? Okay, whispers some ideas to your screen.

What can I do to show, Ganesh is feeling about fighting? Oh, I had someone say Ganesh could raise his eyebrows, which is an action to show his disapproval.

Okay, so let's use that idea, but before, write down your idea.

That's Miss McCartney's idea.

Pause the video and write down your idea.

Okay, Ganesh raised, his eyebrows and refused to fight.

Okay, that is the end of Miss McCartney's paragraph, but it is not the end of the scene.

Oh, I need to give myself a tick for feelings.

It is not the end of the scene.

So I would like you now to pause the video, you are going to write the part that I have already written using your notes and your toolkit.

And then you are going to carry on and finish the scene, at the point where Kartikeya rushes off.

So pause your video now, to complete your wonderful writing.

Hello, wonderful writers.

I hope that you really enjoyed crafting your piece of writing that had an exciting but tense mood.

I would love you to hold your writing up to the screen so I can have a little look.

Can you do that now? Oh, my goodness.

There is so much wonderful writing.

I can see thoughts.

I can see feelings, actions, and appearances to create moods that move our reader.

Well done, everybody.

We are now going to edit our writing so you can see, I have a checklist on my screen.

And that's the first thing I want you to hunt with your magnifying glass for, is punctuation, have you got your fullstops, your question marks, your exclamation marks.

If you've used commas and in that the commas for speech, as well as capital letters.

So in a second, you are going to hunt.

And if you think you have double checked, all of those things, you're going to give yourself a tick just at the bottom of your writing.

Then you need to think about does it makes sense.

Sometimes even professional authors when they are writing, they miss out words or they add extra words.

So read through your writing really carefully, to check it makes sense.

Then I want you to check that you have your actions, your appearance, your thoughts, and your feelings.

And if you have all those things, you can give yourself ticks.

So at the end, you will have six ticks.

If you have done all of those things, even if you need to add something or fix something, when you've done it, you can give yourself a tick.

Wow, I just have loved our lesson, writing today.

I hope that you are super duper proud.

Maybe we could do some shine about writing.

So I wouldn't use to pretend that you have got your pencil and you're writing back and forth, and then you can give yourself some wonderful, warm shine.

Great job, everybody.

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