Lesson video

Welcome to today's English lesson.

I'm Mrs. Crompton.

Our focus today is language analysis, and we will be completing a piece of analytical writing.

You will need a pen and paper, take a moment to make sure you've cleared any distractions away and have everything you need to hand.

To begin with then, we have a quick reminder of our subject terminology toolkits for our analysis.

Just give you a moment to have a little look down the screen and remind yourself of the vocabulary.

Moving on, what we're going to do is to have a little bit of a, a skill drill, a recap on this subject terminology.

What we will do is go through each of the definitions, at the end of the slide, I will give you an opportunity to pause, to take down any additional information that you require, but most of this will be a recap.

So a verb, a verb is a word used to describe an action or state.

Running, walking, sleeping, okay.

An adverb is a word or phrase that modifies or qualifies the verb, so to run quickly, if we move down, when we're dealing with verbs, we can also consider what hence the verb is presented in, is it in present, past or future and this will give us a time reference within the text we are working with, and some of those can be, quite meaningful in particular in our extracts, we're working with a flashback scenario.

Another little detail is whether or not the verb is presented as present or past participle.

So noticing the endings of verbs can be very helpful when we're analysing, if we have I-N-G at the end, it means that it's in present tense.

If we have E-D, it means that it's in past tense.

If you get a section of text where there is a flurry of verbs, all with I-N-G, there's a real sense of activity and motion created.

So, knowing whether it's present or past participle could be a really useful detail.

Pause at this point if you need to, add any extra details to your subject terminology list, resume when you are ready.

Moving on, a quick recap, we have simile, the comparison of one thing or another using like or as.

We have the word metaphor, an implicit or hidden comparison between two things that are unrelated, but which show common characteristics.

Personification is where we attribute human characteristics to something nonhuman.

And imagery is where we use particular words to create a visual representation with ideas in your mind.

Again, pause at this point to take down any definition information that you require.

And welcome back, so what we're going to do and where it says pause the video, that means as we go through the slides, as you read through this short passage, it's a recap on the extra that we have been working with, in order to create our language analysis response.

So, a quick reminder of the passage is about to come up for you, just reread, get yourself refreshed with where we were at during our last learning session.

Over to you and I'll be waiting for you with the next step.

And again, we now have a reminder of the activity from our last learning session, where we created our rich quotation plan.

So you should have with you now, your rich quotation plan, if you haven't got it, just pause the video for a moment and make sure that you have that to hand before we move on.

If you haven't done one, if you are just coming into this session, do not worry, I will show you how to create one in a moment.

In terms of our criteria, a quick reminder again, within our language analysis, we have our question, how does the writer use language to describe Rosabel's bus journey home? We have the focus of the question, the bus journey, what is it that's being said about the bus journey? And within that, we want to then show our understanding of the text as a whole, by selecting rich evidence, that we can link together, as we explain how the language is working to create meaning.

So we have our three strums of criteria to make a successful response.

And I said, I would give you an example of a rich quotation section.

So as you can see on the screen, I have got my three rich quotations, to share with you today, and this is an opportunity now, you self-assessed previously, but to have a look at the quotations you have selected, and you can choose to change things around if you wish.

And if you haven't had an opportunity to do this activity, you can work with these quotations to create your piece of analysis.

So from our passage, we needed to select three quotations.

In the middle, with the quotation that's picked out in the green shading, we have fairy palaces, dullness to opal and silver.

So there's a little bit of the quotation missed outs, and we've got the additional section there of fairy palaces connected to it.

That is my anchor quotation, I think this is the most important part of the evidence that I've seen to describe this bus journey.

And what I want to say from this, is that Rosabel has this desire, to change her situation, and the bus journey represents a moment where she feels trapped, and it's not normally when you think of somebody on a bus, you think of them travelling somewhere positive, but not for Rosabel, it's a symbol of being trapped in a situation.

On the other side, we have fairy palaces, something magical, something that promises hope, something that promises her wealth and a luxurious lifestyle, the word palaces, opal and silver, and we've got this image of transformation, because the dullness changes to opal and silver.

So that's my anchor, and from there, I then have in contrast, this image of her, the hem of her skirt being coated with black greasy mud, so the skirt and that the kurta, are covered in this black greasy mud.

And why I've picked this quotation out is to show that this is actually the dominant feeling and this is her reality.

The verb, coated, in particular is very powerful.

If something is coated, it's really covered, it's really stuck on.

It's going to be so difficult to get rid of, and so we've got this image of something, absolutely covering Rosabel, and that is a metaphor for her situation that she's not going to get out of her current lifestyle easily.

And the colour black has links back to the previous language of everything being grey, and muddy, and misty, and blurred.

And it's the grey, the greasiness, the mud, that is her reality.

Moving along, I then worked to my final quotation and we have a link back to the dullness repeated in this final image, and what you can see is I've used all of the passage and I've gone to the meaningless staring face of the massive people who sit in opposition to Rosabel.

She's not part of this.

She wants to be part of the fairy palaces, but she has this opposition and it's society, it's represented through the collective noun of the staring face.

And the staring is observing her and creating that sense of isolation and separation.

So I've got quite a lot of meaning out of these pieces of evidence, they are rich quotations, I can link them together.

That's what you need to check that your quotations can do.

Well at this point, just pause, go over your quotations, if you are new to the activity, please take these quotations down and you can work with them during this session.

Welcome back, so today what we're going to do is to slow write a response.

So we're going to be writing up our ideas in steps.

Our main focus is to ensure that we give a clear and detailed analysis of the effects of language.

So I verbally went through my chain of quotations and showed how they're linked, now we're going to actually apply that learning.

So I'm just going to show you the next two slides before giving you control to work through at your own pace so that you can achieve the criteria of being clear and detailed.

We're going to start with an overview statement.

We've looked at a previous model where we saw that the opening was really woolly and it didn't say anything.

So what we're going to do, is have a really precise overview statement.

The writer use this language to present Rosabel's bus journey as, a symbol of, or as, what do you want to put in there? That's where I've paused for you there, so you can fill that answer, the writer uses language to present Rosabel's bus journey as how do we want to fill in the rest of that sentence, but you need to be precise, you need to give a definite answer.

You are then going to use your anchor quotation, that's your best quotation.

From there, we're going to build onto the next line and we're going to unpick the quotation, and we're going to phrase the sentence by saying, the effect of the, and the subject terminology is going to come there.

Now, the reason for doing this is to make sure that we retain a focus on language and its effect, so that we don't stray into interpreting ideas, by raising our sentence this way around, we can lose the focus.

Okay? So the effect of the adjective or the simile, whatever it is that you want to zoom in on first is to highlight or create a feeling of, et cetera.

Moving on, we're not finished yet.

we're then going to do some more with it, look at a specific word and within this, we're building a range of evidence, if you can unpick more than one word, please do.

And then finally, within your explanation of everything, you need to consider that you have not forgotten the context of the passage.

So that is the complete and detailed analysis, just a one quotation.

Use the sentences to help you work your way through, in particular, I really want you to concentrate on, focusing on language and its effect and focusing on precision.

Okay, control is over to you, you're working with the first quotation, if it happens to be the one that I have used with you today, fairy palaces, dullness, to opal and silver, really zoom in and work through that section, explaining how, that quotation unlocks the idea and unpick that carefully, okay.

Over to you, I'll be waiting for you for the next step.

And welcome back, so now what we're going to do, is repeat that process.

So we're going to repeat the structure, but we're going to add in the linking line of this is reinforced by, as we introduced, the next quotation or, if you're using, for example, the quotations that I showed you, it would have to be this is contrasted by, and then we'd use the next quotation.

Work through point two, quotation, effect of a particular technique, zoom in, unpick, link out to the third quotation, make sure that you complete your response.

So what I will do is actually run it back to this section just because we're learning how to do our analytical writing.

So if that helps you, you can work your way through the whole of this section and look at the structure one more time, okay? Over to you.

And welcome back.

So we've got all of the quotations worked through now, we just want to have a final line.

And here, I would like us to think about just stepping back a little bit and take in the overall effect.

What does that bus journey symbolise? And here, think about how you started it all off, think about your anchor quotation, think about those big picture ideas that we have been exploring about Rosabel's situation, try and capture that in a final concluding line, and it just finishes off the analysis.

It's a final step, over to you, complete that response, with a summary overview statement.

Welcome back, so you have your response in front of you.

It's our first attempt and you will get better and better as we progress through our learning, but what I would like to do is to show you a sample response, it's a high quality answer, but as you work through, I don't want you to be daunted by what you read, what I want you to do is to have a look at things that you've achieved, in particular, reward yourself by ticking where you've included evidence and unpicked the detail of it.

Make sure that you've concentrated on the effect.

Reward yourself, where you have used our key terminology, this is reinforced by, this is contrasted by.

We'll read through this once, I will then hand over control to you, so that you can go back over the sample response and use that as a model, use that as a way of identifying areas where you could add in further detail, it could be content wise, it might be an idea that you've missed, or it could be the phrasing.

So you will have that opportunity, once we've read through it together, okay.

"Mansfield uses the contrast of imagery of the streets and windows, which in reality were blurred and misty, but to Rosabel seemed opal and silver under the light." So this overview sentence actually uses embedded quotations within it.

"The second description seems almost magical and creates an ethereal atmosphere, which gives the reader an insight into how Rosabel views even the dullness as beautiful." And that's all still part of the introduction, setting up almost like a line of arguments.

"The metaphor of fairy palaces." So we've got focus on the method and then the selection.

"Is an image that sums up her situation.

What is outside of the bus is unattainable.

The adjective fairy, combined with the concrete noun palace, creates an interesting image.

The substantial nature of a palace is juxtaposed to the dreamlike fantasy of fairy.

Rosabel is separated from this world, not just by the pane of glass in the bus, but by her poverty." Now look at the way that, that initial selection of fairy palace, just two words is unpicked and explored, and then expanded out to this big picture idea and understanding that the pane of glass, is not the only separating factor, it's her poverty, that means that, that's never going to happen for her, and I really liked the detail of the concrete noun versus the dreamlike word of fairy, that's a really nice close analysis detail.

"The image of light striking on the panes is also interesting.

Striking is a violent verb.

To break through this barrier is not going to be easy for someone like Rosabel." So just in terms of the analysis, it stops there on our having going to be the last part, but we then build onto it.

So I didn't want to give you too much to look at today, but look how carefully, that initial analysis has been unpicked and explored.

And from here, we then move on to the second quotation and the third quotation, but the overview is all present.

Okay.

Over to you, take control, have a look at this response, add any additional ideas, and then also, start to think about how you could even improve your own.

Ultimately I'd like you to have a target for yourself at the end of this way, you'll say to yourself, right okay, I can do this.

I now need to concentrate on making sure that I do, X.

So for example, it might be that I need to make sure that I select really precise details to unpick.

Okay, control is with you, I'll be waiting for you, when you're ready at the other side.

Okay so finally, I did say this already, but if you haven't already selected your next step, this is where you now need to be really reflective and identify the bit in your analysis that you can still polish.

But I also want you to select the bit of your analysis that you have done really well, it's always so important to recognise, what learning we have achieved within the session and where we have improved so, final step, what have you done well today? Which bit of the three criteria has gone well for you? And finally, where is your target for the next time you come to doing a language analysis response? Complete your reflection, pause the video, resume when you're ready.

All that remains for me to say, is thank you for your focus today.

Don't forget to complete the exit quiz and enjoy the rest of your learning.