Lesson video

Hello everyone.

My name is Miss Weerasekera, and welcome to the final lesson, lesson 10 in our unit for our created story.

In today's lesson, we're going to be writing the ending that satisfies our audience, and using everything that we thought about in the previous lessons with our endings toolkit and our different story ending to help us.

We have already written an amazing introduction that hooks, an incredible middle that builds.

So now we need to do our story so far justice by writing a really powerful, satisfying ending.

We're going to go through our boxing up to remind ourselves what to include first, recap the toolkit quickly.

And then I'm going to show you my piece of writing.

You'll then have a go at doing your ending independently.

Sometimes I love and also hate endings, especially to stories and books.

It's so satisfying to get to the end and know that you've read it and to find out what finally happens to the characters in the story.

But it also makes me sad because you get to know the characters and the story, and it's such an exciting world to be a part of.

I feel a little sad when it ends.

Do you feel that way too? Can you think of some of your favourite endings of the stories that you've read? How have they made you feel? I agree.

Most of the time, I feel satisfied and happy, but always a little sad that it's over.

There's been a few stories I've read that have been tragedies, which means they don't end well and they end badly.

And those always leave me feeling a little bit sad.

I try not to read too many of those.

I prefer ones which have a nicer ending.

Do you? Today, you're going to need a piece of paper to write, on a pen or pencil to write with and your brain to finish off our story in the most amazing way possible.

If you do not have a piece of paper or a pencil pause here and then press play when you're ready to get started.

We're going to start off with a spelling activity.

Our final time recapping the rule from earlier in the unit.

Then we will recap our boxing up plan and look at the events that need to be in our ending.

We'll look at our endings toolkit, One more time before we write our ending, that satisfies both us as the writer, but also hopefully our readers too.

Our spelling goal for this unit has been to use the prefix un to add two root words, to change their meaning.

Prefix, remember means a letter or letters that have been added to the front of a root word.

Can you remember how it changed the meaning of these words? That's right.

It meant not something didn't it or it made it the opposite of what the root word meant by itself.

I have written six words with a prefix un here.

Some of them are correct, and some of them are incorrect.

We can't add un to all words, only some of them.

So I wonder if you can spot the ones that are right.

Try reading them out loud.

I often find that that helps me to spot words that don't really exist.

Pause the video here and then press play, when you think you've spotted the ones that are incorrect.

Fantastic.

Let's have a look together.

Did you manage to spot these uncover the opposite of cover? Maybe you could uncover the teddies that are under the, duvet in your bed.

Unteach is not one.

Unwalk is not one, either Unlucky is the opposite of lucky.

So if something really horrible happened to you, or you stood in a big puddle, someone might say that is unlucky.

Whereas if you found a five pound note on the floor, someone would say, that's lucky.

Undraw is not a word.

And finally unsafe is the opposite of safe.

Well done, if you manage to spot those, let's carry on with the lesson.

Let's put our spelling wall to the test.

Which words could you add the prefix un to in the passage below to change the meaning of the story? I'm going to read the story to you, and then you can press pause and see if you can find the words to add to the prefix to.

The dog was very friendly and was welcomed in the town.

It was very lucky that the owners got that dog and they felt safe walking him around the park.

I would like you to pause here and try and find some words that you could add un to, to make them mean at the opposite meaning.

And that will probably change the whole meaning of the story.

It's a bit like a prefixed magic trick.

Pause here and press play when you think you've found them.

Well done.

I told you you were prefixed detectives, didn't I? Let's have a look.

Let's see.

Did you spot all of these words with the un involved? I'm going to read it again this time and we can see how the story has changed by the power of un.

Very Magical.

The dog was very unfriendly and was unwelcome in the town.

It was very unlucky that the owners got that dog and they felt unsafe walking him around the park.

Can you see that just adding those two tiny letters to the front of all of those words has completely changed the meaning of this story.

It went from a really lovely story.

Didn't it? About a friendly dog to a not very nice story about and very nasty dog.

It's really amazing that just two letters can make such a big difference.

Let's quickly recap our endings toolkit, before we go ahead and look at our boxing up and then write our ending.

So our ending that satisfies us well, hopefully have a solution that rewards our main character.

We know that there is half an award because Apollo gets his harp or his item that you've chosen back for 12 hours Includes a solution which surprises or satisfies the audience.

I think it is satisfying even though Hades keeps it for half the day.

That's satisfying because it explains why we have daytime with sun and nighttime, with darkness.

If gave it back then we wouldn't necessarily get the satisfying lesson that we do get.

Show how the good qualities of the main character lead to the problem's solution.

Now we did discuss that.

Apollo is probably our main character and it's not his good qualities that get the item back from Hades, is it? It's actually Zeus's.

so I guess this one doesn't really apply, but it does apply if we talk about the lesser character of Zeus.

He is the one that uses his brains and his convincing skills to get the compromise with Hades.

Show the consequences of the solution for the characters.

We'll definitely see that, won't we? because we'll see that when the harp is with Apollo it's daytime and it's sunny, when the harp is with Hades in the underworld, it is nighttime.

Ending with a memorable scene or event, we've said half applies to this story.

Let's have a look at the boxing up part of our story to remind ourselves which bits we're going to include in this section.

Okay? So you need to make sure that you've got your boxing up from lesson six.

If you still have it.

Don't worry if not, because you can use my to help you.

We're just going to quickly look at this to remind us which part of the story are included in our ending.

So we know that our introduction that hooked the reader was this first scene and the moment where the harp was stolen.

Then in our middle, that built drama.

We saw Hades with a harp or the item that you chose in the underworld, trying to get it to do something, but it refused.

And that's going to be important in our ending, the impact of that Apollo being sad, the sun disappearing all life on earth, dying in the darkness, Zeus, King of Gods, coming to speak to Apollo to convince him to bring back the sun.

But he says he will not without his harp.

That was fate.

And they were the three events in our middle, which brings us to the two boxes from here that are going to be our ending.

So we're going to have our main solution here, which is going to be Zeus coming up with a compromise with Hades and Hades said it's played 12 notes here.

So it has to say, and Zeus has to come up with a compromise of 12 hours in the underworld, 12 hours on earth.

So you're going to have to think really carefully here.

What is it that your stolen item does? That means it has to stay for 12 hours, has to do 12 of something.

So if it's an instrument, you can do the same as me, 12 notes.

If it's another item, think about what that item could do 12 of.

If it's an animal or if it's a human, perhaps it could be that they've eaten 12 of something or said 12 words.

You just have to choose what 12 things that stolen item or animal or human does.

Okay.

And then finally we have got our lesson and our conclusion and our learning for the reader, the 12 hours, the harp is in the underworld.

It is nighttime and darkness disappears and everything dies.

And then the 12 hours of the day, when the harp is returned, Apollo is happy.

The music plays and he brings back the sunshine.

And that means everything on earth starts to grow again.

And that's our explanation of why we have daytime and nighttime each day.

Okay? So now we should have those events really fresh and secure in our mind.

And we are ready to start writing.

Now that we've recapped those events.

I want you to use these three sentences again, just to get your mind ready and prepared for what you're going to do in your writing.

What do you want to use to help create a satisfying ending? What do you want the reader to imagine as they read your ending? And most importantly, I think, what do you want your reader to feel? It might be a few different emotions, but you need to think about what those are and have them in your head so that you can make them happen in your writing.

Pause here, have a go at thinking about how you would finish each of those sentences and then press play when you're ready to start writing your ending.

Okay.

We're about ready to write our ending.

That satisfies the reader.

Before we do that, I want us to have a look at some of the sentence stems on here.

Now I've included quite a lot of sentence stems here to support you.

You do not need to use all of them.

They're just there if you get a little bit stuck, I've really helped to structure the action of the ending, but you might want to come up with your own.

And that's absolutely fine.

I'm going to model how I would write my ending now.

And then you will have your go afterwards.

It's time to write to the end of our creative story.

I am so excited before I get started with my writing.

I'm just going to write my unit, which is unit 14 and my lesson, which is lesson 10 at the top of my page.

I'm going to write my learning objective, which is to write on ending that satisfies.

Okay.

I'm ready to get started.

So I know that the next events that's going to happen in my story in the middle.

I had this conversation with Apollo where he refused and now Zeus is going to go down and speak to Hades.

Isn't he? So we're going to start by saying went to speak to Hades so that.

Why is Zeus going to speak to Hades? Can you remember? So that he could demand for the.

And the it's going to be beautiful harp.

Remember you need to put here whatever your item was stolen.

to be returned.

He found Hades looking smugly at the golden harp.

Right.

I'm going to use my inverted commas now, because Zeus is going to demand that it's returned.

So what is Zeus going to say to Hades, do you think? Probably something quite stern, something quite strong.

Yeah.

I think something like you must, a command like that would be really good.

You must return the harp to.

I'm just going to underline that in red for you.

So you know, that's where you need to put your items, then return the harp to Apollo or.

What will happen if the harp hasn't returned? Yes, perhaps there'll be darkness forever.

Everything will die.

Or all of life on earth.

Will die.

Zeus, how's he going to say it? Shouted, demanded, commanded, exclaimed.

Zeus I'm going to say commanded commanded.

I'm going use an adverb.

Said he did it crossly.

You choose something else? Sternly, angrily.

Now what do we know? Hades smug response to this is going to be, what does he do? I said, it's quite irritating isn't it? He smiles.

It's such a bad guy.

You don't want him to be smiling.

Hades smiled.

Now he's going to start talking, which means we need our inverted commas on a new line.

He's a different character.

The harp has played 12 notes in the underworld and that means it Will stay with me.

Sorry.

I keep forgetting to do those bits in red, but I'll underline them.

So the harp, you're going to change it to whatever your item is.

What's it done? Okay.

So remember you need to think about back to your middle.

What was it that Hades was trying to get your item or your person or your animal to do that refuse to do so you might want to go back and have a look at it and check it might've been that they wouldn't eat something, but they wouldn't say something, but whatever it is now, Hades has managed to get them to do it.

But 12 of it, so say 12 words, eat 12, whatever you choose here.

And it needs to go in there.

Okay.

And that means it will stay with me for ever.

Close my, inverted commas And how is Hades going to say that? I am going to think stated Hades.

I'm going to say he's happy about it, gleefully.

Okay.

Now we know that Zeus is going to be thinking deeply.

We're going to do show, don't tell here.

How can we show that Zeus is thinking deeply? What might he do? You did this in a previous unit.

If you did this piece of writing too, but you might not have done that.

Let's think of those ideas.

Yeah.

Perhaps he, Zeus scratched his head as he thought deeply for a solution.

Whoop, sorry, solution.

Okay.

Now he's going to suggest his compromise here.

So we need to start a new line.

because he's a different character, Hades speaking.

If the harp, underline that in red, because you need to change that to what you're doing.

has played 12 notes then going to underline this bit as well, because remember wherever you've put here, you're going to repeat here.

Ate 12 of something, said, 12 words, whatever you want your item or person to do.

It will spend 12 hours each day with you.

And the other the 12 with Apollo on earth.

Zeus.

How did he say it? I'm going to say reasoned.

You could say smartly? I think that was quite clever.

Okay.

Now we are going to do our last little paragraph.

So we start this section with just this section here, where we learn our lessons.

Okay? From that day to this, the harp, you need to put your item, spends 12 hours in the underworld.

During this time.

What happens when the harp in the underworld, to the earth? Can you remember? That's it, we're going to try and put this into a list of three things.

During this time, the sun vanishes.

I'm going to put a comma between my next item in the list.

What happens when the sun varnishes? Yeah.

Darkness falls.

Put and before my last item, and all life on earth begins to die.

This is the time.

What's the time we call the gold story? It was winter.

If it's dark, it is? That's it.

Night for the other half of the day.

The harp, Make sure you change yours to your item.

Is returned to earth and Apollo happily.

This is my adverb.

What's he going to do, now? He's going to bring back, brings out the sunshine.

The suns.

The sun's rays.

What did the sun's rays do? Shine down, bring warmth.

It's up to you.

Bring warmth to the earth and life returns.

This is the time we call.

What do we call it? Day.

Fantastic.

Okay.

So we managed to do our solution and compromise between Zeus and Hades here.

And then we had at the bottom, our explanation and our learning.

Our really satisfying ending for the reader where they learn that the harp and it's on earth for 12 hours.

It's daytime.

And when it's in the underworld for 12 hours, it's nighttime.

And that's our lesson learned.

Our lovely satisfying ending.

Okay.

It's your turn to write your ending.

Remember that whatever you chose to be Apollo's special item or person or animal needs to be in your ending too.

So think about what you wrote in your introduction and your middle, because that needs to be the same thing that is compromised about for our ending.

Okay? So make sure you use your own words, but you use what I've written to help you.

If you get stuck.

Pause here, write your amazing ending.

And then our story is going to be finished.

Then press play, When you are done.

I am blown away by that amazing ending.

And I certainly feel satisfied.

Do you? It's a really good feeling to finish a long piece of writing that you've been working towards.

Isn't it? I feel very proud of myself and I think you should be proud of yourself.

I'm going to give myself a pat on the back and you should give yourself one too.

I would love to see not just the ending of your story, but your whole story.

If you still have all of the pieces of it, if you would be happy to share it with me, please ask a parent or carer to take a picture and share it on Instagram, Facebook or Twitter, you can tag @OakNational and use the #LearnWithOak.

You have been amazing in this unit.

And I have really loved going through this experience with you.

I hope to see you in another unit of learning soon.