Lesson video

Hey everybody, It is me, Miss McCartney, and I am super excited to do some storytelling learning with you today.

We are going to be looking at some different sentence types and techniques to really think about how we can impact our readers mood.

Storytelling superstars, for our lesson today, you will need a piece of paper or something to write on, a pencil or something to write with, and your wonderful creative brain.

If you need to go and collect anything to make sure you're ready, pause your video now.

Okay.

Let's have a look at what we are going to be learning today.

We are going to start with a short game called two truths and one lie.

And the game is about Ganesh.

Then, we are going to have a little look at our sentence toolkit that we will use to start writing later in the unit.

We are then going to look at some sentence examples, and you will have a go at writing some sentences.

And then we are going to read as a writer and see if we can find the effect of those sentences.

Let's start by playing a little game and the game is called two truths and one lie.

I am going to tell you two things that are true about our story, the marriage of Ganesh, and one thing that is a lie, and you have to try and catch me out by telling me which one is the lie.

Okay, so the first sentence is, Ganesh was cutting an Apple in two of his hands at the beginning of the story.

Sentence number two, Ganesh loved to read books and sentence number three, Ganesh raced all around the world.

So, Ganesh was eating an apple at the beginning of the story, Ganesh loved books, and Ganesh raced around the world.

Which one of those statements is a lie? Can you whisper to your screen now? I had some different answers and I will be honest.

I was trying to trick you.

So we know that Ganesh definitely likes books.

In fact, he loves them.

So that one was definitely true.

Was Ganesh eating an Apple at the beginning of the story? No, he was eating a mango, so that was the lie.

But some people thought the lie was that he raced around the world because actually he stayed in his library and he read his book.

But I said that as a statement that was true, because again Ganesh explained that he still raced around the world, by reading.

Today, we are going to use this sentence toolkit to help us to create some different sentence techniques in our writing.

Now, different sentence techniques can help us to create different moods.

We will learn about these sentences today and then hunt for them in a reading passage.

So, we are going to start with my turn, your turn.

Power of three, your turn, 2A sentences, your turn, rhetorical questions, your turn, short, sharp interruptions, your turn.

Okay.

You may have heard some of these techniques before, and if you have, you can use your knowledge to help you today.

And if you haven't do not worry, because we are going to learn together.

Shall we get started with the first one? Okay.

Our first technique is the power of three.

I have a picture of a cave here because I had one of our learners say that in their recycled story, they have chosen a really dark and scary cave.

So Miss McCartney has written a sentence inside the cave Kartikeya could hear dripping, scuttling and wiping.

Now scuttling could be bats, It could be rats or it could be creepy, crawly, insects.

Miss McCartney would be so scared.

So I would like you to look at that sentence and have a think.

Why have I decided to describe three things instead of one thing? Can you pause the video and use the sentence stem? The effect of this sentence is mmm because, pause your video now and have a go.

Okay.

Can you whisper your ideas so that I can hear your wonderful learning? I had somebody say the effect of their sentence is that we can really hear lots of sounds because all of the sounds are working together, instead of us just saying one sound, well done.

Let's give you some shine.

That was a great idea.

Another learner said, that we are given lots of detail to help us to really imagine what the cave was like for Kartikeya.

Fantastic, it is now over to you to have a practise.

So you need to have a think, your setting and your recycled story.

What was it when it was the really dark setting? Was it a cave? Was it the deep sea? Maybe it was something else, but I would like you using my sentence to help you to write a sentence using the power of three, about three things that you can hear in your dark and creepy setting.

Pause your video now to write your sentence.

Excellent, I saw somebody writing the sentence, deep down below the sea Kartikeya could hear shuffling.

So maybe shuffling a fish between rocks, splashing and hissing.

This is creating a really scary boot that is filling me with terror, but I also really want to know more.

I can't wait until we are writing about our setting later in unit 11.

Shall we have a look at our next sentence technique? Fantastic.

Our next sentence technique, this is called a 2A sentence.

And this is where we have two adjectives in our sentence side by side.

and they are separated with a comma.

So Miss McCartney's sentence was, upon the Lake surface grew bright, delicate water lilies.

If something is really delicate, then they are really beautiful, but they can break easily.

Have a little think.

Why in my sentence, have I chosen to use two adjectives side by side? Use the same sentence stem.

The effect of this sentence is mmm because? Pause your video now and have a little think.

Okay.

I had some of our learners saying that the effect of this sentence is that we can really see the Walter lilies because I have given two adjectives together, but it's not too long.

When we use the power of three sentences' very detailed.

If we use two adjectives, we are still given detail, but our sentence is a bit shorter.

It is over to you now.

I would like you to write a sentence using two adjectives.

And I would like you to write your sentence about the Lake in the palace garden from our recycled story.

Pause your video now, to write your sentence.

Excellent.

Shall we hear some of your ideas? Can you whisper them to me on the screen? Oh, I had a really wonderful sentence.

The sentence was, the Lake's surface was calm and shiny.

Fantastic.

Give your friends some shine because they, have come up with some wonderful sentences and give yourself a little bit of shine too.

Are we ready to move on to our third technique? Brilliant.

Right.

I really, really, really, like this technique and stories.

Now this is a sentence type that is a question, but it is a very special type of question.

It is a rhetorical question.

So my rhetorical question, Kartikeya is thinking in his head.

What if the sand storm scooped him up and he was lost forever? That's what he was thinking in his head.

Now, rhetorical questions can be inside your head or they can be spoken out loud, but you are not expecting anyone to answer.

You are just expecting yourself or somebody else to think about your question.

So I would like you now to use the sentence stem, the effect of this sentence is, because.

Why have I used a rhetorical question? Pause your video now to have a little think.

Wow.

I just had such a wonderful idea.

Somebody just said the effect of this sentence is, that as the reader, we start to think about something that we hadn't thought about by ourselves.

And that's so cool.

When we are writing, we can ask a rhetorical question to help our reader think about something new.

It is now your turn to write a rhetorical question.

I'm really excited.

Now, remember, questions need to start with a question word and they must be punctuated with a question mark at the end.

I would like you to write your question about the setting that you created in your recycled story that is hotter than the polar bears ice.

Pause your video now to write your rhetorical question.

Wow, I'm so impressed with all the children that remembered their sentence word and their question mark.

I really liked one of the questions that I heard was, what if Kartikeya never was found again? What happens if he got lost in the desert and he was never found again? Great question.

I had so many great questions.

Another question was, what if Kartikeya could not find any water? That would be so terrible.

So rhetorical questions help us when we are listening or reading a story to think about new ideas or they help us to know what the characters are thinking.

Fantastic.

Let's move on to technique number four.

Short, sharp interruptions.

I want you to say it like that.

My turn, your turn, short, sharp interruptions.

Your turn, brilliant.

Now I'm going to read the sentence and I want you then to think about the effect of my short words that I've used to interrupt the sentences.

Guests were throwing their heads back with laughter.

People greeted each other with her hugs.

He stood.

Watching.

Waiting.

Why did I use those really short sentences? He stood.

Watching.

Waiting.

So use the sentence stem.

The effect of this sentence is, because, and then pause your video to say your sentence.

Okay.

Fantastic learners.

I have heard somebody say, the effect of this sentence is to make us stop and think because all the full stops keep making us stop when we are reading or listening.

That is such a great idea.

Somebody else said that these short sharp sentences are really different to our 2A sentences and our sentences that use the power of three because they don't have lots of detail.

They just make us imagine one thing, lots of wonderful suggestions.

Well done, everybody.

It is now over to you.

I would like you to write about the same scene that I have written about.

So when Kartikeya is at the marriage feast of Ganesh and Birdie, and he is , he is waiting to talk to his brother.

Pause your video now, to write down your sentences with some short, sharp interruptions.

Excellent.

Shall I share with you one of the sentences that I heard from one of our wonderful storytellers? Somebody said, everybody was having fun, but no, there was one person who could not enjoy the dancing Kartikeya full stop.

Fantastic everybody, shine to you.

Okay.

Now we are going to read as a writer.

So I am going to read this section of text and I want you to hunt for our four techniques.

The power of three, a 2A way sentence, rhetorical question, and short, sharp interruptions.

I had to squeeze those words down a little bit.

So they would fit on the page.

Okay, make sure you've got your magnet eyes on the text.

You have got your good listening and you are using your reading finger to follow along on the screen.

He has arrived in a bustling city.

People shouted prices of their goods, ran out in between the traffic and pushed past Kartikeya.

Where was he supposed to go now? It was almost impossible to find a path through the heaving crowds.

Wait.

He thought he saw his brother, but it turned out to be somebody else.

Kartikeya decided that the best way to raise through the city, was on a tall moody camel.

I would now like you to pause the video, hunt for our four techniques and you can use the sentence stems at the bottom.

I can identify an example of mmm when, or when I read the sentence, it makes me mmm, because? Pause your video now and see if you can find any of those techniques.

Excellent.

I heard somebody say, I can find an example of a rhetorical question when it says, where was he supposed to go now? And that is really making us as the listener, as the reader, worry about what Kartikeya's supposed to do.

Okay.

When I read the sentence, wait, it made me feel scared because I wondered what we were waiting for.

So that was our short, sharp interruption.

Fantastic, and then for our power of three we had, people shouted prices of their goods, ran out in between the traffic and pushed past Kartikeya.

So as a reader or a listener in my mind, I am seeing all these things and it's creating the bustling city in my mind.

So I can really imagine where Kartikeya is.

And the last one, 2A sentence we had, Kartikeya decided the best way to race through the city was on a tall, moody camel.

Miss McCartney has seen a tall, moody camel before, and I would not want to ride on one of those.

I would be so high off of the floor.

So my 2A sentence helped me to really imagine what the camel was like.

I am so, super impressed with your learning today.

I wonder if you could come up with any more of these sentences on your own later today.

Perhaps you could tell somebody in your house.

We are going to be using these techniques when we are writing throughout the rest of the lessons in unit 11.

So I cannot wait to see some more of these sentences.

You have done such a wonderful, wonderful job, everybody.

Super work.

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