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Concluding and editing a journalistic report about a climate protest

I can write the conclusion of a journalistic report and I can edit my work, focusing on punctuation, text cohesion and vocabulary.

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Concluding and editing a journalistic report about a climate protest

I can write the conclusion of a journalistic report and I can edit my work, focusing on punctuation, text cohesion and vocabulary.

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Key learning points

  1. Our journalistic report will end with a conclusion that updates the story and gives an 'official' position.
  2. The conclusion will also look to the future to explain what will happen next.
  3. After we finish a first draft, we use editing time to rethink, rephrase and reconsider those first ideas.
  4. Editing can be done by oneself, with a peer or with a teacher.
  5. Editing is most successful when it is chunked by punctuation, sentence structure, vocabulary and cohesive devices.

Common misconception

Pupils may believe that finishing a piece of writing is the end of the writing process.

When adults model enthusiasm for editing and improving, pupils will follow. Giving pupils a real outcome and audience for their writing also hugely increases the motivation to edit and improve.

Keywords

  • Cohesive devices - language structures that contribute to text cohesion

  • Editing - the process of revising and refining a piece of writing, focusing on improving its punctuation, sentence structures and language

  • Punctuation - a set of standardised symbols and marks used in written language to structure sentences

  • Text cohesion - refers to how a text flows to maintain the interest of the reader and achieve text purpose

  • Vocabulary - the language choices made by the writer

You may wish to devote a complete lesson to editing the piece of work; if so, you will want to pick out particular mistakes and misconceptions from the children's work to focus on in addition to those suggested here.
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6 Questions

Q1.
Which sentences below do not use reported speech?
Correct answer: Inspector Braddock was present at the protest.
Inspector Braddock said that two arrests were made.
Correct answer: Inspector Braddock arrested two activists.
Inspector Braddock said that his officers had done their job well.
Q2.
Which sentence uses inverted commas correctly for direct speech?
Professor Li explained "Vehicles contribute to climate change."
Correct answer: Professor Li explained, "Vehicles contribute to climate change."
Professor Li explained, "Vehicles contribute to climate change"
Professor Li "Explained vehicles contribute to climate change."
Q3.
Which sentences below are punctuated correctly?
Correct answer: "Soon," Professor Li noted, "we will see these activists were right."
"Soon," Professor Li noted "we will see these activists were right."
"Soon, we will see these activists were right" noted Professor Li.
Correct answer: "Soon, we will see these activists were right," noted Professor Li.
Q4.
Which sentences use parenthesis correctly?
Ben Braddock (a police inspector said his officers had made two arrests.
Correct answer: Ben Braddock, a police inspector, said his officers had made two arrests.
Correct answer: Ben Braddock (a police inspector) said his officers had made two arrests.
Ben Braddock, a police inspector said his officers had made two arrests.
Q5.
After which word could a semi-colon be placed in this sentence? 'Two activists tried to damage a bulldozer they were quickly arrested.'
damage
Correct answer: bulldozer
tried
they
Q6.
Which sentences are adverbial complex sentences that contain adverbial clauses?
The police arrested two activists, who had tried to damage a vehicle.
Correct answer: Two activists were arrested while they tried to damage a vehicle.
Two activists tried to damage a vehicle and they were arrested.
Correct answer: Two activists were arrested because they tried to damage a vehicle.

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6 Questions

Q1.
Match each type of sentence to its example.
Correct Answer:direct speech,Professor Li noted, "Cars contribute to greenhouse gas emissions."

Professor Li noted, "Cars contribute to greenhouse gas emissions."

Correct Answer:reported speech,Professor Li noted that cars contribute to climate change.

Professor Li noted that cars contribute to climate change.

Correct Answer:statement of fact,Emissions from cars contribute to climate change.

Emissions from cars contribute to climate change.

Correct Answer:journalist's opinion,Cars are just dreadful: they contribute to climate change.

Cars are just dreadful: they contribute to climate change.

Q2.
Which sentences below are punctuated correctly?
Correct answer: "For now," he explained, "we have put construction on hold."
"For now, we have put construction on hold" he explained.
"For now," he explained "we have put construction on hold."
Correct answer: "For now, we have put construction on hold," he explained.
Q3.
Which sentences are punctuated correctly?
Alison Hughes a council spokesperson explained her views.
Correct answer: We know some people are upset, but others are in favour of the bypass.
Correct answer: Alison Hughes, a council spokesperson, explained her views.
We know some people are upset but others are in favour of the bypass.
Q4.
Which sentences below use colons and semi-colons correctly?
The council is in favour: the protestors are opposed.
Correct answer: The council is in favour; the protestors are opposed.
The council is in favour: of the bypass.
Correct answer: The council is in favour: it believes the bypass will reduce congestion.
Q5.
Which cohesive device has been used in this sentence? 'The meeting, which is due to take place on Wednesday evening at City Hall, will be open to the public.'
Correct answer: relative complex sentence
colon
parenthesis in brackets
adverbial complex sentence
Q6.
Which sentence uses vocabulary appropriate for a journalistic report?
Until then, there won't be any trees removed.
Correct answer: Until then, the tree removal has been put on hold.
Until then, thank goodness, no trees will be removed.

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