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Editing the first half of a non-chronological report about anglerfish

I can edit the introduction and first section of a non-chronological report.

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Editing the first half of a non-chronological report about anglerfish

I can edit the introduction and first section of a non-chronological report.

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Lesson details

Key learning points

  1. Editing is the process of making changes to improve writing.
  2. When editing punctuation, missing or incorrect punctuation, like capital letters, full stops and commas, is checked.
  3. When editing sentence structure, the flow of sentences and the variety of sentence types used are checked.
  4. When editing language, word and phrase choices are checked to ensure they meet the tone required.

Common misconception

Pupils may think that editing means only correcting spelling and improving handwriting.

Editing involves improving punctuation, language choices and sentence structure to ensure that the writing meets its purpose.

Keywords

  • Editing - the process of improving writing to ensure coherence and overall quality

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Sentence structure - the way words are arranged within a sentence to convey meaning

  • Language - the use of specific words and phrases to convey meaning

Provide pupils with a word bank so that they can up-level and improve their language choices. Allow them opportunities to practise editing on mini-whiteboards.
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6 Questions

Q1.
What are the adjectives in this sentence? 'The anglerfish's bioluminescent lure attracts unsuspecting prey in the ocean.'
anglerfish
Correct answer: bioluminescent
lure
attracts
Correct answer: unsuspecting
Q2.
What is the verb in this sentence? 'The anglerfish's bioluminescent lure attracts unsuspecting prey in the depths of the ocean.'
anglerfish
bioluminescent
Correct answer: attracts
prey
unsuspecting
Q3.
Which sentence is accurately punctuated?
camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows the anglerfish waits for prey
Correct answer: Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish waits for prey.
Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows the anglerfish waits for prey.
camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish waits for prey
Q4.
What is the main clause in this sentence? 'Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish waits for prey.'
Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows
Correct answer: the anglerfish waits for prey
Camouflaged amongst the ocean's shadows, the anglerfish
Q5.
Fill in the blank with the correct conjunction. 'The anglerfish is a deep-sea predator with a bioluminescent lure __________ it resides in the darkest depths of the ocean.'
because
Correct answer: and
as
but
when
Q6.
What is the relative clause in this sentence? 'The bioluminescent lure, which is attached to the top of its head, attracts unsuspecting prey.'
Correct answer: which is attached to the top of its head
the bioluminescent lure
attracts unsuspecting prey
the bioluminescent lure attracts unsuspecting prey

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6 Questions

Q1.
What do writers do when they edit their writing?
Correct answer: Make improvements to language choices.
Re-write a whole piece of text.
Correct answer: Make improvements to sentence structure.
Look for and correct mistakes only.
Q2.
Which sentence is accurately punctuated with commas?
The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure sharp teeth and a cavernous mouth.
The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure, sharp teeth, and a cavernous mouth.
Correct answer: The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure, sharp teeth and a cavernous mouth.
The anglerfish has a bioluminescent lure sharp teeth, and a cavernous mouth.
Q3.
What should we do when editing punctuation?
Check that the tone of the vocabulary matches the text's purpose.
Check that language choices are ambitious to engage the reader.
Correct answer: Check for missing or incorrectly used capital letters, full stops and commas.
Check that the diagrams and pictures match the text.
Q4.
Match the word types to their corresponding words or phrases.
Correct Answer:noun phrase,rotund, expandable stomach

rotund, expandable stomach

Correct Answer:viewpoint fronted adverbial,Significantly,

Significantly,

Correct Answer:adjective,remarkable

remarkable

Correct Answer:formal fronted adverbial,However,

However,

Q5.
What pair of adjectives would be suitable for this noun phrase? 'the __________, __________ anglerfish'
stifling, scorching
Correct answer: unique, fascinating
torrential, relentless
majestic, proud
Q6.
What pair of adjectives would be suitable for this noun phrase in a non-chronological report? 'the __________, __________ lure'
Correct answer: bioluminescent, extended
soft, feathery
disgusting, evil