Lesson video

Hi there, my name's Ms. Toole.

And in today's lesson, we are going to become creative writers.

And we are going to write our own story, based on a problem that matters.

In today's, lesson we're going to start off with our spelling, and we're focusing on the phoneme /ph/.

We're then going to sing our song about a problem that matters.

And then, we are going to start writing our story.

So today we are going to write the opening to our story.

So you are going to need; an exercise book or piece of paper, preferably with lines on so that you can do your writing, a pencil or a pen, your amazing brain filled with all your creative ideas, and your wonderful self ready for your writing.

So pause now while you go get your resources, and then press play when you're ready to go.

In the previous lesson, we focused on the phoneme /ph/.

/ph/ say with me, /ph/, /ph/ And we looked at some of our words with our /ph/ sound.

Can you think of any of our words? I'll give you a clue.

We had phone, there were a couple of animals one of them, swims in the sea, it was a dolphin.

And one of them has a really long trunk, elephant, good.

So on the next slide, I have six of our words.

Let's have a go at sounding them out together.

We'll start at the top pink, move down and then down.

So are you ready? /g/, /r/ /a/, /ph/, graph.

Good, next one.

/ph/, split up, /ph/, /o/, /ne/, phone.

Fantastic, next one.

/d/, /o/, /l/, /ph/,/i/, /n/, dolphin.

Super, back up to the top.

/a/, /l/, /ph/, /a/, /b/, /e/, /t/, alphabet.

Middle blue, /ph/, /a/, /n/, /t/, /o/, /m/, phantom.

And the pink, /e/, /l/, /e/, /ph/, /a/, /n/, /t/, elephant.

Good, now, we've got some sentences with missing words, and I need your help, to put in the correct word.

And the correct word is one of our /ph/ words.

So, the jumped into the sea.

What could it be? Could it be the phone? The phone jumped into the sea.

Now that would be a silly sentence.

Could it be alphabet? The alphabet jumped into the sea.

No, that would be a silly sentence.

What do you think it might be? Shout it at the screen.

The dolphin, good.

The dolphin jumped into the sea.

Super.

I like to sing the.

What do you like to sing? Do you like to sing the elephant? No.

Do you like to sing the graph? Silly sentence.

I like to sing the alphabet.

♪ A B C D E F G ♪ We like to sing the alphabet, good.

Tom spoke to his granddad on the.

Phantom? No Tom spoke to his granddad on the elephant? No.

Tom spoke to his grandad on the.

Phone /ph/ /o/ /ne/, phone Fantastic.

Have a go putting one of our words into your own sentence.

In the previous lesson, we created a song to help us explore problem that matters and to remind us what we need to include.

So we need to include the character's thoughts, the character's feelings, the character's actions, and dreams to make sure that the problem is hard to solve.

So I'm going to sing my song first and then I'd like you to pause it and sing your version at home.

Just to remind you about our problem.

So are we ready ? ♪I've got a problem I care about ♪ ♪I've got a problem I care about ♪ ♪I've got a problem I care about ♪ ♪Someone stole my treasure map ♪ ♪Captain Stump Foot stole the map ♪ ♪Captain Stump Foot stole the map ♪ ♪Captain Stump Foot stole the map ♪ ♪And hid it in his pocket ♪ ♪I can't find captain Stump Foot ♪ ♪I can't find captain Stump Foot ♪ ♪I can't find captain Stump Foot ♪ ♪What am I going to do now ♪ ♪How will I get my map back ♪ ♪ How will I get my map back ♪ ♪ How will I get my map back ♪ ♪I'm really upset now ♪ ♪ I'm feeling very determined ♪ ♪ I'm feeling very determined ♪ ♪I'm feeling very determined ♪ ♪I'm going to get my map back ♪ Do you remember that song ? Have a go now with singing your song and focusing on our problem that matters toolkit whilst you are singing it.

Now that you've recapped your problem that matters song we're going to start to write our story.

Now looking at our box up in our opening, our focus is introducing our character and where our story is set.

And because our focus is around a problem and the problem is something that's been stolen, we just need to introduce that object.

So all I'm going to be doing is writing our opening to our story, introducing our main character, where the story is set, and for me, I'm going to be introducing my treasure map book to you.

Your object that gets stolen might be something a little bit different.

So you're going to need your pencil or your pen and your piece of paper, ready to do our writing.

Now that you've got your pen and paper, we can start, So I'm going to model writing my own half first and then we'll pause and you can have a go at writing the opening to your own story.

So my first sentence sets the scene for my story and also introduces my character.

So my sentence is going to be: On an island far, far away, there lived a young pirate, called Pirate Pete.

It's going to be 14 words for my first sentence.

I'll do it again.

On an island far, far away there lived a young pirate called Pirate Pete.

Now I want to describe Pirate Pete as a young pirate so that the reader knows he's not really experienced.

So when captain Stump Foot comes along it makes the problem even harder because Pirate Pete is not going to be able to fight captain Stump Foot on his own.

So when we're writing, we start at the beginning of our line and we start our sentence with a capital letter.

Now capital, then we've got our 'on', an island on an island far, far.

Away.

Away, then, our 'there' is one of our tricky words.

T- H- E- R- E Remember we're actually communicating with our Latin names.

far, far away there lived.

we've got that -ed suffix on the end.

Lived a young pirate called Pirate Pete.

Now because it's his name, Pirate and Pete both need capital letters.

Called Pirate, Pete.

And it's the end of my sentence so I put a full stop.

On an island far, far away, there lived a young pirate called Pirate Pete.

So I've set my story on an Island and I've introduced my main character, Pirate Pete.

So have a go now at writing your first sentence.

So set the scene of your story wherever it's taking place, and to introduce your main character.

Off you go.

So now you should have the opening sentence for your story.

So I'm going to read mine back to check it makes sense.

And then I'm going to write my next sentence.

So On an island far, far away, there lived a young pirate called Pirate Pete.

Perfect.

Right, my next sentence, I want to introduce the treasure map, but to introduce the treasure map and make sure it means something to the reader and that they feel sorry for Pirate Pete, I need to just mention that Pirate Pete's father is no longer round so that they understand it's really important to him.

For your object, it might be a little bit different.

You might just need to make one quick sentence about how your character is playing with objects or where they might have found it or something along those lines.

But for my character, I need to introduce the treasure map to say, that it was really important because it was his late father's and he longer lives with him.

So my sentence is going to be: Pirate Pete's family and friends died whilst sailing the Seven Seas.

Pirate Pete's family and friends died whilst sailing the Seven Seas.

I've got 11 words now.

So where a full stop appears, we use capital letters to start.

And remember it's his name, we need definitely capital Pirate.

Pete's family and.

friends.

All is one of our tricky words.

Remember it's a A-L-L, all.

died whilst sailing.

The, one of our tricky words T-H-E, the Seven Seven Whilst sailing the Seven Seas.

Pirate Pete's family and friends all died while sailing the Seven seas.

End of my information full stop.

And then I'm just going to put a short sentence.

Now, all that remained was Pirate Pete's father's treasure map.

Was nine words.

All that remained was Pirate Pete's father's treasure map.

So I'll start my sentence with a capital letter.

All, tricky word again.

That.

All that remained was, tricky word, W-A-S.

was Pirate Pete's needs capital letter because it's his name.

Pirate Pete's father's needs to just put an apostrophe and an S there because it belongs to him.

So the father belongs to Pete and the treasure belongs to his father.

Father's treasure map.

M-ap full stop.

All that remained was Pirate Pete's father's treasure map.

Okay.

So I'm going to read through my open up, because that is my open door.

I've got my story's set in, I've got my main character and I'll start to use my problem that matters by making it meaningful for the reader and engaging them.

Cause I've introduced the treasure map.

I've also made it feel sad because Pirate Pete doesn't have any family.

That's all that's left On an Island far, far away, There lived a young pirate called Pirate Pete.

Pirate Pete's family and friends all died while sailing the Seven Seas.

All that remained was Pirate Pete's father's treasure map.

And that is my opening.

Have a go now finishing off your opening by introducing the item that gets stolen.

How did you find writing the opening to your story? Did you make sure it's got all the factors we need from our box up to make sure our opening hooks the reader? So our main character, where the story is set and from where is because our problem is problem that matters just introducing the object so that when we come to my own problem in the next lesson, it flows nicely.

Can I just give you a big marshmallow clap for your super super effort today? Well done.

You've all worked really hard.

Now to end today's lesson, I am going to tell you another pirate joke.

Why does it take pirates so long to learn the alphabet? Why does it take pirates so long to learn the alphabet? Do you know the answer? They spend years at C.

They spend years at sea.

Do you get it? So we have A, B, C, and then they also sail the sea.

So they spend years at sea, but it's been a bit silly because it's talking about the alphabet A, B, C.

Thank you for joining this day.

And I'll see you in the next lesson of this unit.